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  1. A Simple Beginning
  2. A Simple Beginning Gone Twisted
A Simple Beginning Gone Twisted

Author: SinfulOblivion

Date: 11 June 2004

Body modification, Fiction, First Time, Masturbation

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As I had started originally it was getting later than I had expected, and I wasn't sure if the beauty of my affectionate lust would be showering this late, but no way was I about to give up the chance, tonite was one of the nights when I was exceptionally horny. I kept hoping to myself that she had not yet taken a shower as I came closer to her house, walking through the shadowy street. My mind was so pre-occupied it took me until I had almost passed her house for me to notice it. I smiled my usual smile and slipped into the shadows of her house, licking my lips and sneaking to the bathroom window, having decided that she may at least be getting out of the shower at this time if anything.

As I came to the window I peered in to see the window slightly fogged from steam of the shower. This was bothersome, however, I could make out a figure behind the nearly invisible shower curtain, hopefully it was the girl I wanted and not her mother which I had on accident seen on a few occasions, bad memories. I saw the figure bend down and listened for the spraying to cease, and sure enough it did. I stood there peering through the fogged window, biting my lip softly but soon smiled when I saw through just the smallest of opennings in the foggy smear of the window a hint of strawberry blonde, so I knew it was her considering her mom had light brown hair.

I groaned and decided to myself that this fog was never going to allow me to see inside, so I began to step away. Just then it struck me that the very window which I had to stand on the side of the garden to see through was to a room, so I rushed there quickly. Perfect, I made it just in time to see the girl walk into her room wrapped in a towel, this much clearer window such a relief compared to the foggy one. With a grin on my face I watched as she sat down softly on her bed and played with her wet hair a little bit. After just a few seconds I could see her arm moving in a strange way, but since the bed was against the wall near me her back was to me and I couldn't tell, but I realized that there was only one thing the young girl could be doing. In a matter of minutes I was proven right as she laid back longways on her bed and openned up her towel, exposing her soft, perky breasts and sexy, smooth body. She slowly ran her hand down her stomach and ran her fingers against her inner thighs, teasing herself as she lay back and relaxed. This was too good, finally I could see more than just her nude, ready to shower body.

I stood there peering through the window with a grin, completely undetected as I watched her. Her teasing hand softly creeped to her soft, nicely trimmed red haired pussy and she began to grind her slit with her fingertips. She continued to rub her soft pussy as I randomly began to rub my tent in my jeans, grinning and doing this out of instinct and relaxation rather than aiming towards release, in fact it took me a minute to realize what I was doing. My eyes grew hungry as she softly prodded a finger halfway into her moistened cunt, her other hand now resting on her left breast and softly massaging it, squeezing and twisting the nipple softly as he finger slid in deeper and was soon accompanied by a second finger. She was now thrusting two narrow fingers into her moist and hungry pussy as her other hand stroked and carressed her own pale, nicely-rounded breast, my hand kept rubbing my erected cock through my jeans. I couldn't help it, this was too much to just watch.

Finally, I noticed her face growing with passion and satisfaction as I could tell she hit her climax, this was much later and I was still rubbing my tent softly. She moaned, although it was almost completely muted to me and slowly slid her fingers out, gently licking them clean and smiling. She laid there a moment to catch her breath and then began to get up. About this time I hoped down and began to walk hope, satisfied with what I had seen tonite. I realized every night she probably did this about the same time, and at the same time while walking home realized that I could watch night by nightt as well. I grinned and continued my way home.

I continued that process every night for a long time, but only saw a few disappointments when she decided against masturbation for the night. I couldnt take it though, I had seen her body and beauty, I had seen her gradify herself to countless orgasms but I decided there was just one thing I had not yet done.... I hadn't touched her beauty yet. In all the time I had watched her I never once laid hand on her or even got close enough to her to do so, but I set out to change that. So, one night, just as normal I decided to go over to her house and spy, but this time I had much more intimate intentions, or should I say... extreme. I showed up a bit earlier today, by this point I had figured out when her mom went to work and also knew her dad didn't live there, unless in 4 months he had not left the house once for more than an hour, which wasn't likely.

I waited until I saw her mother leave around 4pm and knew that she had left the door unlocked for the girl, so with that I slipped into the house. I grinned and found a hiding place beneath the young girl's bed, a practicle hiding place but it had been my experience that she had not once checked under the bed for "invaders", so I was safe. I waited there about two and a half hours until I heard her enter her room, I knew she always went to her room before getting into the shower, to put things away mostly such as her books and things. Just as she came to the bed I grinned and withdrew my knife, waiting just for the opportunity to slip out for more than a little scare.

She walked to her dresser and I took this moment to slide out silently from under the bed. I walked slowly over to her just to have her turn and let out a shrill scream on the sight of me. I grinned and placed my hand over her mouth, holding her back against her dressed and held my sharp knife to her throat, my eyes on her eyes and only one of us was scared at all, and it sure as hell wasn't me. I could see tears build in her eyes already as I held her silent and at the edge of my blade, wondering if she would attempt to escape as well as giving her a chance to do so if she did so wish to try.

She only stood still, shaking and quivering, tears in her eyes. I smiled and slowly ran the blade down her neck, not cutting her. I leaned close and licked up the edge of her ear, softly whispering to her "Are you scared?". I of course knew the answer even without her quick fearful nodding and smiled at her reaction. Slowly my knife found its way down to her chest and ran tauntingly across the top of them, my eyes insane and hungry. I softly whispered in a demented, raspy voice "Are you a virgin?". She paushed a moment and just stood still, then with the escape of a tear from each eye she nodded and tried to inch away, but it only took a small poke from my knife to freeze her in place. Softly I whispered once more "When I take my hand away from your mouth you know that no matter how hard you scream nobody's going to hear you... it's been my experience over the past four months that this house is near sound proof, and nobody is currently home.". I giggled softly almost as if this were a game, because it was to me, and wiith the retreat of my hand I heard her scream, that was the last I heard from her, as well as the first in fact other than very slight moans through the window.

I looked down and noticed that at the excitement of her screaming I had pushed the knife into her side, which is where I had slid it by that point. I bit my lip slightly nervous as the blood stained my steel and her shirt and looked up to her face to see a shocked, horrific stare. Normally I would have been horrified of a look like that but... something drew me to it, and I began to laugh softly. I slid my blade away from her small body and licked it clean slowly, allowing her body to limply fall to the floor. My bloody lips grinned and I dropped to my knees, straddling her newly dead body. I had planned to do this ahead of time, maybe it was the year I spent in a mental institution when I was 13 I didn't tell you about that was the factor which may have told you to expect this, but suprise is better.

I softly placed the blade to the top of her shirt and gripped it with the other hand, slowly tearing my blade through the thin fabric and exposing the tops of her luscious breasts, soon to be a full exposure. I tore away the top and threw it to the side, leaning down to softly lick her neck and collar bone. Oh was she sweet, sweeter than I ever had anticipated. I began to slowly kiss down her body and dropped the knife to the floor, running my hand gently along her side and feeling the smeary feeling of blood from her open gash. I smiled and licked my hand half-clean then crawled down to softly suck the wound clean, slipping my tounge around and just slightly into it, licking up the extra blood which had already escaped. Her blood was so sweet, just like her, finally I had sweet, sweet satisfaction.

I began to lick down her stomach and almost instantly undid her jeans, sliding them down her sweet, soft dead thighs and placing them to the side. She had gone commando today, interesting. I smiled and began to rub her soft pussy as I leaned up and looked into her open, shocked dead eyes, softly kissing at her cooling lips and rubbing her bloody side softly. I kissed down her neck and picked up my knife as I rubbed her cunt, grinning. I leaned up and undid my jeans, slipping them down just a bit and pulling my cock from my boxers. Within a few moments I began to carve into her stomach randomly, licking up the trailing blood behind the blade. I purposely ran the blade across my tounge just enough to slice it open a bit and began to lick up and down her bloody stomach, combining mine and hers and smiling to myself.

I crawled slowly down and hovered my lips just over her cooling pussy lips. I gripped my knife in my hand firmly and took the blade to her pussy and with fine carving of the blade, I literally began to eat her pussy.


~I hope you see now that I was serious about my stories becoming more graphic, this is the last of this story but it won't be my last, and expect my future ones to be similar to this one. I bid you farewell for now, but check for my stories often if you like this, they get darker. -Insane laugh-


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    READER 500
    14.06.2004 15:18
    hmm thats different...eating a pussy yum lol, thats a more then a little disturbing but hey what can i say? lol its all good. sounds like good eating to me but id never do that...its a little to violent...regardless of how much i like the taste of blood and such id never consider eating a person...i have morals...even if i am a strange person who is goth...lol...you are goth in real life arent you? lol goth is all i could think of that would have such sick demented fantasies...i enjoyed ur work...sorta lol

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    14.06.2004 18:04
    I appreciate you commenting on my work he who is called Nice, and yes, I am only classified as a goth, nothing else. I just added a fourth part to REVENGE!, but I'm waiting for it to be reviewed, so if you're interested, read it. It's the most intense one of all thouugh, so if cannibalism bothers you at all you're not gonna like it, but that's all. And just so you freaks don't flip out about it, I don't vote for my own stories, so don't worry. I like to see the honest opinion of everyone, I don't just want GOOD ratings I wanna learn on what I do bad and dish out my own fantasies. SO VOTE AND COMMENT!

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    16.06.2004 12:24
    that was discusting...this story is not true because he would be in ajil and there is no way that he can use a computer in jail....this is discraseful

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    16.06.2004 16:34
    it says fiction....

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    17.06.2004 21:56
    i agree with Nice...it was different...but very to my liking hehehe. I have only begun to read these stories in general but i think this is one of the few that i enjoyed full heartedly. You write very well...

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    18.06.2004 17:22
    ur a fucking maniac man.. what the fuck are you thinking writing a story like this man. its just plain stupid ... seriously stop writing

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    20.06.2004 19:46
    You know what kills me about so many who comment? They play off as so "appalled" and "disgusted"... yet they knew the subject matter when they chose to read it! Maybe the intelligence level lies less in the ones who comment and more in those who chose to bear all and share with us their wonderfully wicked, not so "closeted" imaginations. Personally, this is not my "thing" however, curiousity is and I thought you did a phenomenal job.... I look forward top reading more of your work!

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    20.06.2004 22:46
    Well, if it's honest criticism that you want, here it is. The story on writing merit alone is decent, but not fabulous. You have grammatical errors and spelling errors. The suspense only half-heartedly builds and we only glimpse a very small portion of the true twisted mind of the character. I think you tend to "inform" you readers about your characters, instead of building your characters in such a way that your reader can get to know, infer and deduce the nature of your characters. As for content, well, whatever blows your hair back, as long as you maintain a vast distance between your fantasy and reality.

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    22.06.2004 06:59
    Holy Shit people when u read this u knew it would have that kind of stuff in it, i liked it. if you dont like it dont read it

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    22.06.2004 20:45
    I was little scared by it and I won't lie!!! Creepy and now I will always lock all my doors and windows. I shall also close my blinds when I play with myself.

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    24.06.2004 01:14
    fucked up but good story

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    26.06.2004 12:46
    Cannibilism is sick in my opinion. But this is a well written story with a somewhat suspenseful plotline. One problem I have with it is that there is great detail in the beginning but not that much towards the end. Good story in my opinion.

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    26.06.2004 16:49
    wow thats ummmmm different, way different

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    27.06.2004 22:04
    ok....calm down and sorta look at your life

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    28.06.2004 05:11
    I don't find the subject matter to my liking but I decided to read and rate this story for you. The story was very well written, only a few spelling / punctuation errors. Still a very well written story grammaticly. I feel you should continue writing but if this is how you are in real life... Look at your life and how your living it and then think if you still want to be this way.

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    01.07.2004 09:59
    sukt.

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    07.07.2004 23:25
    OMG THIS IS LIKE THE WORST STORY I'VE EVER HERD

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    09.07.2004 00:06
    Omg.. XD I love you people. The lovers and haters a like, I welcome both kinds because you're just so fucking great! Thank you for reading this shit, it's going a lot farther. Oh and to let you know, even if I was like this, which would have landed me in prison by now, I would LOVE to live that way. I write this shit to 1. Freak you norms out. 2. Give the people like me what they want. 3. Cuz I just fuckin' like to write it. lol, Now shut up and read the rest of my stories.

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    20.07.2004 19:51
    YOU ARE ONE VERY SICK ASS HOLE!

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    24.07.2004 01:15
    I think this story was awesome. I wish there were chapter long books like this. The only thing i would have done was have sex with her first then kill her (well in real life i wouldnt kill her... Having my salad tossed in prison aint my thing) And to all the dipshits that keep writing how sick this story is. why did you read it in the first place if you think this shit is nasy? DUH

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    10.08.2004 03:07
    Hey, this isn't s.o., this is his friend. i entered his newest work into the site tonite but i don't know how long this stuff takes to get put on the site. i found his xnxx folder, and it had his name, password, and all that stuff in it along with his only other written entry, which is a poem. i see a lot of people like his work but unfortunately hes no longer able to get on here... its a long story but you wont see his work anymore after the poem, it's called "finale" and it will be on the site eventually, sorry about this, depressed people like him just don't last long without snapping, sadly.

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    10.08.2004 09:06
    For fucks sake!! Are thew writers of this crap peados who spend all their time writing perverted stories, Get a life!

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    13.08.2004 01:10
    That was such a kickass story, sorry to hear that the author's not doing to well, this is the first of his works I have read, but now I shall go read the rest... Thanks S.O.

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    30.08.2004 19:42
    Excellent story, graphically ... I thought it could've had a bit more "gore" to it. In real life I'm ... what you call ... a modern "vampire". My sexual arousal is at its peak when I'm with blood. Interesting and scary at the same time. Anyway, loved the story ... Lets see some more blood sex ...... Like a virgin who gets raped by 25 men with 12inch cocks, now THATS a story ... did I mention she gets cut up afterwords?... And her cut up midsection eventually gets fucked and eaten by a pack of wild dogs ... Mmmmm ... Freshly cut and fucked virgin pussy .... Her left-over pussy juice and blood smeared all over my face and tongue, her dead arsehole wrapped around my thrusting cock ... Oh sorry, got a bit carried away. Nice story, keep up with good work :)

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    21.09.2004 17:55
    This is sick, and you are one twisted person for writing it.
    Well, I suppose someone might like it?

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    28.09.2004 16:14
    This story gets several awards. First...the award for the biggest waste of time in writing and reading it. I could produce a better page by eating a dictionary and shooting it out of my ass at a piece of paper. Secondly....the author is an idiot. No imagination. Just a desire to spout un-thought out pseudo-violent crap (I say pseudo because this isiot doesn't understand the subjet). It's amazing what some people consider imagination.

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    02.10.2004 22:06
    you are one sick fuck, i truely hope you are dead.. you sick fuck

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    13.10.2004 17:54
    dude, this is the most fucked up story ive ever read

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    17.10.2004 01:40
    i am i sick wierdo for liking this? it was awesome

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    25.11.2004 18:36
    this was the most fucked up and disgusting story i have ever read, to the sick fuck who wrote this you should be locked upuantil you die

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    08.12.2004 19:51
    MR.Sweetness you are fuckinng nuts! I love blood too..

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    15.12.2004 16:15
    thank god i have someone to relate to me considering i had done this to my sister a few years back her blood was sweet too

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    23.12.2004 21:30
    kick ass....this was a grate story but it could have had more gore and also am like Mm..sweetness cus well yah ive got like the hugest boner ever rite about nowand i intend to satisfy my erge so bye bye for now


    p.s. VAMP SEX RULES ALL WHODONT LIKE IT I GIVEITH THEE THE FINGER

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    25.12.2004 02:26
    thats totally not ok. and as i girl i think that maybe this is the reason i check under the bed every day before i lock the door. Creep like u are slowly creeping into my life. while i dream i am afraid to walk home in the dark..because of storys like this one! no wonder you were in a mental institution at 13. Hanninbal wouldn't even sink that low. 2 thumbs down you sick excuse for a human!

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    25.12.2004 06:34
    You cut off her vagina and ate it?

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    26.12.2004 02:55
    the history is a cliche from the 70's or son of sam tjmes, i whish you have more imagination but for that Wethotchick{ this stuf is a literal genere, like i sopoust you are a 12 year litle girl you ignore that. the art is not about a good or bad it´s about deal whit fantafy, The mediocre alweys censure everything.

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    03.01.2005 02:12
    OH MY GOD man u ATE her..like u cut her up and ATE HER! holy damn....woah...*twitch* i am NEVER living...anywhere near u i hope..damn i gotta go make sure my doors, windows, and cellar doors are locked...dont get me wrong...im deffinatly a fan of blood gore and all things nasty but..hmm..perhaps im dissapointed...i thought ud fuck her dead body...guess im a sick fuck..eh whatever lol bye *waves*

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    03.01.2005 12:21
    "Thank God
    12-15-04 - 16:15
    Thank god i have someone to relate to me considering i had done this to my sister a few years back her blood was sweet too "
    Wait.. what?

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    03.01.2005 12:23
    Amazingly well written, I must say...

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    09.01.2005 23:13
    LOL haha you are a sick people eating basterd that made me laugh you ate her, bit I agree with that one guy i never want to live near you You might lick eat me and drink my blood like a canable gay vampire what ever it was well writin but dont ever write again or I will Kill you if I read it maybe what ever just dont write again its sick and you should burn in hell you could make it less sick by just fuckin her but thats still sick what ever peace out homes

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    16.01.2005 18:25
    What made me read this!!!! that was fuckin disguistin it made me real, i'll stick to romance and passion thanks!!! You ate her pussy man!!!! get help

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    28.01.2005 17:31
    OMG you sick fuck, i didnt even read it all i went straight to the bottom to see if it was real. but holy shit you sick mother fucker. i hope you burn in hell for just writing something like this

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    29.01.2005 00:42
    please do more! thaanx xxx jo

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    06.02.2005 00:38
    you sick little fuck u ate the pussy like where do u come up with this shit? u and the people who actauly liked thiss should bbe shot. u are a discrace to society and i hope u die

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    14.02.2005 17:27
    you are one fucked up individual

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    19.02.2005 00:18
    I love this! it's so........I don't know.....it's just really good. We need more authors like you.

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    02.03.2005 08:05
    um people that didnt like the story im pretty sure he told you before you started reading that it gets graphic. maybe im just seeing things

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    02.03.2005 15:57
    this was one fucked up story!!!! who the fuck actually eats people u sick bastard u should b locked up or shot or something!! Wat the fuck were u thinking when u wrote this shit!!! fucking discusting!!!!!!!!

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    02.03.2005 16:00
    some sick bastards out there for actually liking this! who could you? It's fucking rotten

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    03.04.2005 22:51
    Sick, sick, and sick. Not to mention sick.
    Oh, I almost forgot – it was also sorta sick.

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    23.04.2005 21:03
    prudes. i love your writing my sweet, they just can't appreciate beauty.

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    10.05.2005 02:57
    here is a story for you, you sick fucking ass hat.....once apon a time there was 4 groups of people...the gays who eventualy got hung by all the strights who hated gays, the lezboz who ebcause very rich, the strights who fuck real wemon not blow up dolls like you, you sick fuck!, and the sick ass fucking human eating shit holes!!!!!! the human eating basterds eventualy took a 12 inch drill bit and drilled the happys things from their head!!!!!! THE END you fucking sick peice of shit i hole you die 5 minuits after you read this....sick fuck!

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    19.05.2005 21:20
    Omg sick.
    I like literally puked.
    Maybe you should consider being rehabilitated in that insititution. fuckin weirdo.

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    21.05.2005 21:42
    YOU sick little fucking retard i bet that you are a white trash necro who is part of the loser KKK go to hell you fucker and that goes for all of u other white trash necro fuckers too!

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    02.06.2005 19:04
    Geeze peaple!!! Its just a freaking story dont get all hyped up about it..damn...i thought it was pretty good though you had a few spell errors in it...great story...and thanx for sharing it with me

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    07.06.2005 07:33
    FUCKED UP MAN

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    26.07.2005 00:04
    Great story....and if you other fuck-tards don't like it then don't read it...it says Necrophilia, Cannibalism. "Ummm, I wonder what it is about." Just go back to your house under the power lines and eat a bowl of lead-based paint chips. You Down Syndrome prude Motherfuckers. By the way...did I say I thought the story was great.

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    16.09.2005 15:11
    11 reviews, 2 supported your story, 9 did not. I think that tells it right there.

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    READER 500
    09.11.2005 18:29
    You shouldn't read stories if you don't read the description, For all you idiot fucks out there who posted negative stuff, go get a Blowjob and be over with it! Don't read a fucking story if you don't like what it is about! It clearly says "Necrophellia" so for all you Gay-Ass bastards, go to hell! Great story, man. I hope for a sequal!

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  • READER
    READER 500
    04.12.2005 21:41
    It was the most inriguing unfortunate story ive read. Sexually insane... kinda secret crush meets psycho.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    02.01.2006 07:17
    You are fucking sick man, please, kill yourself, or I will, burn in hell 1/10

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  • READER
    READER 500
    04.01.2006 04:08
    alright dude that is some seriously fucked up shit, you really need help dude i mean im not trying to be negative i mean the actual writing was all right but seriously what the hell is wrong with you dude, you are going to hell for sure

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  • READER
    READER 500
    28.01.2006 01:08
    people like you....i kick their ass

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  • READER
    READER 500
    30.01.2006 20:13
    Interesting... Not necessarily erotic however. As a writer, I would actually venture to say that the author may have not originally intended it as eroticaI I deal in sociopathic disorders as well, and my recommendation is to edit. Fix the grammatical and spelling errors, add a few more details. You want to really freak these fuckers out? Give a detailed description of the cannabalistic act. 7/10

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  • READER
    READER 500
    31.03.2006 02:30
    I found the overall idea of the story to be good. My only complaint is that there were too few erotic points to it. More detail in where the girl was stabbed, or exactly how her cunt was eaten would have helped. other than that, good story. These people need to stop antagonizing you for writing it...dont they read the description? What were they expecting? A cinderalla story?

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  • READER
    READER 500
    12.04.2006 08:15
    YOU FUCKIN SICK FUCKIN JEFFERY DOMMER WANNABES HOW ABOUT I KILL ONE OF YOU SICK FUCKS AND I TAKE A DUMP ON YOU FOR A COUPLE OF MONTHS THEN SICK FUCK THAT WROTE THIS AND ALL HIS FAGGOT BUDDIES CAN EAT HIS ROTTING CORPS FLYS ALL OVER THE PLACE. THEN I WILL KILL YOU AND SHOVE YOU DOWN IN THE SEWER WHERE SCUMP LIVE IT IS YUR NEW HOM GET USED TO IT YUR SOUL IS GOING TO HELLLLLLLL LOSERS YOU NO WHATS FOR DINNER BEEF IS WHATSS FOR DINNER. NOT FUCKING HUMAN BEING YOU WILL DIE LIKE JEFFERY DOMMER DID IN PRISON GETTING BANGED BY BUBBA AND THEN SHANKED

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  • READER
    READER 500
    07.05.2006 22:41
    I liked it. I also like the way you think. I would have kept her alive though because It is much better to have your victims wish for you to kill them just so they can get away from the pain of being alive through all the hell they are going through. But not that I'm a expert on the subject. Its not like I have thirteen subjects waiting for the pain that is about to be inflicted upon them....

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  • READER
    READER 500
    21.05.2006 18:46
    dude, u have serious fucking issues and u should definately go back to a mental asylum, even if this may be fiction, u still should go back there, nobody will miss you here,

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  • READER
    READER 500
    07.06.2006 02:50
    everyone on this forum just needs to chill out

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  • READER
    READER 500
    24.06.2006 08:50
    you sick mother fucker i dont give a fuck if that is fiction thats fucked up im going to find you and every body like you and fucking kill all of you , you fucking sick fuck thats just fucking wrong to even think FUCKING CUNT

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  • READER
    READER 500
    03.07.2006 14:01
    your fuckin sick even if it is fiction ur fuckin insane for thinjing that way i agree with the guy below me you are a fucking cunt how can you live with yourself i mean litterally eating a pussy your fuckin sick go back to the looney bin pysco people like you make me sick

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  • READER
    READER 500
    03.08.2006 04:09
    well..this is quite interesting..considering...... a single person here could ever harm you without having to go through me first..and thats an experience that they wouldnt last through...Oh and by the way...about the story...Yum..^-~

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  • READER
    READER 500
    08.08.2006 10:49
    "You sick mother fucker i dont give a fuck if that is fiction thats fucked up im going to find you and every body like you and fucking kill all of you , you fucking sick fuck thats just fucking wrong to even think fucking cunt"

    now that to me, is just hilarious... all these people that are threatening to kill the author are just as bad as what they claim he is... only difference is that hes writing about a fantasy, not threatening to do it... THEY ARE THREATENING... ~.~

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  • READER
    READER 500
    18.08.2006 10:49
    I give you props for having the twisted mindset, stronger stomach, and balls of steel in making this horrific and disgusting story (I meant it in a good way). What your motivation was for making this is what'll really get you creeped out.

    8/10

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  • READER
    READER 500
    31.08.2006 21:16
    Writing this should be illegal....... there is no place on earth for this kind of material or fucked up ideas........ i suggest those who enjoy it to get help------- what kind of upbringing leads to sick fucks that enjoy such evil............this is a really sad side of the internet, that such sick ideas can be shared, and viewed.... the world has come to an all time low and is behond all hope

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  • READER
    READER 500
    08.09.2006 22:41
    All you threatening bitches should shut the fuck up. It's fucking fiction. I got Sinfuloblivion's back. Fuck you all.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    14.09.2006 00:40
    Whoo-hooo I liked it it was well fucking written and it actually wasn't THAT sick u know i mean at least he killed her that was fucking mercyfull... and I have been to a mental facility all u assholes out there come and fucking get me cuz u know what U are the one with the fucking issues maybe I'll be the one treating u someday cuz I'm gonna be a fucking Psychologist! HA

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  • READER
    READER 500
    16.11.2006 16:33
    People, the viewers posting disgusted and angry replies are most likely just young teenagers that are bored out of their minds, so they decide to post some random hate crap just to see our reactions. Ignore them. If they are serious, then why did they read this in the first place? Just n00bs that want attention because they don't get it at home...

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  • READER
    READER 500
    03.01.2007 14:22
    Hey all you immature whiners mouthing off : you KNEW what this story was about. You read it. You could have stopped reading when things got intense. You are just as "sick" as you claim the author to be.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    24.01.2007 01:18
    im a 19 year old girl id let you do that to me do you live anywhere near flex canada? i realy like it and i want to do it to someone SOON!

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  • READER
    READER 500
    26.03.2007 15:06
    Beautiful.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    22.06.2007 15:45
    this is shit bitch face

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  • READER
    READER 500
    24.08.2007 02:12
    Love it. Creepy, dark, and twisted. And very well written. 9/10

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  • READER
    READER 500
    29.08.2007 17:28
    that was awesome!
    10/10 who ever had a problem with this story should fuck off some people like this sort of writing, if u don't, then don't fukin read it

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  • READER
    READER 500
    18.10.2007 23:48
    Nice.

    A little dark for my tastes, but hey, it works.

    Seriously though, If you have a problem with it then why did you take the time to read it?

    Johnny Demon

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  • READER
    READER 500
    11.01.2008 06:27
    that was cute how you guys masturbated together :]

    me too im a girl id love you to do that to me

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  • READER
    READER 500
    27.01.2008 19:20
    Snape kills Dumbledore.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    18.02.2008 13:32
    Poor writing. Go to school

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  • READER
    READER 500
    26.03.2008 01:31
    He isnt sick, It was a horrible story. Not graphic enough for me, hell can anyone wirte a story on here? I might as well write one.

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  • haha+as+if%21
    14.05.2008 00:45
    hmm.. must admit.. that was NICE! and very dark
    me liked it.. liked it ALOT!
    *sighs* sadly.. the knife in the pussy part isn't as grand as said.. don't ask!
    yep.. posative rating! =D

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.06.2008 06:46
    When I wrote this story I was 15. I'm actually rather surprised to see that anybody has read this since 2006, or any of my stories for that matter. If you're a fan of these, you may wish to check out "Revenge!" and the series I wrote a bit later called "Mukuneiu". That was another one that I started and let die, but it was done a little better because I was a bit older.

    I actually am considering writing more on this site, but I'm in the process of writing two non-sexual novels at the present time which have so far showed a great deal of promise.

    Looking back on this I actually see the poor quality of the writing. Good for fifteen, and terrific for this site, but still pretty poor. If you are interested in reading any of my further stuff... keep an eye out on this site in the near future for stories in the "Dark Fantasy" section by a user with the initials J.W.G.

    I'm not entirely sure exactly what the screen-name WILL be, but it'll have those initials for certain. Have fun.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.10.2008 03:39
    Of course you had to eat the pussy. A little more detail there would have been nice. How did it taste, feel, look?

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