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Cumming of Age

Author: EvnMorRude

Date: 4 October 2013

First Time, True Story, Virginity, Young

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A tale that takes place many years ago. First there's me, kind of average looking not skinny nor fat, neither

ugly nor hot. People could say that I'm tall and that I'm smart, but as far as I knew people didn't notice me

enough to say such things.

I have two older brothers that are 4 and 5 years older than me. They always hung out together, and I ended up

either being the third wheel or being left out. I've learn to be okay with this as I don't have much in common

with them anyway. Both brothers are the “Coors!” and “Motorcycles!” types, while I played D&D and read

books. And let's face it, I really did look down on their inferior minds. There is something I was always jealous

of them for though. I'm sure you can tell between my attitude and interests that I was never popular with the

ladies. The two of them seemed to have new bitches every night. I say bitches because this is how I convinced

myself I didn't want what they had, I told myself I wanted a woman of quality and substance—though reality

was I was mauling myself near raw constantly and I would have done the chubby retarded girl down the street

if she'd let me.



I was fourteen and it was the summer after I had finished the eighth grade. My dad informed me that we were

to have one last major camping trip before I started high school. We were going to spend a week up at the

lake. My father loved camping. We must have went to the lake every weekend during the summer from my

ages seven to sixteen. I wouldn't call myself an expert survivalist or such, but I did know the drill and even now

I can hold my own the wild. This was to be nine nights on the lake though. Eight days without power or running

water. Wind, dirt, sun, sand and rain. My dad then added that Mark, a longtime family friend, and his wife and

daughter would be joining us at the lake too.


My dad had been friends with Mark for as long as I can remember. He was pretty nice guy, a shirt off his back

kind of fellow. He was the guy who gave me my first beer and helped me through my first hangover. His wife

Julie was the epitome of a MILF—a tall leggy blonde with big tits that always seem to be screaming “Hi there!

Touch me!” in a seductive voice. To this day I am convinced my oldest brother lost his virginity to her. Alas I

have no proof as such, I've just heard one to many innuendos and double entendra as well as catching a few

strange stolen glances between the two of them to not have my suspicions.



Then there's Anna, their only child. A blond preppy cheerleader type that always seemed to have way too

much pep and giggled far more often than was healthy. She was in the grade beneath me. And while I've

known her since we were little and had seen her around school many a time, I never paid her much heed since

I was a year older that her and was too good to talk to a seventh grader. At the time she was clearly beneath

me.



We left after my dad got off work, late 5, almost 6 o'clock. It was a three hour drive to the lake, but we had to

stop and help Mark's family load up first. Mark and Anna were outside when we arrived. I remember Anna

greeting me with a smile while brushing her shoulder length hair behind one ear. It was elegantly simple in

execution; a perfect flirtatious and girlish greeting. A wiser man would have seen the hint in this action.


These people were definitely not camping people. The whole time we were there I was thinking “Where's the

rest of their gear?!” To give you an idea of how bad it was I'll tell you this: they brought one ice chest with one

twelve pack of soda with them to drink. A week away from civilization and that is all they brought. While loading

the van with their “camping gear”, twice I thought I saw Anna watching me work. Each time however, she

seemed to quickly look away.



We stopped at McDonald’s half way to the lake for dinner. The place was packed. Never in my life before or

since have I seen so many people in a McDonald's. We all waited through an eternally long line. Anna gets her

food first and disappeared into the crowd. The adults' got their food next then made their way into the hoard.

My brother's followed suit shortly after.



“Sorry buddy, we ran out of buns. We've got more, but your food’s gonna be a few more minutes.” A man in

the ugly red and yellow hat says to me. I stared blankly then nodded. At least I didn't have to brave the mob

just yet. My food comes and the manager gives me a free small McFlurry since I had to wait. Grasping my food

close, I step into the press of bodies. I first see my brothers who have managed to seat themselves at a booth

with what appeared to be a pair of collage girls and were quickly making their acquaintance. Near them I

sighted my father, sitting with Mark and Julie, chatting away—probably about some inane work related thing.



I continued searching. There wasn't an empty table, chair, booth or stool to be seen. I stood, feeling slightly

dejected, my McFlurry dripping melting creamy goodness down my hand. Then I spot Anna, sitting alone at a

small booth in the very corner. Her blonde hair pulled into a high pony tail. Salvation!

I approached the table and sat without speaking. She seemed startled at first, pausing mid-fry as I seated. She

then saw the melting tasty treat I held. “Awe, I should have got one of those!” I looked at the sweet storm of

M&Ms and vanilla ice cream continuing to melt into my hand. I knew it would ruined by the time I finished my

meal. So I offered it to her. “Really?” She seemed to squeal when she spoke.



“Yeah, it was free anyway. You should take it.”



She snatched the cool dessert out of my hand and started to happily consume it, then paused “Wait, we

should share this.”



I shrugged “it’s okay, you have it. Besides we only have one spoon, and I'm not brave enough to fight through

that again.” I gestured to the swarm of people between us and the condiment stand. It seemed a tour bus had

arrived and deposited another few hundred people into the joint.



She giggled a little. “Here,” she licked the spoon she was using clean, “You can use this one.” In my

adolescent hormone stewing mind there was something rather erotic about watching the thirteen year old girl

lick a plastic utensil clean before offering it to me. I had to remember to keep chewing and breathing so I didn't

choke on my hot tasty burger. When I didn't move to take it, she scooped up a small bit of M&M-ice cream swirl

and aimed it towards my mouth.



I was flustered. I didn't know what to do or think. Role playing games had did nothing to prepare me for such

an interaction. I now know, years after the fact, she was attempting to flirt with me, but in that moment my mind

leaped to her thinking I was a retard or something. “I'm not two, I can do it myself!” The words snapped out

and were a bit loud and harsh even to my own ears. I even got a one of those sidelong “what's wrong with

you” glances from a middle aged Mexican woman sitting in the booth beside us.


She looked as though I just slapped her, then she flushed with anger. “I was just playing.” Anna turned away

to quietly eat the McFlurry. I finished my meal in silence—well as much silence as you can have in a

McDonald's filled with three thousand people stuffed into a space that might have held three hundred. I

watched her from the corner of my eye as best I could. I knew I was just seeing what I wanted to, but more

than once I thought I saw her start as if to speak only to stop herself thinking better of it.



Then our parents were beside us with my brothers in tow. “Hope you're keeping Anna here out of trouble.”

Mark grinned at me. “You two ready to get going?”



I nodded and collected my trash. I steeled myself against the onslaught of people. The smell of body odor and

desperation washed over me as I made my way to the receptacle. As I dropped my waste, a small hand

grabbed mine. I turn to face Anna “Thank you for the McFlurry.” She had a timid half-smile, like she was afraid

I might slap her again—though her words were quite sincere. She slipped gracefully away into the crowd

before I could respond. I faced a nightmare of spandex and sweat before I was through.


I made the McDonald's exit just in time to see Anna's face in the window of her father's van as it smoothly

glided out of the parking lot. In my mind I saw her smiling and licking the spoon clean and I could feel the soft

touch of her hand upon mine. Pain then radiated up my arm as my oldest brother struck me “Slug bug red!” he

called pointing to a red VW beetle parked down the lot a few spaces.



“Dude, what the fuck!” I angrily rubbed my arm. He had hit the bicep squarely against the bone causing my

fingers and then my hand to tingle numbly.



“Sorry” He shrugged mockingly. “Guess you need to pay more attention.” We then piled into the truck and got

back on the road.



The Sun had set by the time we reached our campsite by the lake. Mark's van barely made it down the sandy

track that lead to the small secluded cove my father favored. My dad's truck had a shell on the bed, so while

the others went about setting up their tents in the dark, I took the remainder of the camping gear from the bed

and claimed it as my sleeping spot for the night. Score one for lazy!

I had my queen-size air mattress inflated in half the time it took any of the others to erect their tents. I settled

into my sleeping bag with a small book and light, closed the tinted glass windows of the shell and relaxed. Not

twenty minutes later I hear Anna's voice, filled with frustration, call out “Dad! I can't get this stupid thing up. It's

too dark!” Her voice was angry, annoyed, and only slightly muffled. She must have been nearby. The

response came from much farther away. While I could hear someone speaking, I could not make the words.



It didn't matter anyways. I went back to my book.



Before I could truly get back into the groove of reading, the rear of the shell opened and Anna began climbing

inside. She must not have realized I was there for when she saw me she reeled back to her heels and paused.

“Your dad said I could sleep here tonight since I can't get my tent up.”



I glanced around at the unused space around me and shrugged. She looked around sheepishly, as though

she knew she was doing something she shouldn't, before climbing into the bed. She had on a gray long sleeve

shirt with a loose fitting round neck. Where I was laying combined with her angle and my small book light

afforded me an unobstructed view down her top. I could see her smooth white skin and a little black bra—

maybe an A-cup or a very small B.



After climbing in and closing the glass behind her, she went about extracting her sleeping bag from its stuff

sack. She was doing this still bent over, oblivious to the show she was giving me. This was the most I had

seen of any real live girl and I was entranced. I'm not sure how long I stared, but eventually my eyes shifted to

hers and I realized she was watching me with the hint of a knowing smile. She made no move to cover herself.


I wasn't going to avoid pitching a tent after all that night, and I turned to my side to hide my main pole. There

was a giggle behind me as she laid out her bag and squirmed inside. I was surprised to notice she had the

same bag as I, though her' was in red beside the black one I slept in. I reached out and turned off the light. I

focused on breathing slow and calmly, silently pleading with my pocket rocket to subside. Every time she

moved, it reminded me that she was there and the sight I was treated to and my soldier would stand at full

attention. Eventually I drifted off into a fevered horny sleep.



Morning came with a bang. Julie was pounding on the glass yelling for Anna to get up. Anna rose sleepily, her

face a mixture of sleep and confusion. She looked around then found me quietly watching her. I quickly looked

away in a poor attempt at pretending I wasn't staring. I knew I was caught. She didn't say anything though. Just

moved to climb out of the truck.

I lay in my bag a moment longer, thinking about what I should do with my day. I decided it would be a day of

fishing and reading. Normally I don't fish, but it's what I do while camping and it affords me plenty of time to

read. Multitasking right? First I had to set up my tent—no sense in putting that off anymore.



Wandering into the main camp I was greeted by one of my older brothers dumping some fried eggs into a

tortilla and handing it to me. “There was sausage, but you slept too late and I ate it all!” The other brother

chuckled.



“Thanks for saving me some.” Annoyance was clear, though I was surprised he had actually cooked anything

for me at all. I rolled up my burrito and moved to gather the things I needed to set up my tent. I saw Anna with a

sausage link skewered on a plastic fork chatting with her dad. This frustrated me a little, though I couldn't tell

you why.


I carried my things away from the rest of the camp, maybe about one hundred yards, then began to prepare my

site. Having been camping for so many years, my dad had taught me his perfect way of setting up a tent. At

first I thought it was silly and too much work, but after a weekend spent sleeping on a very awkwardly shaped

rock digging into my back, I learned the merits of his preparation scheme. As I worked I got the distinct

impression that I was being watched—that feeling of the hairs on the back of your neck standing on end. I

never did see anyone.


Shortly after finishing, just enough time to get my stuff squared away and get changed into swimming trunks

and a tee shirt, I heard Mark and Anna approaching with conversation about setting up her tent. They stopped

about ten yards away behind a thick group of trees. He was telling her something about her being cold if she

sets her tent up this far from the fire. She just laughed at him. I wondered if they knew how close they were to

my tent. It seemed they hadn't noticed me.


I crept forward, silently into the trees and watched them. They did nothing in the way of site preparation, just

threw the tent down on the ground once it was standing and staked it in place. Even from my poor vantage

point I could see she was going to be sleeping on some pretty brutal rocks. Poor girl.



I finished my stalker session ahead of them and walked back to camp with my fishing gear and book. I

informed my father that I was going fishing up the canyon a ways and I assured him that I would at least check

in around noon. I set off to my spot, a deep fishing hole about a half mile up the canyon. Before I got too far

from the camp I heard Mark calling my name. I considered ignoring him, pretend I didn't hear him if it came up

later. Sighing, I turned towards his voice and called out to him. After a few back and forth calls I find him and

Anna walking up. Anna was in a plain white bikini that did well to accentuate her lithe, but unmistakably girlish,

figure with a see through white tee-shirt over top a few sizes too big. She carried a pink fishing pole and a

small pink tackle box. They both looked brand new, and I could even see a price tag hanging from the reel.


“Hey, do you think Anna can go fishing with you? We have to head back into town and get some supplies.”

Remember the ice chest and soda? Yeah my Dad just found out what they had brought and was having a

small fit about it. I think it's a control thing personally. “I think she'd just be bored if she came with us and your

brothers have already taken off on their bikes.” My brothers had a pair of dirt bikes they spent all their time on

while we were up here—at least till they ran out of gas.



“Um, sure.” I looked at Anna, who was just staring at the ground in front of her. He thanked me, told me to

make sure I look out for her, then started back towards the camp. “Do you have everything you need?” It was

a stupid question, as it was pretty clear she had never been fishing before and really had no idea what she

would need. But Anna nodded anyway and the two of us started back towards my fishing spot.



We walked in silence for a while, though hiked might be a better word for it. The trail here was rough rock and

sand weaving in and out of boulders and trees that marched along the water's edge of the canyon. We were

about half way there when she broke the silence. “How much farther is it?”



I stopped and turned to her. I could see she was pretty tired from the hike. She was wearing small yellow flip-

flops that couldn't have been very comfortable. I then notice she wasn't carrying any water. “It's still a little

ways up.” I pointed up the trail as if this would make our destination clearer. She looked a little disappointed.

“But we can stop here and take a break.”


“I'm okay, we can keep going.” She tried to sound enthusiastic, to me it seemed as though she just didn't want

to drag me down.


“I'm kinda of tired anyway.” I lied, speaking as I sat down on a rock. I un-slung the canteen I carried and took a

big gulp, watching her eying the liquid as I did. I offered it to her. She took the bottle and started gulping it

down. I was kicking myself, I should have thought about bringing extra water. I wondered how long she had

been thirsty. She had probably been staring at the water I carried and thinking about how much a pick I was for

not giving her any. After drinking near half of what I brought, she handed it back and thanked me.



“Ready to go?” She stood up and started walking again. She seemed both eager and dreading the walk at the

same time. I didn't know what to think. I quickly caught up to lead the way.



We eventually arrived at my fishing spot. Here the sandstone walls had created a large bowl shape with water

on one side dropping into a deep hole, and a sandy beach half-shaded by the rock over hang on the other.

“Wow!” Her eyes where wide with wonder as we slid down into the small basin of sand. I remembered when I

first found this place, I probably had much the same look on my face. “Okay, the hike was worth it!” She smiled

over at me. I sheepishly grinned back. I then moved over to a rock chair I had created on the beach that was a

perfect place to fish and sit and read from.



Putting the rest of my things down, I quickly rigged my pole and cast it into the water then sat down. I leaned

back in my rest and watched the light ripple as it reflected off the water onto one of the bowl walls. Nearby

Anna had sat down in the sand and was fumbling with her fishing pole. After watching her become increasingly

frustrated with the thing, I offered my help. She accepted in a way that made me feel like she was expecting

the offer the whole time. I handed her my pole and began rigging hers.



“So, are you gay or something?”



“What?! No! Why?!” The words came out in rapid fire succession as her question burned in my ears. I looked

at her incredulously.



“I've just never seen you with a girlfriend or anything.” One hand held my fishing pole while the other traced

small designs in the sand. The fact that she had paid that much attention to my social life should have told me

something.



“So?! I just haven't met anyone I've liked that much!” I was near stuttering as I sat flustered.



“Seems gay.” Came her response.



“Well I'm not, so drop it.” I was getting a hold on the shock and pure anger was rising now.



“If you say so.” Infuriatingly sweet. “Maybe you should prove it.”



“What? How can I prove it?” She shrugged and began reeling my fishing pole like she knew what she was

doing. “No, really, how do you want me to prove it?”


She turned and peered at me. “I'm sure you'll think of something.” She smirked. My blood was boiling at this

point, I was about to blow a gasket and go ape shit on her—throw sand in her face, scream, yell, just have a

general temper tantrum. Then this voice in my head was whispering Kiss her. Kiss her! That'll shut her up!

Just before she turned away I leaned down to her and pressed my lips against hers. I was awash with fear and

anger even as fireworks of amazement went off in my head. I had never kissed a girl before, and I was waiting

for the scream—or slap. To my surprise she did neither scream nor slap me nor did she pull away. At this point

we were just there with our lips pressed together and our eyes closed. At least mine where closed. Knowing

nothing else to do, I slowly pulled away ending the embrace.



My heart was pounding and butterflies filled my stomach. Our eyes were locked together for a time after the

kiss. Neither of us spoke. In that moment my fishing pole, forgotten in her hand, nearly jumped from her as

something hit the line fiercely. She managed to keep hold and cried out “What do I do!?”



We both got to our feet and I said “Start reeling it in!” She was having trouble just holding on to the rod so I

moved up behind her and put my arms around to grab the rod. “Here pull it like this!” I helped her guide the

pole as she reeled. I issued commands on when to reel and pull and when to stop and let out the line. This fish

was putting up a huge fight. Anna would chirp with delight each time the fish would trash and pull at us. At one

point it almost pulled the two of us off our feet. As the lake monster neared the surface I could tell it was a big

one. We were both smiling and laughing and we pulled it to the edge to be scooped out of the water with the

net. It was a striper nearly as big as my entire leg.



“Oh my gosh! I've never caught a fish before!” She was beaming.



“I'd have thought you'd never been fishing before.” I ribbed. She playfully slapped my arm.



“Now what?” She asked.



“Fish more I guess.”



“No way, we gotta get back and show this off!”



I kind of thought that's what she'd want to do. “Okay. Well, let’s get our stuff together.” I looked in my pack for

something to put the fish in, knowing I didn't have anything big enough. Giving up on that I settled on gilling the

fish with a small bit of yellow nylon cord and slinging it over my shoulder. It seemed the way back took much

less time. Anna had much more pep in her walk, striding back towards camp with purpose. She never stopped

talking about reeling that fish in and what it was like and remembering the experience. All I could really think

about was having my arms around her—and our kiss.



Arriving back at the camp we were greeted with my dad and Mark sitting beach-side drinking some beers while

Julie was laying twenty or so feet away sunning herself. “Catch anything?!” Mark called when he saw us

approach. I swung the fish around off my shoulder, and I could see Anna just about to burst waiting for her

dad's response. Our lake monster got a double take from both guys and Anna exploded into the description of

how we caught it. She babbled excitedly, her face animated with delight.


The rule at our campsite was if you caught and kept a fish, you had to eat it. I helped Anna clean the large

aquatic creature and then showed her a simple way of cooking the thing. Basically fileting it and rubbing in

some spices before wrapping it in tin foil to bake beside the fire. The shadows had stretched long by then and

a burning red Sun dropped below the horizon. All of us had gathered around the fire to take our meals. Anna

and I sat beside each other and shared our fish while the rest cooked hot dogs over the hot embers.



My dad was an audiophile. He loved music. There isn't a genre out there that he didn't enjoy. His truck had

two 16-inch woofer boxes tucked behind the seats that he pulled out to rest atop the cab and blast music from.

We all enjoyed the music as we sat around the raging campfire. At one point Julie got up and began dancing

and singing along with one of the songs: Madonna’s “Like a Prayer”. She eventually got Anna up dancing and

singing with her and the two of them were teasing and cajoling all of the guys to get up and play with them.


Anna grabbed my hand, attempting to pull me to my feet “Come on!” She smiled in between singing the

verses. She was now dressed in a pair of short white cutoff shorts and another loosely fitting long sleeve shirt

that hung open exposing much of her smooth shoulder. This one had black and white horizontal stripes. Her

hair fell loosely past her shoulders.



“I can't dance.” I laughed and shrugged her hand off.



“Oh, everyone can dance!” She said to me. “Like this!” She demonstrated a simple move, swinging her hips

from side to side with the music.



She reached for my hand again then put on an exaggerated pout when I denied her. “Really, I can't move like

that.” I said apologetically



“Just try! Please?” I was taken aback. This whole trip seemed almost surreal. I had known this girl for a long

time, but now I felt as if I was seeing her for the first time. Her smile, the sparkle of her gray eyes, the way her

hair fell to frame her face, all of if filled me with a fleeting feeling I couldn't place. The feelings tugged at me,

pulled at me, urging me to do thing I'd have never even contemplated before.



I didn't want to disappoint her.



So I got to my feet. This brought a round of laughter from my brothers. She held my hands in hers, a little lower

than shoulder height, leaving a space between us so we could see each other’s feet. I tried to mimic her

motion, but failed miserably. Feeling foolish, I stopped moving “I can't do this”.



“No, you were doing it, just keep trying!” She giggled and held my hands tighter, and I started moving with her

again. “See, you've got it” She smiled encouragingly. “You're doing good!”


“Yeah! For a drunken octopus!” A brother teased from the far side of the campfire. I flushed with

embarrassment. Somehow my mind linked that feeling with her, as though it was her fault.



“Shut up!” Anna snapped angrily as I pulled away and stopped moving.



“You've pissed her off now!” The older of the two mocked.



“Hey, you guys be nice.” I heard my dad saying over my shoulder as I stepped away to the darkness towards

my tent. No moon had risen as of yet, so it was dark—near pitch black. I felt confused and hurt. Something

about the whole situation made me feel vulnerable in a way I'd never felt before. It was stupid really. I wanted

to impress her in some way and I though my brothers' comments would somehow reveal the truth about me.

They might reveal that I'm just some geeky nerd with nothing to offer.



I caught a flash of light from the corner of my eye and turned to see someone striding towards my tent with a

flashlight—though they were approaching from a different angle. I stopped and waited. I could just make out

Anna's pretty face in the reflected light. She stopped a few paces from my tent, the ring of light on the

entrance. She called out my name softly, a look of anxious worry marring her beautiful features. I'm not sure

why I kept quiet. I saw her silhouette shift and sigh before turning and heading off towards her own tent.


The heat of the sun baking my tent brought me from sleep the following morning. I climbed from my tent and

made my way towards the sound of voices at the main camp.



“We lost you last night.” Mark said when I walked up.



“Yeah, I just felt real tired so I went to bed.” My brothers snickered a little. From the corner of my eye I could

see Anna watching me, pretty much staring. I look everywhere else to avoid eye contact.



“Got any plans for the day?” Mark asked.



I suddenly felt as if everyone was watching me, waiting for my response. “Um.” I paused, my brain slowly

working for a response. “I thought I might walk out to Beggar's Point and go swimming.”



“Beggar's Point?” This was a place we went cliff diving at. There was a number of different cliff faces of

varying height that all dropped down into an absurdly deep pool in the lake. It had been named such because

of an incident when I was eleven where I had been brought to tears by my father while I was begging not to be

thrown off the highest point—a nearly sixty-foot drop to the water. Somehow the name stuck and we've been

calling it that ever since. One of my brothers narrated the story of the places naming with far more assholeish

mockery than I could ever hope to match.


“Sounds fun!” Mark laughed at the story. “I wanna go.” He looked to Julie “You want to join us babe?”


“No, I think I'm fine right here.” She smiled from where she was already laying out working on her tan.



“What about you Hun?” He asked Anna.



“I think I'm gonna stay here with mom.” She said while throwing a towel down on the sand beside her mother.


The rest of us made our way out to Beggar's Point and spent the day jumping from the cliffs and swimming in

the cool deep waters beneath. There was a lot of laughing and splashing. Someone dropping in a cannonball,

and at other times dunking each other. I tried focusing on anything, but somehow my mind kept wandering

back to Anna, I knew I was stupid for leaving her last night and ignoring her today. I just couldn't bring myself to

face my mistake so I continued down that path. I wondered if she was thinking about me. I wondered what she

thought of that kiss we shared—if she even thought about it at all.


The day seemed to melt away far too quickly and soon the sun was in it's decent on the horizon. All of us,

pretty much exhausted, climbed from the lake and began making our trek back to camp. Anna and Julie were

cooking burgers over the coals when we made it back.



“There's food!” Julie called to us as we arrived. “Anna's got the stuff!” She pointed to the young girl who was

deftly cutting up some fresh produce—lettuce, onions, and tomatoes.



I grabbed a bun and a burger then walked over to where Anna was, smiling at her as I drew closer. I stopped in

front of her, waiting for her to look up at me before saying anything. She never did. Someone behind me

barked “Shit or get off the pot!” I looked over my shoulder to see Mark and my brothers waiting for me to move

aside. I grabbed some lettuce and a few slices of tomato and got out of the way.



I ate my food near the fire, watching Anna when no one was looking. I waited for the chance to catch her

attention so that I might have an opening to talk to her. She never glanced my way. My heart sank when she

got up and walked away from the fire without ever saying a world to me or even looking my way. Now what?



There was a ledge nearby, another “secret” spot I had found. To the rear of the camp was part of the canyon

wall as it peel away from the waterfront. Here the wall towered up about thirty or forty feet. I had found a spot

that was between ground level and the top—about twenty feet up. The path, a mere jagged crack in the rock

face, was hidden by a small cluster of bushes so it was hard to tell the ledge was even there.



I liked to come to this place and watch the stars. It was high enough that the light from the fire didn't blind your

star-sight, but it still shielded you from the constant winds that plagued the area once you crested the canyon

wall. I climbed up, threw a pillow down and lounged back under the clear starry sky. It was silly, but for as long

as I can remember I always wish upon any shooting stars I saw. I made a wish that night, and it came true—for

a time at any rate. I'm not going to repeat it here though, even now I feel like it might ruin the magic if I told you.



I heard a scraping noise, then the sound of falling pebbles. I sat up and looked to see Anna's face peering up

over the edge at me. “Hi.”



I had a deer in headlights moment and all I could respond with was a lame “Hi” in return. She scrambled up the

edge and took a few steps to sand beside where I sat. She wore a pink spaghetti strap top with those same

short cut off shorts.


Not knowing what else to do, I laid back down to look at the stars.



She stood there a moment, thinking, waiting. Then spoke “I forgot to bring a pillow.”



I glanced at her, trying to think of a solution. Then it hit me. “You could share mine.” I scooted over a bit to

make room. She didn't say anything, just sat down before laying her head down beside mine. We stared at the

stars together, wordlessly enjoying the moment.



This is when I saw the shooting star. This is when I made my wish.



“You don't see stars like that back home.” Her voice was soft, like she was afraid the sound might break the

spell.



“No, you don't” I managed. I shifted a little, moving a small rock from beneath me. During my motion my hand

brushed against hers. I stopped as if frozen in time. My heart paused, waiting. My breath was held. Then her

hand locked around mind and our fingers twined together.



She moved so her cheek was resting on my shoulder. She rolled towards me, reaching her opposite arm

across me. She let go of my hand and I felt a moment of sadness in this. That feeling was quickly replaced

with warmth as my arm wrapped around her and pulled her slender body closer to mine. My other hand found

hers and they wrapped together to rest on my chest.



An eternal smile fixed upon my face, I lay there enjoying the feeling of her in my arms. Everything seem to

quiet, to pause, as if the world was taking a step back to allow us to enjoy this moment. If only it would never

end. Music drifted from the campsite below.



All I ever wanted

All I ever needed

Is here in my arms

Words are very unnecessary

They can only do harm



Rarely, if ever, have I known contentment like that moment. It would be forever etched in my mind as a defining

moment of our history. I have no words that could describe how I felt, and words were unneeded. I just knew I

wanted to be with her, to protect her, to make her laugh and see her wonderful smile.




I first became aware of her sent, an imperceptibly sweet smell of flowers. For a moment I wondered what it

could be. Having no showers or even running water, it must have been some kind of body spray. This line of

thoughts was quickly driven out when I became aware of her small breasts pressed against the side of my

chest. The knowledge made my breath catch, and my blood started rising in my loins. I tried desperately to

think of other things. To think of video games or the book I was reading. Tried to think about the last movie I

saw, or the countless stars above. For each thought I had about the mundane world, I had ten more about the

gorgeous girl and her perfect breasts pressed up against me. It was a lost cause.



I don't know how long we laid there together, my painfully hard erection pressing against what I use to think

were fairly loosing fitting shorts. Now they seemed like an iron vice. Eventually Anna sighed and whispered

while coming to a sitting position “We should go back”. While moving upright her hand brushed across my

groin. There's no way she didn't feel it, and this was confirmed by her surprised “Oh!”



I tried to shift and bend at the waist a little to hide my large embarrassment while feeling extremely light

headed. All of my blood was either filling down below, or rushing to my face. I sat up with a hunch in my back

to try and hide it better. I was horrified, and I was fearing a reprisal of anger or disgust. If I wasn't so afraid to

meet her gaze, I would have seen curiosity there, and not the anger or disgust that I feared.



Another eternity passed before she leaned towards me. Calculatingly she placed one hand on the back of my

neck and the other terrifyingly high on my inner though. Anna then pulled me into a kiss. It was another simple

kiss, nothing more than our lips pressed together. Sparks flew in my mind at the exhilaration of her touch.



She pulled away and locked her eyes on mine. With an incredibly erotic and seductive smile she purred “Just

as good as the first.” She giggled a little, then bolted away down the path back to camp.



My mind was a void filled with a thousand unanswered questions. Did that just happen? I'm I that lucky? What

just happened? They flowed unabated, the next one forcing out the previous. The music stopped and the

campfire burned low signaling those below where heading off to bed. My blood calmed enough so that I could

stand without embarrassment or pain. I crept slowly down the path back. The younger of the two brothers slept

in a lawn chair by the fire, a blackened stick falling forgotten out of his hand. The moon was rising giving me

just enough light to make my way to my tent.



As I rested, trying to calm myself enough for sleep, I thought of the events since we left home and marveled at

how I ended up here. Then my thoughts drifted to Anna. They drifted to our kisses. I recalled her white bikini,

then remembered seeing her little black bra. Finally I relived feeling her small breasts pressed to me. I'm not

ashamed to admit I masturbated furiously to these thoughts, cuming more than once before my session was

through.



I awoke early the next morning to see Anna watching me from the unzipped entrance to my tent. Once she saw

that I was awake, she grinned and climbed inside, zipping the door behind her. “What are you doing?” I

whispered. It was early enough that the sun had not risen yet, just the vaguest hint of it upon the horizon.




“Shh, it'll be our secret.” She whispered, crawling into the bed beside me. She wrapped her arms around me,

and I tried to do the same, though she was still outside my sleeping bag while I was within. “How did you get it

so soft?” She asked while shifting her back against the air mattress. “Even with my sleeping pad, the rocks

and ground are painfully hard.”



I just smiled. “It's a secret.”



“Well, I'm gonna remember this tomorrow night.” she responded. I was excited wondering what that might

mean. We both drifted off to sleep in the other’s arms and didn't wake until the sun was raising the inside of

the tent to oven-like temperature. I moved to kick the sleeping bag off and this action brought us both out of

our dreams. Anna sat up first, stretched her arms and yawned. “I slept good.” I lay still, smiling at the girl

beside me. Her movements were both feline and girlish. Something about them sent a shiver of delight down

my spine. Glancing my way, she saw me watching her. This time I held her gaze. “What are you looking at?”

She smiled. I couldn't help but grin foolishly back at her.



“Just a pretty girl.” Her cheeks took on a slight tint of rose, and the whole act of blushing made her even cuter

in my eyes. She then dropped back down to the pillow with a flop. Her face was less than inches from mine,

our eyes lost in the others. Her eyes closed and she moved just a mere fraction of an inch and her lips were

touching mine.



This kiss was different than the others. This time our lips nibbled gently at the other, tasting, and exploring. My

hand instinctively reached up to her neck, fingers twining into her smooth blonde hair and pulling her into a

deeper kiss. I felt her tongue softly brush my lips, a tentative test. I experimented with my own tongue, touching

her, tasting her.



Nothing else existed for us as we lay there each devouring the other. There was no tent, or sleeping bag. The

sun didn't shine above us and the wind didn't blow. The waves of a passing boat didn't break against the lake

shore, and our parents weren't calling for us. Our parents. I can't tell you how long we kissed for; passion

burning desire into our souls. Suddenly Anna sat bolt upright, tearing herself from my embrace. For a moment I

felt empty. Then I heard her father calling her lakeside.


I tossed another log on the fire and slouched down into a nearby lawn chair. The sun had long since set, and I

was exhausted. Mark and rented a speed boat from the marina and we all spent the day cruising around the

lake and towing people on the inner tube. Anna was in a chair across the fire from me. The day had been

rough. Every time I looked at her, the memory of the morning’s interaction would force its way into my mind,

and my blood would begin flowing towards a particular extremity. The others had slowly trickled away to their

beds till it was Anna, Mark and I left around the fire.




Anna stretched in an exaggerated yawn “Well, I’m heading to bed.” She shot me a sidelong glance. “Good

night daddy.” She gave her father a peck on the check then drifted out into the darkness. I sat for a while, idly

stirring the fire. The silence felt thick and awkward. The fear that he knew what Anna and I had been up to

clawed at me. It was a nagging feeling that wouldn’t be pushed away. There was something I had missed and I

couldn’t put my finger on it.



I was just about to retreat to my own tent when Mark started talking to me—questioning me about school and

what plans I had for the future. What did he expect from a fourteen year old? I stayed and made the small talk

with him, too polite to walk away. After what seemed like hours of conversation he finally made a complaint

about his eyes being sore. The fire was a few small coals. He made his way to his wife in their tent.



A bright moon had risen to bathe everything in a silvery glow. The walk back to my tent was quiet but for the


occasional splash in the lake waters beyond. Weaving between the juniper trees, Anna’s tent caught my eye. It

was silent and motionless. ‘She’s most likely asleep already’ I thought to myself. I silently cursed her father and

my own sense of manners for a moment before trudging the last few yards to my tent.



Wordlessly I unzipped the opening and slid off my shoes before climbing inside. I closed the flap, zipping out

the moonlight and leaving myself in total darkness. I paused a moment, considering waking Anna up so that we

might continue where we had left off that morning. Before I could make a decision a light turned on behind me,

and I turned to see Anna sitting up in my bed holding a small battery powered lamp out before her. “Took you

long enough.” She smiled. Her golden hair was a little messy from laying in my bed. She had on an over large

men’s gray flannel shirt only buttoned to her navel. Her small cleavage hinted to me of the treasures beneath.




I tried to give an apology, but all that came out was a gulping noise as I tried sucking down enough oxygen.

“It’s okay, it gave me time to do this.” She pulled back the top of the sleeping bag to reveal two things. The first

was her long slender legs. Silky smooth legs that ended with just the hint of a pink panty edging from beneath

the gray shirt. The other, albeit less important, revelation was that our two sleeping bags had been zipped

together to form a much large one. She giggled and patted the bed beside her.




As soon as I moved into the bed, we were kissing again. Her arms were wrapped around me, clinging to me,

as if she was unable to get her body close enough to mine. Our lips locked, and our tongues twined together. I

was having trouble figuring out where to put my hands. Nowhere seemed right and all of it wasn’t where I

wanted my hands to be. I decided to go for broke. One hand found a comfortable place at the back of her

neck, twisting into her luscious hair, the other found the last button of her shirt at her navel. I deliberately slid

my hand through the opening to her cheerleader firm stomach. The flesh beneath my hand was perfectly soft

yet toned. My hand felt rough and calloused compared to its suppleness. Millimeter by gradual millimeter I

stroked my hand upwards



Her hand was on my face holding me when my fingers first brushed against her breast. I nervously touched the

under edge, testing for her reaction. Her breath was caught and held tight. When my hand finally closed over

the small half apple sized mound her breath released in a sighing purr. I don’t know what it is about breasts

that creates that primal urge to touch them. It felt so perfect in my hand, just enough to fill my palm. The feel of

its shape and the small hard nipple permeated me with a lust I had never know. Her back arched as if trying to

push her breast deeper into my hand.



I was so lost in my exploration and her kisses I failed to notice her hand had wandered down my body to the

top of my shorts and was now fumbling with the tie. After an agonizingly frustrating moment of her muddling

with the knot it came free and her hand gently snaked inside. Her fingers grazed my glans and fire flashed in

my eyes. No one save myself had ever touched me intimately and I thought I was cuming. With the amount of

precum filling my shorts one would have though I already had. She didn’t seem to mind. Her fingers brushed

against me again sending a jolt of pleasure up my spine. Her probing became bold as she wrapped her small

girlish hand around my girth and slowly began stroking me.



At first I was ecstatic at having someone touch me, but her inexperience soon showed. Her grip was a little too

firm and her stroking was more like a tug o’ war. I winced and my hand shot down to cover hers. Our hands

groped together and with a few unvoiced gestures I slowed her caress and loosened her hold. Moving my

hand away from hers, I placed it on her inner thigh. I was only a few inches away from the edges of her

panties. I felt her hips shift a little, opening her legs just a slight more. I did not wasted the time stroking her as I

had when going for her breast. This time I decisively slid my hand up to investigate her nether regions. I

explored her from outside the moist cotton fabric only a scarce short moments before skimming up to the

elastic waistband and slipping down inside.



I found a small patch of soft downy hair. She was soaking wet and moaned deeply into my mouth when my

fingers first touched her slit. My mind took on an iron-like focus of her body. While her soft hands were doing

wonders to my erection, and her kisses remained like fireworks in my head, if I paid them too much heed I

would cum. I feared that might end our escapade much too soon.



I had no idea what to do or how to touch her. So I explored. I started at the apex of her slit, feeling her wetness

and velvety smoothness as the outer lips parted around my digits. I elicited a sharp gasp of pleasure from her

as my finger slid over the small bump that was her clit—though at this point I didn’t realized what I had done to

cause such a reaction. I glided further down to feel her inner lips and the opening to her carnal places. I

caressed around her a moment before pressing one finger inside. Her whole body tensed and my mind when

directly to pain so I quickly retracted my finger. Then her hand was on mine. Her fingers directed mine, guided

me to start a long gentle stroke from the top of her clitoral hood down to just probing her entrance. She

repeated this gesture a few times using my hand before returning to her own task.



Instead of going straight back to my penis, her hand went to the waistband of my shorts and began attempting

to pull them down. I was so focused in touching her and avoiding an early eruption it took me a few moments

to realize what she was doing. Once it dawned on me I quickly shucked my shorts and shirt aside. She

watched me unclothe then followed. I saw her undo the few buttons holding the flannel shirt closed then slid it

gracefully from her shoulders. She shifted under the sleeping bag to remove her last bit of clothing, and I

marveled again at the perfect shape of her breasts. Seeing them in the dim lamplight for the first time then

were small yet exquisitely formed half-apple sized mounds. She had small pink nipples like littler erasers, and

areolas not much bigger than a nickel.



A small bit of pink cloth hit me in the face, breaking me from my reverie. “You’re staring!” She had a

mischievous grin and she rolled towards me, pushing my shoulders to the bed and straddling me in one

movement. My dick was pinned between us, the lips of her labia spread around it and forced it up against my

lower abdomen. I could feel my own precum wetting my stomach and her juices flowing to coat me as she

slowly glided herself up and down my length. Her hands were holding my shoulders to the mattress; her

elbows were locked. I had an amazing view of her pale white body. She deliberately rode her slickness up my

member, and her extended arms pressed her breasts forward accentuating their shape. I didn’t really know

what else to do with my hands so I placed them on her hips. This seemed quite natural, and it allowed me to

help grind her pelvis harder onto me.



I can’t tell you how long we stayed in this position and it was only through some divine providence that I didn’t

burst my load all between the two of us. Unexpectedly one of her hands reach amid our bodies and grasp my

erection. My heart stop as fear and excitement swirled over me. She shifted its position and angle just the

slightest bit and my head was caught in the silky folds of her entrance. Her hips shifted back pressing herself

onto me—though nothing happened. She shifted the angle of my dick a bit more and drove herself back again.

This time there was a slight parting. I could feel and see her how body go ridged with pain.



As much as my pubescent hormone addled mind wanted this it ripped at my soul to see her in pain. “Maybe we

shouldn’t-“



“Shh.” She leaned down and kissed me again, cutting off the weak protest. She pressed again, this time much

gentler. I felt the entrance to her pussy slowly part around my invading member. She would trust onto me just

enough to penetrate herself another micron before backing off. I really could not tell if there was any progress

at all. I felt a tight pressure at the tip of my penis, almost hard enough to make the shaft bend painfully and

then she would stop. I don’t know how long this went on—tension, then relax. Strain, then ease.


Then it happened.



I was just about to voice another week objection when I felt a pop. The head of my penis forced its way inside

her. Her vaginal opening tight around me like a ring a few sizes too small. She cried out and wrapped her arms

tight around my neck. She clung to me, her breath slow and ragged. She tried to adjust to this new feeling she

had forced inside her body.



Adding her tight grip around my neck to all of the events leading up to this moment I was feeling light headed. I

held her close in my arms. I wished desperately to somehow take the pain away. I was kicking myself that I had

let it go this far. At the same time I was fighting the powerful instinctual urge to grab her hips and start trusting

furiously.



Her death grip around my neck loosened and she leaned back just enough so that I could see her face. Her

grey eyes were like ice chips under moonlight. My heart broke when I saw a tear pooling in the corner of her

eye. “We don’t have to do this.” I whispered nervously.


She leaned back further, pressing the rest of my length into her. “It’s already done.” She smiled weakly. This

time when she tensed I could see the pleasure rising up though her body. She moved her body, almost

extracting me completely from her, before slowly pushing herself back onto me. I could feel every inch of her

velvety pussy wrap around me; slide over me. She built a rhythm with her movements, and I started to thrust

back against her. We writhed together in ecstasy. Her moans of pleasure rising from somewhere deep inside. I

had reached my break point. I enfolded her in my arms and plunged as deep as I could. It seemed as if I was

pouring myself inside her as pulse after pulse of warm cum shot into her waiting vagina. The world fell away

around us once more. I was lost in and eternity of bliss as my orgasm peaked. Her whole body went ridged

and spasms rippled over my dick as she reached her climax with me.



Once spent, she clung to me almost desperately. She was a hurricane survivor and I was her life raft. Her

breath was short frayed pants. Her head rested upon my shoulder. My arms wrapped protectively around her.

My erection was still buried deep inside her. “Can we stay like this forever?” This was the last thing I heard

before drifting off to sleep.


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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 12:32
    This was a beautiful story, a few mistakes here and there (grammatical) But it did not take away too much of the quality.

    Keep up the good work.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 12:32
    This was a beautiful story, a few mistakes here and there (grammatical) But it did not take away too much of the quality.

    Keep up the good work.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 13:13
    This is a great story told in a very well written way. I would certainly like to hear more of the relationship as this is not one of sex so much of love. A lot of sex these days, but not so much love. Very inspiring.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 14:56
    Single space please. This isn't grade school

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  • Jakeped23
    04.10.2013 16:08
    Great story is there more to add to this l hope so.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 18:22
    very good..top quality and only your spacings tend to be over the top ..but keep writing , I can see a big future for you..not only with this stuff , but maybe fiction stories..your descriptions of nature and rock pools need to be nursed into full holiday stories about places and times..cheers.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 19:59
    That was probably the best story I've ever read here. The structure, the imagery were great. The double spacing also made it a lot easier to read; not everybody thinks of that.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 20:54
    I feel the same this is the best storie be it True and or Fiction !
    Please too all the wriihter out there follow siut wrivht like this.
    I give it a score of out of 1 to 10 a Whappi?g (20)

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 21:18
    Great story is there more to it would enjoy reading it

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.10.2013 23:44
    beautiful sweet story...you should continue.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.10.2013 01:54
    Basically more of the same above. A few grammatical errors, but the story was well written. The devil is in the details as they say and you did well. I personally liked the double spacing. I agree it makes it easier to read and follow. I'm also a romantic, so stories like this that have substance to it, really enhance the sex scenes & vice versa. Please continue with this story! I also believe theres a lot more that can follow! Thanx, I enjoyed you story! B|

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.10.2013 02:06
    Dude, beautiful love story.. Almost made me cry.. :')

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.10.2013 10:24
    Extremely well written. Great love story with the right buildup and right amount to of sex. U have left it open for a sequel. As forum the losers that try to

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.10.2013 10:52
    A simple and beautiful story it could be about my wife and I many years ago

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.10.2013 00:13
    Long, but a wonderful story. Thanks for sharing. Are you two still together?

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.10.2013 02:03
    Great buildup, though the (story) climax was so-so. A bit more detail during sex.

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.10.2013 10:42
    Great story and it would be nice to see how things worked out for the two of them.

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  • dyson69
    06.10.2013 11:36
    Possibly the finest bit of writing I've ever posted here. Great imagery and the double spacing was a good choice. Started with this story for the sexuality, stayed with it for the writing and the tale unfolding, "GREAT" doesn't do this story/your writing justice

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.10.2013 22:24
    Good story with nice build up.

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.10.2013 22:27
    I thought the double spacing between every line was unnecessary.
    I prefer double spacing between paragraphs, but double spacing between every single line and then triple spacing between paragraphs made the reading tedious. All this wasted white space made it time-consuming to scroll up or down. I would strongly suggest that like most of the better writers, you double space ONLY between paragraphs.

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.10.2013 16:43
    I love young girls to talk to :) Luckyyy7

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 11:03
    Very good story, the build up was well done and the story as a whole was really quite good. I will say that the spacing issue was unnessary and did make for a bit more difficult read, but I would like to see what happends to the young man and Anna, so I hope you decide to post a second chapter to this story, I would love to read it if you do.

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.10.2013 11:04
    Very good story, the build up was well done and the story as a whole was really quite good. I will say that the spacing issue was unnessary and did make for a bit more difficult read, but I would like to see what happends to the young man and Anna, so I hope you decide to post a second chapter to this story, I would love to read it if you do.

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    08.10.2013 12:26
    Very horny pkz tell us more

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.10.2013 02:43
    Very awesome, romantic story. True love can only be experienced in nature right? I feel we are kindred spirits you and I

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.10.2013 03:32
    awesome story, one of the best I have read on this site thank you!

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.10.2013 23:07
    Loved it!!! Hope there will be more story to follow!!!

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    11.10.2013 10:00
    "Tell me how, you know now, the ways and means of getting in, underneath my skin - you were always my Original Sin..."

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    12.10.2013 00:45
    That was a beautiful story. I thoroughly enjoyed it, you are a great writer!

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    12.10.2013 17:48
    A story nicely told. Well done.

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.10.2013 11:12
    nice story liked the slow build litte complaint is the short time he was inside her before spunking even tho I can understand wud get more exited if he stayed fucking her longer

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.10.2013 17:07
    When is Part 2? This was an excellent story and very well written with passion and innocents. There has to be a second or maybe even a third installment.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.10.2013 23:59
    Few words:

    PART 2!!!!!!

    SPELL CHECK!

    Good job though please post part 2

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    16.10.2013 20:08
    I can't wait to read more, this was a perfect way to young people to begin their sexual journey

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.10.2013 17:41
    Very well told. Excellent writing style. A few spelling errors but not enough to distract from the story. I'd like to read more about them.

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.10.2013 18:01
    good a part 2 would be better

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.10.2013 22:46
    PART 2!!!
    Awesome but you need a part 2

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.10.2013 06:39
    beautiful story and excellent writing skills

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.10.2013 01:15
    if this is a true story perhaps you should continue if this isnt the last time you interact with her..

    perhaps she becomes your gf then wife?

    its cute. typical disney love ending.

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.10.2013 01:15
    if this is a true story perhaps you should continue if this isnt the last time you interact with her..

    perhaps she becomes your gf then wife?

    its cute. typical disney love ending.

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  • anonymous+reader
    21.10.2013 03:14
    Ikr I agree with u first comment plus I want to know If they get caught

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  • anonymous+reader
    22.10.2013 00:00
    That was the most erotic and sensual story I've ever read that was wrotten from a man's point of view. It is so romantic ♡

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  • anonymous+reader
    22.10.2013 00:02
    That was the most erotic and sensual story I've ever read that was written from a man's point of view. It is so romantic ♡
    Did you part ways? Did you keep contact? Stay in a relationship? I know this is an erotic story website but I feel like I need to know more!

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.10.2013 09:46
    This was so amazing, I never knew that something like this could be written so well.

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.10.2013 10:21
    great story! How did it contnue?

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 09:00
    very good. continue please

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:47
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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:47
    ^(#$!@#$)(()))******

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:48
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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:48
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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:48
    ................windowswin.ini

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:48
    acunetix_wvs_invalid_filename

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 10:48
    )))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 14:14
    good job..though there are some errors with in the format and grammars you used

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 16:15
    Good job. Erotic and somewhat believable. Ah youth. Keep going. Spacing a little strange BUT very readable. Much rather have this spacing vs a wall of unreadable rext.

    B

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 16:16
    Good job. Erotic and somewhat believable. Ah youth. Keep going. Spacing a little strange BUT very readable. Much rather have this spacing vs a wall of unreadable rext.

    B

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.10.2013 17:03
    Very nice job, hope there is a follow up to this.

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  • famliboi
    25.10.2013 21:16
    Very good hope theres a follow up

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.10.2013 12:56
    my laptop is full of cum

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  • anonymous+reader
    27.10.2013 12:58
    my laptop is full of cum

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.10.2013 14:55
    Very light on sex, but one of the best written stories I've seen on this site.

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.11.2013 07:59
    Very good job with the story

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.11.2013 06:37
    EXCELLENTLY WELL WRITTEN STORY. VERY GOOD. READ LIKE A NOVEL. PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.11.2013 06:37
    EXCELLENTLY WELL WRITTEN STORY. VERY GOOD. READ LIKE A NOVEL. PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.02.2014 14:44
    Just have to say: your penchent for double-spacing is terribly annoying and stoppd me from reading your story in full. Your use of paragraphs is good -- and necessary. But the double-spacing makes you unreadable.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.03.2014 05:11
    Great story, hope to see more

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.12.2014 03:14
    Beautifully written. Ignore people who can't appreciate such a beautiful story and such details. can't wait to read your stories

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.03.2015 05:22
    Pretty good story well written. Would make an excellent novel.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.06.2015 00:16
    Previous comments: are you all English teachers? When you have a story of such beauty, why grade it as if you were professors.
    This was one of the most beautiful love stories I have ever found on the XNXX site. I know my comments are 2 years latte; but I could easily identify with the young man from my personal experiences 60+ years ago.
    Again: you have written great lover story. It will hold thru the ages.

    /jab

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.07.2015 15:21
    Great story, reminds me of my first time, was 22, the one I fucked for the first time, I wound up getting married to. lasted 22 years, am now single, and wont marry again.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.09.2015 19:40
    wish he had kept posting stories like this. enjoyed reading this story very much

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.01.2016 18:07
    great story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.02.2016 00:31
    Amazing...I stayed intrigued the whole time!e reading.my criticism next time do a proof read and grammar check

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.03.2016 05:46
    Excellent. Takes me way back. I remember, meeting, figuring it out, mutual attraction, kissing for hours. Those summer explorations of one another. First times.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.04.2016 20:08
    Great story, you should consider adding to it. It is a great start, it has all the right qualities of becoming a novel. Good luck in your future writings.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.04.2016 20:43
    Great story. The line breaks were weird and typos slightly distracting, but a pleasurable read.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.05.2016 10:54
    Take to fucking long to fuck her.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.05.2016 15:41
    "A blond preppy cheerleader type" is such a cliché. Even "preppy," as a noun, and "cheerleader type" are clichés by themselves.

    Playing against "type" is interesting, at least, "when his parents and teachers were around, he pretended to be a preppy," or "I thought that she was the cheerleader type, but then I saw her reading a Bible in study hall with two of the other Jesus zombies."

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.05.2016 18:01
    Good read. Enjoyed the build up. Keep up the good work!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.05.2016 17:48
    Good job. Keep on writing, youre good at it!

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  • ShamelessSexuality
    17.05.2016 05:03
    What's with the periodic line breaks? It's extremely distracting.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.05.2016 14:24
    Great story. Don't listen to these two fucks ^^^^^^

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.05.2016 15:50
    I can relate to this storie, great job!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.05.2016 17:17
    really good job with the story. you are a good writer

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.06.2016 02:00
    Holy shit that was good

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.06.2016 20:58
    Thank you for thememories.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.06.2016 19:04
    I absolutely loved it. I want there to be a part two so bad!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.07.2016 12:40
    OMG, that was so hot. Well done.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.07.2016 03:39
    damn is there more between you two?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.08.2016 02:23
    Make part 2 please

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.08.2016 20:56
    For someone who bragged so much about intellect from the start and how superior you were, you certainly write like someone who lacks intelligence. Are you 12? If you have to try so hard to convince others of how smart you are, you're usually not.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.08.2016 20:07
    This is very good. Great! Super hot! Post a continued story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.08.2016 19:18
    Wow....that's all I can say, one of the best stories I've ever read. It kept me going till the end and made me want to read more. Keep up the good work!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.08.2016 03:05
    This is one of the best writings I have ever read! I appreciate the double-spacing, which increases readability. Such presentation of subtle thoughts and actions of the characters kept me intrigued. Story development was entertaining to keep me reading, not giving too much away in advance, but not building too quickly to end up with simple smut. You have a gift of story-telling. Please keep it up, regardless of your subject matter.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.09.2016 03:56
    Woah
    Positive rating

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.09.2016 04:19
    Awesome story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.09.2016 13:41
    a beautiful story. more please.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.09.2016 06:26
    Lol wtf it's good tho

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.09.2016 02:06
    Awesomekeep her to to yourself and impregnate her with your child

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.09.2016 08:14
    This is a fantastic story, I'd love to read a part 2.

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  • 1bagman
    23.09.2016 18:27
    Sweet but long

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.09.2016 22:12
    The writing style, including grammar, spelling, and keeping the same tense throughout the story, could be improved. I do like the overall story and the descriptions, but this feels like a really nice rough draft ready for editing with more detail and conversation and such. With a bit of polishing, this could easily be one of the best short stories in the section. Good luck!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.10.2016 12:37
    Need sequel. NOW!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.10.2016 08:55
    Young inocent lover. Reminded me of my youthful days. Not just sex but love. Good writing. I look forward to part two.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.10.2016 22:00
    Amazing. So sad I had to skip a little cuz its late!! I am 15 years, and I love reading books. You could for real make an awesome teenanger book by this story! Dude! Keep it up!
    Lots of love - Mr.Anonymus(u can call me oscar)

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.10.2016 22:00
    Amazing. So sad I had to skip a little cuz its late!! I am 15 years, and I love reading books. You could for real make an awesome teenanger book by this story! Dude! Keep it up!
    Lots of love - Mr.Anonymus(u can call me oscar)

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.10.2016 10:36
    What can I say. No rush, no confusion, no skip plots.
    I would give you 95% because as I was getting into it and I read misplaced words as it threw me off.
    But as I got back to read it really enjoyed it.
    Keep writing more.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.10.2016 20:14
    Yeah, gave me the feeling of falling in love! Thanks, excellent. But mind the typo's!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.10.2016 21:40
    Very entertaining but watch the typos

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.11.2016 05:38
    Very good story. Well described and taking us slowly to the conclusion. I can sense that you are a very good story teller and writer. Keep up the good work

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.11.2016 06:38
    Very good story kept me drawn to the kids.... don't worry about the misplaced words I have read much worse......keep up the great work.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.11.2016 03:37
    mmmm, great story

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  • PO469
    06.11.2016 01:24
    Good story but your strange spacing made it a little hard to read.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.11.2016 19:21
    Best story I've read work on spacing

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.11.2016 14:56
    Amazing story, keep up the good work!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.11.2016 11:25
    ah yea, nice 'teen story.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.11.2016 20:33
    No
    Very nice

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.11.2016 23:26
    Does any want to give pic

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.11.2016 15:54
    what a night o fuckm more

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.11.2016 20:44
    fuckin cool

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  • geyguy
    03.12.2016 09:32
    Great story such a turn on

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.12.2016 23:24
    What a crock.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.12.2016 21:13
    Very, very erotic.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.12.2016 19:14
    they were just kids much to young for that

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  • ShamelessSexuality
    17.12.2016 04:24
    English, motherfucker, do you speak it?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.12.2016 02:06
    Took too long to fuck her and then when they finally did it didnt go on long enough. But a good try. Meep going and ylull get there.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.12.2016 04:10
    silly long stuff....... good try though

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.12.2016 04:51
    Beautiful. The negative comments make no sense to me whatsoever.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.12.2016 21:22
    Great story. I like how long you spent on the buildup, it really added to the story.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.12.2016 09:18
    Not sure why theres so much hate but I liked it. Good Job man nice story buildup

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.12.2016 15:56
    This story gave me the feels man. I wish I could have an experience like that, so that I know what it is like to embrace someone I care about.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.12.2016 19:18
    This is amazing story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.12.2016 08:31
    Wow! This made me very wet! It made me feel like I want to ride a cock!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.01.2017 06:56
    What an amazing story!!

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  • seminole50
    22.05.2017 20:02
    Awesome story and I hope that you will consider continuing and let us know how the relationship turns out with Anna and yourself.... This was one of the best stories that I have read on this site and would like to read more from you I think that you are very talented and deserve to be treated as so. Again I hope that you will continue the story...

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  • seminole50
    22.05.2017 20:02
    Awesome story and I hope that you will consider continuing and let us know how the relationship turns out with Anna and yourself.... This was one of the best stories that I have read on this site and would like to read more from you I think that you are very talented and deserve to be treated as so. Again I hope that you will continue the story...

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  • apartstory
    16.06.2017 12:07
    Your story in brilliantly written. I'm an author myself (dry technical stuff for pay, some erotic for personal pleasure and expression.). I rate your story as truly excellent on two scores. 1. The story development which creates a true context is flawless (okay a very few misspellings but who's counting.). The pace is just right and don't be dissuaded by the jerks that just want a sex story. 2 and all too poignant, one clown said you don't do that at 14. I know all too well how wrong he was. See, both Sue and I were 14. It was at camp instead of camping. We were both virgins and, like your Anna, she was the the more aggressive; bless her heart. Keep up you writing. There's great talent there.

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  • mistyoptic
    06.11.2017 21:15
    Lved this story, now 76 but still remember my first time but I was 10 years older at 24, and came at the second stroke, had to pull out sharp.hope it has a happy ending for them both.

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  • SliqeScribe
    10.01.2019 05:51
    One of the best I have read

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  • Doozy+woof+Hunter
    07.11.2020 21:33
    Excellent story! Erotic and romantic - so good I ignored the many spelling mistakes - they didn't upset the flow! Good writing

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  • cum2meluv
    26.04.2021 22:04
    OMG, that was erotic and so loving. Reminds me of my camping trip, I was 14 and she was 18. It is wonderful when people make love and not just fuck.
    One of the best stories I have read. Your great!

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  • cum2meluv
    26.04.2021 22:06
    OMG, that was erotic and so loving. Reminds me of my camping trip, I was 14 and she was 18. It is wonderful when people make love and not just fuck.
    One of the best stories I have read. Your great!

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