One Night of...

Date: 22 September 2008

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Longing for
Untamed
Sensual
Touches
Featherlight
Under moon-
Light

Pleasant
Alluring
Sighs
Sought
In
One
Night

Between
You and me

Together
Here
Ever

Firey
In
Reaching for
Exhausted
Lightheaded
Intensity
Grasping
Holding
Tight

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Poetry inspired by a classmate, was definitely not a style I normally write poems in but it began with a single word written vertically in the margin of my notes while taking covert glances at him while the prof droned on and on. I probably should have been taking notes but it's quite difficult to concentrate when he sits anywhere within 10 feet of me.

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LadyofTheRavens

28.09.2008 09:08

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Interesting how one can vote something negative, yet not be willing to voice why they didn't like it...

Feedback is always welcomed..

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Anonymous reader

29.09.2008 08:08

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The simple answer is that it isn't even worthy of comment!

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Anonymous reader

29.09.2008 14:47

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It is listed under "First Time." I expected a story about a couple's first time. It looks as if what we got is a first time writer wondering why no one likes their writing?

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LadyofTheRavens

29.09.2008 18:08

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2008-09-29 14:47:27 To Reader

You might want to know a person before you make assumptions. I've you look at the writers bio it's not the first time I've written. I happen to be a published poet for over 15 years.

As for the tag "First time" It is the first time, since the point of the poem is a woman's fantasy of a man she barely knows.

Thus the notes at the end combined with the actual poem itself.

Dan-o, no follow through yet, but the semesters just begun.

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seraphinferno

01.10.2008 00:48

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I personally liked it. Not my favorite style of poem but I appreciate the idea behind the it.

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Anonymous reader

17.10.2008 17:00

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Hi Raven Lady....as one poet to another....acrostics are always difficult aren't they? Liked it !

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LadyofTheRavens

17.10.2008 21:04

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They are, and it's rare that I ever attempt them but that day in class this one practically wrote it self. I'm glad it did though as I like how it flows and captures the images that I'd been thinking about at the time.

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Anonymous reader

19.10.2008 23:11

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really, to all you jackasses, poetry is hard and this is a great poem. im a poet to and i know how hard it is to put up with dumb shits, keep writing this is awsome

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Piquet

07.11.2008 22:16

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Very nice Lady. You've said so much with so little. Well done !

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cykos1s

17.11.2008 02:42

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Never stop writing, this is amazing.

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spunklover

07.02.2009 22:02

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I loved it. I have written a lot of poetry but nothing quite like this. Most impressive.

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