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John's Memoir's-Part 1

Author: JPGRSAAF

Date: 13 August 2009

Anal, True Story, Blowjob, Oral Sex

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Author's Note: This is my first story so if you can please have any advice, I would like to hear it so I can get better at writing stories. If you liked it, there are more stories to come about John. Enjoy.

I didn't know why I was failing English. In fact, I was getting mostly 80's on everything else except English.
Maybe it was because I was paying attention ,listening to what the teacher was talking about. Or maybe it was because I was too busy,thinking of sexual fantasies of my English teacher,Ms.Kori and I fucking. My mom wasn't pleased when she saw that my midterm was a forty-five percent. She screamed at me for what seem like hours, about how I should pay more attention in my school work and stop thinking about girls.
"John,"she would say," You're getting high marks in everything else but you're failing English."

Maybe it was because Ms. Kori was tall, and lanky, with shoulder length. She must have been part Indian, because her name and her dark, chocolate colored skin with big brown,puppy eyes and shoulder length hair.Or maybe it was the fact that she wore skin tight clothing that I'm guessing is either from Lulu Lemon or American Eagle. Or, could it be that she had nice tight tits that I wanted some much to lick or the tight ass that would get me hard at any time.

It isn't like I was smart from my father, who ever he was. He walked out when he found out that my mother was pregnant with almost eighteen years ago. Since then, my mother would never go on a date with another man because she felt that all men were scum. None the less, I looked exactly liked my father, standing six feet two inches with brown eyes and short brown hair. Plus, if that wasn't enough, I had a eleven and a half inch cock to go along with my solid structure.

She made me promised that I would go find Ms.Kori for help to try and get ready for exams, which only six weeks away. The next day, fortunately was Friday, meaning that I go still see Ms. Kori and still be able to have enough time to come home, eat and hang out with my friends. School went by pretty quickly that day. First period was English, which Ms. Kori was talking about Romeo and Juliet. I manage to speak to her after class and get directions to her house because she wouldn't be staying after school. After that, I ran to my locker, got my stuff and ran to Geography class. I manage to walk in before the bell rung. After Geography class, was lunch,then French class where I sat for seventy-five minutes listening to Mr. Gagne's speech's about boring global warming. Then, I was off to Math class , where I had to finish 5 work sheets in 30 minutes or else it was for homework. I was relieved when I heard the bell ring at 2:25, signaling the end of the school day.

I walk down the busy stairs, crowded with students walking to their lockers. I walk down the steps to the first corridor where I walk slowly past a group of cheerleaders talking about new moves for their routine and jocks talking about the football game. I walk past them towards my locker, to get my school bag, throwing some binders and textbooks along with my pencil case. I walk at a fast pace out of the corridor, out the back entrance,where step into a wave of heat greeted me. I looked for my 2009 black Acura that my mother gave me when I got my license to drive without a parent. It was,apparently, an early birthday present.

I opened the door of the car, got in and put the keys into the ignition, listening to the sound of the classic rock music, waiting for the AC to kick in. I drove from the school, listening to old classic rock artists like Alice Cooper and Led Zeppelin with Purple Haze from Jimi Hendrix. Ms.Kori's house, was only about 15 minutes driving from the school. It was an new apartment building that I saw going a couple years ago and( I was thinking of buying a room when I turned nineteen).

I walked up the steps of the apartment building. I opened the door where a cold bust of wind gently hit my face. The room, was made to look likes stone pillars with oak floors and an polished oak desk that matched the floors with an old man siting behind the desk. The old man at the front desk didn't even glance up from the newspaper he was reading to see whom I was. I walked by him to the elevator, pressing the the sixteenth floor. I quietly hummed to myself the tune of Purple Haze as I was the only person in the elevator. After the last floor, the doors of the elevator slowly opened to reveal a long,wide hallway with oak floors and paintings of beaches and flowers on the walls.

I walked slowly down the hall, looking at the numbers on the doors. I stopped at number 604, where I gently knocked with my knuckles on the tall white door. It opened, revealing Ms. Kori in one of her usual skin tight clothing. I had to stop myself from wanting to tear those clothes off her.
'Come on in," she said with a smile, as I walked past her into her tidy apartment.

The floors, were wooden, with a shine that told me that she had just bought it. She had pictures of herself and family members or friends on the walls. Her furniture were a leathery black with a wide screen television in the family room. The kitchen, from what I could see, had a oak cabinets with gleaming green counters and a grey stainless fridge.
" Do you like my house John?" she asked curtly, noticing me looking around.
" This is a really nice apartment", feeling so stupid after I spoke those words,but she just smiled politely.
" I was going to take a quick shower before you got here,but I guess you came quicker then I expected."
" I can wait for you if you still want a shower." I said with a smile.
She smiled and then said "I'll be back in 15 minutes".

She left towards the bathroom. I took off my Nike shoes and walked around the house for a bit . I then sat on one of the black couches. I could hear from the bathroom, the sound of a tap being turned and the sound of a zipper. I immediately thought of Ms.Kori, getting undress with me being not even fifteen feet away. I could feel my cock begin to throb. I looked over and saw that the door to the bathroom was ajar, meaning that if I walked over to the kitchen, I could probably see her undressing. Slowly, I crepted to the kitchen, hoping she wouldn't glance towards me.


I managed to quietly walked towards the door. I peeked inside,seeing her bending over, her back towards me as she was turning off the bath taps. Then, she turned around. My heart jumped as I saw her begin to take off her shirt. She was wearing a black, lacy bra on underneath. She then proceed to take off her Lulu Lemon pants. She slowly, took them off, almost in a striptease. I had a thump in my throat the size of a baseball as I watched her finally take the pants off from her ankles. She turned around suddenly and saw me.

"John?",she said,"What are you doing?",with a puzzled look on her face.
"I'm so sorry,"I said", trying to make an desperate excuse in why I was watching her undress.
"It's okay", she replied with a smile,"I think that you're being watching me for quite awhile anyways.
"Ummm..."
"Why don't you come here and show me what you can do." she said with a wicked grin.
My brain wasn't thinking but somehow, my feet managed to stumble over to where she was standing.

The very first kiss that night was the most memorable thing I will ever remember. Her lips were perfect, and I could smell the aroma of her perfume. That moment, time itself seem to stop as we kissed .We kissed seem to last forever, but I know it only lasted a couple minutes. Before I could actually think that I was kissing my hot English teacher, she was already fumbling with my shirt.

I helped her out by lifting my arms so that she could get my shirt over my head. She kissed me again, but this time, it was more quick then the last kiss. She was quickly at my jeans, opening the button and pulling down the zipper. Her hands were flashes as she quickly pulled down my jeans, revealing my plaid boxers.She got the jeans to my ankles before I noticed to lift my feet up to kick the jeans off.

This time, I kissed her, more slowly, more romantically. I soon began kissing down towards the neck as I ended up near her tits.I slowly reached behind her back and undid the button, letting her black,lacy bra fall to the bathroom floor. I kissed both her tits, before on her tits in my mouth and sucking on it and pinching on the other one. She let out a small moan, of pleasure, as I would switched back and forth between her tits. I lightly set her down on the bathroom floor as I continued downwards/

I worked my way down towards her stomach, where I teased her pussy through the black panties. She let out another small groan of pleasure as her panties became wet with pre-cum. I took the hem of her back panties in my mouth, and pulled them down towards her feet, pulling them off completely and tossing them aside.

I gently kissed her leg all the way up to her pussy. I used my index and middle finger to touched her pussy slightly, making Ms.Kori cringed and let out a soft moan. I then proceeded to enter her pussy with my two fingers, shallow at first,and then deeper, as I gently finger fucking Ms.Kori. I could feel her still intact hymen, and that she was about to cum but I wasn't done with her yet. I then took my mouth and licked the inside of her pussy with my tongue. That sent her over the edge, as her body tensed up and she cum all over my mouth, dripping onto my chest. Her juices were sweet, and that only intensified my hunger.

Ms.Kori, seem to recover and pushed me onto my back on the bathroom floor. She then took my boxers off, my 11 and half inch cock popping out to greet her. She smiled as she began massage my balls, She then began stroking my shaft, at a slow pace,then up to a steady rhythm. I could feel my shaft begin to expand, signaling I was going to cum soon. She must have felt it too because she stopped stroking and started to licked the head of my cock.I could have cum right there but I didn't. She then put the whole head of my cock in her mouth . Soon, she had deepthroated my cock, and bobbed her head up and down. Soon, my cock expand and I let out a huge moan as I felt the cum spurt in her mouth. As soon as I had finished, she began milking me, sucking the rest of the cum from my cock.

She then laid me on back once again, and started to mount me. I could feel, as soon as she had put her pussy on my cock, that she had a nice and tight pussy. She slowly began moving her hips, each time thrusting my cock further into her pussy. Then she pick up rhythm and began thrusting faster. Soon, she thrusted so hard, I could feel my cock go right through her hymen, breaking into pieces and spurting blood over my cock.She let a small groan of pain, then a moan of pleasurement as she cum just moments afterwards. I could feel the width of my cock start to expand as I let a loud groan, and with one final thrust, I cum my load into her pussy.

We laid there on the bathroom floor, hugging each other, my cock still in her warm and tight pussy. We must have fallen asleep because when I woke up, Ms.Kori was gone. I got up, feeling tired but proud of myself for losing my virginity. I waked towards the kitchen, and saw Ms.Kori making coffee.
"Hey John,"she said,"Would you like some coffee to drink?"
"Sure"I replied with an eager grin and looked at the time on the stove. It was almost 6 o'clock! I was here for almost an 3 hours straight.
"I have to go.."I said.
"Oh" she said with disappointment."I'll guess I'll see you Monday."

I had to leave, but I didn't want to. I said that I would come back so Ms.Kori could help me with my "English". She just smiled and said that she would be waiting for me on Monday for another "lesson". I could help but smile, all the way home, because I had just fucked my hot English teacher,Ms Kori.


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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.08.2009 17:50
    Good story.

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    READER 500
    11.11.2009 21:38
    Good story i liked how you were descriptive

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.09.2010 18:42
    waiting for the next instalment

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.07.2013 06:52
    Oh. My. God. This is amazing. Basically the best story on the site. This is an amazing first story holy shit. MOAR

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  • The_Purvv
    14.07.2013 07:43
    Your story is quite impressive for a first effort. Lots of little things wrong, but less than most first timers. Just thought I'd point out a couple of annoyances, for what they are worth. 1. Paragraphs need to be double spaced...and shortening some would make the story much more presentable...thus readable. 2. I suspect that the vast majority of guys don't care to read about 9 inch peckers when 99% of us are less than 6 inches (true stat). I don't think you have to give size in story. 3. I could be wrong on this as I'm an old fogy, but do girls getting fucked today scream out the word motherfucker? Do they even use it? I know society has bypassed me, but... Hope this helps.

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.07.2013 08:00
    That was incredible. You Sir are fantastic, keep it up!

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.07.2013 20:54
    If I were you, I'd take The_Purvv's advice, I've been reading his work for a while now and he's definitely top five on the whole site. Keep things realistic, that's my only annoyance. Other than that, keep it up! I know talent when I read it

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.07.2013 20:55
    Best story ever keep 'um cumming!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.07.2013 23:00
    Follow the purvs advice. He knows where it's at; I've been reading stories for a couple of years, so this definitely has a lot of potential

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.07.2013 00:47
    Looking forward to next part, enjoyed reading this one immensely.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.07.2013 04:00
    great story. keep it up. can't wait for the next part

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.07.2013 09:52
    holy fucking shit
    this is amazing.
    and you say this is your fist story ?
    bro, with a little bit of practice you can be one of the best writers on this site.
    take the other peoples advice. the_purrv should be able to help you out
    once again, fucking awesome .
    DONT STOP WRITING OR I WILL 1V1 YOU
    (black belt in karate here lol)
    another reason I liked this was because the fight scenes were completely believe able :)
    please add in a bit of fighting.
    this is honestly so epic. it made my day.
    you have my thanks bro
    a big fan

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.07.2013 11:36
    I hope there is a follow-up to this story. It begs for more. What happens with Jason after he learns he can fight and screw? How about Mark, Tina, and Mara, and the other girls at school? I look forward to seeing the next chapter.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.07.2013 11:38
    I hope there is a follow-up to this story. It begs for more. What happens with Jason after he learns he can fight and screw? How about Mark, Tina, and Mara, and the other girls at school? I look forward to seeing the next chapter.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.07.2013 15:59
    Karate dipshit... Karate is the most useless martial art... Its stupid and only fed up losers say that they take karate.... If you want to brag about a martial art, brag about muay thai or jiu jitsu..........dipshit

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.07.2013 01:42
    Good bit. Keep writing.

    Coach

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.07.2013 04:40
    Lol wtf? The guy below me identifies himself as coach?

    Not bad writing btw, I personally just hate high school stories that are based on how high school was back in the day. Things have changed, and the whole "take-on-the-jock" thing just isn't fun to read about.

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.07.2013 07:24
    That story was so good I mean there are not alot I like but this one I just cant stop reading it and if someone thinks this is dum then they do not know how to read

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.07.2013 10:23
    Awesome thats the only word that can define this story XD

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.07.2013 16:03
    Great story keep writing, fuck what people say

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.07.2013 01:00
    good story keep writing. Martin G

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    17.07.2013 07:57
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  • anonymous+reader
    18.07.2013 02:04
    This story is amazing XD make more to this story and p.s Karate is so cool so all u dip shits that b hat-in go fuck your self

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.07.2013 09:59
    Great story. Write chapter 2 soon!

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.07.2013 18:55
    Good story except as a practitioner of krav maga, its not a competitive sport as it foucuses entirely on finishing a fight in under a minute

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.07.2013 23:12
    Write moor deff please u good like that fight realy had details r good keep it up

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.07.2013 23:40
    Waiting for the next part

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.07.2013 00:53
    Best story i've read in a lon long while, keep it up!!! Can't wait for part two!

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.07.2013 03:45
    Write moor deff please u good like that fight realy had details r good keep it up

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.07.2013 23:40
    Please please please continue this story!!!!!!!!! Awesome!

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.07.2013 09:26
    More please! Great job!

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.07.2013 09:26
    More please! Great job!

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.07.2013 09:26
    More please! Great job!

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.07.2013 19:56
    Best story you've read in a long time? Then you need to read more. The run up was too long, the dialog mediocre, the writing juvenile. While the story was okay, the writing didn't flow and was often too wordy. It was also difficult to follow who was speaking. The formatting could stand to be better too.

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.07.2013 22:40
    Here's my biggest suggestion. I've written more than 80 stories on this site. After uploading you have to reformat. The upload removes spacing between paragraphs and makes the story difficult to read. a lot of readers will face a text wall and stop reading. That's what I did.

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  • anonymous+reader
    22.07.2013 10:10
    Awesome job. Keep it up.

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.07.2013 02:20
    For a first story, this is really impressive work. You just need to work on your formatting and make it not such a wall of text. Also, make the paragraphs shorter and easier to follow who's speaking. Fucking great story though, keep it up. Can't wait for part 2.

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.07.2013 03:50
    Interesting but to my way of thinking not well written. A nice story but over done. for example; a martial arts instructor forgets about the third football jock? I don't think so. And the cliché 9 inch dick? For god's sake!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.07.2013 09:47
    Good story, a little unbelievable that not only did he kick three guys butts, but then he kicked the ass' of guys on the way home from work? Too much. Also it's flipping off, but overall a good first story! Good job, keep writting!

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.07.2013 08:50
    mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm enjoyed

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.07.2013 23:59
    Only 1 grammatical error, but none of them would be better. Definetly requires a sequel or 2 (or 65,536).

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.07.2013 06:28
    To the anonymous grammar nazi:

    You spelled "definitely" wrong.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.07.2013 10:37
    Sequel should be made

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.07.2013 11:10
    Put spaces between paragraphs. Too hard to read

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    28.07.2013 08:14
    My friend, this is amazing, keeping writing

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.08.2013 22:00
    what the fuck.
    what the fuck.
    this story was shit.
    A guy breaks a dudes arm and breaaks a dudes nose at school and he doesn't get in trouble. Than he walks apon an attempted rape, knocks out 5 knife wielding dudes, saves the girl, the girl agrees to go and sleep at a total strangers house after almost being rapec and has sex xwith him?
    what the fuck
    this story was shit, you suck, go die

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.08.2013 08:18
    Don't listen to the people saying this story is shit, its great
    To the complainers
    Jason was defending his sister at school, why would he get in trouble?
    Jason already knew her, she wasn't walking into a stranger's house, it was her best friends house
    Read the story you illiterate shit, it's because of people like you people like me can't find great stories like this one.

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.08.2013 10:51
    Agreed, its a great story! :)

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.09.2013 23:33
    What's with all the code? (about 15 pages of comments' worth of it).

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.02.2014 03:24
    Just a word of advice for your next story; pay a bit more attention to your paragraphs. It was a good story but it was a little difficult to see where one section ended or began. It's a little thing but can make all the difference.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.02.2014 03:24
    Just a word of advice for your next story; pay a bit more attention to your paragraphs. It was a good story but it was a little difficult to see where one section ended or began. It's a little thing but can make all the difference.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.04.2014 18:03
    Nice story but damn too long

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.04.2014 18:06
    Nice story but its too long. You gotta improve on your paragraphs too, they're confusing. Keep it up and throw a new story the floor will ya?...

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.07.2014 05:11
    Really enjoyed it cant wait to read the next chapter

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.04.2015 03:26
    it shows you Love to Write. This is a beautiful story - more about feelings than simple eroticism. Thankyou

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.04.2015 02:12
    Good story. 8/10

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.04.2015 06:59
    Very good story. I give this a 10/10.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.05.2015 07:36
    an, might I take liberties here and say: at first I thought that you wouldn't be able to pull this off. Not because of a lack in skills, no, you are quite the acrobat. The topic is just so ...impossibly sensitive and doesn't matter from what angle you approach it, awkwardness will be in your wake. I mean, I still don't know how you got around the sex-addiction issue. Ok, some may feel that Allen had been in love with her from his teenage years, unwittingly of course, and that the merge was a good thing, their sex-drives being similar. Some may be concerned for her health, the old addictive behaviour showing itself during times of stress (happiness also being a stressor), with her reading it as something else. Some may feel Allan to be in danger. Who cares! I just can't figure out how you put it all in one bowl and made a casserole! Wow.
    Thanx
    Evebroughtanaxthistime

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.12.2015 03:45
    Longer paragraphs u morons I love long stories. These people cannot read more than three sentances without dying of word torture. Awesome story it sounds like you have been writing for a long time great writing very formal. I think you are a great writer.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.06.2016 02:51
    was not very sure when started story but you now have a big fan/thanks.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.12.2016 23:58
    outstanding ..

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  • Adiggle20
    14.08.2017 07:31
    Good story

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  • Lucien333
    06.07.2018 05:57
    Love the long story and how you made it but break it up into paragraphs Please make into series and add more chapters

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