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A Dish Best Served Cold or Bryan's Revenge

Author: Rutger5

Date: 24 September 2012

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A Dish Best Served Cold or Bryan’s Revenge
(The sequel to Spring Break Broke My Heart)
By rutger5 (An Original Story - Copyright 2012)



My bleary eyes stared at the computer screen as I watched some Asian girl expertly sucking some guy’s cock. The moans sounded tinny to my ears though that was due more to the video’s poor production values than my sound system.


For the past sixty hours since arriving from my family’s vacation cabin I’d alternated wracking my brain trying to think of how to get revenge with watching a lot of porn. Now before criticizing me for watching porn let me explain why I was doing it. Like most nineteen year olds sex was always on my mind whether I wanted to think about it or not. But ever since witnessing my scumbag father and his no good friends gangbanging my friend Courtney when I now thought of sex the images from that night came back to me. Since before that I’d had major feelings for her every time I remembered it was like a dagger to my heart.


So in order to drive those images from my mind I was watching porn instead while making sure none of the women looked anything like Courtney. It was far from a perfect solution especially since in order for me to think about revenge the reason why I was seeking it would pop up and I’d think of Courtney. So I’d watch more porn to drive the memory away. A real catch 22.


It didn’t help that I was surviving the last couple of days on beer and delivery fast food either with a little bit of Mary Jane to take the edge off if I got too drunk. I also had to turn my cell phone off as both Courtney and my mother had tried to contact me repeatedly and I didn’t want to speak with either of them but for completely different reasons.


In regards to Courtney there was just nothing left to say. She’d broken my heart and killed our friendship and like Humpty Dumpty there was no putting it back together again. If I kept ignoring her she’d finally have to accept it I hoped.


As far as my mother went I just couldn’t speak to her until I could figure out what to say and how to let her know the truth. How do you tell someone ‘Mom, by the way that night we stayed at the lake house Dad and his friends had a good old time with Courtney if you catch my meaning. So not only did she hurt me but she betrayed you as well after you welcomed her into your home. Not as bad as Dad did, of course’.


So instead like a coward I stayed hidden in my dorm room with my phone shut off. But no matter how much I thought about it inspiration still eluded me. The only idea I could think of was to show the pictures I’d taken of my dad’s friends having sex with Courtney to their wives. Not particularly original and in spite of wanting nothing further to do with Courtney I didn’t wish to expose her in such a way.


However it seemed I had no choice but to do so. Since I was unable to come up with a better plan or even another plan at all. So I downloaded the video I’d made that night from my smart phone to my computer. Once there I was able to take screen shots from the video and edit them so either Courtney’s face wasn’t showing or blur it in the case of Harry Peyser. Since he had only received oral sex from her there wasn’t any way for me to show him having sex without her face being there. Then I uploaded the edited pics to my phone and I was set.


First I showered as I was really starting to reek and after shaving and dressing I was ready to go. It was now early Wednesday morning and it was time to act. As soon as I’d left the building and began heading toward where my car was parked I saw her. She must have had the place staked out or been remarkably lucky as I had barely been outside since getting back. Putting my head down I hurried forward but she was able to intercept me before I could reach my vehicle.


“Bryan please, can’t I talk with you for a minute?” I heard her ask as she struggled to catch up with me.


Without slowing my pace or actually looking at her I replied “There really isn’t anything for us to talk about anymore. I said my piece the other day and nothing’s changed since then.”


“I know I hurt you Bryan and I hate myself for that…”


“Whatever but we both know I had no claim on you. You’re free to do what you want, when you want, with who you want. Only thing maybe is if you’re going to fuck a married man its probably best not to do when his wife is in the same house. Kinda fucking rude, you know?”


“I know I deserve that and more” she answered with a sob as I fumbled in my pocket now that I’d reached the car “but if I can explain just a little…”


“No you can’t, at least not to me” I told her as I unlocked the door and got into the car.


“So that’s it Bryan, its over, even us being friends?”


“Well” I said starting the car “you have a funny way of acting toward your friends I must say. No doubt we’ll see each other in class.”


With where she was standing right next to my car I was unable to drive off so reluctantly I looked up at her and instantly regretted it. Despite her green eyes being red as tears rolled from them I was as always struck by how beautiful she was and somehow her misery made her even more so in a vulnerable sort of way.


“Please Bryan I see you’re not ready to talk now and maybe you never will be and it’s all my fault and I have to live with that. But just do one thing for me please if you can. When you’re able to, just read this letter I wrote to you, that’s all I ask.”


She produced an envelope in her dainty hand and held it by the window and I could see my name written on it in her flowery script. Taking it from her I tossed it onto the passenger seat.


“I’m not making any promises but maybe. Now please step away from the car because I have things I have to do.”


“Okay Bryan” she said in a sad and resigned voice before turning and walking away slowly.


Fuck! Here I was doing my best to not think about her and she goes and gets me all worked up I thought as I began to drive. It took a few hours to reach the city and it was now almost afternoon. I really didn’t have a rational plan on how I was going to approach anyone or what to say when I did but I had to start somewhere. Because of this I first headed for Queens where David Weinstein lived.



My family had been to many parties over the years at his house though it had been a couple of years since I’d attended one. In a way this was going to be the toughest part, excluding how I handled my own family. David had always been a nice guy and had also treated me well. He was more down to earth than the rest of them which was why even after becoming quite successful he had stayed in his old house instead of trading up both his house and neighborhood. But he had made his choice and it was time to pay the piper.


A little while later found me on his front steps ringing the doorbell of his colonial style house. I rang again when no one answered and I was about to turn and leave when the door opened a crack though I couldn’t see anyone.


“Who is it?” I heard a female voice ask.


“Yes hello. My name’s Bryan Ohrffs and I was hoping to speak with Mr. or Mrs. Weinstein if they’re available” I replied.


In response I heard a squeal after which the door opened wider and a face peered around it. The face belonged to a stunning dark haired girl wearing glasses who looked awfully familiar.


“Bryan!” she practically screamed as she launched herself into my arms and hugged me tightly.


For a few seconds I didn’t even attempt to think but instead I wrapped my arms around her lithe body and returned her hug while also noticing how nice she smelled. It wasn’t until I felt stirrings in my loins that I reluctantly broke our embrace as I studied her face.


“Hey Rachel, it’s been a while” I said to the smiling face of David Weinstein’s teenaged daughter.


“It’s been years” she replied as she took me by my hand and practically dragged me into the house behind her.


Once we were inside she closed the door though she kept a tight hold of my hand. She then led me to the living room and I couldn’t help checking out her cute little butt as she did so. Rachel sat on the couch and pulled me down so I was next to her and only after I was sitting did she release me. She was sitting sideways facing me with her long legs folded under her body as she stared into my eyes with her spectacle covered brown ones.


“How are you Bryan? You look good” she told me and her face reddened a little but she didn’t look away.


“I’m good Rachel, how about you?”


“Fine” she answered softly “but you didn’t say how I looked.”


“You look great Rachel, you’ve umm, really grown up, umm since I last saw you” I told her.


“Do you really think so?” she asked as she pushed her chest in my direction making me swallow hard.


“Oh definitely” I answered and it was the truth.


I’d known her most of my life and since we were kids we’d gotten along well. But though she had always been cute her facial features especially her nose had been somewhat prominent and she also had been tall and skinny as a twig. Now as she’d matured her features had softened and she looked gorgeous with her long, black, wavy hair. On top of that, though she was still on the slim side Rachel had definitely developed some curves and the perfect word to describe her now was willowy.


Her bosom though not large was shapely and the black tank top she was wearing showed it off to great effect. I’d already been entranced by her tight round ass which was encased in a pair of multi-colored lounge pants and her legs were as long as a summer day.


“Cool” she gushed “I’m glad you think so. So how’s college Bryan? I’m so excited. I don’t know if you heard but I’ve been accepted to Columbia.”


“Wow that’s great Rachel, congratulations. College is okay, I’m doing well in my studies” I told her. As far as the rest, well no sense getting into that with her I figured.


“Oh Bryan I’m sorry I forgot to ask you if you want anything?” she asked as she leaned so close I could feel her soft breath on my skin “I mean to drink or something.”


“Don’t go to any trouble for me Rach” I replied as I felt myself getting warm.


“No trouble. Besides for you - anything. I doubt you remember it but you gave me my first real kiss at my bat mitzvah so I could never say no to you if you want something from me.”


Talk about a loaded statement. I wondered if she’d really thought about the implications of what she’d said but knowing Rachel I believe she had. She had always been a serious and intelligent girl though she always did have a good sense of humor as well. Forget about warm though, now the room was hotter than the equator for me at that moment.


“Of course I remember Rachel and I also remember you were a very good kisser even if you were a beginner” I truthfully told her and I saw from her expression that she loved my answer.


“Really you thought that? You don’t have to lie to make me feel good. You were very nice to make out with a scrawny thirteen year old, all my friends were sooo jealous I was kissing an older boy. Besides I’ve gotten a lot better at it since then.”


Again I swallowed before replying as she sure was doing her best to tempt me, intentionally or not.


“I’m not lying. I actually thought you were a better kisser than I was at the time. Remember how it ended though when your mom found us, I thought she was going to freak out.”


“I know” she laughed as she remembered “but it was better her than my Dad. Who knows how he’d have reacted. But you never answered me, can I get you something? We have juice or water or iced tea I think.”


“Iced tea would be nice if it’s not too much trouble.”


“No trouble at all. Don’t go anywhere and I’ll be right back.”


I watched as she got up and walked toward the kitchen and my eyes feasted on her butt the whole time until I noticed she had turned her head back and was looking at me. She smiled and now she exaggerated the sway of her hips as she continued toward the kitchen.


Damn I thought! If this kept up I was going to say or do something I shouldn’t. I was here for revenge on her father not to flirt with her. Once I drank the tea I was going to get out of there and return when she was gone and her mom was home. Rachel came back into the room and she had a tall glass in each hand. But instead of returning to the couch she passed by me though she did turn her pretty face my way.


“Talking about my bat mitzvah got me thinking Bryan. I still have the pictures from it on my computer. Do you want to see?”


When she asked me this she had such a hopeful look on her face that I was unable to turn her down. It probably wasn’t the best thing to do under the circumstances but I couldn’t refuse her for some reason.


“Sure I’d love to Rachel. It’ll be funny to see our younger versions again.”


“Well come on and follow me” Rachel replied and she waited until I was right behind her before she started walking again.


All the way up the stairs her butt called out to me and I wanted nothing more than to lean forward and kiss it. I followed her into her room where she put the glasses down on her computer desk and indicated a chair in front for me to sit in. While I sat she went over and closed the bedroom door before returning to stand next to me. She leaned over and turned on the computer while also giving me a great view of the top half of her perky little breasts.


“Do you want to sit Rachel?” I offered attempting to stand.


“Don’t be silly Bryan” she replied putting her hand on my shoulder to keep me where I was.


Rachel then turned back to the computer and using the mouse made a few clicks to open her pictures library. A few more clicks and the bat mitzvah file was open but I was unable to take my eyes from the budding beauty next to me. When she turned to look at me she was so close I couldn’t help myself. I reached around her waist and drew her to me as I tilted my head and met her lips with mine.


Rachel responded instantly with her hand touching my face as she returned my kiss and she wasn’t lying about getting better. Her lips were soft and yielding and within a minute they had parted enough that my tongue was able to slip between them and explore her mouth. During our kiss I managed to turn the chair so we were facing one another and once I had I was able to wrap my other arm around her tiny waist as well.


Her tongue wrestled with mine when without warning she straddled the chair as she sat on my lap. Now her arms twined around my neck as we continued kissing and I tried to prevent it but I could feel my lust growing. When I broke the kiss she made a disappointed whimper but after I gently bit her slender neck it turned to a contented purr.


My mouth worked its way down to her shoulder and I could see goose bumps rising on her skin. She tasted like flowers and sweat and innocence to me. My hand grabbed her neck as I kissed her on her mouth hard and insistently. Pulling her body against mine Rachel then pressed her breasts into my chest while she subtly shifted her hips further inflaming my lust beneath her.


“Damn Rachel, you are driving me crazy” I murmured into her well shaped ear.


“I’ve dreamed of doing this Bryan for so long” Rachel whispered in reply as she gyrated faster “but what’s that I feel.”


“You must know what it is. You caused it.”


“I know and I’m sorry Bryan.”


She didn’t seem sorry. In fact she continued teasing me by squirming about on my lap while now delivering little love bites to my neck. This continued for a while as we drove each other crazy. I was hard as a steel rod but somehow I was happy just kissing her. It was Rachel who escalated things when she climbed from my lap eliciting a disappointed groan from my lips. That changed when her hand reached down and rubbed the bulge in my pants.


“Lets get your pants off” Rachel implored me while licking her luscious lips.


Not needing to be told twice I moved quickly. I raised my ass off the chair so I could pull my pants down and once I did Rachel knelt before me. She took my hard dick in her warm hand and tilted it in her direction while smiling wickedly. Then leaning forward she licked the swollen head causing a gasp from me.


For the next five minutes or so Rachel continuously licked my cock. Sometimes she ran her tongue the length of it, starting at the base and working up to the now slippery tip. But she also concentrated on just licking the head at times and she even licked my cum heavy balls until I wanted to scream. She’d yet to do more than use her tongue on me but I was more turned on then I ever remembered being.


“Ooh Rachel you’re driving me so crazy” I told her after she’d just used her tongue to lick up some pre-cum that was oozing steadily from my hole.


“Good, but you just wait” she answered with a wink.


Next while keeping her beautiful eyes locked on mine she opened her mouth wide and engulfed my head and kept going. Her mouth slid down my shaft until my head reached the back of her mouth at which time she pulled back. Her tongue teased the underside of my swollen cock as she began to bob up and down taking me to her mouth’s limit each time.


Rachel then allowed some saliva to escape her mouth and flow down my erection until it reached her hand which was wrapped around the base. Now she began rapidly pumping what didn’t fit in her mouth using the saliva as a lubricant and driving me close to the edge.



My heart was now racing and my breathing becoming rapid in spite of the fact that I was sitting there motionless. She pushed me closer and closer to orgasm and it seemed as if she wasn’t going to stop until I exploded and it wasn’t going to be much longer before I did. My hand stroked her hair appreciatively as I started to moan. Right before I totally lost control I warned her.


“Rachel I can’t take it any more. I’m going to cum!” I gasped out.


Pulling her mouth from me she replied “Yes! I want to see you cum Bryan!”


As she said this her hand was like a blur stroking me and now it was squeezing up to my head and right below it. I doubt a cannon or a volcano had anything on me as the cum erupted from my cock. The first blast shot high in the air before falling down and landing in her hair. The second spurt hit Rachel’s glasses as well as her forehead after which she took my head back into her mouth.


During my orgasm her hand continued stroking me while I shot rope after rope of cum. Rachel sucked on me as if I was a very thick straw and she continued even when no more came. Finally she released me from her mouth although she continued to lick me for another minute making sure she swallowed every drop. Finally she stopped but as I watched Rachel removed her glasses. Holding them by her mouth her tongue licked off the cum that coated the lens.


She then smiled and said “Yummy.”


“Damn Rachel that was…incredible! Is that what you’ve been learning at that fancy school you go to?”


Rachel attended an elite, very expensive private school in Manhattan that was very similar to the one on the TV show Gossip Girl. That was the one extravagance that her father was willing to support as it benefited his little girl.


“No of course not Bryan. That’s silly. But I did learn some tricks from some of the girls I know there.”


“Well thank them from me” I told her half seriously.


She giggled at my answer while picking up a box of tissues and handing them to me.


“To clean up yourself a little Bryan.”


“Wait Rach, I was hoping you’d let me return the favor and maybe help you make a mess” I told her hopefully.


For a second it looked like she was thinking about what I’d said but she then slowly shook her head.


“No I can’t Bryan, not now anyway. I really shouldn’t have done what I did but I couldn’t help myself. Seeing you unexpectedly after all this time I went a little crazy. I’m glad I did it because at the least I’ve opened your eyes about me. Before this if you even thought about me it was as some little girl and now you know better. But if I let you do that now it would be a mistake.”


“I just want to make you feel as good as you just made me feel. I wouldn’t do anything you didn’t want me to.”


“I know that Bryan. I’m just afraid once you started I wouldn’t want you to stop. And I’m not ready for that right now. Sorry. But now you know how I feel and if you’re interested you know how to find me plus I’ll give you my cell number and e-mail address.”


“Okay” I told her as I wiped myself off before pulling my pants up over my unruly and still half hard dick.


She wrote on a piece of paper and handed it to me.


“If you ever want to talk or anything. I know I’m still a high school girl and you’re surrounded by college women and everything…”


“It’s not like that Rachel. I will definitely contact you” I told her.


Things did feel a little awkward now as we walked downstairs together. Both of us seemed lost in our thoughts a little and we weren’t sure what to say. But as we headed to the door Rachel suddenly stopped and looked right at me.


“If you don’t want to, just say so but I have an idea Bryan. My prom is coming up and I was wondering if you might want to go with me. You wouldn’t have to pay for anything. I know it’s probably a silly idea so say no if you want.”


“Rachel, that is definitely not a silly idea. I’d love to take you if you’ll let me.”


It was another fifteen minutes before I left her house as when she heard my answer she squealed loudly and hugged and kissed me. That kiss led to another and then another and by the end we had to tear ourselves apart before we wound up naked on the floor.


Now as I drove I remained hard because of her final words to me. Right on her doorstep after we kissed goodbye she whispered into my ear.


“Bryan, if you want you have plenty of time to back out of this. But if you don’t I can promise you that you won’t regret it. I’m hoping that’s the night I give myself to someone for the first time and if it’s you then it’s almost certain to happen.”


So as I drove into Brooklyn the thought of being Rachel’s first kept me aroused to say the least. But I couldn’t worry about that now as I was on a mission. I was heading to Borough Park where Mitch Katz lived with his family.


End of Part 1


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  • anonymous+reader
    24.09.2012 22:00
    Good cant wait for next part

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.09.2012 22:28
    good one please write soon .. . . . waiting for next story . .
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  • ipmweb
    25.09.2012 00:21
    Great follow up - I am interested to see where this goes.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.09.2012 01:03
    MORE PLS THS IS A GREAT STORY

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.09.2012 01:03
    MORE PLS THS IS A GREAT STORY

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.09.2012 01:38
    waiting patiently for another chapter to zsee how he intends to get back at all those guys LOL

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.09.2012 01:39
    this was grate and that revenge on her dad ;)

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  • jimmythekid
    25.09.2012 18:54
    Man, you are easily one of the best writers on this web-site, Loved the story. It's almost a travesty you don't get paid to do this, that was immaculately crafted, really hot, and it was an actually real, well-rounded and likeable character. Really fantastic, very looking forward to your next one.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.09.2012 19:13
    im about to read it now, I wanted to c how it is first before I read it

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.09.2012 20:19
    it was great, and is there a part 2?

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.09.2012 00:58
    did he leave the video there or what? lol u never specified

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.09.2012 16:32
    more please , I got to see what happens

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.09.2012 17:40
    Please, give this a happy ending: sincerely, everyone out there. The first chapter actually really depressed me, so much that I couldn`t fap, but this made me feel so much better.

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.09.2012 19:40
    Given urself a breather with this while u scrounge ur mind for the perfect vengeful climax, eh? U sly, surreptitious dog :-) Can't wait for the finale- and please, take ur time. Make it real good...

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.09.2012 01:04
    Please continue awesome series!

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.09.2012 08:59
    Bryan should fuck all of their daughters!!!!!!!!! Revenge. And then he will probably fuck his own mom to get back at dad which I am not into but I could see happening.

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  • OGBlueMerc
    27.09.2012 17:21
    a happy ending? back with Courtney? fuck that

    I like the jew girl

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.09.2012 22:57
    Well... The first comment I would make is that there was little to no commas used throughout this part. I'm not sure if you meant run on sentences, so it's just a comment. It also seems you have changed the point of view that you're writing from. Bryan used to be a sweet, introverted romantic. It was why I loved this story. That character was gone in this part. The confrontation with Courtney was beautifully done, and that letter will go a long way I'm sure. I'm still very excited to see the ending part for the story. None of my words are meant to criticize, Rutger. I'm just simply stating differences I noticed from Spring Break Broke My Heart and this piece, of which I obviously loved the first installment. The bringing up the past acquantance was a great idea, but I definitely don't like the last part about heading to prom. Because now one way or another, Bryan is trapped into breaking a girl's heart. Please keep writing. I love your work.

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  • anonymous+reader
    28.09.2012 13:36
    Finally, I can fap to this. Lol The first chapter was so freakin' depressing, I can't wait to see how his revenge plays out. Keep writing! I usually don't read series, but this one is too good.

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  • anonymous+reader
    28.09.2012 18:33
    good lead-in, but light on sex as it stands on its own

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  • anonymous+reader
    29.09.2012 18:26
    What! Its over! You should make another part!

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  • anonymous+reader
    29.09.2012 18:32
    Awesome chapter but please don't end it yet

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 00:57
    This better not really be the fucking end! Come on! there`s so much more potential, so many things left inresolved. Please man, this is a great story and if it ends this way it will just feel hallow for everyone involved...

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 02:03
    Don't end it please!!!!!!!!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 02:26
    please give us another chapter. soo good !!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 03:03
    Fuck you. You can't end it like that.... I'm amazed at your righting skills and the interest I have for this story. My life would be over without this

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 03:43
    I thought only Jew men had bat mitzvih's. Good story but light on anything too sexual. It's like Star Trek 1, a neccary step to better things.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 03:59
    Really? That's it?

    So much potential and it's completely fucked now...

    I think I hate you more than SomeStory right now...

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 05:43
    OMG!!!! you can do better then this man.... wow what a shitty way to do your readers,by ending a story which has so meny possibilities to go on and become a series.. *FACE PALM*

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 08:39
    Many of us want you to continue with this story line.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 09:09
    Awesome like all of your other stories. Hope the saga will continue

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 09:13
    Many of us want you to continue with this story line.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 09:34
    wtf?? the story is finished... O.o

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 10:17
    wtf?? the story is finished... O.o

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 11:45
    This needs at least one more installment. Courtney, Rachel, the remainder of the revenge. Your story still lots of potential. Reconsider your 'FINITO' statement.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 11:54
    To previous commentor a Jewishboy has a bar mitzvh and a Jewish girl has a bat mitzvah but they are kind of the same, coming of age stuff.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 15:36
    Great stories hope to read the next ones soon

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  • richardinoh
    30.09.2012 16:55
    dude, good story. you ended way too soon. I hope you reconsider.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 19:51
    mom/old lady is a serious turn-off. that aside, it was a really bad end to the story if you stop it here. no closure at all.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 19:51
    mom/old lady is a serious turn-off. that aside, it was a really bad end to the story if you stop it here. no closure at all.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 20:19
    Please don't end it here! Continue the story, it's great!

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 20:30
    Its not finnished yet it cant be!

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.09.2012 20:49
    Its not finnished yet it cant be!

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.10.2012 04:13
    You still have Rachel's Prom please don't end it.

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.10.2012 08:34
    I hope there's a part 3.

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  • Rutger5
    01.10.2012 14:27
    To all those readers not happy how this story turned out - this is why I hate to write sequels. People are never satisfied with them.
    For those who want ending spelled out or elaborated on - here goes. Part with mom at end was a red herring. Since some people expected possible incest as revenge and there are a lot of incest story fans I put it in. But no, they aren’t going to get together.
    For those who wanted Bryan & Courtney to get together - no, not going to happen, never was going to happen as long as its me writing this.
    Rachel & Bryan- maybe. It would be up to her character, but there would be issues as he brought about trouble, to say the least, to her parent’s marriage. Can this be overcome? I’m not sure but I’m not going to write it.
    In the past 2 years I’ve put up over 50 stories on this site. Maybe its time for me to move on judging by the reaction to my last 2 stories if this is where things are going. Not sure yet - either way thanks to all who read. r5

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.10.2012 16:40
    Well...well....well Brian did get his revenge. Only the ending is a bit too sudden. All those men got their retribution but how does it really affect them and Brian? Thats the question that many readers wanted to know. You may not like sequel but many of us do. Don't worry about critics who said you should have this or that in your story. But may I suggest an epilogue. In which you could put all those dissatisfied readers to rest. I for one would like to know how Brian make peace and move on with his life.

    There are many people who have encountered this problem. Some breakdown, some became a recluse, some became stronger and so on. Its good that Brian did not hook up with Courtney. His mother divorced his father, there's fight in other families but what really happened in the aftermath that is what we want to know. I hope you're not angry with me for suggesting epilogue. Peace Rutger. You're a great
    writer and believe me many were touch by stories.

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.10.2012 00:55
    Rutger you are an amazing writer. do not let people who write these comments stop you from making these amazing stories I have read most of the ones you have posted and I have loved every single one! I have never commented before because it is not my place to criticize your art but I will support you in your art of writing any one who says you cant do what you like with your stories is a selfish person and probably needs to get laid, their thoughts and wants do not matter these are your stories and there are many who love them and appreciate them as they are and love the way you write. it would be a shame if you stopped posting because of people who do not respect your art!

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.10.2012 01:42
    Please make another part. Screw who doesn't like it. You should keep going for those of us that do

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2012 01:07
    R5 - I love it! Keep them coming!!!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2012 02:20
    Pls don't end it.u re my favourite writer and this is one of my best series.we got to know d end of dat letter & if u bryan forgave her .please rutger

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.10.2012 05:55
    Bro waiting to read the next part..good story line dude..hope you write it soon..thanks

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.10.2012 17:39
    hi rutger,i fully agree with your sentiments about a sequel to this story,let the readers decide in their ownway about the ending,it is not up to you how they think that it should end up,for me,, great ending,regs from djb8247

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  • deviant69
    07.10.2012 01:08
    I have just finished reading all three parts of this story and I loved the ending!!! It was informative enough to know that Bryan did get his revenge but still left the reading guess!!!! PERFECTION!!!! Thank you

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.10.2012 07:23
    Rutger5, you have done a fantastic job bringing back Bryan's character. He acted as he should have in the second part. The story took several turns I didn't expect it to take, but then again, I don't think you really meant for the story to go past 'Spring Break Broke My Heart'. Sure, you did a fantastic job continuing it. But I see now that it might have been better just leaving the story as it was. All in all, you've done a great job on all three parts. But, I disagree with other readers. If there is a story with multiple parts within the plot, generally it is a rule of thumb for a great writer to finish those plots. You closed off a number of them, but while closing those off you left many more questions. The last thing I wish to comment on is Bryan's change in heart. At the beginning of the story, Bryan loved Courtney. Even moments after what had happened and through yelling at her he still loved her. I know from experience those feelings don't just disappear while hooking up.

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2012 04:35
    Yeah that's what I'm tailkng about baby--nice work!

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2012 20:32
    WOW! Thats about all I can say. You did an absolutely awesome work of art. This story MOVED me, and got my heart pounding. When you do that to the reader, you have spun magic for sure.

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.11.2012 15:16
    Sorry but this isn't really an ending. You left out any real conclusion for any of the characters. There is the issue with Rachel's family as well as what eventually happens to Courtney. You could have at least added an epilogue to briefly flesh these out. Otherwise well written.

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.12.2012 20:47
    Hoping that he gets better revenge on the other men that had sex with Courtney and I will bet right now he will fuck his Mom (and, no, I have not read the next one). I want revenge that will hurt them financially and in other ways. At least castrate them if nothing else. Write a third one if necessagy, I love good revenge stories. Fuck his dad up good, it was mostly his fault. I don't mind if he gets back with Courtney, she made a bad mistake but first love is strong.

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.12.2012 21:21
    If you don't write a follow up you don't have a hair on your ass. This story cries for an ending. I could imagine one but I prefer your ending. I want some monetary revenge on the adult males, I want him to fuck his Mom, I want him to get back with Courtney even though she did him a terrible wrong. Good luck even if you don't write an ending. I appreciate your writing. I am an old man that reads for pleasure, it would please me greatly if you finished this. Thank you.

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.01.2013 14:17
    Too much left without proper ending, such as what happens with rachel and her family

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.02.2013 15:10
    One of the better series i've read. You have to do another part to the story.
    Really good story and writing.

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.02.2013 15:40
    One of the better series i've read. You have to do another part to the story.
    Really good story and writing.

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    26.02.2013 12:32
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  • anonymous+reader
    10.04.2013 12:19
    Dude. Finish it. Finish it!

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.04.2013 01:47
    Hey why is the story unfinished and plz dnt spoil it wth incest

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.05.2013 19:52
    One more part please :) Some conclusion would be nice. I really enjoyed the story, you got some serious talent.

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  • anonymous+reader
    29.05.2013 18:14
    Sex with old Jewish women? Yeah that's real hot.....

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.09.2013 18:00
    Right at the top for literacy and intelligence and a very good story line. Are you really going to leave us without resolution to all the issues opened up in this series?

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.09.2013 19:01
    Dude that was off the hook but you did'nt bring closure, you left us wanting more, so make it right man with one more part

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.10.2013 14:33
    I thoroughly enjoyed this series but wish you could wind up the ends -does Rachel and Bryon hook up or does Bryon and Courtney get back together?

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.11.2013 08:40
    Clearly we want more of this story. You left two subplots open. More more more.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.01.2014 19:51
    Needs another chapter cause there's a lot of holes in that story that need to be filled

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.01.2014 19:51
    Needs another chapter cause there's a lot of holes in that story that need to be filled

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.01.2014 08:26
    More pls, Rutger! U really need to wrap things up, what happened with Rach? How about Courtney's letter? Will he reply? Did she leave their college? What about mr katz and david? What happened later? Did he take Rach to the prom? Etc etc. So many unanswered Qs. Pls get on with it. Thanks

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.04.2014 16:39
    Make another part please!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.05.2014 02:30
    Finish it, please?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.07.2014 23:53
    Quite a remarkably good story. Unlike others, I have no real need for further information. It's fine as it is. Things are rarely all wrapped up tidily except in bad fiction. Thanks for the series. People of either sex can be so selfish and self-involved that truly hurtful things like this situation are perhaps more common than we normally think they are.

    Rob

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.08.2014 02:02
    I am inclined to agree with most others here. I think you should write another chapter or two knocking out at least a few of the cliff hangers you left us with. Great read though. I personally think he should make Courtney suffer for the pain she caused him with her conceited way over spring break. But what can I say I've been burned so I am biased

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.08.2014 07:06
    Well guess there is another writer that doesn't finish what they start

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.04.2015 12:28
    this story is hanging finish it please

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  • Salissa
    27.04.2015 19:16
    As an avid fan of your writing I congratulate you on a trilogy well written. I only ask that you give us some closure regarding Leah and Bryan.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.07.2015 23:03
    Please finish this story, it was great, but it needs to be finished. At least one more chapter, it's unikely that you'll see this or Care for that matter so whatever..

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.08.2015 01:59
    I actually am curious on how the fuck you left soo many cliff hangers and thanked people for reading the "FINAL" part of the series, that be like if Harry Potter ended right before dumbledore's death. I don't know how this story has such a good rating. Don't get me wrong it was a good story but you left too many goddamn cliffhangers

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.08.2015 22:10
    Great series and it's always appreciated when someone knows punctuation and how to use spell check. lol

    Really, great sex and good story building. Sorry it's over.

    Thanks so much!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.02.2016 17:24
    Complete the story....this is not the final chapter.you just left it in between.....complete it if you care.

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  • elfinlied
    24.02.2016 07:39
    Pls more I want to know what to know what happens next really great story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.03.2016 11:25
    Someone should complete the story. Its been 4 years.and that is too long to write a 4th part

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.03.2016 05:00
    Why doesn't someone whose a good enough writer adopt this story and finish it

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.04.2016 12:54
    Great story but,I did'nt wanted it to end like I wanted him to get back with Courtney n might have been good idea of a threesome between Rachael and Courtnex too bad its finished.Otherwise I loved it.
    Golden Tornado

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.05.2016 10:29
    The story is incomplete, you didn't even complete Courtney's letter. Besides, what happens to Brian & Rachel??? I would also like to see Brian's dad die or go to jail. I wouldn't date any of my brother's ex or even a girl my brother used to like not to talk of a girl he loves. Brian's dad deserves the worst fate ever.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.05.2016 23:44
    and what.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.10.2016 10:02
    Definitely needs a part four.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.01.2017 01:47
    can you write brjan revenge iii and iv and v

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  • cameraman12035
    18.01.2017 22:50
    You had a great beginning and potentially a great story. To bad you ruined it with a premature and lousy ending.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.01.2017 02:22
    Yep. Incomplete story.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.01.2017 11:30
    and what please write the next two stories

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  • Thuban
    15.09.2017 18:50
    I agree with the rest. Definitely a very good story. The ending was a bit odd since you never finished Courtney's letter.

    There really needs to a continuation in this series. What happens to after all that has been revealed? What becomes of Courtney and Bryan? What of Rachel? What role will she play in the future.

    It would be good to know these things and more....

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  • DudeInATurtleneck
    05.08.2020 21:17
    A very good story, well written -as most of yours are. That being said, I have to say I agree with the majority of the opinions here: it did NOT really conclude. You said in a comment you don’t like sequels because some people are never satisfied...I’m sorry, that really doesn’t wash; the original story, itself, didn’t really conclude; the promise of revenge, the mystery of why Courtney would do that, wondering what would happen to the myriad characters...none of that was resolved in what BECAME part one, but was apparently originally intended as a stand-alone.

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  • DudeInATurtleneck
    05.08.2020 21:18
    (Part two of comments)
    It’s not that “some people aren’t satisfied”...it really is because of how you chose to write the story...I you introduced many characters and a situation that was not completely resolved. That’s it. You can fix that with a conclusion , or not...that’s up to you. But you’re posting stories to a site with the express intention of having them read; you can’t expect people to NOT have legitimate issues with some of them.

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