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The Devil's Pact Chapter 4: Salesgirls

Author: mypenname3000

Date: 29 May 2014

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The Devil's Pact
by mypenname3000
copyright 2013

Chapter Four: Salesgirls

Mary and I exited the Heavenly Creature's Salon, arm's wrapped around each other's waist. “Where's your car?” Mary asked, peering curiously around the parking lot.

“I got rid of that P.O.S.,” I told her, leading her to my new silver Mustang. The original owner decided to be an asshole to me so I swapped cars with him and sent his wife into an orgy to punish him. “Here's my new ride, Mare.”

Mary raised her eyebrows at the car. “How'd that happened.”

“I traded my car for it.”

“How can you do that?” Mary asked. “Everyone just does what you tell them to.”

It was simple, I made a deal with the devil and now people have to do what I tell them, happily and willingly. But, I didn't want to tell Mary that. “If you really want to know, I'll tell you tonight. Think carefully about it. You won't like the answer.”

She frowned at me, auburn eyebrows furrowing. “What does that mean?”

“Just think about it,” I told her. I could tell her to just forget about it. But, something stopped me. I loved her. It didn't feel right making her do what I wanted to. She wasn't like the other women. I kissed her on forehead. “I love you.”

She blushed and smiled. “Love you, too, hun.” Her lips were soft and warm on my as she kissed me. “So, you're going to buy me new clothes?”

“I am,” I told her. “You can get whatever you want. No matter the cost.”

“Well then, I hope you can keep up.”

“I'm your stallion. I have loads of stamina.” At least sexual stamina. Another thing I got from the Devil. And a long, healthy life.

She giggled. “I bet you do.” Her hand grasped my cock and felt it hardened beneath her touch. Then she was slipping into the passenger seat of my Mustang. “Come on,” she said impatiently.

“Okay, Mare,” I said, adjusting my cock in my pants. I got into my new Mustang. The engine roared gloriously to life.

“The Mustang fits you,” Mary said as I backed out of the space. “You're free from the rules of society. You're a wild horse roaming the plains, mounting any filly you want.” I grinned at her. “You can have all the filly's you want, just remember I'm your number one mare.”

“Forever,” I answered and she nodded. “Of course, your free to mount just as many fillies.”

Mary laughed in a rich, musical timbre. “How would two fillies fuck?” she asked. “I don't think mounting would work. Maybe they would just back into each other to rub pussies together.” I laughed, picturing two horses pressing their rears together.

“Maybe they would take turns licking,” I suggested, stopping at the light at the parking lots exit. Across the street was our destination, the South Hill Mall.

Mary laughed harder. “Like … a salt … lick,” she gasped between laughs. Her laugh was contagious and I found myself laughing with her. She had turned a bright red and it was a minute before she regained her composure. “I've always wanted horses,” she said after she caught her breath. “I remember the last summer before …” She paused, sadness flickering across her face, “before my mom left, she took me out riding in the mountains. They were majestic creatures. Have you ever ridden a horse?”

“No,” I said with a shake of my head. The light turned green and I crossed Meridian. “Maybe we could go riding together.”

Mary smiled at me. “I would like that.”

I found a place to park. I used the remote to lock the car and chuckled as all the lights flashed and the horn honked. I never had a car with remote locks before and I unlocked it and locked it again. Mary watched with an amused expression. “Having fun?” she asked me.

“Yeah,” I said, unlocking the car again. She rolled her eyes at me and I grinned at her and locked the door. “Fine, I'm finished.”

Arms wrapped around each other's waist, we entered into the mall. We walked slowly through the mall, window shopping and girl watching. The girl watching turned into a kind of game where we would each take turns pointing out a cute girl and whispering what we would like to do to them. Once, Mary pointed out a Latina with a full ass and a tribal tramp stamp and whispered in my ear, “I would love to eat your cum out of her ass,” right as this old lady walk buy. The old lady looked disgust at us and we broke out laughing as she stalked away.

The first store Mary led us to was Old Navy. It was brightly lit and full of colorful clothes. “I love to shop here,” Mary told me. She saw something on a rack of clothing and practically flew over, grabbing the sleeve of a shirt. “These are so cute!” she exclaimed as she browsed the clothes.

“How are you doing today,” a nasally pitched, effeminate young man asked Mary. I was disappointed. I was hoping for a cute girl working the register that I could have some fun with while Mary shopped, not some guy. I sighed in disappointment, as he explained in excited detail all about the shirts Mary was browsing. I was starting to suspect he was gay, no straight guy could possibly be that excited about clothing. Oh well, at least he would not be hitting on Mary.

I looked around the store and it was pretty empty save for a beautiful teenage girl, pixie slim, with long, blue-back hair streaked with bright, purple highlights. I smiled, guess I was going to have some fun after all. She wore floral print tanktop that was cut short enough to expose her flat stomach and pierced bellybutton. Underneath her short jean skirt, she wore hot pink leggings. The girl held up a top to show someone and I saw an older woman half-hidden behind a clothes rack. She was in her mid-thirties, attractive, and resembled the girl. She was either an older sister or was really young when she had her daughter.

“Hey,” I told the store clerk. “Go close the security gate and then assist Mary with her shopping. Ignore the fucking going on in the back of the store.”

“Oh, absolutely, sir,” he said and sauntered off.

Mary glanced back in the girl, her eyes lighting up when she saw the pixyish beauty in the back. “She's cute.” Mary slapped my ass. “Give her a good ride, stallion.”

God, I loved Mary. I kissed her, before I threaded my way to the back of the store, while behind me the security gate started to close. The teenage girl and her companion looked up in alarm. “It's okay,” I told them, smiling pleasantly. “You can keep shopping.”

“What's going on,” the woman asked, putting a protective arm around the teenager. She was as beautiful as the girl; not the fresh innocent of a teenager, but the lush maturity of an adult. She dressed in a loose flowing, white sundress covered in sunflowers. The dress fell to mid thigh and was cut low to show off her abundant cleavage. She was a least a cup size larger than the teenager, probably a C.

“I'm an inspector,” I lied, “and we just need some privacy. Nothing to be frightened about.” Both women relaxed. “I'm Mark.”

“I'm Laura,” the woman in the sundress said, “and this is my daughter, Melody.”

“Hi,” Melody greeted in a chipper voice. “Today's my birthday. I turned sixteen.”

“How sweet,” I said. “Well, I think I have a birthday present for you.”

Her eyes widened in excitement. “Free clothes!” she shrieked, and threw her arms around me in a hug. Her body was warm and firm against me, her small breasts pressing softly into my chest. She smelled of lilac. It was nice for the brief moment it lasted, then the girl moved away, blushing in embarrassment.

“I need to inspect both your bodies, because I'm a female body inspector,” I said, using the lamest line I ever saw on a T-Shirt. “That's what my camcorders for. And I need you both to cooperate one hundred percent. So, Laura, I need to see your breasts.”

Laura nodded and pulled her sundress over her head. She was wearing a lacy, red bra and matching red, transparent panties. “Damn, mom, what's with the sexy underwear. You and Tony going to get frisky tonight?” Melody asked with a sly grin. “On my birthday?”

“Maybe,” Laura quipped. “You were going out with your friends, right?”

I noticed the wedding band on Laura's finger. “You call your dad, Tony?” I asked Melody.

“My step-dad,” Melody scowled. “He's alright.”

Laura reached behind her back and unhooked her bra. Her tits were large, round, marred only by the tiniest of stretch marks. Her aerola were the largest I ever seen, as big as a silver dollar. “Melody, play with your mom's nipples till their hard.”

Melody's slim fingers reached out, caressing her mother's aerola, circling the pink flesh as her nipple hardened. Laura sighed softly as her daughter's fingers slid across to the other breast. Melody squeezed her tit, then rubbed her palm across the nipple in slow circles. When she finished, both mother and daughter were flushed with excitement, Melody's nipples pressed hard against her blouse, as erect as her mothers.

“Very nice,” I said as I filmed her. “Panties next.” Laura shrugged out of her panties. A black, triangular patch of hair grew above the bare lips of her pussy. A gold ring pierced the hood of her clit, glinting sexily.

“Fuck, mom!” Melody cursed in surprise. “When did you get your cunny pierced?”

Laura blushed. “Well, I had a … wild youth,” she answered, delicately. “And, um, Tony, he likes to, um, play with it.”

“Okay, Melody, time to see how you stack-up compared to your mother.”

Melody grinned impishly. “I thick I stack-up very well,” she boasted. She peeled off her top revealing a hot-pink bra, which quickly followed the shirt to the floor. Her breasts were small, firm, and perky, topped with small, pink nipples. Next, she kicked off her stylish, black shoes and then wiggled out of her jean skirts. Lastly, she peeled off the pink leggings and a pair of pink panties. Her ass was slim and her legs slender. Her pussy was tight and shaved bare, her clit hard and peeking out.

“You both are very beautiful,” I said, unbuttoning my pants and pulling out my half-hard dick.

“What do you plan on doing with that,” Melody asked, eying my cock nervously.

“It's your birthday present,” I told Melody. “But I need you and your mom to get it ready. So both of you start sucking.”

Mother and daughter knelt before me. Laura grasped my dick and licked up one side. Melody copied her mom, licking up the other side. My dick started to harden as mother and daughter slid wet tongues up my shaft. They both reached the tip, tongues sliding wetly over the head. They both jumped back when their tongues brushed together about my cock. “Don't be scared to kiss, ladies. Both of you have long desired each other. Don't be afraid to explore those desires.”

Their mouths were hot on my cock, kissing around my cock. Laura reached out slowly, tenderly, and cupped her daughter's perky tit. Melody moaned as her mother delicately rolled her hard nipple between her fingers. Laura's sucked the tip of my dick into her wet and warm mouth and Melody started to kiss her mother's cheek, the girl's pink lips moving lower, down her mother's sloping neck, down her breastbone. Laura sucked harder on my cock as her daughter's lips enveloped her hard nipple, nursing at her mothers breast.

“Are they related?” Mary asked. She had several blouses folded over one arm. Behind her, the clerk had even more clothes draped over his arm.

“Yeah, mother and daughter,” I moaned as Laura started bobbing her head on my cock. “Did you find something you like?”

“Gabe and I have come up with a few outfits,” Mary answered. “You have fun, hun.”

I kissed her. “I love you, Mare.”

“Even with another woman's mouth on your cock?” Mary asked mischievously.

“Well, she's sucking my cock pretty well,” I said, pretending to consider. “Yeah, even with her mouth on my dick.”

“Good,” she answered with a smile and kissed me. “C'mon, Gabe.” Mary led the clerk to the changing rooms at the back of the store.

I glanced down at the two women, Melody sucking hard at her mother's tit. My eyes followed the lines of her back to her slim ass. I pulled my cock out Laura's sweet mouth and knelt down behind Melody. Laura threw back her head, moaning, cradling her daughter's head to her tit. “Oh, my sweet child,” she moaned. “I've missed nursing you.”

I knelt down behind Melody, and gripped her waist, lifting her up so she was on her knees, still sucking at her mom's tit. “Here's your birthday present,” I said and thrust my cock into her wet cunt. She was tight, like a vice, and so fucking warm.

“Oh, fuck!” Melody gasped, “Christ, he's bigger than Dillon! He's stretching my cunny so good, mom!”

“Happy birthday, Melody,” Laura said, stroking her daughter's face. She bent down and captured her daughter's lips in a loving kiss. “I got a present for you, too, songbird.” Laura sat on the floor, spreading her legs wide before Melody's face. Laura's cunt was wet, lips spread wide open. “Eat momma's cunny!” Melody leaned down, pink tongue sliding up her mother's slit as I fucked hard into her tight hole.

“Hun, how's do I look?” Mary asked as I fucked Melody's cunt. She was stepping out of the changing room dressed in a red dress, tight on her body. A red skirt cinched just under her breasts fell loosely about her waist, ending above the knees. The dress had no sleeves or straps, and exposed a fair amount of her freckled bosom.

I whistled appreciatively. “You look hot,” I said, not pausing my fucking Melody's tight cunt.

“You look cute, sweetie,” Laura moaned. “And so do you, songbird! You look so cute eating your mama-bird's cunny.”

Melody's cunt was so tight and silky, I held off cumming as long as I could, wanting to enjoy her teenage cunt and watch the slut eat her mother's dripping cunny. Mary came out modeling four more outfits: a pair of tight jeans and a hot pink, button-up blouse; red capris pants with a white tanktop decorated with pink flowers; a pleated black skirt and blue, transparent shirt with little black songbirds on it and a black bra visible through the fabric; and a red and white striped pencil skirt with a white, a white, gauzy shirt with a v-neckline.

While Mary was modeling outfits, Melody had brought Laura to four screaming orgasms, Laura's juices flooding her daughter's lips. Melody drank her mother's nectar like a woman dying of thirst. Twice, Melody's tight cunt and constricted on my cock as I fucked her to orgasm.

“What'd you think,” Mary asked for the sixth time, twirling in a black dress, the loose skirt billowing out.

I eyed her up and down. The dress had a loose skirt, cinched at her waist, and then fitted tightly on her torso, clinging to her breasts like a second skin. The dress had short sleeves, that barely covered her shoulders, and a square cut neckline that exposed her bosom almost to her areolas. The bodice lifted her breasts up, enhancing them to seem larger and rounder. “God, your beautiful,” I moaned. I couldn't hold back any longer and shot my cum in Melody's tight cunt. Three large blasts straight into her young womb.

I pulled out, cum oozing slowly out of her tight hole, and stood up. I walked over to Mary and hugged her and kissed her passionately. We made out for a few minutes, my hand sliding down her back to grope at her ass through the sleek fabric. “I guess you like it,” Mary said when we broke our kiss. She glanced down and winced. “Of course, you got cum all over the front.” I looked down, my cum stained cock had rubbed on the skirt, staining the fabric.

“Gabe, bag up Mary's clothes and find a fresh copy of this dress in her size,” I ordered. “Of course, sir,” Gabe answered with his nasally voice.

“Leave out the pencil skirt and the white, peasant blouse,” Mary ordered Gabe, who nodded his head in agreement.

“Ohh, fuck, eat my cunny, mom!” Melody moaned. Mary and I looked over to see Melody on her back, her mother between her spread legs, digging my cum out of her daughter's pussy with her tongue. Mary's hand found my cock and she gently stroked it as we watched Laura eat out her daughter's cunt. Melody writhed on her back, hands gripping her mother's head as she moaned in ecstasy. My hand slid down Mary's backside and lifted the hem of her dress and slid underneath. She wasn't wearing panties and I caressed her bare ass before I stuck a finger up her ass. Mary moaned, squeezing my cock harder as she jerked me off.

“When Melody cums, you take the mother and I'll have the daughter,” Mary whispered in my ear. Mary read my mind and I nodded my head in agreement.

Melody was panting loudly as her mother vigorously ate her cunt. “I'm gonna cum, I'm gonna cum! Oh, mommy, you're making my cunny explode!” Melody writhed and flexed as her orgasm rolled over her. Laura gently licked up her daughter's juices before crawling up her daughter's body to kiss her gently on the lips.

“Happy birthday, songbird,” Laura whispered.

“Thank you, mama-bird,” Melody breathed. “That was wonderful.” Then she kissed her mother back.

Mary and I walked over to the happy family. “That was real hot, ladies,” I said. “Mare, here, wants to give Melody a present as well.”

Melody smiled eagerly up at Mary. Laura rolled off her daughter, both sweaty and flushed. Mare pulled her dress up over her head, revealing her pale curves. Melody's eyes drank in Mary's naked form. “Your heart is real cute,” Melody said as she stared at the heart-shaped patch of auburn pubic hair that grew above Mary's waxed pussy lips.

“Thanks,” Mary said. “I love you belly piercing.” Mary knelt down and gave Melody's bellybutton piercing, a dangling silver chain with a small ruby on the end, a tug. Then Mary crawled on top of Melody. Their breasts kissed and then their mouths. Mary settled her weight on Melody's lithe body. Melody spread her legs, wrapping them about Mary's waist, and Mary started to rotate her hips, fucking her clit into Melody's.

“Oh, shit,” Melody moaned. “Our clits are touching. Oh, fuck that's good.”

“Damn, that's hot watching you trib,” I told Mary. “I love watching tribbing!”

“Tribbing, is that, uhhh, what it's called?” Mary panted. “Discovered it with Joy today. Mmhhh, squeeze my ass. Don't be afraid to stick a finger in.” Melody's hand clawed at Mary's butt. Mary bucked her hips hard when Melody's finger slid slowly into her asshole.

I handed the camcorder to Gabe. “Film,” I ordered as I got on top Laura, her legs spread invitingly open for me. Laura grasped my cock and and guided it to her wet cunt. I slid in, slowly, savoring her pussy's warm embrace. She was looser than her daughter, but still had a firm, warm grip. Laura fucked her hips back into me, matching my rhythm. I kissed at her neck while she clawed at my back and moaned in wordless pleasure. I looked over to my left and watched Mary riding Melody hard. Both girls were panting and moaning, pink tongues exploring each other's mouths, and hands groping firm breasts, tweaking hard nipples.

“I guess you figured out how two fillies could fuck,” I told Mary.

Mary grinned at me and moaned, “I did! And it's sooo good! How's your filly?”

“She's a spirit ride,” I panted back. I noticed our hands were close together and I reached out and caressed Mary's hand. She smiled at me and our finger's interlocked as we fucked our fillies hard. Mary's plump ass flexed and jiggled as she rubbed her clit and pussy into Melody's.

“Oh, god, this is a great present!” gasped Melody. “Ohh, fuck, you're making me cum.” Melody wriggled beneath Mary, fingering her ass and kissing her neck as she came. Mary captured her lips as her body shuddered in orgasm on top the sixteen year old.

I sucked Laura's large nipple into my mouth, exploring the hard, sensitive nub with my tongue as her cunt squeezed my cock. “Oh, crap!” Laura moaned, fingernails leaving hot scratches down my back as she came underneath me.

I was close to cumming as I pulled out of Laura's warmth and jerked off over her, spraying her belly and large tits. She panted, my white cum running thickly down across her belly and the slopes of her breasts. Mary slid off Melody and started licking my cum of her belly while Melody cleaned the cum off her mother's tits. It was so beautiful, watching my Mary lick my cum off another woman. Gabe was filming my cock, I realized, not the beautiful women on the floor and I pointed at the girls.

Laura pulled her daughter into her embrace and kissed her cum stained lips. “Thanks mom,” Melody said happily, “this has been the best birthday ever!”

Laura smiled and kissed her daughter's inviting lips again. “We definitely have to play hooky again next year.”

Clothes were found and everyone got dressed. Mary and I took turns kissing mother and daughter. I gave them my cell number and told them to call for Melody's next birthday. Mary looked fantastic in her red-and-white striped skirt and white, peasant blouse. I told her she looked gorgeous, and she smiled happily. Gabe had the rest of Mary's clothes bagged up at the cash register and once we were all decent, he opened the security gate.

“Gabe,” I said as Mary and I were walking out the store. “Give Melody an outfit for free. It's her birthday, after all.”

Gabe answered in his nasally, effeminate voice, “Of course sir. There's this charming blue chambray dress with white songbirds that's just to die for. Girlfriend, you will look absolutely stunning in!” he said, leading Melody towards a rack of dresses.

“You want to get lunch?” I asked Mary. I was famished after so much fucking. Mary's stomach gave a cute rumble and she laughed.

We went to the food court and purchased lunch. Mary got a large plate of pasta and a slice of pizza from Sbarro's while I hit up the Chinese buffet, getting chow mein, orange chicken, sweet and sour pork and some egg rolls to share with Mary. We chatted as we ate, talking about the TV Shows that we liked, and about movies and books. Mary, it turned out, loved cop dramas. She watched all of them. Her favorites were Castle and Bones. And she just loved Grey's Anatomy, which I confessed I had never watched before. Somehow I ended up promising to watch Grey's Anatomy reruns on netflix with her.

Then, the conversation turned to books and it turned out we both liked to read fantasy and sci-fi, much to our mutual delight. I got introduced to fantasy through Tolkien and Mary through Twilight, but I choose not to hold that against her. We discussed our favorite books and gave each other recommendations; Mary recommended Brandon Sanderson's 'Mistborn' trilogy, and I told her to check out Steven Erikson's 'Malazan Book of the Fallen'. When I glanced at my cell phone, I was surprised that we just spent an hour talking about Song of Ice and Fire theories.

With lunch finished, Mary had more shopping to do. I grabbed the bags, and arms around the other's waist, we walked through the mall. Passing Hot Topic, my eye caught a slutty sailor dress on display. It was blue and white with red bows, low cut bodice, and a short, ruffled skirt. I bet Mary would look so hot in that dress. Mary saw what I was looking at and smiled.

“You like that dress?” Mary asked and I nodded. She gave a throaty laugh. “Okay, I have an idea. I'll go in and pick up some of their naughtier clothing as a surprise for you. And that sailor dress, and you can amuse yourself.”

“How?” I asked, curious.

There was a naughty twinkle in her eye. She pointed to the two salesgirls lounging at the register. One was a blonde with short hair wearing a pink plaid, very short, catholic school girl skirt, a white corset with black lacings, and knee high, white socks. The other girl was behind the counter and wore a red corset, laced up the front, the bodice pushing up her tits. Her hair was black, with blue and purple streaks, gathered in twin pigtails. Both girls had black lipstick and multiple piercings dotting lips, noses, and eyebrows.

“If you stood behind the girl at the cash register, I bet you could be fucking her and no one could tell. Just lift up her skirt and bury your cock in,” Mary said. “That should keep you busy while the blonde helps me shop and bags my purchases.”

“What if she doesn't have a skirt?” I asked, straining to look.

“Then fuck the blonde,” Mary answered, shaking her head at me, amazed I could be so stupid. “But, I bet you she's wearing a skirt, and she's tall enough for this to work.”

“You're right, Mare,” I answered, feeling a little stupid. “I love your idea.”

“Of course you do,” Mary answered. “What guy wouldn't.”

“Gabe,” I quipped, remembering the gay clerk from Old Navy.

Mary giggled. “Fine, what straight guy wouldn't like my idea.”

I did not have an answer, so I led Mary into Hot Topic, my cock hard in my pants. We walked up to the two salesgirls who eyed us up. “Welcome to Hot Topic,” the blonde said in a smokey voice. Up close, I could see that the black-haired girl was wearing a skirt, black and short with black lace on the hem. Black, thigh-high fishnet stalkings covered her pale legs and made her look even more slutty

“Hi, I'm Mark and this is Mary,” I said in a friendly manner. “What are you two beautiful ladies names?”

“I'm Lillian,” the black-haired girl answered, “and this is Anne.”

“Anne, I want you to help Mary with her shopping,” I ordered the blonde. “Do whatever she wants, no matter how strange.”

“Of course,” Anne answered, smiling with her pierced lips. She took Mary's hand and led her deeper into the store.

I turned to Lillian, who had a sultry grin on her black lips. “You are going to let me fuck you.”

“Absolutely,” Lillian purred.

“We're going to fuck right here,” I told her. “I'll be behind you and if anyone asks, I'm training you.” She licked her lips excitedly and I walked behind the counter. “Take off your panties.”

Lillian reached under her skirt and pulled a pair of black, ruffled panties. She stepped out of her panties and held them to my face. I took them and breathed in her scent, musky and sweet. I stuffed the panties in my pocket, joining the pair I took from Cynthia and Vivian at the coffee shop this morning. I unzipped my fly and pulled my cock out. I stood behind her, lifting her short skirt up enough to get my cock underneath. The lace of her skirt's hem felt cool and silky as it brushed my cock before I found her hot, wet hole.

We both groaned as I slowly slid into her warm depths, her cunt rippling softly about my cock. I bottomed out in her pussy, my cock pressing against her womb. She breathed in deeply, wiggling her hips as I slowly fucked her. I could only use short strokes, barely pulling any of my cock out before sliding back in. Outside, people streamed past the entrance to Hot Topic, unaware that we were fucking just fifteen feet away.

School must be over because a pair of giggling teenage girls stumbled into the store. I stopped fucking Lillian, resting hilt deep inside her. Lillian was breathing heavily and she squeezed her cunt slowly on my cock. One of the girls came up to the register to buy necklace. She was cute, fifteen maybe, with a low cut blouse and a pair of small tits. She rested her arms on the counter and I could see down her blouse. She wasn't wearing a bra and I caught a flash of pink nipple as she shifted. It was too much for me. Gritting my teeth, I came hard in Lillian's pussy.

Lillian gasped, and the schoolgirl looked quizzically at us. “Are you all right?” she asked.

“Just fine,” Lillian answered as another jet of semen flooded into her. “I ate a really big sausage and it just filled me up.” Lillian clenched her cunt hard on my dick and then wiggled her hips.

“Okay,” the girl muttered, handing Lillian a twenty. Lillian fumbled for the girl's change and she left with her friend. My dick didn't even get soft and I just started fucking Lillian again.

“Fuck, that was hot!” Lillian moaned.

The second time I came in Lillian's cunt was when this sluttily dressed teenage girl with bubblegum pink hair strolled into the store. She wore a shredded skirt made of wispy purple and white fabric that barely covered her ass, a tight t-shirt that fit tight across her tits and it was quite clear her ample breasts were not supported by a bra. Her nipples were hard, clearly outlined in the thin material of her shirt. There were dimples on either side of her nipples and it took me a moment to realize that they were pierced. The shirt was pink and had “Daddy's little girl” written across her breasts. The word “girl” was cross out and underneath was written “slut”.

Lillian had one hand rubbing her clit and she was close to cumming when the teenager walked in and had to quickly pull her hand up. The girl noticed the motion and smiled wickedly and winked at Lillian, clearly not fooled. She sauntered over to the counter and breathed in deeply. We reeked of pussy juices and cum by then and by her smile she clearly new what we were up to. “Whatcha doin'?

“T-training,” Lillian stammered.

“Slut training?” the girl asked with a smirk.

“Oh, yeah,” Lillian moaned as I started to fuck her again. “I'm such a whore!”

Lillian started to move her hand back to her clit but was stopped by the girl. “Let me help.” The girl reached across the counter and her fingers reached under Lillian's skirt. I felt her fingers caress my cock as it plunged into Lillian's cunt before she started to frig Lillian's clit. Lillian gasped and her cunt started rapidly constricting on my cock as she came.

“Fuck!” Lillian moaned. “I was so horny, I just came when you touched me.”

The girl laughed and licked Lillian's juices off her finger. I fucked hard into Lillian and shot my second load into Lillian as I watched this pink-haired slut lick Lillian's cream. I groaned and breathed heavily on Lillian neck. The teenager ran her pink tongue over her full lips slowly, a silver stud pierced her tongue. “How's her training? Did she live up to your expectations?”

“She's a natural,” I groaned, as Lillian started to gently squeeze her cunt on my cock again. “She really strives to please, which is important in customer service.” From the back of the store I heard a muffled groan and wondered what Mary and Anne were getting up to. Probably Anne's tongue in Mary's cunt.

The girl giggled wickedly. “I've always wanted to work at Hot Topic. Can you give me some training?”

Holy shit. This girl was going to let me fuck her without me having to make her. Fuck, I couldn't believe it. I was so excited, and Lillian's cunt felt so warm and tight as she massaged my cock with her pussy walls, I shot a third load of cum up inside her. Panting, I said, “Absolutely. Just have to interview you first.”

“Oh, of course,” she said, nodding seriously.

“What's your name?” I asked. “And how old are you.”

“Allison Hertz,” she answered, “and I'm seventeen.”

“Well Allison, take off your panties and let me see what kind of pussy I'll be working with.”

“I'm not wearing panties,” Allison confided, lifting up the front of her skirt. Her pussy was shaved smooth, her slit tight,and juices glistened on her lips. Tattooed above her pussy was “Cum on in” with a little red arrow pointing at her clit.

“How'd you get your parents permission to get that tattoo?” Allison licked her lips suggestively. “I didn't. I let the tattoo artist cum in and he was more than happy to give me the tat for free.”

“And those nipple piercing? Did he cum on in as well?” She shook her head. “I had to lick a tight pussy to get those.”

“Well, you're hired,” I told her.

Allison walked behind the counter and pulled up the back of her skirt to expose a perky ass. I pulled out of Lillian's cunt and moved behind Allison. I had to bend a little lower, but I got my cock stuffed up into Allison tight cunt. Lillian was between us and the entrance, blocking us from view allowing me to fuck Allison hard and fast.

“Fuck that slut!” Lillian urged, lifting her black skirt with one hand and playing with her messy pussy with the other. Lillian brought her stained fingers to her lips and Allison slid her hand between her legs and shoved two fingers up Lillian's cunt. “You naughty whore,” moaned Lillian. “That feels sooo nice.”

“And you feel so wet,” Allison whispered, then leaned over and she kissed Lillian. “Oh, god, fuck me stud!” Allison hissed when she finished kissing Lillian. “I'm close to cumming!” I fucked her harder, her cunt spasming pleasantly on my dick as she came loudly, drawing the attention of passing mall shopper, a middle-aged woman dressed in a conservative, cloud blue pantsuit.

As the woman entered the store, I wondered just what I could get away with, so I pulled my cock slowly out of Allison's cunt. Trying to move as little as possible, I slid my wet dick between the cheeks of her ass and slowly pushed it into her asshole. Allison stiffened and gasped. “Are you okay, dear?” The woman asked, eying the flushed teenager as my dick slid deeper and deeper into her ass.

“I'm just fine,” Allison panted. “Just being trained.”

The woman peered suspiciously at us as my cock bottomed out in her asshole, tight and hot. Allison squirmed a bit, trying to get used to my shaft invading her ass. “Are you sure, sweetheart.”

“Oh yes,” Allison gasped as I started to slowly withdraw my dick. “He's an amazing teacher. Right, Lillian?”

Lillian licked her lips. “Oh yes! He cums here all the time. To make sure we're well trained.”

This conversation was too much for me, and I came in Allison's ass as I slid slowly in, sighing in pleasure. “You three are some disgusting deviants,” the woman said shrilly. “I'm going to get mall security.”

“No you're not,” I told her. “Your going to come back her and suck my cum out of Allison's ass for being a nosy bitch. Don't stop eating her asshole until she cums.”

The woman, looking completely ashamed of herself, walked behind the counter and dropped to her knees behind Allison. She lifted Allison's skirt, spread her asscheek, exposing a brown, winking hole dripping with white semen. The woman, gingerly, placed her lips on Allison asshole and started sucking. “Oh, fuck!” Allison moaned. “You are one nasty guy!”

My cock was dirty from Allison's ass, so I lifted Lillian's skirt. Her wet pussy would clean it up, and I shoved my dick into her sloppy pussy, fucking her slowly. I looked over at Allison and asked, “You ever wanted to be a sex slave?”

“Oh yes,” she panted. “I love it when a guy takes charge.”

“Why I am not surprised you found another girl to amuse yourself with,” Mary said as she and a thoroughly disheveled Anne walked to the front of the store. Anne's lips were smeared with pussy juices and she carried several bags of clothes.

“This is Allison,” I told her as Lillian moaned on my cock. “Allison, this is my girlfriend, Mary.”

“Oh, nice to meet you,” Allison gasped.

“Allison is going to be our sex slave from now on,” I told Mary, who arched an eyebrow at me. “Allison, you'll do anything, no matter how filthy or depraved, that Mary or I tell you to do.”

“Oh, absolutely,” Allison gushed. “That sounds wonderful! Thank you, Master. Thank you, Mistress. I'll be the best slut-slave ever!”

“Well, she definitely dressed for it,” Mary said, reading the words printed on Allison shirt. “And, um, who is eating out her ass.”

“Some prudish bitch. She's going to pay for your clothes, right.” There was a muffled yes from between Allison's perky cheeks.

I leaned down to grab the prudish bitches purse, trying not to pull out of Lillian. I almost fell over, and my dick sadly slipped out of her warm cunt, but I grabbed the purse and got back inside Lillian. I opened it up and pulled out her wallet. I found a credit card and handed it to Lillian so she could ring up the purchase. I found about a hundred in cash and pocketed that and threw her purse on the floor. Lillian fumbled at the register, having trouble concentrating as I fucked her hard. Allison orgasmed with a small shudder and a moan a minute later. The prudish bitch grabbed her purse and fled the store, almost tripping in her haste to escape.

“Allison, who do you live with?” I asked.

“My father,” she answered. “My mom died when I was little.”

“Call your dad,” I ordered. “I need to speak to him.”

She pulled out her cell phone and called him. “Hey, daddy,” she spoke into the phone, “my Master needs to speak to you.”

I took the phone and heard her dad ask, “Master? What are you talking about, pumpkin?”

“I'm your daughter's Master,” I spoke into the phone. “She's going to be my sex slave and live with me. I'm going to fuck her and cum in every hole she has: pussy, ass, mouth. You will not worry about her, contact the police, or go looking for her. She will not be harmed.” I handed the phone back. “Tell your daddy what I've done to you.”

“Hey daddy,” Allison said, my balls were tightening and I was close to cumming a fourth time in Lillian's cunt. “I'm having a lot of fun with my Master. He fucked me in the cunt behind the cash register at Hot Topic. It was amazing, I came so hard, daddy. Then, this woman walked in. She was suspicious of us. But Master wasn't concerned, he just stuck his cock up my ass and shot his cum up my butt while this prudish bitch watched. It was sooo hot, daddy.” Listening to this slut moan into the phone as she told her father the filthy things I did to her was so hot. I groaned and shot my load up Lillian's cunt. “Then, daddy, he made the woman eat his cum out my ass and I came a second time.”

I pulled my cock out Lillian, wet and dripping. “Slut, hang up the phone and clean your Master's dick,” Mary ordered, surprising me.

“Don't worry, daddy, I'll be the best slut-slave ever for Master and Mistress,” Allison said sweetly into the phone. “I gotta go now, daddy. Master's cock is covered in pussy juices and Mistress wants me to suck it clean. I love you, daddy.” With that, Allison dropped to her knees, and licked all the pussy juices off my cock.

“Grab our bags, slut,” Mary ordered as I tucked my cock back into my pants. Allison grabbed the Hot Topic and Old Navy bags. “Walk behind us.”

“Yes, Mistress,” Allison said, smiling.

Allison trailed behind Mary and me as we walked through the mall. “You seem to be taking to this slave-thing well,” I told her.

“Well, my older sister, Shannon, used to like to boss me and Missy around,” Mary explained, “and I hated it.”

“Revenge by proxy, then?” Mary nodded. “Why not the real thing then,” I pointed out. “Say the word, and Shannon could be your very own slave.”

Mary blushed. “My own sister,” she whispered, mortified.

“Or not, I'm more than happy with Allison.”

Mary bit her lip. “You wouldn't ever, you know, mess with my sisters.”

“Only with your permission,” I said. “I promise.”

She smiled gratefully. “Thank you.”

Mary led us to Victoria's Secret. “I want to put on a modeling show for you,” Mary said as we entered the store. “Slut can help.”

“I would love to, Mistress.”

Mary arranged everything, after I told the salesgirls to listen to her. The customers were hurried out of the store and then the salesgirls locked the store up. Mary and Allison browsed the shelves with the help of the salesgirls, two beauties named Aurora and Heather. Aurora was the younger of the two, eighteen, her hair dyed dark blue, large breasts on display in a low cut, lacy blouse and blue jeans so tight they were almost a second skin. Peeking out of the back of her blue jeans was a red, whaletail thong. Heather was older, nearly thirty, but no less beautiful than Aurora. She had strawberry-blonde hair, falling in curls about her shoulders, brilliant blue eyes, a dolls face, and pair of round, large tits that strained her gray, silk blouse while a black, tight miniskirt clung to her curvy hips and ass.

Mary had a divan moved to face the changing rooms and sat me in the center and had the salesgirls do a strip tease for me while Allison filmed with my camcorder. Both were novices at doing a strip tease, and there was no music, but it was sexy nonetheless. The two girls wiggled asses in my face as they shrugged off blouses. Heather wasn't wearing a bra and her right nipple was pierced with a gold ring. Aurora was wearing a strapless bra that barely covered her areolas and pushed up her large breasts. Bra off, she rubbed those large, fleshy tits in my face. She smelled of lavender and rose and I sucked a brown nipple into my mouth before she danced away.

When Heather's miniskirt came off, I wasn't surprised to see she wore no panties, her cunt shaved and glistening. I wondered what was the point at working in a lingerie shop if you didn't wear any. Aurora had a difficult time getting her jeans off, they were so tight, and Heather had to help. Then, with far less effort, her red thong was off and both girls danced naked before me, rubbing against each other as they danced, then laughing, they seated themselves on either side of me, large breasts pressing softly against me.

Mary took the camcorder and placed it on the shelf, making sure it had a good shot of the divan and the entrance to the changing room. Then, she and Allison disappeared with their lingerie into the changing room as Heather and Aurora fished my cock out of my pants and started to stroke it while I took turns making out with each woman. I was sucking on Aurora's tit when Mary and Allison exited. Both were stunning.

First Mary went, modeling a white, strapless bra with the cups covered in delicate, lilac lace and a matching pair of lilac panties, trimmed in lace. Lilac garters held up thigh-high lilac stockings. She walked before us as if she was on a runway, strutting forward then turning to give us all a good look. The three of us on the couch clapped and told her how beautiful and sexy she was. Then Allison, in a cream bustier with black lace running up the stomach and bodice, matching panties and sheer, white stalkings held on by garters, complimented the bustier. Allison did her strut, a more aggressive and sexually charged walk compared to Mary's more graceful walk and Heather, Aurora, and I whistled and catcalled.

Giggling, Mary and Allison went back into the changing room for their next outfits and I pushed Heather down to the floor and she sucked my cock into her mouth, warm and wet, her teeth gently caressing my cock's sensitive head. Aurora started to kiss me, her tongue wiggling in my mouth and I groped her heavy tit, rolling fat nipple between my fingers. After my cock was good and wet with Heather's spit, she popped it out of her mouth and piled her big breasts around my cock, sandwiching it in their pillowy softness. Squeezing her tits around my cock, she started to slid them up and down. Her skin was smooth as silk, and her mouth would kiss the tip on the down stroke, teasing my cock with her wet tongue.

Mary and Allison came out in their next outfits and Mary was wearing a matching bra and thong set made of gray lace, her dusky aerolas peeking out through gaps in the lace. The thong was just wisps of gray lace that barely hid her pussy. She looked so hot that I groaned and shot my cum on Heather's face and tits. Heather gasped in surprise, licking semen off her lips.

“Don't just stand there, Slut,” Mary barked, slapping Allison's ass hard, “lick up your Master's cum of that whore.”

“Yes, Mistress,” Allison moaned, almost flying across the room in her haste to lick my semen off Heather's large breasts and face. Allison was dressed in a black, babydoll nightgown, trimmed in pink lace and matching, transparent black panties.

Mary smacked Allison's panty-clad ass again. “Good little sluts always lick their Master's cum up, immediately! No matter where they find it!”

“Absolutely, Mistress,” Allison answered as Mary smacked her ass a third time.

Mary returned to the dressing room to change, leaving Allison busy cleaning Heather's face and tits. Allison spent a good deal of time making sure her aerolas and nipples were sucked clean of cum. Aurora started to lazily stroke my cock as we watch my little slut clean Heather. When my cock was hard, she slipped down and sucked it into her mouth. Allison must have found some cum on Heather's pussy, because she was now happily licking out her cunt. I wasn't sure any cum actually got there, but I couldn't complain if Allison wanted do a thorough job.

Mary third outfit was a sexy, sheer babydoll slip, pink in color. The bodice, solid pink, cupped her breasts in delicate fabric while sheer, pink silk fell down across her stomach ending just at a pair pink, lacy panties. She looked as innocent as a schoolgirl and as sexy as a stripper. She did her runway walk and I whistled at her. “God, your beautiful,” I moaned as Aurora deep-throated my cock.

“Thanks.” Mary set down next to me and spread her legs. “Slut, eat my pussy.”

“Yes, Mistress,” Allison said, pulling away from Heather's pussy and pushed aside Mary's panties to dive into her wet cunt, nosily eating her pussy. Heather moaned in disappointment, then furiously started to masturbate.

Mary embraced me and we kissed as are respective sluts performed orals sex on us. My hand found her tit encased in the soft silk of the slip, and rubbed and squeezed. Mary and I came together, hugging each other tightly, filling our whores mouths with our cum and juices. Some of my cum spilled out of Aurora's mouth and Allison wasted no time in licking it off her face. I pulled Mary onto my lap, and her legs straddled my hips, the soft silk of her panties rubbing coolly on my dick as I captured her lips in a kiss.

I started deep into Mary's emerald eyes as she pulled aside her panties and sank her cunt down onto my cock. “I love you,” she moaned, fucking me slowly. I pulled her bodice down, popping a freckled tit out and sucked it greedily into my mouth. I gripped her ass through her silk panties, feeling it flex beneath my fingers as she writhed on my cock. Her arms cradled my head to her breast, holding me as I suckled on her nipple and aerola.

Mary's hips begin to move with a faster urgency, her breath panting. The walls of her cunt were fire on my cock, fanning my desire. “Cum with me, Mare,” I whispered, looking up at her. Our foreheads pressed together. “Cum with me.”

“Yes, yes,” Mary panted. She was fucking hard and fast, now. Hips rotating swiftly as she danced on my cock, grinding her clit into my groin. “I'm almost there!” she moaned. “Oh, God, I'm there!” Her cunt was clenching about my cock as she sat down, burying my cock all the way to her womb as she came on me. Her lips found mine and we kissed as I spilt my seed deep inside her and for singular, perfect moment, we were one.

Mary sat on my cock, kissing me, breathing my soul, as we held each other in the afterglow of our pleasure. Behind her, the other girls moaned and panted as they fucked each other, yelling as they made each other cum, lapping at wet cunts and sucking at hard nipples. Mary finally got off me, slumping wearily on the couch and cuddling up to me. Her legs were spread, my cum oozing through the silk panties. Allison was on us in seconds, licking the cum off my cock and out of Mary's cunt as we dozed on the couch, lazily watching Heather and Aurora slip into a sixty-nine and devour each other.

“I love you,” I whispered to Mary, and kissed my love as our slut licked my cum out of her cunt.

To be continued …


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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 23:23
    MORE SOON PLEASE BUT NOT ALOT OF SEX PLEASE CAUSE TO MUCH TO MUCH SEX RUINS A STORY

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 23:52
    Helluva story so far. Hated the cliffhanger at the end, but thats the way good writing is. It makes u wanna scream at the characters and strangle the author when he leave u hanging. Keep up the good work.
    Mike H.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.10.2013 22:51
    Really? God might not answer you after you traded your eternal soul to the devil?

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.10.2013 01:56
    Awesome story keep them coming

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 00:48
    dont know what it is about this story but I had people its long enough for me to add to my kindle. excellent work my friend.

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  • mypenname3000
    08.10.2013 01:09
    Glad your enjoying it

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 02:59
    Definetly scarred that family haha

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 05:35
    so he y wats up im new on here so jus tryn ta mke a few friends an meet new peps my name rande an urs is

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 05:41
    a is there any females out here that can tlk an have fun

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 05:45
    a is there any females out here that can tlk an have fun

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 05:47
    a is there any females out here that can tlk an have fun

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.10.2013 03:03
    ghhjjvghjmmyertjmrtyjnvthjvfh

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.10.2013 15:40
    Complete the next part quickly please

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.10.2013 05:36
    i'm enjoying the story, BUT, would you please stop typing things in italics, because the format changes when you copy it over and it's annoying to have to try to read around the brackets it puts in. an easy fix, just don't put anything in italics.

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  • mypenname3000
    12.10.2013 10:07
    Sorry, I thought it was making things italic and not just leaving the code there.

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  • steelkat29
    13.10.2013 05:31
    If you want to use italics, use this code instead of this one <i></i>

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.10.2013 12:31
    Take your time, your story is great. Don't listen to the whiners, listen to the advise. If the readers are so distracted by a couple code symbols coming over, then they obviously have issues concentrating. Listen to supportive or corrective advise.

    I totally understand why some writers lock their stories from commenters. Some of the readers that traverse this site are the most miserable, hypercritical bastards I've ever witnessed.

    Keep doing what you are doing, because what you are doing is great.


    -Sent from my Dick Tracy watch

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.10.2013 18:24
    Thst nun bitch should like get under marks power willingly an think thats its better to be under thana bitch

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.10.2013 22:05
    Nice twists keep up the great writing

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.10.2013 03:22
    have u thought of getting one or even some of the girls pregnant

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  • mypenname3000
    15.10.2013 09:53
    Someone will get pregnant eventually.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.10.2013 14:21
    Whoever you are male/female. Your imagination is wild. This was epic

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.10.2013 18:39
    Whoever you are male/female. Your imagination is wild. This was epic

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  • mypenname3000
    17.10.2013 02:59
    Glad you liked it. I'm a guy.

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.10.2013 16:25
    Very fun story, thanks

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.10.2013 05:39
    Oh yeah!! so fucKing hot. l need a master to FucK my soaKing wet pussy!

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.10.2013 17:45
    Argh! A cliffhanger! The suspense is killing me!

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.10.2013 18:07
    Please post the next chapter soon I can't wait to see what happens next!

    ~Afont

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.10.2013 18:33
    love this story please keep going

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.10.2013 22:16
    Ok fuck those nuns fuck that shit they just cry babys I'm sorry but id do some similar shit to people if I had those powers.....id make all those bullies an jocks an preps an riches pay

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 18:39
    TCIaOh Appreciate you sharing, great blog article.

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.10.2013 14:21
    ... That suspense. Glad to see you continuing this series. Can't wait for the next installment!

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  • mypenname3000
    27.10.2013 16:36
    I don't plan on stopping before I get to my ending.

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  • anonymous+reader
    28.10.2013 02:23
    great job :) been here since the first chapter :D you got a loyal fan now! I hope you put more scenarios with lilith. theres something bout her thats getting me. anyways keep it up!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.10.2013 11:24
    Thanks for the compliment. Glad you liked it.

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.10.2013 14:46
    what ever happened to the fat bloke? Anyway, I hope alice won't be a problem, I like her devotion. Imagine if she thought mary didn't love her and was really desperate so she begged to be mary's slave. One more thing, how fun would it be if cuntrag got asked about her little lovers, that would be splendid and my final spitball what if lilith's last boon was to corrupt every nun she could find. Use my ideas or don't.

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  • mypenname3000
    31.10.2013 02:47
    By fat bloke do you mean Brandon? He's not going to show up for awhile. I have plans for him, though.

    As far as Cuntrag/Karen's past I have thought of writing about it. Particullary the night she became Susanne's slave.

    As far as Mary's final boon I know what she's going to use it for. I just didn't think of your idea. It's a good one.

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.10.2013 07:51
    love your story but I believe u should add the devil more into it. We never hear whats he been doing the whole time this is gonna on. Also how come no one has raised a eyebrow over all these woman leaving thier familes or all the sex acts at public places. Surely the police or fbi would have notice by now.

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.10.2013 09:43
    to the one about police and FBI they had noticed and is why he tells all cops what he does is legal

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.10.2013 12:27
    hey its me again :) thanks for posting another lilith scene but I kind of prefer that lilith would get fucked :)) if thats alright with you also I agree with the commenter whats happening in hell while theyre off doing fun? thanks again

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  • Countz
    31.10.2013 15:20
    I've been following this story on asstr and was pleased to see it here. I'm a little sad to see the nun give in because reluctance is one of my favorite themes but really a good story. It would be interesting to see Mary get mistaken for one of the sluts by men who Mark has given access. She could see what their perspective is.

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  • mypenname3000
    31.10.2013 23:57
    Lilith is a succubus so she's preying on men. I'll see about writing about it. As far as the Devil, he's just hanging out in hell, I guess. He really can only manifest at crossroads at midnight unless certain rituals are performed.

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  • mypenname3000
    01.11.2013 00:05
    Lilith is a succubus so she's preying on men. I'll see about writing about it. As far as the Devil, he's just hanging out in hell, I guess. He really can only manifest at crossroads at midnight unless certain rituals are performed.

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  • mypenname3000
    01.11.2013 00:05
    I also want to say I appreciate the feedback and questions. And while I may not use your suggestions, I do consider them.

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.11.2013 07:17
    Am I the only here hoping that he starts trying to take over some parts of the government, eventually the white house awhile the devil in the background watching all of this?

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.11.2013 19:49
    keep this series up!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.11.2013 02:07
    this is such a good series, please give it a good ending!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.11.2013 02:37
    Do more anal shit, really good series. Waiting for mark to fuck his mom...

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.11.2013 12:04
    keep this series up!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.11.2013 12:04
    keep this series up!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.11.2013 20:03
    Learn the difference between there, their and they're! Also "here" is not "her"! Good story, but sometimes hard to read.

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  • mypenname3000
    03.11.2013 22:25
    I do my best to correct those sort of mistakes when I edit but sometimes they slip through

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.11.2013 07:38
    love this story the next chapter cant come quickly enough

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.11.2013 12:30
    Sorry, I didn't want to sound so harsh. Appreciate the effort, though.

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  • mypenname3000
    05.11.2013 00:30
    Oh, no problem. And for the person waiting for Mark to fuck his mom, its coming, just a few more chapters I'm afraid.

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.11.2013 14:11
    I can't read ur chapter 16 even the repost xx

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  • mypenname3000
    07.11.2013 03:00
    It seems the original post of chapter 16 is viewable know? no idea how that happened.

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.11.2013 10:03
    Fuck all tht sex.....make him take over the gov or something but stop with all the sex dam....thank you

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.11.2013 10:27
    I like tgis one haha aside from having a lilith scene its kind of funny how swat went outside and obeyed mark and the agent incharge was like wtf?! haha good job man good job

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.11.2013 10:49
    I like tgis one haha aside from having a lilith scene its kind of funny how swat went outside and obeyed mark and the agent incharge was like wtf?! haha good job man good job

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.11.2013 05:20
    I dunno what the previous guy is talking about, the sex is kind of why I'm on here. Keep up the good work! I really like your writing style and the story line in general, though I am pretty excited to see what happens when thinks stop going Mark's way.

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.11.2013 22:59
    Awesome story, loved the part of about Lilith and Lucifer. It's nice to see them more involved, Please keep writing!

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  • mypenname3000
    08.11.2013 23:58
    Glad you liked it. It wan't in my plan to have Lucifer appear for awhile, but someone suggested it on the comments and it was good idea. I only wish I could credit who suggested but it was an annoymous post.

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.11.2013 02:29
    I liked it! Im your fan haha I really am obsessed with lilith now @.@ I maybe anonymous but to communicate you can call me duhr haha plain name but im too lazy to create an account. great story haha keep it up :D

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.11.2013 03:55
    I love your stories and they are my favourite that I have read (and I have read quite a few) but I think that you are introducing too many sex sl*ves and I found that it is getting hard to keep track of all the slu*s, on another note I like the way you way you made lucifer favor mark and watch over him! please continue writing you have alot of talent!

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  • mypenname3000
    10.11.2013 09:29
    Yeah, there are to many, I'm having trouble remembering them all sometimes. I don't have plans to add anymore unless I have an important plot reason for doing it.

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  • mypenname3000
    10.11.2013 12:20
    Oh, and thanks duhr. Lilith will make an appearance in chapter 18. I'll work on keeping Lucifer more involved, but right now he's just wanting for events to play out to his advantage. Anyways, I love the feedback.

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  • Countz
    11.11.2013 11:52
    Great series. Every time I log on I hope you've posted another chapter.

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.11.2013 21:10
    I absolutely love the watersports in this story. In fact, this story is downright amazing. Thank you for writing, keep up the awesome work! Im a big fan

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.11.2013 21:10
    I absolutely love the watersports in this story. In fact, this story is downright amazing. Thank you for writing, keep up the awesome work! Im a big fan

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  • mypenname3000
    11.11.2013 22:40
    glad you like the watersports. Just finished the first draft of a story that's got some

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.11.2013 23:47
    I noticed you said this takes place at the same time as the D&D side story, but that story hasn't been posted yet. Should we be expecting it in the near future?

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.11.2013 00:09
    Not sure if it's just my end but the url for your blog didn't work.

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.11.2013 00:17
    It's not on your end, it didnt work.

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  • mypenname3000
    12.11.2013 00:27
    I was messing around with it, its back up

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.11.2013 00:34
    It's not on your end, it didnt work.

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.11.2013 05:52
    I absolutely love your stories. Truthfully, your work is the only reason I hop on this site on a regular basis. Keep up the great work! It would be epic if you could throw some "panties being shoved into their associated girls mouth while they're being fucked" action, as I find that really hot. Regardless, keep up the amazing work!

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.11.2013 05:53
    Hot super hot, when is next part cumming

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  • mypenname3000
    13.11.2013 07:55
    I'm hoping to finish chapte 19 today, then I have to edit it so probably a few more days. I also love when a girl gets her panties shoved in her mouth and I can't believe I haven't done that. Will rectify it at the earliest spot

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.11.2013 10:58
    Great work keep it up!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.11.2013 14:12
    I'm actually surprised no one has gotten pregnant yet. It's been glossed over on e or twice, but besides casually mentioning the pill for Mary and a couple others, it seems these two virgins were amongst the first to express concern...that it I missed that part.

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.11.2013 14:12
    I'm actually surprised no one has gotten pregnant yet. It's been glossed over on e or twice, but besides casually mentioning the pill for Mary and a couple others, it seems these two virgins were amongst the first to express concern...that or I missed that part.

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.11.2013 15:23
    I'm actually surprised no one has gotten pregnant yet. It's been glossed over on e or twice, but besides casually mentioning the pill for Mary and a couple others, it seems these two virgins were amongst the first to express concern...that or I missed that part.

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  • mypenname3000
    14.11.2013 00:10
    It just hasn't been enough time for anyone who might be pregnant to show. Their is at least one girl pregnant. The story started at midnight on late Wednesday/early Thursday and its only Friday of the following week.

    It's also a bit of oversight on my part. The problem with posting chapter by chapter is I can't fix oversights like that.

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.11.2013 14:42
    Thats fuked up but great story

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.11.2013 16:50
    Excellent work, can't wait for the next chapter!

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.11.2013 03:19
    That was awesome! And thank you for incorporating the panty thing in there; it was incredibly hot.

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  • mypenname3000
    15.11.2013 08:41
    i loved writing that panty thing so thanks for that suggestion

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.11.2013 10:35
    Big fan of ur work can't wait for the next Chapter...

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  • mypenname3000
    16.11.2013 00:41
    I hoping to upload chapter 19 on sunday morning PST. I'm editing it right now

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.11.2013 04:00
    It was a good story but now it is just sick reaping swinging I think u know that ur story always get 91 92 or 94 percent vote when u WRITE STORY WHERE MARY IS FUCKED BY OTHERS IT DROPS TO 80% FUCKING STUPID SICK STORY

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  • mypenname3000
    17.11.2013 10:15
    To previous commenter, sorry you don't like it when Mary fucks someone else. But if its fair for the goose, its fair for the gander and the reverse is true as well.

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.11.2013 10:44
    Lol, so you're okay with him forcing people to have sex against their will (many if which are underage), ruining lives, and rape...but your draw the line at Mary having sex with other men?!?

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.11.2013 11:14
    Lol, so you're okay with him forcing people to have sex against their will (many if which are underage), ruining lives, and rape...but your draw the line at Mary having sex with other men?!?

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.11.2013 13:26
    One: holy shit, talk about plot twisting revelations. Didn't see that coming regarding Mare's mummy. Kudos.
    Two: I thought Mare's friend's name is Alice, not April? Feel free to correct me on that...
    Three: Always a treat to see past characters return, even if only in text messages.
    Bravissimo! Encore! Encore, I say! :D

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  • mypenname3000
    17.11.2013 14:10
    Alice is her name, that's my bad

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2013 01:39
    so many plot twists! I hope this all ends well. :)

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2013 02:56
    Booo. Why stop there? Lol. Jk. Extrmely pleased with story so far. Love the fact that u go back and show the side stories. Keep up the great writing.
    Mike H.

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2013 05:28
    Best written stories on here. Always a joy to see a new posting!

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  • mypenname3000
    18.11.2013 10:15
    Thanks! Glad everyone's enjoying the story. Posting the webcast from Vivian's perspective this morning

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2013 12:48
    It started out ok, but then it turned into multiple overkill repetitious bullshit, all highly unlikely especially as a combination.
    You should go back to working the deep fryers at McDonalds, you stupid fuck.
    Then kill yourself when you get back home to your trailer

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2013 12:54
    When you write a story, you write something that's likely to happen, or at the very least make up a story that's BELIEVABLE, as in LIKELY TO HAVE HAPPENED.
    You dumb fuck.
    On top of that, you don't include 150 sexual scenarios in 1 story with hardly any more build up than the tartar on a baby's unexposed teeth.
    Again, you STUPID FUCK.
    And stop rating your own story up; it will only piss everyone off and your shit stories will be removed

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2013 16:39
    I must admit, I enjoy reading stories where characters thought long gone return for a scene or two, if only to give the impression that they are real people living actual lives.

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  • mypenname3000
    18.11.2013 22:55
    It was my original plan to follow up on a number of characters in one off stories.

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.11.2013 01:51
    im a huge fan and i've read all of your stories, thank you for the amazing work! please never stop.
    -Crash

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  • mypenname3000
    19.11.2013 08:01
    Thanks crash, I have no plans on stopping. I'm having a lot of fun writing

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.11.2013 14:25
    Great work!!!!!

    -Baj

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.11.2013 22:42
    Hey mypenname great shit yo love ur writing im on here all the time hoping for a new story great writing amazing twist

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  • mypenname3000
    21.11.2013 02:48
    Glad you liked it. I have the rough draft for the next chapter done, and will start editing it tomorrow.

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.11.2013 03:27
    hey crash again, 5 stars on this chapter!!! I forgot to mention that I live in seattle and am a musician (yes I am a guitarist) so all of this takes place in our backyard XD. very good cliff hanger man!keep 'em coming.
    -Crash

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.11.2013 06:03
    Holy cow! That ending was intense. This story just keeps getting better and better. I really like how you've shown how the action of Mary's mom leaving has really affected Mary and her whole family, showing both sides of the Devil's Pact. Your writing just keeps putting everything else on this site to shame.

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  • LordFenrir
    21.11.2013 09:45
    I have been following this story, excited for every new update and eager to see how things go from the first post. That being said, Im afraid of how this whole thing will end. I know that everything cant end sunshine and rainbows and whatnot but Im honestly afraid of what horrible things could go wrong for all parties involved. Not saying that you oughta change your game plan or anything, just posting this to kinda voice my fears. Anyway, keep up the good work, Im gonna keep reading eagerly to see what happens.

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  • mypenname3000
    21.11.2013 10:26
    LordFenrir: Yeah, things are about to get rough
    Crash: I grew up in South Hill but I live in Tacoma now.

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  • anonymous+reader
    22.11.2013 14:04
    I can help if u want a Masterl

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.11.2013 20:54
    is the master a gurl I cant figure it out

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 01:42
    I hate and love the cliff hanger please write more when is the next part comming out

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  • mypenname3000
    24.11.2013 02:26
    Sunday morning hopefully

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 03:14
    NO DON'T TEAR THEM APART!!! fucking cliffhangers...
    -Crash

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 06:21
    Mark should break the spell and then use liliths boon to hunt down and make slaves of the entire conventry of nuns

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 12:40
    I hate and love the cliff hanger please write more when is the next part comming out

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 12:44
    nko matkokom alkhab

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 13:22
    Loved it hated the beginning but loved the end need more when do you think you next post will be

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  • mypenname3000
    24.11.2013 19:14
    It should be tomorrow.

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.11.2013 23:05
    That'd be great! You post your stories incredibly fast

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  • mypenname3000
    24.11.2013 23:17
    I like writing. It maybe a little longer for the next part with thanksgiving coming up.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 02:39
    I really hope the nuns fail and Mark and Mary break this prayer. The best part of this story for me is the pair together using their powers as they wish.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 04:03
    Holy cow! That was way more intense than expected. This is going to get crazy real fast.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 04:47
    See I'm the opposite, I'm hoping Mary doesn't break the spell and starts to go on a war against the nuns. Mark stays off to the side at first, but then under the guidance of the angelic connection he is pulled into the fight against the Mart, the enemy of God. And then we have Lilith and her lesbian worshipers on the side that are just making things bad for both sides, with Lilith playing the end game moves.
    I too really liked Mark and Mary together, but I feel like with powers that let them easily solve almost every situation they face, they have to fail (or not succeed for a while) at something to balance that out. Just my thoughts on the whole thing. Keep up the amazing work! And I like your new site.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 04:48
    *...against Mary, the enemy of God.*
    *...bad for both groups...*

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 11:20
    Frankly, both main characters are scum and deserve a good slow death.

    I hope they lose. Badly. Possibly with fire.


    The story is great, though. And the worldbuilding/exploration. With a number of interesting characters (and a lot of not interesting ones at all).


    Best thing to do would be to, eventually, end it with their deaths. Maybe move on to sequels with other characters that aren't evil sacks of shit.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 11:34
    I really hope the nuns fail and Mark and Mary break this prayer. The best part of this story for me is the pair together using their powers as they wish.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 15:42
    I like the story line, but it ruins the flow when you make mistakes like "women" instead of "woman" and stuff. My advice for that is to read each sentence one more time when you're finished. You'd be surprised how many mistakes you'll spot!

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 16:07
    God fucking damn it, I hate cliffhangers so much but you're such an amazing author that I can't stop reading. Waiting for new chapters is becoming hellishly unbearable.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 16:10
    I've become so hooked to the story that even a Grammar Nazi like myself has started to simply ignore all of the typos and mistakes. I just block them out for now, mostly because I'm just so eager to read the next chapter already. Besides, it's easy enough to tell what the author meant. There's been very few mistakes he's made so far that've made me simply too confused to tell what he meant.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 16:24
    I've become so hooked to the story that even a Grammar Nazi like myself has started to simply ignore all of the typos and mistakes. I just block them out for now, mostly because I'm just so eager to read the next chapter already. Besides, it's easy enough to tell what the author meant. There's been very few mistakes he's made so far that've made me simply too confused to tell what he meant.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 20:00
    I really hope the nuns fail and Mark and Mary break this prayer. The best part of this story for me is the pair together using their powers as they wish.

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 21:45
    I'm a great fan of your stories, you're doing an excellent job! Do you know how much further you're going to take this story?

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  • anonymous+reader
    25.11.2013 23:37
    Keep up the great work. And keep the 'women' its kinda part of the story now. If your really into it u barely notice that anyway.
    Mike h

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  • mypenname3000
    26.11.2013 00:20
    I do try to read carefully. I just am a bit of skim reader and it bites me in the ass when I'm editing. I catch a lot of mistakes
    I've taken to doing find/replace for certain words I mess up on. (your/you're for instance I'm very bad at). I'll add woman/women to the list of words I mess up on.

    I did a find on woman/women and boy did I mess that up a lot. Well

    I know how I want to end it, and I'm hoping for the story side to move faster. But I'm not sure how many more chapters it'll take. I've already gone about five chapters more than I thought to get this far.

    I'm writing a side-story right now. It'll be a litlte longer for the next chapter than usual.

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 00:49
    Omg perfect need more can the next post be SUPER long I really love the story it's my all time favorite when will the next post be try to make it a SUPER long one

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 03:15
    as long as mark and mary are together all is good.Rock on bro!
    -Crash

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 07:29
    Yeah, I figured i'd get to a recent post before I drop a comment. To me, Mark has gone too far and mary who is supposed to draw a line a moderation is just a more bitchy bitch.
    Dear author, I hope you are not 1 of those that allow evil to triumph...

    Joshie.

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 07:49
    I love your story.. it feels like a diary XD

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 08:26
    More twists and turns... Lilith doesn't like Mark or Mary so I guess she'll see to their downfall.
    "what a man sows, so shall he reap"

    Mark and Mary must go down!
    Joshie

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 09:11
    Wow, thrilling, even if evil managed to find a way to wiggle out of trouble. Now lilith is no longer in support and the Angel and the Nun have a better "messier" plan, I cnt wait to see how it ends.
    :
    Desiree's husband is another person to watch out for
    :
    ,
    :
    @mypenname, I think this has got to end sir! Write another stuff, thanks.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 09:11
    Wow, thrilling, even if evil managed to find a way to wiggle out of trouble. Now lilith is no longer in support and the Angel and the Nun have a better "messier" plan, I cnt wait to see how it ends.
    :
    Desiree's husband is another person to watch out for
    :
    ,
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    @mypenname, I think this has got to end sir! Write another stuff, thanks.

    :
    #Joshie

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  • mypenname3000
    26.11.2013 09:21
    Well said Joshie. Actions always have consequences

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  • anonymous+reader
    26.11.2013 20:27
    Could always recruit a few loyal readers to proof read the stories before you post them. I myself wouldn't mind doing that just to get to read them a little sooner :P. Seriously though I find it hard to proof read my own writing so I normally get someone else to read over it after I'm done.

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.11.2013 04:56
    Holy cow! I definitely didn't see the Brandon storyline picking up like it did. Great chapter!

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.11.2013 11:29
    Fckn amazin keep it up

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  • anonymous+reader
    29.11.2013 06:42
    submit a comment

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.11.2013 05:37
    love ur stories always woundering when next chapter will be out

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.12.2013 02:33
    jesus fucking christ I hate these cliffhangers

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.12.2013 06:23
    Omg please stop with the cliff hangers I know they keep us comming back but please keep writing it's soo good maybe make the next one super long

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  • mypenname3000
    01.12.2013 08:37
    Sorry, I just can't help myself with the cliffhangers. Good news, I've finished the first draft of the next chapter.

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.12.2013 23:29
    Love the stories :)
    I'm glad you're not like other writers who leave lots of time in between their stories.

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.12.2013 23:52
    Nice add on love it keep it comming

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  • mypenname3000
    02.12.2013 09:55
    Glad you liked it. I've been wanting to write this story for while.

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  • mypenname3000
    02.12.2013 09:59
    Glad everyone's liking the story.

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.12.2013 13:00
    Why does Mary and Mark have to go to Europe, seems they could find a PHD in NYC and Mark can compel them to check out the book for them. Or he could have told the librarian he was a PHD

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  • mypenname3000
    03.12.2013 02:19
    It's Brandon that's going to Europe.

    Mark and Mary are going to New York. Sure they could use their powers to do that, but its more fun for them to go themselves.

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  • loyaltyrusty
    03.12.2013 14:07
    Better story than the original 'pact' series. Very, very good work.

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  • mypenname3000
    03.12.2013 14:13
    Thanks for the compliment loyalty. Sometimes what I picture in my head I'm just not able to express properly when I typed it but this one came together just as I imagined it.

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  • anonymous+reader
    03.12.2013 19:28
    Love it as always :) cant wait for more!

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  • mypenname3000
    04.12.2013 01:38
    There like trolls, its best just to ignore them and how annoying they are. I like responding to people who post actual comments because the feedback and comments are helpful and encouraging.

    When I started writing this I never thought it would be popular at all. I had been writing dirty stories for years and never had the courage to post them. And frankly, most of them are pretty bad. I cringe when I read how bad my writing was then.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.12.2013 02:03
    wasn't mary's older sister named shannon

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  • mypenname3000
    04.12.2013 02:25
    Yeah her name's Shannon. I have a bad habit of getting their names mixed up. I wrote a chapter and a half last time I made that mistake. Luckily I caught it before I uploaded it, unlike this time.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.12.2013 05:42
    Thanks for making me cum

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.12.2013 05:43
    Thanks for making me cum

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.12.2013 05:43
    Thanks for making me cum

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.12.2013 21:19
    If you haven't done this already, then you should make Mark use people he doesn't like to sell their souls for him and ask for his wishes

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.12.2013 10:16
    Hey how old are you really??

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  • mypenname3000
    05.12.2013 12:15
    I am 32.
    Now some extra words so my comment is long enought

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.12.2013 22:33
    Great story.....u should make mark rule the world and make him force people to sell their souls for him to get free powers and stuff.........keep up the good work and you'll be a rich author in no time!

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  • mypenname3000
    07.12.2013 01:43
    I just hope to be a successful author one day. But I'm glad you liked it.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.12.2013 01:45
    Wow, nowadays I dnt even read the sex part, jst the main story. This story shld be published really...
    ,
    mr author, I don't mean to control you, but don't you think this story should end? Its taking too long o.
    And I meant end in a good way. Mark and Mary exorcised but not killed.
    .
    Bt with Lilith children incoming, something tells me there's more episodes. Anyway nice work and I wana ask, are u a christian?
    .
    #Joshie

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  • mypenname3000
    07.12.2013 02:09
    The story is nearing an end. We're definetly past the halfway point and it sould be more story and less sex. I actually just finished the next chapter that brings us though multiple days. And there is an ending planed. It's written in my head.

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  • mypenname3000
    07.12.2013 02:09
    Oh, yeah I am a Christian

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.12.2013 07:15
    HEY SADISTS, the author is a good person, so good must prevail in this story ok? :p
    .am talking to dat guy that wants Mark to rule the world, and get more wishes from satan. lol
    .
    Keep going author...do u hav a name?
    .
    #Joshie

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  • mypenname3000
    07.12.2013 09:52
    Well thanks for the vote of confidence, Joshie. My name is Jim.

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.12.2013 05:45
    I can't wait till mary finds out who her mother really is and what she says thanks for the story

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.12.2013 05:48
    Another great addition to the story thanks

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  • mypenname3000
    09.12.2013 08:59
    Well I'm glad you liked it.

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.12.2013 17:29
    I thought of this in one if the earlier stories, but you'd think a pilot would be one of the few positions you wouldn't staff based solely on physical appearance

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.12.2013 17:33
    Fucking awesome as usual! Mike H.

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.12.2013 17:46
    Ohh it's about to go down can't wait till the next part post as fast as you can

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.12.2013 21:49
    Wow, nice work Jim.

    Lilith is assembling an army. Doug has d original copy, brandon and mark both have incomplete copies, the intrigue and suspense jst keeps building.

    I wish this could be acted into a movie. Jim, you're awesome, can't wait for the next chapter.

    #Joshie

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.12.2013 00:29
    Oh my that ending <3
    keep up the great work!

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  • mypenname3000
    10.12.2013 01:40
    Next chapter should be up around Thursday. For the pilot comment, clearly Mark takes looks over skills. They were all qualified pilots, maybe not the best, though.

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.12.2013 02:08
    What do you do for a living?

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  • mypenname3000
    10.12.2013 09:16
    I'm a paratransit driver. I transport people with disabilities to where they need to go.

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.12.2013 16:02
    Oh my that ending <3
    keep up the great work!

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 17:37
    Holy shit. I am a huge fan of this series. Wondering if the devil will drop any hints about his plans next chapter. Keep the stories man they're great.

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  • mypenname3000
    12.12.2013 17:42
    Devil will drop hints soon, but not next chapter. The next chapter will be up tomorrow.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 20:15
    oh my god, you and your cliff hangers! love this series.

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 20:37
    Nice! Love how fast youre getting them up too!

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 20:47
    i love this series keep it up ‹3

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 21:34
    Oh my god this ending is crazy good! I never expected it to go down like this!

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 23:01
    Nice! Love how fast youre getting them up too!

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.12.2013 23:29
    #shotsfired oh shit thanks for the awesome ending I also have a idea for a side story maybe talk about marks and Mary's family and what they have been up to since last time we saw them and what they where doing before the gun shot

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.12.2013 00:38
    Shouldn't this be chapter 28? 27 being "The Book"

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.12.2013 05:28
    Holy cow! That was such an intense ending and I love the way the story is progressing. Is it weird that a story about mind control and devil packs has the most realistic and consistent plot out there? I mean movie and tv scripts could learn some things from you. Keep up the amazing work!

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  • mypenname3000
    14.12.2013 01:48
    Yeah I messed up the chapter title with the Book, then forgot to fix it with this chapter. But, thanks to the new update to the sight, I fixed it.

    That's an interesting sidestory idea about the family.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.12.2013 04:58
    well done, love the stories keep it up

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  • mypenname3000
    15.12.2013 01:32
    So I posted the new chapter Friday night and it's been stuck in validation ever since. You can view the chapter on my blog mypenname3000.com/devil029

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  • papaprv
    15.12.2013 13:04
    Great story, I'm really enjoying your series.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.12.2013 00:38
    562-293-6818. 19. Female . Boys mssg me. Any age. Ill send nudes ;)

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.12.2013 20:07
    come on mate we have been wating for ages now you at least need to get one out before christmas but anyway great story have liked it from the start keep it up

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.12.2013 04:35
    Wow, that was very intense. I am excited for the next chapter!

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  • mypenname3000
    18.12.2013 09:44
    It's been stuck in validation since yesterday morning. you can read it up at my blog at mypenname3000.com/devil030

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.12.2013 14:55
    ths series is so goodd....please complete it asap. I love it. this story bring my every fantasy into words.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.12.2013 14:57
    ths series is so goodd....please complete it asap. I love it. this story bring my every fantasy into words.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.12.2013 14:57
    ths series is so goodd....please complete it asap. I love it. this story bring my every fantasy into words.

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  • mypenname3000
    19.12.2013 01:48
    I'm completing it as fast as possible while keeping the quality.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.12.2013 02:05
    I did find it sort of amusing that Mary had to think so hard about whether or not Mark and her had actually ruined any lives.

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  • familyties4ever
    22.12.2013 06:09
    Mmmm good story enjoyed it

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.12.2013 11:46
    dude where is the new story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.12.2013 12:28
    I'm all for everyone having opinions but if Mark stays stuck in this spell I will be emotionallyruined. I've become so attached to this story that when Mary got drunk I had to stop masturbating so I could read quicker to see what happens. Thankfully I fully enjoyed her gaining a cock. Great story :) I don't normally leave comments so...

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  • mypenname3000
    23.12.2013 14:02
    Stuck in validation. you can read it at my blog at mypenname3000.com/devil031

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  • mypenname3000
    28.12.2013 14:38
    Yay! Finally posted! That was annoying

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.12.2013 06:05
    Amazing story! I can't wait for the next chapter. I had guessed the sluts who would stay and I really thought Desiree would leave but other that that I was right. Keep up the good work.

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  • mypenname3000
    31.12.2013 06:19
    Cool, glad you liked it and came close to guessing who would stay.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.01.2014 21:22
    Hey
    Mike and the kids to

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.01.2014 04:44
    I love this story, top 3 of all time for me. Anyways, I can't wait for the next one it sucks that Chastity died though

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  • mypenname3000
    03.01.2014 05:43
    Thanks. I sent chapter 33 to my editor this morning.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.01.2014 07:32
    Ugh, you're blog's not loading! Bloody extended holiday. Hopefully everything will be fine by Monday...

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.01.2014 02:41
    I've been reading this nonstop for the last week. I really hope it doesn't end soon... Good job on the story. Minor grammical errors, but that's it. Good job on the point of views as well.

    Just don't let it end soon, please.

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  • mypenname3000
    08.01.2014 08:59
    Well thanks. The story is about 3/4 done. But, there's still side stories, and miniseries set in the same universe. I'm hoping for chapter 33 to get posted tomorrow.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.01.2014 01:35
    great story as usual looking forward to the next installment

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  • mypenname3000
    09.01.2014 06:58
    Thanks, glad you liked it.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.01.2014 04:18
    best series i've read on this site, looking forward to more.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.01.2014 08:46
    Great can't wait for 34

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.01.2014 17:31
    This was my least favourite chapter of this story, but was still good. So positive vote from still. Looking forward to the next one.

    Cya Later:)
    Thel20

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.01.2014 17:32
    This was my least favourite chapter of this story, but was still good. So positive vote from still. Looking forward to the next one.

    Cya Later:)
    Thel20

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.01.2014 20:59
    صوÙu0081يا سانتي

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.01.2014 21:01
    صوÙu0081يا سانتي

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  • mypenname3000
    23.01.2014 06:26
    @thel Sorry you didn't like this one as much.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.01.2014 02:42
    hello, I have read all your stories twice nlw! they are amazing and fun to read. please notfy me in the comments when the next instalent will be. amd sorry for all the bastards who post that stupid website on here. yhanks for writing!

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  • mypenname3000
    28.01.2014 17:20
    Glad you like the stories. I have a blog that I keep up to date, mypenname3000.com, My editor thinks he'll have the first edit of Ghost of Paris chapter 2 finished tomorrow, Once that's finished editing chapter 35 will be sent to him.

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  • mypenname3000
    24.03.2014 14:20
    Only registered users can comment. Got super tired of the mass bot spams.

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  • caboose9117
    28.03.2014 05:49
    Great story can't wait for chapter 40

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  • mypenname3000
    28.03.2014 14:47
    Caboose Chapter 40 is with my editor, so soon!

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  • mypenname3000
    28.03.2014 14:51
    Only registered uses can comment. I got tired of the spam

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  • mypenname3000
    02.04.2014 15:37
    Only registered users can comment, tired of the spam.

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  • caboose9117
    02.04.2014 22:52
    Great chapter! Do you think you will publish this series?

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  • mypenname3000
    03.04.2014 06:08
    Probably not. Underage and incest are not allowed on most ebook sites.

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  • mypenname3000
    09.04.2014 15:24
    Only registered users can comment, sick of the spam.

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  • mypenname3000
    12.04.2014 03:47
    As always, only registered users can comment because of spam.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.04.2014 17:50
    Rape

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  • Countz
    15.04.2014 21:54
    Great story again. Something about Mary having to degrade herself to break a warlock is such a turn on. I was disappointed Brandon didn't screw her before he was defeated.

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  • mypenname3000
    16.04.2014 05:57
    Hey Countz, glad you liked the story. The original plan was for Brandon to fuck her and get exorcised, but that was too obvious, so I went for the twist. There is a one-off Warlock story I have floating in my head where Mary has to fuck the guy to get out of the situation.

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  • mypenname3000
    17.04.2014 14:16
    As always, registered comments only, too much spam.

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  • mypenname3000
    21.04.2014 16:16
    Only register comments, tired of spam!

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  • mypenname3000
    08.05.2014 16:00
    Only registered users can comment. Too much spam! Hope you enjoy!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.05.2014 18:09
    Wooah, that was unexpected. I love the fap material but the plot is pretty interesting.

    #RealReview #NotAnAdvertisement

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  • mypenname3000
    17.05.2014 05:27
    only registered uses can comment

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  • mypenname3000
    20.05.2014 16:20
    As usual, only registered users can comment. I welcome all comments and criticisms, just not spam.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.06.2014 02:27
    I love getting tetogher with you and Jan. Loved fucking her mouth, cunt and tight ass along with giving you a good face-fucking. She is amazing takes all we have have for her hours of hot wet sex and two hot loads in her ass. If I hadn't needed to head home I know she would have been ready for more. What a hot lady!!!!!!!

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  • mypenname3000
    01.07.2014 19:58
    Only registered my comment

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.07.2014 14:46
    Xnxxx com

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.07.2014 14:46
    Xnxxx com

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  • caboose9117
    05.07.2014 04:28
    Well I wasn't expecting that, not Alison. Now he is screwed what can he do now lucifer is free. Loved it, looking forward to the next chapter. Dammit Alison!!!

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  • mypenname3000
    10.07.2014 08:04
    Hey caboose. Well, I guess you should know the answer to your question.

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  • mypenname3000
    10.07.2014 08:28
    With the recent changes to the site, my stories might get pulled down. You can read them at my blog mypenname3000(dot)com

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.08.2014 08:55
    best story line ever

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.08.2014 12:20
    I supospe that sounds and smells just about right.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.08.2014 06:55
    What a joy to find such clear thinnikg. Thanks for posting!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.08.2014 06:12
    As Charlie Sheen says, this article is "W!NIINGN"

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.09.2014 10:11
    Now we know who the senlsbie one is here. Great post!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.09.2014 12:43
    this is interesting, I"m curious to see how this all plays out

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.09.2014 08:01
    Took me time to read all the comments, but I sesiuorly enjoyed the write-up. It proved to be Very helpful to me and I am positive to all the commenters right here Its always good when you can not only be informed, but also entertained Im sure you had fun writing this article.

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  • xilix
    27.09.2014 22:34
    Mark & Mary better not lose to the nuns!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.09.2014 04:36
    Lol what a cliffhanger!!!
    The Wrath of Mary had better be unleashed on those damn nuns!!!

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  • xilix
    30.09.2014 01:29
    I would have given this a positive rating, but the anti-gun sentiment ruined it. Also ruined any desire to read any more of what had so far been an enjoyable series.
    As you clearly illustrated, later in this chapter, Mankind will ALWAYS find a means to kill each other. The "let's blame the gun" mentality is getting old!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.10.2014 04:58
    Actually Theology says Satan is the Prince of principalities of the air and rules here on earth . At the end of the Millennial Kingdom he will be cast into hell. The fact that Christ didn't dispute the fact and Satan tempted him with the kingdoms of the world shows this so he would probably be out raising havoc with others of his minions

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  • thejohnnyrotten
    30.10.2014 06:29
    Hey this is a story of fiction, And it's his story of fiction, So he can write what he wants!! If you don't like what you read it's okay to be critical, But it's not okay to be an asshole!!!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.10.2014 07:04
    The last anonymous guy needs to calm down or grow up. Its not like he's paying this guy to write this or something

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.10.2014 00:46
    Lilith has had sex with the former nun, Karen. Sence Lilith is a Demoness, who knows how long it would take for a woman who is pregnant by Her too show.......

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  • thejohnnyrotten
    02.11.2014 01:25
    Great plot twists. Keep up the great work
    as always
    Johnny Rotten

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.11.2014 07:45
    Unfucking Believable! !!!!!!
    I never saw this coming in a million years ......
    Making a masterpiece in the making.

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  • thejohnnyrotten
    12.11.2014 20:41
    Didn't expect it to be Alison thought it would be Candy......

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  • thejohnnyrotten
    12.11.2014 21:05
    Live by the sword die by the sword, Live by the trick. Die By the trick.......ha ha ha....
    Loved it!!!!!!
    As always
    Johnny Rotten

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.11.2014 10:35
    Fabulous Photos - all of them - thank you for taking them. The text shluod read 'demoniac' rather than 'demonical' which is a misprint starting with Mudd and quite widely in print ever since. AD.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.11.2014 19:12
    When you've purchased some winning sunglasses for example Oakley's or Rudi Project shades, yet need to make certain they're in the very best shape, get some good fresh sunglass lenses with poralized lenses for the greatest advantage. Or if your pricey sunglasses require some small sunglass repair make sure to search for sunglasses repair services online to get a fast and affordable service to be sure that your sports sunglasses will be in the very best condition for the summertime.Collier thought this was "potentially deadly lying." Post launched a campaign of intimidation; Collier sued for libel and was awarded $50,000 in damages. Lawyers said that this was the largest verdict in a case of this kind.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.11.2014 05:00
    I love this story set just wish they would put them in order.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.11.2014 11:53
    Mind = blown

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.12.2014 13:29
    While I'm certainly not against deflowering a pair of virgins, it wasn't really necessary. Mark wished for a long and HEALTHY life when he made his Faustian deal. Someone suffering from AIDS is hardly healthy.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.01.2015 18:53
    holy shit your stories are dam amazing with detail and length

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  • NeoDadachum
    08.06.2015 16:17
    This series has got to be the greatest find on here in a looong time.

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  • NeoDadachum
    15.06.2015 15:36
    I simply love this series! Glad that the whole nun angle seems to be moving forward, too.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.09.2015 17:48
    the story is great buh an error. mark was fucking annas ass not her cunt

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.10.2015 05:14
    God damn, this needs to be a novel

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.12.2015 09:38
    dude, you've got talent, and one hell of an imagination, this story just keeps getting better

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.12.2015 17:18
    why would a Magdalenite sister chant "shama"? the word has sanskrit origin meaning "forgiveness". Christianity/Mary Magdalene/Baptism or anything relevant doesnt add up to this. Is that a research error?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.02.2016 06:27
    i searched minecraft and found this xD

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.04.2016 04:09
    sounds like my wife when we went out with my class mates. he was up her dress in no time as men watched as they wiggled by them on the dance floor. he exposed her breasts and she said to show them them around the floor. they finally finished and my smart mouth wife said Tom was quite a dancer. said she invited him over to the house when he got a chance or after work. little did I know he would also bring a friend or two one time he brought a black friend that split her good

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.04.2016 10:31
    happens all the time niggas

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.07.2016 05:09
    you could put it all together and make a book. sell it its amazing. there is a high market for sexy books.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.08.2016 22:59
    There is no God or eternal soul. Get a grip. :)

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.09.2016 08:58
    Malazan Book of the Fallen is a great series.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.11.2016 06:10
    Awsome I just started this yesterday to pass time between two other stories this author is working on and I am glad I did its like I'm watching a very long episode of supernatural but from a whole different perspective then from Sammy and Deans

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.11.2016 07:34
    I hope mark summons Lilith and she tears that nun in half fucking feminazi not all us guys are bad her experiences may have scared her but that's never a fucking excuse to be a stereotypical bitch there are a few of us good guys out there this story is really good but this is really my only complaint because fictional character or real life women who think all men are pigs and have no good in them are stupid and delusional and irritate the hell out of me I'm reading this for its story I really enjoy it but that bitch is the only thing I dont like so far

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.11.2016 08:14
    I'm sorry but that feminazi nun bitch should have died not just been humilated they should have killed her great story apart from that bitch still breathing and those fucking cry baby nuns because the one comment under mine is absolutely right with powers like that I'd get some pay back on a few people although I wouldn't do what the character mark has been doing draws too much attention I would make sure and be ready for as much as possible but I'm also a majorly paranoid person so meh

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.11.2016 04:48
    Appreciate the mistborn love

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.11.2016 01:58
    Fuck that was hot

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.12.2016 17:14
    I hope they get out of the punishment phase bullshit when it comes to their enemies and start taking the fight to them war is the only way to true peace and killing the nuns is the only way those fucking nuns are gonna stop I still dont like the bitch who almost beat them who's also from what I'm gathering pregnant with a spawn of lillith she may be under their control but still doesnt excuse the feminazi attitude thats still there under everything and Mary's mother at this point I hope she betrays the nuns when she realizes she was played into going after her own daughter I really like this story but mark and Mary need to start thinking like they are at war in my oppion because these nuns are no different then vampire hunters as long as they live they will never stop

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  • Pfiredude
    15.04.2018 12:56
    Mostly very well written,(a few burps,) but hot as hell ! Wish it were legal to actually do that !!!

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