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Emily and The Newlywed’s

Author: Emily23XXX

Date: 24 April 2010

Anal, Fiction, Ass to mouth, Bi-sexual

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The light fog added a moisture to the air. The coolness of the night wrapped around her like a wet towel, sending a shiver up her spine. She was lucky she knew the area so well, or she could have easily become lost. She looked through the trees at the house where he lived, slightly smiling at the one electric candle burning in the kitchen window.

He had probably been waiting up for her. She told him not to and that she would be out with the girls all night and wouldn’t see him till the next morning. But, there were no other lights on, so maybe he was in bed.

She walked up to the front steps, moved the cute little gnome that she had bought to give the place a little character and grabbed the key from beneath it. Her legs were a little wobbly from the night of drinking and lack of sleep. She probably shouldn’t have been driving, but she just had to see him. She fumbled with the key, even dropping it once before getting it in the lock. Turned the lock, entered the house and shut the door behind her. The house was silent so he must still be in bed as the sun was just starting to come up. She kicked off her black high heels and headed for the bedroom, unbuttoning her blouse as she walked. Tina had long sandy brown hair, grayish blue eyes, 5’ 8” about 135lbs, long legs, a flat tummy. She had very full lips, 36B breasts that were perky and firm. She took care of herself, tried to exercise daily, and liked to think of herself as a nasty, dirty slut.

She laid her blouse on the chair just inside the bedroom door. When she left her apartment to go out for the evening she was wearing a white bra, which was now balled up with her black thong panties in her purse. Standing at the foot of his bed she unbuttoned her skirt and let it drop to the floor, slid both hands up her body cupping her breasts, and pinched her semi-hard nipples between her fingers and thumbs sending a little jolt through her body to her still wet and thoroughly used pussy. The man lying in bed before her was Brad; she loved him and loved being a nasty cum loving slut for him. She lifted the blanket and sheet at the foot of the bed and crawled in between his legs. Without waking he turned a little more on to his back, giving her better access to his flaccid cock. Her heart raced. She stuck out her tongue and started licking from his balls up to the head of his cock. She giggled a little at the sight of his cock growing and moving around like it had a mind of its own. It was even pointing right at her like it was asking her to take it in her mouth and down her throat. So she did, taking him in her mouth and down her throat till her nose was pressed into his abdomen. His cock still wasn’t fully erect so it was easy going in and out of her throat. She felt him stir and knew that he would soon be fully awake. Brad woke up knowing exactly what was going on; his little cum slut Tina was sucking him like a pro. His hands immediately went to the back of her head pressing it to him as he thrust his hips forward, pushing his cock deeper in her throat and making her gag a little. Tina took it like the cum slut she was, like the slut she loved being called with Brad’s cock down her throat.

His cock was now fully erect and more difficult to take in her throat, which was fine because her mission wasn’t to suck him off. She wanted to fuck! To feel his cock pound away at her tight wet cunt, well as tight as one can be after being fisted by more than one of her girlfriends during their girls' night out!

She kissed her way up his stomach and chest, passed up his mouth and offered her hard nipples to his hungry lips. She reached behind her as he held her boobs in his hands licking and sucking her nipples. She positioned his hard cock and sat back on it, enjoying every inch of it in her. He fondled her boobs as she sat up, closed her eyes and softly moaned as she got into her rhythm. He grabbed her hips and forcefully pulled her down on his cock, each time she raised up slamming her down. Tina loved it, made her feel like such a slut getting pounded and riding his cock like that. A few minutes later she felt the first wave of orgasm build and wash over her. Her pace slowed a little but Brad kept her going. As his orgasm quickly approached, he pulled her down hard and held her there, his cock buried deep in her slutty cunt as his cum pumped inside her. She felt her second orgasm rock her body as his last spurt of cum was released. She collapsed on him resting her head on his chest, smiled to herself think how she loved being a slut. He smiled to himself thinking what a slut his fianc?was.

After a few moments of rest she popped up and kissed him passionately. She broke from their kiss and with a devilish look on her face waited for his reaction. With a puzzled look he raised his head and smelled her mouth, more her face. It was the first time they had kissed since she woke him that morning. He could taste the alcohol on her breath from the night before, but there was another distinctive taste and smell. She hadn’t sucked his cock after it was in her pussy, yet her mouth, hell her whole face, smelled as if it were covered in pussy juice.

“What have you been doing Tina?” He asked

She climbed off his now flaccid cock, his cum had run out of her and covered his cock. Without answering him she moved down like a good little slut and started cleaning his cock with her mouth. In between licks and swallows she explained to him that the Girls' Night Out for the past six months had consisted of three to five of her friends going out, getting drunk, and going back to whoever’s place was available. Licking, fucking each other with dildos, and more recently fisting to an orgasmic frenzy. By now his cock was completely hard, he didn’t know if it was because of what her mouth was doing or because of what it was saying. The images in his head of her naked with her hot friends would make any man hard. She truly was a dirty little slut, his dirty little slut, the slut that had his cock in her mouth and part way down her throat. He grabbed her head, held it in place and pumped his second load of the day down her throat. She finished cleaning him up making sure not to miss a drop, swallowed, climbed up to his face, gave him a peck on the lips and asked, “Do you still love me?”

He just smiled and stroked her face; how could he not, she was just being a dirty slut like he wanted. Yes, it could be seen as cheating, but it wasn’t with another guy, it was with her girlfriends that have something sexual to offer her that he couldn’t. Who knows, maybe some time he could get to play with the girls, too. Well, at least he could dream.

Some time had passed and it was about two months before their wedding that I was introduced to Tina. I’m not sure why, but she played very hard to get although we both knew we were bi and what we wanted. Anyway we started playing together, quite often, at least once week. I even gave her an orgasm the night of her wedding rehearsal with her apartment full of friends and family. She’s such a slut!
Just before her wedding we started talking about what it would be like if I showed up at the hotel pool on her honeymoon, acting like strangers with her husband off playing golf; I seduce her, and we go back to her room for some steamy lesbian sex. The talk turned to what I would do if her husband came back and caught us together, I told her I would let him fuck me if she wanted, but only if that was what she wanted; it was about her and me.

Her wedding came and went, and we resumed where we had left off, playing together about once a week. I even met and talked to Brad a couple of times. Apparently she had told him of her desire to watch the two of us fuck. He agreed that if she was willing and I was, he would enjoy fucking me. So everything was ok, but I was still hesitant. I didn’t want to be the cause of them breaking up or causing any problems of any kind. I told her if I fucked him it would be on my terms, I would use his cock, and treat her like the slut whore wife she was, which only turned her on even more.

So we set it up, reserved a hotel room, and met there.

I went to the front desk, picked up my card key and went to the room to prepare, I was planning on anal so I like to prepare with a trip to the potty, a cleansing shower, and a relaxing bath with scented oils and candles. They weren’t expected for a couple of hours so I had plenty of time. After the bath I put on a baby blue open cup teddy that had a tie front, g-string back and matching stockings. To me it was more of a show for Tina than anything else. It wasn’t long before Tina and Brad were at the room’s door. I let them in and instructed them to remove their clothing while I adjusted the lighting and turned on some music. We set a chair at the foot of the bed where Tina could watch. This was to be a twosome--at no time was it to become a threesome. I took Tina’s hand, led her to the chair; I gave her a passionate kiss, and my hand slipped between her legs confirming that she was a wet and horny dirty slut. I gave her a push that sent her off balance and sitting in the chair.

Brad’s cock was already hard. I don’t know if it was from the excitement of what was about to happen or if it was because of the passionate kiss I had just given his wife. I instructed him to lie in the center of the bed on his back; I climbed on the bed at his feet, licked up his leg starting at his inner calf, up his thigh and to his balls, kissing, licking and sucking them. His hard cock oozing precum, brushing against my face as I did so, I moved back down the calf of his other leg and licked my way up back up it, this time reaching his cock I just hovered my open mouth over it. I could tell Brad was dying for me to take it in my mouth, and a quick glance at Tina she looked like she was dying to blurt out “SUCK IT, suck that cock!!”. His cock was standing up and twitching; I stuck out my tongue and with the tip of it licked the droplet of precum from the tip. Brad gasped and Tina’s hand went straight between her legs. I had wondered how long it would be before she would be fucking herself with her own fingers.

I then crawled up his body his hard cock making contact with my body as I moved and I kissed his lips, I’m not sure if Tina even noticed because she was halfway to her first orgasm. I then stepped off the bed stood next to Tina, climbed back on the bed on my hands and knees. I looked over my shoulder at her, smiled and pulled the thin piece of fabric covering my wet pussy to the side; I then reached between my legs and rubbed my finger up and down my glistening slit. Putting on a show for Tina I knew she wanted to lick me so bad. I began licking the shaft of brads cock, he let out a moan as I did, he was finally getting what he wanted. But I didn’t care about what he wanted this was about me and Tina. I took his cock in my hand, pointed it straight up and with one movement took his cock balls deep in my mouth and throat. I gagged just a little but fought through it with my nose pressed against his abdomen. I then raised my head up and went to work building a rhythm of long cock sucking strokes front the tip his cock to almost having my face pressed in to his abdomen again. After a while I needed a little break, took his cock from my mouth, a long string of throat saliva stretched from my mouth to his cock.

I looked at Tina and said “Look at how wet sucking your husband’s cock makes me!”

Turning back to Brad I said, “Tell her how I give better head than she does!”

He whimpishly said, “Emily gives better head then you do.”

I asked him if he wanted me to keep sucking; he didn’t sound to convincing.

He replied with, “Yes Emily, please suck my cock, you suck it much better than Tina does!”

I took his cock in my mouth again and quickly regained my rhythm up and down his hard cock, I could tell he couldn’t take much of this and I would have a mouthful of cum soon. I had other plans and they didn’t include his cum in my mouth. I raise my head off his cock again, got off the bed and grabbed a tiny pair of scissors from my purse and cut that silly piece of cloth that was suppose to cover my pussy. With that out of the way my pussy could get some action. I stepped onto the bed and in reverse cowgirl, took Brad’s cock in my hand and guided it in me as I stared into Tina’s eyes. “Yes this is your husband’s cock going into my tight pussy you dirty slut!” I thought to myself as I looked at Tina and took his cock inch by inch in me.

God it felt good but I didn’t want Tina to know, in no time I was bouncing my ass up and down on his cock and heading toward my first orgasm .

I said to Brad over my shoulder, “Tell her how good and tight my pussy feels!”

Brad said to Tina, “Emily’s pussy feels so good and so tight!”

“Tell her my pussy is better than her nasty cunt!” I told him, while staring in her eyes.

“Her pussy is better than yours,” he said whimpishly.

That sent Tina over the edge and into her first self inflicted orgasm. She looked so hot as her orgasm shot through her body. I was soon right behind her with an orgasm of my own, Brad’s cock pisitoning inside me felt so good. Followed soon by Brad erupting inside me. We had all cum within seconds of each other. I quickly climbed off Brad’s cock and laid on my back next to him. Some of his cum ran out of me down his cock, but most of it was still in me.

I told Tina, “Get your slutty ass over her and lick your husband’s cum out of me you slut!”

Tina leaped from her seat and quickly was on her hands and knees, head between my legs licking her husband’s cum from me. Brad just laid there watching his wife be the little lesbian slut she loved to be. Her tongue was deep inside me licking my walls clean and feeling so good I was close to cumming again. I pushed her head with my hand, her face and tongue deeper in me.

I let out a scream, “LICK ME you fucking cunt!!!”

Tina began to lick faster and harder bringing me quickly to another orgasm.

Tired, my head spinning and trying to catch my breath, I told Tina, “Clean my cummy juices and your husband’s cum off his cock, you slut!!”

Tina did as she was told, licking his balls, making sure not to miss anything before turning her attention to his flaccid cock, which was growing again. By the time she had finished cleaning it, it was quite clean and she was enjoying giving him a damn good blow job.

“Slut” I said to Tina, “Get over here and lick my butthole!!”

Tina knew I loved being rimmed and left her husband’s cock to kneel back between my legs again. I raised my legs in the air to give her better access as her tongue swirled around my butthole and started pushing its way into me. Tina has an extra long tongue, almost like Gene Simmons from Kiss, one of the first things anyone that has gotten oral from her notices right away. She knows I love having my butt tongue fucked too, and was pushing it deep inside my relaxed butthole. I was in heaven and so was she. She loves being a nasty slut. After enjoying the anal tongue fucking I was getting it was time to get back to Brad before he got soft again. Then again when I looked over at him he was stroking his cock and watching his wife with her tongue buried deep in my ass and my pussy lips wrapped around her nose.

“Rub my clit you slut and make me cum again!” I order Tina

I don’t know why but I am a very anal girl. Her tongue felt fantastic and her fingers pressing and rubbing my clit into my pubic bone quickly brought me to another orgasm. I just lay on the bed panting after I came. Now it was time for some cock in my ass, but first I want Brad to taste my pussy. Tina moved back to her chair and started touching herself again. I climbed over Brad and got in a 69 position, it was perfect because I could look into Tina’s eyes and suck her husband’s cock while she sat at the foot of the bed. Brad was feasting on my wet pussy, men are like dogs eating as fast as they can and women are more like kittens just taking soft gentle licks. It didn’t matter it felt good anyway.

I said to Brad, while staring into his wife’s eyes, “Tell her how good my pussy tastes!”

“Mmmm, her pussy, mmmmm, tastes so good, babe!” Brad boldly said.

“Tell her it’s better than hers!” I said.

"Mmmm, it’s better than yours!!” Brad said.

“I know it’s good! I've licked it many more times than you have,” Tina said with a gloating smile.

Brad's cock had an upward bend that in this position made it great for deep throating, I quickly had my nose pressed against his balls and his cock down my throat. Tina seemed mesmerized by it. I guess this was the first time she had really seen me give head and the first time seeing someone other than herself sucking Brad’s cock. Well, Brad had his taste of my pussy; I wanted his cock in my ass. I climbed back into reverse cowgirl and positioned myself over his cock.

I told Tina, “Grab his cock and guide it in my butt!”

She did as told and I slowly lowered myself down on it. Once it was inside me she sat back in her seat, put one leg over the arm rest and started fingering herself. She was relaxed and watching the show, and at the same time putting on a show for me. I started moving Brad’s cock in and out of me. It was starting to feel better and I was picking up the pace. The initial pain had turned to pleasure and I was taking deep, hard thrusts of his cock in my ass. Tina fingering her pussy as I stared into her eyes was also turning me on; I started rubbing my clit and in no time was ready to orgasm again.

I moaned to Brad, “Tell her how good my ass feels!!”

Brad quickly spouted back, “She has the BEST ASS!! Better than yours!”

With that he thrust upward and his cock started pumping his cum in my ass. My orgasm took me over at the same time and with my head spinning I could see that Tina was having one of her own.

After I regained my composure I told Tina, “Lie on your back on the bed!”

She did as told; I climbed off Brad’s cock, straddled Tina’s face and lowered my butt to her awaiting tongue.

“Lick your husband's cum from my ass, you dirty filthy slut!” I told her.

Tina did as she was told. Well, she would have without me telling her anyway, but she enjoyed being told what to do and called dirty filthy slut. Once she was done cleaning my butt I climbed off the bed and sat in the chair at the foot of the bed. Tina then moved to her husband’s cock, licking the cum that had seeped from me and run down his balls.

“Do you like the taste of my ass mixed with your husband’s cum, you nasty slut?” I asked

Without taking her mouth from his cock she grunted “Mmmm hmmm!” and nodded her head. The slut was in heaven; her fantasy of me fucking her husband had finally come true. I put on a long coat I had brought, collected a few of my things in the bag I brought and slipped out of the room. I’m sure Tina begged him to give her cunt a good pounding when I left and I’m sure he was happy to do it.

Such a naughty slut.


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  • azash
    26.04.2010 18:55
    really really well written and awesome story..... is there a part two to come ???

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  • Wantsomefun
    28.04.2010 05:39
    Whew!

    That surely isn't what I thought of when I read that first paragraph! But I have to admit, I loved it. Dark? Terrifying? Disgusting? Uh, yeah!

    Amazingly well-written, impossible to stop reading, a visceral terror, and one of the most compellingly emotional things I've read for a long while? I should say so.

    Congratulations, Janey. The bases were loaded, and you hit one WAY over the fence.

    I'm almost sorry I bothered to submit a story myself.

    Wantsomefun

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.04.2010 16:09
    Great story Jayney. Very well written. I may never jump in the hot tub with my neighbor after my wife falls asleep again.

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  • JayneyRedd
    28.04.2010 19:09
    Hot! Strange, but hot!
    I enjoyed reading it.

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  • Emily23XXX
    28.04.2010 19:14
    Very detailed complex story!!! Makes me not want to fuck around!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.04.2010 20:28
    Such an erotic yet emotional story.
    Makes a pleasant change :)

    I think there shouldn't be an ending, that leaves the reader to create his/her own ending.

    Top notch work!

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  • sassypants
    28.04.2010 20:29
    wow! wonderful emily!! I agree there should be a part 2!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.04.2010 20:56
    4 some reason i read that as a normal story and not sumthing to get off to. i think it was a good story

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  • Wantsomefun
    29.04.2010 03:33
    Why choose? Either ending has it's appeal. A part of me is glad you stopped where you did. Maybe, after this contest is over, you could do us the favor of writing both endings.

    A happy ending could be crazily hot or romantic, or better still, both.

    A not-so-happy ending could be a chilling story of psychological self-destruction by both characters -- not exactly a porn story, but definitely a must-read.

    Thank you for what you've given us so far.

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  • JackassTales
    29.04.2010 13:15
    Hey, good story! Damn, I expected the "Other Woman" to ram her pistol up the cheating woman's ass at any minute. I thought she might even do so and then pull the trigger. Not exactly my kinda story, but I couldn't stop reading it once I started. GOOD JOB

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  • friend+of+thinker
    29.04.2010 13:52
    Who da fuck does wantsomefun think he is? A bloke wid a doctor's degree in porn writing? Mind your own fuckin' bussiness, asshole, and keep your fuckin advice to yourself. You think your story is so fuckin perfect? Your story is fine, freethinker, don't mind that asshole

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  • Wantsomefun
    29.04.2010 13:56
    Maybe you should re-write this a time or two and THEN re-submitt. Not at all up to the normal standards that we are shootong for here. Good luck in contest, but don't hold your breath, you'll be sooooo disappointed if you do, and turn blue

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  • evil_incarnate
    29.04.2010 16:38
    I don't know who you are, friend, but wantsomefun's comment was fine with me. I considered writing an ending at first, but I have worked on trauma patients and can get quite graphic describing injuries - I did not think that was necessary here. On the other hand, like I said, I'm not a 'live happily ever after' kind of guy. That's why I left it up to the reader, and why I left the comments open - good or bad, they are all welcome.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.04.2010 23:20
    good ending dude!!! GOod ending lol

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.04.2010 02:20
    I would for one thing love for the following to be spelled out in great detail as it is similar to what my ex and I used to do:

    "The next weekend Carl was back, and this time he spent the night with them in their bed. He was a weekly visitor for a few weeks after that, then one night he brought another friend, and she was kept busy satisfying three cocks. Shortly afterwards, the circle of friends began to grow, as Jim invited others over to visit and share Allison’s delights. Soon there were half a dozen or so, and she opened her body up to each of them as Jim watched. Allison didn’t mind; she knew Jim enjoyed sharing her, loved watching his friends fuck her as she begged for more, and she really did love the workout her pussy got, the multiple, continuous orgasms. And, she had to admit, she enjoyed playing the role of a slut for her lover."

    As far as the ending is concerned I would love for Jim to be able to use and abuse her with detailed fucking scenes.

    Loved the story

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  • Lunalupo
    30.04.2010 02:27
    End it with going back to Jim's circle of friends fucking her in every way imaginable with extreme detail. It would be great if the guys feelings were also told as well as hers. Minutely detailed fucking scenes are what makes readers really enjoy your stories. You have a very exceptional talent and I gave you a well deserved positive rating. Now I am going to seek out your other stories. Thank you so much for sharing your erotic talent.

    Lunalupo

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.05.2010 03:12
    Have him kill himself then she picks up the gun and kill herself as well. You said it yourself, you're not a happily ever after type of guy

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  • danixafano
    04.05.2010 00:02
    wow. . . you can write.
    i'm not into happy endings. they're not real.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.05.2010 10:16
    eh.......I always expect something exciting when I read 'written by women'......but half the time it turns out to be junk....

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  • george
    george 45
    05.05.2010 10:17
    Very Good Need to keep it in a series

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  • crackedjaguar
    05.05.2010 23:00
    Not too bad if I do say so myself...CJ

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  • crackedjaguar
    05.05.2010 23:16
    Wow depressing... good but depressing... CJ

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  • invictus
    06.05.2010 07:36
    now that's what I'm talking about. Obama's troll can suck my dick, this is great writing....imagination, flair, well developed, all the things the dumb assed congress is not capable of due to alligence to the spook in chief

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  • wantsomefun
    06.05.2010 07:55
    Absolutely dumb, can't you do any better. Check out the stories written by ejls and Daddycums in this contest for some ideas. Best for you to leave writing to those who can do it, you just read and jerk off. Think I can't "earn" the right to comment? Think again dope

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.05.2010 10:22
    that dick wantsomefun is so out of line in trashing this story. I wonder on whose authority he feels welcome to make such remarks. I was amazed at the negative turn it took at the end, wow, that added a lot to the story, good job Bloke

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.05.2010 10:36
    WTF are they trying to say here? Natural brands has been around forever, so why not buy some at supermarket? they R in the dairy aisle, wantsomefun knows that, he works in a supermarket, oh, and, he is such a superior writer he comments on other's shortcummings

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  • ejls
    06.05.2010 10:41
    OK and what is the POINT of this tale? Does the expression, Amatuer Hour mean anything? I swear, if only wantsomefun could spend a little time with you and straighten you out, you may improve as a writer, just a thought, suggestion really
    ejls

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  • Hog%26amp%3B%23039%3Bs+Dick
    06.05.2010 10:47
    aren't you excited that wantsomefun approved of your story. He trashed everyone else, so what hint does that give us about your set-up wid WSF. Better watch out, ejls will be jealous, she likes to get all his positive remarks. Do you have any other stories? Did he approve of them also?

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  • Wimmers
    06.05.2010 11:58
    So the cowardly half wit troll has discovered me. I may spend time tracking you down, that text should be easy to trace. Please do not copy and paste it to claim as your own thicko.

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  • niggerboy
    06.05.2010 12:09
    I think this is the winner even thou no black dick in the story

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  • JackassTales
    06.05.2010 15:30
    Loved how you used the derogatory "VAGINAFEST" tirades as inspiration for a story. The great writing here disproves that critic's remarks. JackassTales

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  • seeminglysatisfied
    06.05.2010 19:10
    Its a different style than I have seen around here. Good change of pace and very fluid. Liked it.

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  • seeminglysatisfied
    06.05.2010 19:20
    Very good. Again, a change of pace from the norm around here. I liked it.


    seeminglysatisfied

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  • niggerluver%26amp%3B%23039%3Bs+man
    07.05.2010 07:38
    oh gosh, a brilliant story, now you're getting into the place where your writing is challenging the quality of jackass tales and wantsomefun and ejls, wow you are soooooooo good it's breathtaking. a superstar is born, your mother must be so proud, and your daughters also and granddaughters, oh no, look out wantsomefun would fuck your granddaughters and all his buddies would salivate at the thought and they'd all compliment each other on how well written the tale was

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  • JackassTales
    07.05.2010 13:33
    Very nice romance. I hope you realize that wantsomefun did not actually write the shitty comment below. There is a troll masquerading as popular writers posting negative comments all over the place.

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  • Just+a+thought
    07.05.2010 14:48
    Come on, wsf ain't a dick, he's more like a know it all dick in his mouth, self inflated creep who haunts a small segment of this site...a safe little portion of the site safe with his certain friends who have their own club and can't accept a word of criticism aimed at THEM or THEIR FRIENDS. Why else have their own little contest with no criticism welcome or else they cry about the moderators should erase the unloving comments. What a group, they SHOULD hang out wid each other.

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  • scrot
    07.05.2010 15:40
    how many nigs does it take to fuck up a 3 car funeral?

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  • ridiculous
    07.05.2010 16:02
    And who is it who took the time to "cover" for that prick Wantsomefun? Could it be his little friend ejls? Or, could it be Wantsomefun himself, who makes a comment, then mentions himself again in another comment? oh yeah, it's all about WSF, ain't it, why not rename the site after him? Maybe he could be the co-president so he could share top billing with the great Obama, don't ya'll get a hint about Obama-Wantsomefun being all over every other comment on this nasty site? WTF?

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  • Lookn4awillin1
    08.05.2010 05:05
    Will be looking for chapter two...more please!

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  • ssalo
    08.05.2010 18:42
    Perfectly titled. Powerfully written. Thank you for the wild and terrifying ride. I need a valium.

    ssalo

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  • Gingersnap
    08.05.2010 22:05
    I want an invite to that dinner party. I would be looking forward to the dessert. Great story.

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  • outsider
    09.05.2010 06:27
    this is a cute little private club of special members who all pretend they are just so exclusive OH it must be smug to be you and you and you and you

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  • not+exclusive
    09.05.2010 06:45
    wow giggly it must be to be in the club with secret handshakes and everyone saying how special your story is...did you "people" know that THIS is a porn site where pips use bad words and there are bad pix? amazin concept

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  • JayneyRedd
    09.05.2010 08:10
    Really enjoyed reading that! Thank you x

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  • Gourmet
    09.05.2010 13:00
    carmalized carrots, oh wow, you've GOT to give me the recipe, it sounded so delish in the story when she served it. Do you ever watch any of those cookin shows on TV, I get lots of great ideas from them too. Hope your apple pie turns out well, good luck sweetie.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.05.2010 16:02
    NICE details. Loved it!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.05.2010 16:03
    NICE details. Loved it!

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  • wantsomefun
    13.05.2010 01:51
    I'm trying to figure out if there are multiple trolls who have decided among themselves which of them should pose as DC, JT, ejls, and me, among several others, or if there is one actually fairly gifted (i.e. prolific) troll with multiple personality disorder, among his other sicknesses. Wait! Maybe he's not insane! Maybe he's just the guy whose picture appears in an illustrated dictionary along with the definition of "asshole!"

    Anyway, prepare to have some comments attributed to you.

    And by the way, EXCELLENT story.

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  • Sahara907
    14.05.2010 09:45
    Nice job of proving The Unripe Plum wrong [as usual]. It's not a "vagina fest" after all.

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  • Sahara907
    14.05.2010 09:47
    Hmmm, apparently quotation marks don't turn out too well in the comments section. ;-)

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  • cassandra789
    14.05.2010 14:51
    loved it. though when i was hired to do somr=ething similar by a wife, i was more a teacher to them. it was her way to save theyre marriage and it worked.

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  • Wimmers
    14.05.2010 16:34
    Thanks for the Excellent comment Reader.
    With so many double identities and who's who? It may be better to write spy/espionage stories.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.05.2010 16:48
    freethinker:

    I am really me. Not some goofy troll. That said....

    ARGH!

    You silly nit! It's not a story without an ending! It's not my job; it's YOURS!

    (deep breath)

    Okay. I'm calm. Your prose is solid. Good imagery, and lots of hotness. But honestly, stories have endings. Sheesh!

    In all seriousness, great job. I've read 9 stories so far. You're a front runner for my vote, by virtue of the imagery and hotness, despite the ridiculous absence of an ending. Shessh. :)

    aesexual pseudonym

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  • JayneyRedd
    16.05.2010 07:59
    That's another story I really enjoyed reading, thank you!

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  • ejlsabortedbaby
    17.05.2010 19:53
    Not too bad. Too bad, however, that wantsomefun saw fit to dick your story in another review, the sneaky prick. He and ejls are like that, sneaky and up each other's butts, sorry.

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  • Daddycums
    18.05.2010 20:53
    Next time, PLEASE include something in the tags to indicate there's gay male stuff in here. I'm tempted to vote this story down because you didn't warn me ahead of time, but I'll cut you a break because it's a contest entry and I'm reading all contest entries regardless of the tags so that I can be fair in my voting.

    -Daddycums

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  • klaxx
    20.05.2010 02:03
    Why the YOUNG tag? Stating that they met in high school doesn't count.

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  • Very+interesting
    20.05.2010 07:47
    ejls said in forum post today that she would protect her child with her life....yet she also says she condones abortion, ok...WTF do you guys see her for what she is, a waffling, say whatever she thinks you want to hear queen of the alley type a girl? Very interesting

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  • he+told+you
    20.05.2010 08:02
    There, you've been warned by DC and he means business. If you said that about him, he would pee his pants and wimper to all his friends. "The evil troll said sumpfing bad about my story, oh, boo hoo, save me

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  • dominatemeplease
    20.05.2010 08:05
    Piss on you daddycums in his little girl and wantsum cock in my hairy ass. Who da f do you assholes think you are? ejls for Chrissakes?

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  • cunstain
    20.05.2010 08:12
    How does it feel to KNOW that you won the contest EXCEPT for ejls cheating to jigger her score and be on top. Only good news is that she'll hurt herself when she falls off bed from being on top of fatboy wantsomefun and ejls ain't no skinny thing either, say what

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  • fantasyalive
    20.05.2010 11:28
    This was hot, well written, so vivid. Being transported into the story was a very sensual experience. Great Job.

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  • Daddycums
    23.05.2010 21:34
    If you don't like getting critized then write Better or don't write

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  • freethinker
    23.05.2010 21:39
    Oh god AP, pleasssssssseeeee vote for me

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  • dominatemeplease
    24.05.2010 10:43
    Troll, read my tag...I live for humiliation and criticism...it makes me fucking HOT!

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  • JayneyRedd
    25.05.2010 05:56
    OMG!
    Wow!
    That's HOT!
    I have to go and ..er...be alone for a minute or two now ;-)

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  • no+shit
    25.05.2010 12:12
    Govt killed the Obama troll

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  • usmc
    25.05.2010 12:17
    Govt shot and poured diesel up the butt of Obama troll

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  • nigger+luver
    25.05.2010 12:20
    ok, great you won but got 2nd but Obama trooll was shot and body filled wid diesel mouth and butt

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  • gotta+smile
    25.05.2010 12:22
    you can fuck whoever ya want but Obama troll got wacked by govt enforcers, then they filled his ass wid diesel and poured it over his head and pissed in his mouth

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  • Wimmers
    25.05.2010 18:18
    gotta smile---Gosh those govt enforcer chappies sound rather beastly.

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  • drewz
    27.05.2010 19:53
    Great story!! The title said it all.........the story said even more.

    Drewz

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  • cijababe
    04.06.2010 12:30
    I'm really sorry that the title actually put me off reading this story. I enjoyed it, but you skimmed over a lot - I would have preferred a more detailed description of a shorter period of time. Still very nice overall.

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  • JayneyRedd
    04.06.2010 15:09
    Gosh, what a good story!
    Loved the happy ending, I really enjoyed that whole tale.

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  • Wimmers
    05.06.2010 17:46
    Great blockbuster of a story. I would not even wolf whistle at a girl who lived within 100 miles of that town.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.06.2010 18:43
    I can't understnad why this story isn't rated higher. superior mixture of hot sex, and sweet romance. difficult if not impossible to fins that in most stories these days. that said, the "filling" commentary read well also. superior writing and yes **MY** dick got very hard. the wife liked this story too.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.07.2010 22:18
    so, down and dirty porn within a morality tale? are you kidding me? ha ha ha are you fricking kidding me? thumbs down.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.07.2010 22:37
    so, down and dirty porn within a morality tale? are you kidding me? ha ha ha are you fricking kidding me? thumbs down.

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  • wirepaladin
    28.07.2010 17:35
    Not really my type story but I, none the less enjoyed the read. It was well written and well titled. Keep it up

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  • Prurient+Purveyer
    08.09.2010 01:44
    This is stunningly good. I've got this on my favourites list now.So there.

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.11.2010 20:15
    I know how this ends...
    Jim hears allisons loud sound, and is full of joy; but as he moves the gun away from his mouth, it seeks he wasn't fast enough. He huts hit nose and forehead practically smashing his skull, as Alison runs in finding her beloved in such a state. They rush to the hospital, but he has a terrible chance of recovering.

    ... He recovers. Barely. He is sick, forever more, can not work in the mill-or anywhere, and can't join Alison in the steamy sex she's been waiting for.

    They still get married, and continue to live, but it seems life turned to straight south as he watched her play with other men.

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  • Mercutio
    08.11.2010 00:26
    Gotta love the two nitwits running their mouths anonymously. -.- Fuck 'em. The story wasn't my cup of tea, either, but it was beautifully written and emotionally tense. I didn't enjoy it, per se, but I couldn't stop reading it, either. Bravo, my dear! :rose:

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  • Mercutio
    08.11.2010 00:26
    Gotta love the two nitwits running their mouths anonymously. -.- Fuck 'em. The story wasn't my cup of tea, either, but it was beautifully written and emotionally tense. I didn't enjoy it, per se, but I couldn't stop reading it, either. Bravo, my dear! :rose:

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.01.2011 00:46
    you cannot fuck underwater....try it

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.01.2011 17:06
    unbelievable story, entertained by ever word, so erotic, so thrilling

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  • Wimmers
    23.03.2011 19:57
    Everyone thinks it's a great story with the exception of one silly spammer; namely you. Why do you spam; is it an illness?lol lol, lol, lol.

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  • wilburjorgeafraidya
    30.03.2011 19:51
    You have written a terrifying story. Very well written.Can't vote for, can't vote against.

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  • JayneyRedd
    27.05.2011 17:38
    To the reader who said "you cannot fuck underwater"

    OH YES YOU CAN!

    lol

    The part of this story in the hot-tub that I describe was simply a re-telling of an incident I once did.
    It was with my (at the time) own husband, not the husband of my next-door neighbour, but believe me, all the action I described in the hot-tub is very possible! :-)

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.06.2011 09:32
    This is a fantastic story, such escapism.

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.06.2011 08:17
    this story should be continued, it has the beginnings for a wonderful series. The scenes that could be written about are endless.

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.08.2011 05:35
    Only after Jim kill himself does she discover she is prego. Since she had only been riding black horses while tripping on coke she has to marry a black. Found an alien from Kenya who needed a citizen wife to stay a bit longer. After the baby was born in Hawaii her returned ot Kenya and his first wife. So allison hooked up with an abusive Islam man and moved to Milasia with him and her son. But he hated his step son and forced him to attend an Islam school their that hated blacks. So Alison sent her messed up son back to Hawaii for her parents to raise. Now you can find the ending from there---or is it still being writen??LOL

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.08.2011 16:13
    I find this highly offensive. I am a five-year-old black girl who was born in Inida to a pair of hyenas who shat me out their asses and called me Wimmers.

    864-751-1033 if any of the men out their want their dick sucked!

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.08.2011 16:23
    864-751-1033 - best blowjob of your life!

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.08.2011 16:34
    I called the bitch below and it is just a radio station in Alabama! They won't suck your dick for nothing!

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.08.2011 16:20
    that was funny but ii really didnt have much to do with sex
    ===================================================
    It had B.D.S.M. and rape, lol. thanks for comment.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.08.2011 16:21
    This story has been reported as kiddie porn! I hope you banned from the site!

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.08.2011 16:24
    GOBS OF CUM FOR THIS! I JERK OFF HARD TO THIS!

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.08.2011 19:01
    it would be so funny if he really did get banned but then again there is no god so not likely

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.08.2011 19:07
    A Negative vote for your bullshit joke..... js-hellman posts much better and much more funny jokes. people go checkout his jokes you will laugh like hell.

    ...douchebag

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.08.2011 16:25
    A Negative vote for your bullshit joke..... js-hellman posts much better and much more funny jokes. people go checkout his jokes you will laugh like hell.

    ...douchebag

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.08.2011 16:25
    A Negative vote for your bullshit joke..... js-hellman posts much better and much more funny jokes. people go checkout his jokes you will laugh like hell.

    ...douchebag

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.08.2011 16:26
    A Negative vote for your bullshit joke..... js-hellman posts much better and much more funny jokes. people go checkout his jokes you will laugh like hell.

    ...douchebag

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.08.2011 16:27
    A Negative vote for your bullshit joke..... js-hellman posts much better and much more funny jokes. people go checkout his jokes you will laugh like hell.

    ...douchebag

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  • anonymous+reader
    29.08.2011 19:26
    I love all your stories. It's so nice to read a real story, with proper spelling and grammar, but at the same time a well written erotic story. You're a good writer.

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  • noname692001
    11.11.2011 17:05
    That was a great story! I loved the topic and you had my dick hard the entire time!

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.11.2011 13:07
    wha makes you think all black men deals in negativity and drugs it could have been a good story had been just related to sexual desire and being watched. why are you still in the 1970 pimp mood or something this is so stupid

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.12.2011 18:58
    This story is a waste of space and poorly written. Negative vote!

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.12.2011 11:40
    for a woman you truly have a sick mind.

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  • anonymous+reader
    29.01.2012 03:23
    typical fucking woman.............. can't trust any of them, all sleazy whores

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.07.2012 06:37
    glad to see someone write a good romance story for a change I sure hope they do live happily ever after all their problems

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.10.2012 01:21
    A perfect reply! Thanks for tkanig the trouble.

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.11.2012 12:56
    Should have had more lesbian stuff

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  • takeitinyourmouth
    16.03.2013 01:42
    Eat my cum, slut. Taste your ass on my cock.

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.03.2013 11:55
    Why is retardient ASSHAIRVOYEUR voyeur still around?
    Had he not choked and died on emu shit yet?

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.05.2013 03:03
    A throughly disturbing tale... But well written!

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  • Norton5
    25.07.2013 23:08
    This is what I call an excellent story. You write very literate stories that are accessible to everyone whether they be simple or sophisticated. Please, keep on writing. Anything you write is delicious for sex lit-hungry readers.

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.09.2013 09:48
    mG9dVQ Thanks a lot for the blog.Thanks Again. Awesome.

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.09.2013 12:33
    LrIwbi Thank you for your post. Great.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.10.2013 10:09
    a29dhx Thanks-a-mundo for the blog post.Really thank you! Really Great.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.10.2013 12:03
    mwL2oZ I am so grateful for your blog.Much thanks again. Really Great.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.01.2014 09:44
    PeK5E7 Thanks a lot for the blog post.Thanks Again. Want more.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.01.2014 17:05
    CZQeuT Im obliged for the blog post.Much thanks again.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.01.2014 06:00
    5v9MC5 Say, you got a nice blog post.Really thank you!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.05.2014 03:06
    This is very well written. I love seeing her get what she deserves.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.05.2014 00:35
    So the one saying women are whores. Does that mean you're gay?. Not all women are like this. And some men make stories like this but in a mans point of view and I don't see anyone saying he's sick. That's just down right sexist. All the ppl making horrible comments needs to go burn in hell

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.05.2014 00:41
    So the one saying women are whores. Does that mean you're gay?. Not all women are like this. And some men make stories like this but in a mans point of view and I don't see anyone saying he's sick. That's just down right sexist. All the ppl making horrible comments needs to go burn in hell

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.06.2014 15:42
    That's a modr-bleaker. Great thinking!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.06.2014 00:43
    Your story was really intrimafove, thanks!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.07.2014 00:23
    I think this was a great and well written story. It was a total 360 degree change from the normal " pinned her down, fucked her violently and left ". This actually had a storyline to it. Keep writing.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.10.2014 14:35
    What an Awsome complete story, some ppl only write the sex bits, others forget about those altogether, but this has everything, decent read.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.05.2015 09:33
    *_
    2014-05-19 00:41:11
    So the one saying women are whores. Does that mean you're gay?. Not all women are like this. And some men make stories like this but in a mans point of view and I don't see anyone saying he's sick. That's just down right sexist. All the ppl making horrible comments needs to go burn in hell_*

    I know someone like that , it's not so far off the mark . Wakeup it happens . Reality bites this is not Eutopia Bitches like that deserves it . To the author: i thoroughlyenjoyed it . GREAT STORY !

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.07.2015 20:21
    At last a decent story to read

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.03.2016 04:39
    A happy ending would be terrible for how she left Jim. Hooray for getting clean, but it's past midnight, princess.

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