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Sharing a room with sister

Author: BigGuy97

Date: 30 May 2014

Blowjob, Fiction, Consensual Sex, First Time

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When I was 17 my sister Jordan was 16 and we lived with our mom and dad in Syracuse, NY. We lived in a moderately sized home with 3 bedrooms; one for my parents, one for my sister, and one for me. My sister's room hadn't been painted since we moved in 7 years previous. So that winter, Jordan decided she wanted it to be completely redone. There was no guest bedroom so my parents suggested she sleep in my room as I had a king size bed. They thought that it was alright for us to sleep in the same bed because my parents were very trusting people, especially with us. Well, let me tell you, I was not so comfortable sharing a bed with my own sister even if she was deemed one of the hottest girls in the 10th grade. Though I won't deny having admired her looks a few times. She was about 5 foot 8, with dark brown, almost black hair, with a small number of cute little freckles and brown eyes. She had really started to fill out in all the right places when she was 14 and by now, I'd say she had average size boobs, so like B-cups. Her best source of sex appeal though was her long dancer's legs that gave way to a drop-dead gorgeous butt (or at least that's what I had heard other people say). She was extremely intelligent, really funny, shy, and a real sweetheart. I was 5 foot 11 with soft features, varying hues of brown hair depending on the season, brown eyes, and I had a creamy but not tan skin color. Now while I am not ripped, I am definitely fit, I am toned, and even though people don't notice it, I am deceptively muscular. The two of us were best friends, although we didn't always tell each other everything personal.

So in the last week of January, Jordan moved into my room. I told her I didn't feel comfortable sleeping in the bed together so she happily took the bed while I slept on the floor in a sleeping bag. It was over a very long weekend that lasted 5 days so we didn't have to worry about getting ready at the same time in the same room in the mornings as she gets up earlier than me. On the first day of vacation, Thursday, she had a birthday party for one of her friends so she was gone all day. I had basketball practice all day so we only saw each other at night when I drove out to pick her up from her friend's house after my practice. We arrived home at around 9:15 that night to find the house to be empty. I found a note from our parents that said they decided to go on a 2 day trip to Lake Ontario. I was to look after Jordan and was not allowed to have any of my friends over (okay not that trusting). She was allowed to have one friend over and she could sleep over if she wanted(not fair). They also left us $50 to pay for our dinner for the two nights ahead. I immediately went upstairs, got undressed and got in the shower. I got out wearing nothing but my towel on my lower half. As I walked into my room, I see Jordan in nothing but a bra and panties. That was when I first started really realizing how hot my sister was. One thing I noticed was that right above her butt, she had dimples. I thought that was really nice to look at, and so did another part of me. At that time, she turned around and gasped covering herself up and just staring at me. She didn't say anything and just stared at my naked upper half. After a while the trance was broken and I left the room and closed the door, waiting outside. After about two minutes, I knocked on the door asking if she was done and the door opened. To my surprise she was still in her underwear. I apologized for walking in without knocking and she just waved it off, saying it wasn't a problem but that I had just scared her.

"Shouldn't you put something more on though?", I said.

"It's alright I was just getting ready to get in the shower, so if anything I should be taking more off!" She laughed.

She got in the shower and I got changed and went downstairs to watch something on Netflix. I was wearing gym shorts and a sleeveless shirt. I started watching "How I Met Your Mother", my favorite show. Jordan came down the stairs. She was wearing her blue bathrobe and from what I could tell just underwear underneath. I tore my gaze away and focused on the show. She sat down next to me on the couch but she laid on her back with her legs on the couch with a slight bend.

"What's this show?"

"It's "How I Met Your Mother", the show with Ted, Barney, Marshall, Lily, and Robin."

"Ohhhh okay I remember this show now!"

As we were watching I felt like she was looking at me. But every time I glanced at her she would look at the tv. I couldn't help but notice that her legs were slightly open, showing a bit of her panties. They were pink with red stripes sideways on them. My dick immediately started to get hard but very slowly. Just then she got up, took off her bathrobe, got back on the couch, but sat right next to me, laying her head on my chest. At that point I put my arm around her shoulder to make myself more comfortable. Somehow, I fell asleep like that, and when I woke up less than an hour later, my arm was still around her shoulder. However, my hand, was not in a place that a brother's hand should be on a sister. I was basically cupping her left boob in her bra. *SHIT*, I thought. The only thing was, she didn't seem to care at all, so I just left it there. She looked back at me, seeing I was awake. She smiled and kept watching the tv. Then I noticed where HER hand was. It was very precariously resting on my thigh very close to my growing erection. I decided to take things up a notch. I slowly and very lightly started to squeeze her breast and she seemed to be liking it, because she wasn't stopping, and her hand got even closer to my erection, which was now at full attention. Suddenly, she spoke.

"Max, I feel really sore. Would you mind giving me a massage?"

I thought to myself about what could come of me agreeing to give her a massage and my hormone induced brain couldn't see anything wrong with it, so I agreed.

"Sure, do you have lotion or anything?"

"Yeah, let me just go grab it from my room."

She got up and went to her room. *Oh dear lord what have I gotten myself into*, I thought to myself. That thought immediately left my mind as soon as Jordan came back downstairs. She was in her bikini which seemed like it was getting a little tight on her. Not that I minded. It was a string tied bikini and I very much wanted to untie those strings to my viewing pleasure. I decided that there wasn't a good surface for her to lie on in the family room.

"Why don't we go up to my room?"

"Okay, sure!"

She went up before me, and I got a wonderful view of her butt. Her bikini bottom was beginning to ride up her butt so I saw quite a bit of cheek. *What a nice ass she has!*, I thought to myself. When we got to my room she handed me the lotion and I went and got some towels as to not get my bed sheets dirty. I laid one one the bed and I asked her,

"Where are you most sore?"

She answered saying that her upper thighs and her whole back including her shoulders were sore. I told her to lie on the towel on her stomach, and she did. I got to work starting with her shoulders. It wasn't long before my dick started to slowly harden.

"Can you slip the bikini straps to the side so I can get to your shoulders more?"

Without saying a word she slipped the straps to the side. After a while I started to move toward the middle of her back. The same situation with the strings popped up and I asked her if she was comfortable taking her top off completely if I looked away, and she said yes. So I looked away as she reached behind her back and untied her top sitting up slightly to get it off all the way. She then told me it was okay to look now. Her boobs must have been pretty squished so she was always adjusting on the bed. As I massaged her back, my hand slipped and I think I touched the side of her left breast very slightly. She flinched but didn't say a thing. I then moved my hands to her side and started to massage the side of her rib cage and the side of her stomach. I started to move towards the sides of her breasts. I was definitely touching boobs now. About a minute passed and I moved down to her thighs. At one point I sneakily brushed my finger across the fabric covering her mound. At this she quietly gasped. I allowed this to happen a few more times before I asked her another question.

"Would you like a butt massage?", I laughed.

She giggled and said, "Just don't be too rough!"

"You might need to move those bottoms down a bit."

She contemplated this for a moment. "Sure, why not! I bet you've seen your fair share of female butts before!"

She was right, but not in the way she probably thought. I had never done more than kissed a girl before, and the only asses I had ever seen were on porn sites.

She moved the garment down almost all the way off her butt, but not quite all the way. As I got to work, I nearly passed out with joy because I was groping my gorgeous sister's ass, and even better, it was with her permission! As I continued, I spread her cheeks enough so that I could see her sphincter clearly. I could barely stop myself from shoving my finger in it. She began to moan and I slowly, cautiously started to pull her bottoms down the rest of the way. She flinched, and I immediately stopped. She then said something unexpected.

"Don't stop, please..."

I needed no more encouragement. I pulled them off down to her ankles. She kicked them off and they landed on the floor. I noticed something. She was stark naked now, and she seemed to have no problem with it either. I went back to rubbing her ass, trying to work my way closer to her pussy. To my surprise, she turned on her back, baring everything and said, "Massage my boobs now, Max." I didn't need to be told a second time and I immediately placed my hands on her breasts and she gasped ever so slightly. I started to knead them thoroughly. At some point her hand moved to her shaven pussy. She put me in a trance as I watched her play with herself. My dick was harder than ever as I watched her play with her clit. She grabbed one of my hands and put it right on her labia. The two of us were overtaken by lust and I decided to act. I pulled my hand away and pulled her to the edge of the bed as I got on my knees. I stuck my face in between her thighs and started licking. This finally sent her over the top as she orgasmed. I stood up and went to the bathroom so that I could relieve myself of a certain white army. As I stroked myself, I heard the door open, and in walked Jordan, still fully naked. She spoke when she saw what I was doing.

"Max you just made me feel the best feeling I've ever had, without any reward."

"No trust me, I got something out of it too don't worry sister!"

"I still feel like I owe you though, and I mean, you DID get to see me naked. I think it's only fair you return the favor."

"We'll there isn't much more to see than you're seeing right now, but--" She cut me off.

"Oh my god Max, sometimes I wonder how you get such good grades. I'm offering to help you get off!"

"Oh."

She laughed then stopped immediately and frowned.

"Max, this is incest. We're brother and sister! We shouldn't be doing this but I want it so badly! I'm so confused! She quickly left the bathroom and into my room where she was staying. I got up still no clothes on and stood in the doorway of my room. I stopped and looked. Jordan was sitting on the bed, hugging her legs. She was crying. In this moment I felt very sad. It was painful to see my sister cry. Especially because he only cried when something was really bad. The only other time I had seen her cry was when our dog Molly was put to sleep. I felt a new feeling come over me. I started to feel protective and I walked over and sat down on the bed next to her and put my arm around her shoulder and hugged her. The feeling of our bare skin touching gave her goosebumps. I turned her head to face my own, and I spoke.

"Jordan, you are the smartest, sweetest, and most beautiful person I know. The decisions you make are your own, and if you want something, go and get it. Don't be afraid to do what your heart desires. It pains me to see you cry like this. I know society doesn't like what we did and what we were going to do, but society should mind its own business, because if something feels right, then it doesn't matter what anyone else thinks. And I want you to know, that I love you, no matter what. Not just as a brother, but as a friend too."

She smiled, and she leaned in and kissed me. She pulled away to see my reaction. I didn't give her much time to figure it out, as I kissed her back. This lasted until we were lying down on the bed, facing each other. We kissed again, this time more passionately. She broke the kiss and told me to sit up. I obeyed as she wrapped her hand around my dick slowly stroking it. She spit on it and went faster. Leaning over it, she licked from the base of my shaft, to the tip of my helmet. On her way back down, she put the head in her mouth and started taking more and more of my rock hard dick as she went. I was in euphoria. She didn't get all of it in her mouth, but she did pretty well for her first time giving a blowjob. I began to feel that sensation in my balls as she sucked away.

"Jordan I'm gonna blow my load soon!"

I orgasmed and shot my seed into her mouth. She got most of it, but the last few spurts she let land on her face. I was so horny still that my erection didn't even go down at all.

"Jordan, are you a virgin?"

"Yes, but I don't want to be after tonight. I have loved you for a very long time Max, as more than my brother. And I always thought it would be nice to lose my virginity to you, but tonight has confirmed it. Max, I want you to be my first. I want you to take my virginity."

"And I want you to be mine."

She looked at me with a face full of surprise.

"You're a virgin? But who wouldn't want to have sex with you? You're so hot!"

I was pretty sure I was blushing, but I didn't care. I was about to lose my virginity to the girl of my dreams. I knew she had already broken her hymen because I saw her masturbating with a hair brush once so it had to have been popped before.

I asked her one last time, "Are you sure that this is what you really want? You can back out now if you'd like."

"I'm positive!"

With that, I laid on my back, while she mounted my hips, sitting right in front of my dick. She lifted up a little and I aimed my dick at her hole and she slowly sat on it. I was in pure ecstasy and I'm pretty sure she was too, because she was moaning loudly. She gradually got faster and faster, riding my dick harder and harder. She started to moan louder and louder. I even began to moan some too. I felt the pressure in my balls rising, and I warned her that I was gonna pull out soon so I could come but she said that she was on the pill so I need not worry about it. We orgasmed together and I came, rope, after rope, after rope. She collapsed onto me and I pulled the covers over us, leaving myself inside her.

"I love you Jordan."

"I love you too Max."

THE END


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  • anonymous+reader
    04.06.2013 23:50
    Very well written story.

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  • creamman300
    05.06.2013 00:38
    Good story line. Not sure why anyone would want to go to Lake Ontario in Jan unless they where Ice fishing or Snowmobiling. Wouldn't mind a follow up as to what happens after.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 02:52
    Nice story hope there is more to this one

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  • Panther68
    05.06.2013 08:05
    Very nice story. I could imagine some of the same interaction between the brother and sister in my current story if they had given in to their desires when they were teens. When Jordan confessed her love for her brother it read almost the same as mine. I hope nobody thinks I took it from yours. I hope you continue posting.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 08:07
    Very nice story. I could imagine some of the same interaction between the brother and sister in my current story if they had given in to their desires when they were teens. When Jordan confessed her love for her brother it read almost the same as mine. I hope nobody thinks I took it from yours. I hope you continue posting.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 11:46
    Shaved pussy. Negative rating.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 11:46
    Shaved pussy. Negative rating.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 11:47
    Like the the story a lot, only wish that it was a little longer. Chapter 2 ??

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 11:58
    Yee a nice story. Contiue with the sex in the next chapter with a twist mom and dad ok with them together. Or they continue in secret until Jordan accidentally gets pregnant.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 12:17
    Good story Write part 2

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 13:16
    Very well done , hope you continue with this

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 18:12
    I like this story because of the how I met your mother reference

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 18:26
    What'ya mean ''shaved pussy, negative rating.'' Bull stuffing. That's a positive rating from us. Really cute story. My brother an I loved it. I had electrolysis done of the pubic hair around my pussy. I'm hair free for over 20 yrs. now. My brother loves it. He once said how much he didn't like gettin' the hair in between his teeth. So I started shaving, then the stubble bothered him, now, no more problems. I can't seem to keep his mouth off of my pussy sometimes. We've been reading a lot of these types of stories, and he eats me while I read aloud, then I suck him while he reads a story. And when we're not readin' these stories, we're watchin' TV and I'm always suckin' on his dick. Love the feel of that smooth dick in my mouth. We look forward to another chapter with these two discovering one another. It makes us remember our first times at everything. First time I saw his dick, first time I sucked it, first time he ate my pussy, first time he fucked me. Lots of fun.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.06.2013 19:18
    PLEASE MAKE A PART TWO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT CAN'T BE THE END!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.06.2013 19:05
    Great start but the end felt rushed.

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.06.2013 16:27
    Started out good but fell to shit when they sat on the couch it sucked from that point on. Neg Rating

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.06.2013 18:06
    Could have described the actual sex a bit better, but a nice story of what might have happened between two horny sibs. More would be icing on the cake.

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.06.2013 22:18
    I'd say everything was great except the sex wasn't very detailed. It just seemed to be over really quick. Your writing style is good though.

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.06.2013 21:24
    Good story until the end, then it came too soon, like permature ejaculation.

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.06.2013 07:33
    Ending felt rushed.

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.06.2013 15:22
    good story and I live in NY about 45 min from syracuse so that made me like it all the more

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  • anonymous+reader
    16.06.2013 16:17
    Looking forward to another story from you.

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  • pajarojkl
    19.06.2013 01:54
    you should keep writing. It'd be awesome if you continued this story.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.07.2013 16:48
    Great Story! Keep writing, though I would suggest a little more detail at the end. It feels a little rushed in the last few paragraphs

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.07.2013 23:44
    Awesome I love how this is based in Syracuse I m 30min from there

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.07.2013 15:44
    this better not be the end there is way too much left to explore and do. do the parents find out if so how do they react. is it a one time thing or do they keep at it? does she move back to her old room or stay in his?

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.07.2013 00:08
    Nice story bro but it needs more detail talk about how her pussy felt and other stuff

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.08.2013 19:38
    Nice. The tender moment just prior to the deflowering was nice. I am going to put in a vote for Jordan rimming and playing with Max's asshole though.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.12.2013 09:13
    nice story, call me guys 630-823-6402

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.01.2014 01:15
    very disjointed and confusing. if she was having her room redone who was doing it? if it was the parents why did they go away? what kind of parents allow teenage siblings of oppisite sexs to sleep in the same room with only one bed? all in all a crappy story that was rushed and unfinished, this was a first draft and never should have been posted.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.01.2014 23:23
    best story ever. jordan sounds like one hell of a hottie that I want to fuck hard and long :p thanks man

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.01.2014 20:23
    It is normal to have sidlings of opp sex to sleep in the same bed come on what parent thinks" they'll fuck"

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.05.2014 07:18
    YES KEEP THE SERIES GOING THIS WAS A EXCELLENT START

    JJ

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.05.2014 07:21
    Sorry but the story telling is just not that good. I couldn't continue reading. Just from what I did read there were issues like parents who encourage their teen age children to sleep together? And parents that on the spur of the moment with no planning or warning and while their kids are out for the day decide to just leave for a weekend trip out of the country? Then we have the sister suddenly for no reason baring her underwear clad body in front of her brother twice? The sister also acts like the TV show they are watching hasn't been on in years and she has to think about before she remembers it? And I finally completely gave up on the story when his dick "immediately" started getting hard "very slowly". Which was it? Immediately? Or very slowly? It can't be both. Anyway I decided that trying to struggle through the rest of this story probably wasn't going to be worth the effort, so I stopped after the confusing erection scene. (PuppetMaster)

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  • Oldperv4u
    02.05.2014 12:49
    Good story please continue the series

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  • Ronwalk68
    02.05.2014 17:28
    Good enjoyable read. Good charter, tension. And descriptions. I like the alt ending. Write the 2nd.

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  • BigGuy97
    02.05.2014 22:27
    Thank you Puppetmaster for the constructive criticism, I will certainly take what you have said into account! However, people do make mistakes when writing, and the erection part was simply because I had started it and then picked it up mid-sentence so I guess I just got a bit mixed up.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.05.2014 00:30
    I enjoyed both versions of your story, however I do believe that this version is better.

    I do not agree with Puppetmaster. There are some mistakes that you could have corrected with a proof reading or two, but overall I felt it was a good story, with fairly good descriptions and a pretty good story line.

    Keep up the good work, I will keep checking back to see your next chapter.

    farmerken

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.05.2014 17:13
    Continue it...

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.05.2014 18:15
    This was a damn decent story!! The twist where they were set to sleep together but then decided to wait was quite unique, kudos for that. Just please don't let us readers down by not continuing! As always Puppetmaster is an overly harsh critic. I am guessing someone must have dumped in his cornflakes and that's caused him to not only have vile breath but a shitty attitude to go along with it. So fuck him and his comment, you're right people make mistakes. Proofread your work and don't be discouraged by him. Keep writing and thanks for taking your time to write something for our enjoyment!!! ;) :)

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.05.2014 18:20
    I guess perhaps we should consider since he calls himself Puppetmaster there is a good chance he has a hand up his ass!!! Hell that would be enough to make anyone pissy and grouchy!!!

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  • BigGuy97
    14.05.2014 03:42
    I think I might just murder the next person to spam comment on my FUCKING STORY. Thank you.

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  • BigGuy97
    14.05.2014 04:02
    Just so everyone knows i'm quite busy right now with finals and such so I probably won't post a new story for around a month. But I really will try to find the time to keep writing the next one so don't worry I AM planning on writing another chapter to this story!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.05.2014 14:49
    Here's a bit of advice...
    Unless you're damn good, you ain't damn good and to stop after one story would be really, really bloody silly.
    You get better, but very rarely you get worse so don't treat it as such.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.06.2014 07:06
    Sexy Story Of A Brother And Sister Having Sex And You Should Write A Part 2!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.06.2014 03:32
    This is my favorite story so far:);)!!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.06.2014 00:22
    not that good the paragraphs were to long at the beginning. the plot was weak and boring and as said by some one else way to unrealistic and stupid. this was not worth reading or continuing.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.06.2014 16:57
    delete and take some writing classes before reposting

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.04.2015 05:43
    It was ok I guess

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.04.2015 05:53
    Not really. Same girl as the comment right before this

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.06.2015 03:29
    That moment when a S.W.A.T. team breaks down your door and demands for the Tostino's Pizza Rolls you just made...

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.06.2015 10:39
    I want to fuck her too.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.09.2015 20:14
    Jordan I wana fuck u with my 9inch cock

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  • knight5946
    26.11.2015 08:52
    well, after reading puppetmaster's comment, that guy has his head up his ass. both versions of the story are good but I like original ending more, it still allows for a continuation to the story with a nice long term romance for those 2

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.07.2016 23:06
    I liked it. Fuck the has ayesayers

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.10.2016 02:22
    I wanna luck her vagina and for her to lick my vagina back #69

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.11.2016 05:19
    I like it just cause it takes place in ny great work also

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.01.2017 17:11
    I like trains

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.02.2017 06:28
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