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Midnight Swim

Author: Austiman

Date: 17 August 2007

First Time, Fiction, Romance, Teen

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At 16 Kyle was told many, many times, on many, many occasions that he wasn't in love. "You're too young!" "You haven't been with her long enough" and all that. 'They don't know shit!' He would think. Happy as can be until he got a hard slap in the face from reality.

The people knew shit. And it was the shit he didn't want them to be right about.

Just a week ago he was so positive and happy, seemingly indestructable. Then when he decided to go to Lynn's house early ((Ex) girlfriend), he saw her riding Leon. He had seen him around school, never really talked. But now he knew who the sonofabitch was.

"Goddamn it all to hell." Kyle muttered, sitting in his seat in his last class. He tilted his head and waited for the bell to ring. For the last 10 minutes they could read, free from homework, thankfully. 'It's been a hard fucking week. I'm just going to try to relax.'

He heard something drop against his desk. He lifted his head to see a folded piece of paper. Opening it he saw written: "We need to hang out." It was written in his friend's handwriting. Her name was Kate.

He scribbled down, "Sure, I could use a friend to feel better." He passed the note back up.

She nodded to herself as she read the note. She wrote with her pink pen, and passed back the note. "Let me hitch a ride home."

He again began writing "Biatch, You know better than to boss yo pimp!" He tried to hide his laugh as he passed it back up.

Her shoulders raised as she tried to not laugh, and began to write. She passed the note again.

"Muh fuckin' bitch! You ain't funna tell my ass what to do!" He chuckled silently and was about to write when that magic sound went off.

The bell, annoucing the high schooler's freedom for the weekend.

"Nice comeback, biatch" He said with a smile. Being around her always made him feel better.

"I ain't no bitch!" She said with a grin.

"Let's get some food." He said grinning back.

He followed her out of the room when it became less congested with people. It's what Kyle called the traffic jam, and always avoided it since he was a child. As he followed her out he noticed her auburn hair was especially lovely today. In fact, everything about her was. Her scent, her curvy figure, her brown eyes, How the top of her head met his shoulders. She was only 5'5", and had firm, round 32C breasts. She was beautiful but didn't ever date. Only at 15 she was already looking like she was in her 20's.

Kyle was about 6 feet tall and had brown hair, brown eyes, and was pretty muscular, but not like the hulk or body builder. Just enough to get noticed.Usually by Kate's side they were always called a couple. But they were just friends. These feelings he was having was making him think and hope they could be more than that.

Could they? No, that was just the loss striking him, making him want any girl he was close to. But why wouldn't it work? 'God stop thinking like that,' he thought.

When they put their things away at seperate lockers, Kate did something she had never done before.

She grabbed Kyle's hand and rested her head on his shoulder.

'Whoa' he thought. 'That's new.' Confused, but happy to be with Kate he walked to his car.

When they arrived Kate shouted "Shotgun!" and grinned. He laughed, and opened his door.

Putting the keys in the ignition, he turned the key and twisted in his seat. He grabbed a big book filled with CD's. They both looked at eachother. Kyle smiled and raised an eyebrow. Kate nodded. That was the signal to put on their song.

Woman by Wolfmother was blared in the car as they both sang, and headbanged. They rolled down the window at a stoplight so all could hear. They sped off and headed for a diner, timing it perfectly. The song ended when they arrived.

"Well that was awesome!" Kyle said as he walked out of the car.

Kate bent her neck a little as she replied "Fuckin' whiplash" She said.

Kyle laughed "Pussy." He laughed again as she swiped at him playfully. "Is it bad?" He asked feeling a bit of concern for his friend.

"No, it should be fine in a few minutes."

"Good" He said. We walked with her and they held hands again walking into the diner. When they opened the door they were greeted with music, friendly folks, and of course the aroma of food cooking. The place was always packed and had great food and was themed for the 50's. The music was from alot of era's and was pretty much the hangout for after school.

They were seated at a booth. On the table were two menus, to the right of them was salt, pepper, ect. Basic shit in a diner. But there was one thing that was what made "Classic Cuisine" about the coolest diner ever. A flipbook with tons of songs in a frame of a jukebox. You put in a quarter and pick a song.

They ordered some food and dined to music picked from people around the diner. whoever put in a song first got their song, then the next person, ect. Quite fun to be there. They left the diner full, and had lots of songs that they wrote down with the bands.

"Wow, I write down new stuff everytime I go there" Kyle said.

"Yeah, me too! We should hit CDCDs." Kate said. CDCDs, was a music shop that sounded like CBGB's. Just a regular Music store with a great selection. From Sinatra to 50 Cent they had it all. Quite cheap too, seeing as most of their CDs were used but in good condition.You could get probably 15 albums for 50 dollars.

"Oh hell yeah!" Kyle said. He pulled out of the diner and drove to the store.

They picked up quite a few CDs, Kate filled with joy for one CD in particular. Steve Miller Band's Greatest Hits. "A must-have!" Kyle said in a "radio" voice. She grinned as she took out Wolfmother and put in her new CD, changing the song to "The Joker"

They enjoyed the music as Kyle drove to his house, ready for Kate to spend the night as she did many times before. Being only 5:00 they had alot of time to spend together.

When they got home they were greeted by Kyle's parents, home early for work. "Kate's spending the night tonight, is that cool?"

"She's always welcome!" His mother replied cheerily. Kyle smiled at his mother when he walked past her, and down his spiral staircase to the basement. He wanted a spiral staircase so bad that when they moved here He made sure that He ran up and down the staircase for fun. That seemed so long ago. 6 years.. It was amazing that He knew Kate for that long.

When they got downstairs they both went to the entertainment part of the basement. They put in some Pantera and went into "Metal Mode" dancing and having a 2 person mosh pit. Getting red in the face and sweaty, Kyle suggested a swim to cool off.

"We'll have to get my swimming suit" She told him.

"We should swim naked!" He replied with a laugh.

"Maybe later on tonight" She told him her finger on his lip and seductively heading up the stairs, silencing Kyle.

He swallowed and blushed, with his obvious erection. He walked up the stairs in disbelief.

They walked to Kate's house in silence, Kyle still in disbelief at what she had said, Kate with her head on his shoulder again.

'What the FUCK is going on?' His mind screamed. Thoughts swirled around his head. Thoughts of being with Kate, and loving her. Also perverted thoughts of fucking her, her swallowing him, pleasuring her. They got to her house, faster than Kyle thought they would. He definately wasn't going to have enough time for this erection to die off. Embarassment was guaranteed.

She let him in and told him to wait downstairs. "I'm going to get some clothes for tomorrow and my swimsuit."

"Okay, I'll be down here." He said, desperate to hide this tent in his pants.

"Here's a little present for taking me around today" She said, about 4 stairs up. He looked at her back, puzzled and say the back of a sexy red thong. She giggled and swayed her hips as she walked up the stairs, purposely slow. He put his hand on his face when she went to the right of her hallway. "Jesus" He moaned, exhaling.

'Cold showers, a tree in a meadow, a sandwich on a plate' He thought. HE thought of anything non-sexual. He felt himself calming down noticing his tent lowering. She came down a few minutes later, a drawstring sack in her right hand, in blue short shorts, a loose white t-shirt, and red and orange strings at her neck, her bikini top.

He took her bag and walked out. When she locked her door and came down, he grabbed her left hand with his right, and kissed her cheek. "Aww" She said blushing.

"My turn to tease." He said taking off his shirt, showing off his abs and pectorals. She used her free hand to gently rub his abdomen. Her eyes widening as she traced the outline of his stomach. "I'm a sexy bitch."

"I thought you were the pimp" She asked, giggling.

"Well you're a sexy bitch too. We are sexy bitches!" He replied laughing.

He enjoyed the feeling of her soft hands on his body, feeling him exploring. They walked holding hands again. When he got home he pulled his shirt down and let Kate in first.

"I'll be there soon, I have to change and get some towels."

"Okay, I'll be there." She replied.

When he got downstairs he watched her go outside and head for the pool. When he got to his room he immediately wanted to jerk off right there but he kept calm and found his swim trunks. He stripped down to nothing but the trunks and got two big towels. He had one around his neck and one under his arm. He walked up the white wooden stairs to see Kate lying on the ground, shimmering with suntan oil. He put the towel that was under his arm on the body sized chair that Kate ignored.

"Hey, ready for a dip?" He asked. He didn't get an answer.

He got an idea. He nudged her with his toe and said "Hey. I know how to wake you up." He said. She smiled,teeth showing.

"No, No! Don't do it!" She shouted.

"Oh no, you asked for it!" He told her scooping her up. He held her close and fell in the water, back first. When they fell into the water the were greeted with the coolness and refreshment of the water after having to deal with the beating sun. The car had no A/C.

Kate came up first, but Kyle stayed under for literally a minute before coming up. He was surprised at water splashing at him from Kate and growled as she giggled. "I'm coming for you!" He said laughing.

"Oh, shit! No, no!" Kate yelled laughing harder than Kyle. Both took a deep breath before Kyle tackled her and sent her down, dunking her.

When under the water Kyle noticed her beauty through the water and chlorine. He saw the beauty of her auburn hair, figure, breasts, face.. Every physical feature. She was incredible. He wondered why he never looked at her like this before. 'Fuck it. I need her' He thought, pulling Kate close, who was underwater as well motionless.

They were face to face now, and Kyle moved his hand to her head. He pulled her close and their lips met in the most passionate kiss of either one's life. Their tongues explored eachother's mouths. A pocket of air being the only thing besides their tongues in the others mouths. Soon, Kate could hold her breath no long. She pulled away and pointed up. Kyle held her close, and used his legs to shoot out of the water.

Kyle exhaled as he broke through the water, Kate silently panting. He used both hands to move the water out of his face.

"Wow.." Kate sighed.

He moved them now, to Kate's face and moved her hair, and cleared the water from her face.

"Your beautiful" Kyle said. She reached for him and pulled his head to hers and they kissed above water now.

It was the most passionate kiss they each had experienced. Tongues touching eachother, both sets of eyes closed, lips full on themselves. The passion of it all aroused them both, the contact of the two friends, breathtaking. The friendship would never be the same.

Kyle used his hands to explore her back, holding her close. Kate rubbing his back with one hand and pulling his head in with the other. Kyle's hand was drifting to her front when they heard a call.

"Hey, you two! Pizza's here!" Called Kyle's dad.

"Shit." Kyle muttered pulling away. "They'll keep calling until we come out." Kate frowned but knew he was right. Kyle jumped out of the water with his arms pulling himself out. He pulled Kate in and was face to face with her again. He smiled at her and handed her her towel. He grabbed his and dried himself, While Kate did the same. They walked inside, and walked upstairs.

"Smells good" Kate said when she walked upstairs.

They were greeted qat the table with two plates, each with a slice each. Kyle took his piece and put the crust side in his mouth and said muffled, "I'm the pizza demon" and spit it out growling loudly. Kate laughed while his parents shook their heads at their son.

After the dinner was over Kyle went back out with Kate. They walked up the white stairs together, hand in hand. "Let's try this again" Kyle said. He held Kate close, and jumped in, back first again.

Once under water, Kyle noticed her again and her striking beauty. He hair flowing in the water, lucious breasts, and flawless skin. He went to her again, and kissed her underwater. Roaming her back, right hand on the top of her back, left hand gently squeezing her ass. Kate doing the same with Kyle.

Kyle held on tight as he came out of the water, and kissed her above the water now, free to breathe. He pulled away, and moved her hair. He stared into her eyes, arms around her back, her arms around his neck. He stared, aching feelings to take her in his eyes. She stared back with the same, burning desire in her eyes.

He began kissing her again, and went down her neck aiming for her breast. He kissed he tops of them, pushed up from the bikini. He was about to pull it off when he was stopped.

"Not yet" She said red in the face. "Later tonight, baby." With that, she got out of the pool and lay on the bodyy sized chair and put more suntan oil on.

Kyle sank down in the water to the bottom closing his eyes. He relaxed underwater holding his breath for a good minute and a half thinking. 'What is going on? Are we.. God.. What's happening? Not that I don't like it. I love being in a realtionship with her like this..'

When he came up, he came out of the pool, and went inside. He grabbed his CD player, his CDs from the car and in his room and brought them outside and played many. Led Zeppelin blared at times, Kate slowly rocking her head to it. Nine Inch Nails, Motley Crue, and many other bands just playing, enjoying the rest of the evening sun. Finally night fell, and they headed inside.

Neither said a word about the kissing in the pool. 'This has been a fucked up day." Kyle thought to himself. Nothing like this had happened previously, not even a hint that they had liked eachother. These thoughts swarmed through Kyle's mind, altough he didn't mention anything.

After watching TV with nothing happening, and eating leftover pizza, Kyle assumed nothing was going to happen but the kissing in the pool. Wondering where Kate was, and slightly dissapointed, he was about to turn in for the night when he opened the door to his room, he saw Kate.

"Hey"she said. "Where have you been, I've been waiting for an hour."

"You've been here since midnight? Why didn't you get me?" He asked.

"I wanted to suprise you with this" She said, dropping her robe. Underneath she was bare naked, nothing but her bellybutton ring and her sexy body.

"Holy shit" Kyle slurred. "What the fuck.. What's happening to our relationship?"

Kate stood for a moment, Then she reached up and squeezed her own breasts and stretched. "We can pretend nothing happened in the pool, But I don't wouldn't be happy, or satisfied. I've liked you since I was 10 years old. I'd like a birthday present early. You." She said, lowering her head. "Take me, or this opportunity is over. Take my virginity.. Besides... My vibrator is out of batteries" She said with a smirk.

Kyle smiled, and stood in disbelief, staring at Kate, His friend for 6 years. It was such an easy gift to give! Being such the giver he took no time to keep her waiting.

He took off his shirt and pulled off his shorts and boxers, now in the nude too. He walked to her and began kissing her like it was his last time seeing her. His tongue went right into her mouth as he wrapped his arms around her tightly. He kissed her for a long time, now grabbing her breasts when he picked her up. He moved his door with his foot.

"I have an idea" He said raising his eyebrows, and smiling like a goof. He walked past his family room and entertainment center and opened his door to the backyard with his foot. He waslked to his pool and lay her on an inflatable raft. She giggled as she watched him attempt not making noise as she loudly splashed in the water, on purpose!

"You little shit" He said with a grin.

"Come get me!" She said loudly padling away. He dove in, not caring about the noise now and was under the raft. He flipped her over easily, and laughed when she complained at him.

"Now I'm all wet!" She whined.

"You ain't wet yet" He replied grinning.

"You have no idea how wet I am" She she said back, grinning as well.

He went for her neck and pulled her face to his and kissed her. They kissed in the moonlight and water, hearing only the wind, and the music of the crickets. They continued for around 5 minutes until Kate broke the silence. "I can't take this anymore. I need you now" She said sighing.

He nodded and lifted her legs. The top part of her body floated, and where her legs were were secured by Kyle. He spread her legs in a position where she could breathe and get easy access. It took a minute or so until he finally got it. Before he entered he asked, "Are you sure you want to do this?"

"More sure than anything.. As sure that I'm in fucking love with you."

He smiled and felt his heart drop. "I fuckin' love you too" He said, and began to push inside of her warm, tight pussy.

The feeling of his 7 inches buried in her except about an inch was phenomenal. The cold of the water around him, but the warmness of her was incredible. After a few seconds of pushing in her, he took time to make sure she was comfortable. She was now supported on the still tipped over raft, her head resting on it, he arms supporting her weight.

As soon as she was ready for him he began to move in and out of here, the suction of her pussy like a warm vice grip. He thrusted, and the raft would move, along with the rest of the water and the reflection of the bright moon.

"Oh, yes. Oh my God" She would coo. "Oh, fuck! Oh yes, right there.. fuuuck!!" She moaned out, having her first orgasm quickly. Kyle moved his left hand to her pussy, and rubber and flicked her hard flaming clit. Her pussy got slightly warmer after a few moments and shouts of pleasure. He felt her cunt milk his dick now as she exploded into a more violent orgasm.

"Like that baby?" He asked thrusting fast, pumping harding, rubbing quicker.

"Oh shit!" She moaned. "It's ahh.. fuck! Oh God!"

"Yeah" He said going even faster at all three things he was doing. He moved his head so he could suck on a breast as he continued making sweet love. He nipples were hard, and apparently very sensitive. She began moaning louder and again, came. This one the most intense, lasting the longest. Soon after all the sucking, thrusting, rubbing, and pumping it finally got to Kyle.

"Oh shit.. Fuck yes!" He exclaimed. "Oh, shit! Im gonna fucking cum!"

"Oh fucking cum in me, Let me take all of your fucking cum!" She cried out, red in the face, moaning.

"Oh shit!" He cried out. His cum shot in intense bursts as Kate came for a fourth and final time. The cum shot in hot strands, about 7 in all as he felt her pussy milk him.

"Oh fuck yeah, I feel it going in and being flushed out with the water.... Fuck!" She cried out one last time.

"Ohh shiiiit.... ahhh.." Kyle groaned. He toppled back in the water pulling out of Kate, being submerged in the water. He stayed under moaning letting out a sigh under water, watching the bubbles come out of his mouth. Kate slowly came down, and kissed him as he stopped blowing out air. She pointed up again and Kyle held onto her and came out of the water.

He held her in the water kissing her completely soaked and in love, passionate with the kiss. This time he was positive he was in love, because this time, the girl he was with said "I Love You too."

"We should get in. It's probably 2 by now." He said finally pulling away.

"I bet it is... Come on help me out." She said, hold up her arms. Kyle easily lifted her and put her on the platform. He dried her hair and breast, her tummy and arms, and legs. Her little feet still in the water.

Kate came to him with his towel from earlier and dried his hair now, his chest and abs, strong arms and powerful legs. His feet still in the water.

He stood now with Kate and lifted her easily. He kissed her all the way inside and closed his door. He went to his room and shut that door as well. He slipped on his boxers and Lydia put on a blue t-shirt and a black thong and slipped into bed first. Kyle came in and wrapped his arms around her.

"God, I fucking love you so much" He said kissing her forehead.

"I love you too" She replied, eyes wet.

He smiled and dried her tears and kissed her lips. He held her and fell asleep with her, and woke up at about 11am. That day was going to be an even wilder wide than the first.

Part 2? Hopefully, this was fun to write :D


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    READER 500
    20.08.2007 08:52
    I think the rating have been a bit harsh. Good story, though. I can't wait for part 2. Maybe read through the story a couple more times before posting for spelling and grammar.

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    READER 500
    20.08.2007 10:17
    that was so romantic and im soaked!

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    READER 500
    20.08.2007 10:19
    Too bad you write like you talk, trashy. Too many uses of S**T makes gutter language of the story.

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    READER 500
    20.08.2007 11:11
    Its really well written and a really good, natural storyline......yes do read over it a couple of times before posting it...also dont use as much bad laguage, takes away the romance....but other than that, excellant 9/10

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    READER 500
    20.08.2007 11:34
    good to see some top Aussie writing - excellent stuff !! you must be missing Aus! :)

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.08.2007 13:46
    "Lydia put on a blue T-shirt..." Who the hell is "Lydia" at the end? Good romantic story but clean up the grammar.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.08.2007 14:03
    Is it Kate or Lydia??????

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.08.2007 20:34
    I fucking suck, I got my characters confused.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.08.2007 23:27
    This was REALLY good. It reminded me of my boyfriend and I. It was almost weird how much it relates to us. I lovvved it.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.08.2007 23:45
    great, but i dont think you should switch to 1st person for #2

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  • READER
    READER 500
    21.08.2007 02:52
    im lydia bitch!

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  • READER
    READER 500
    21.08.2007 10:02
    Hey no need to be so upset over a minor name mix up guys. A good steamy story worth a read. Keep them UP and CUMMING!

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    READER 500
    21.08.2007 10:14
    Really good story. I'd love to read part 2. Don't write it in 1st person though. It's good the way it is. Try adding a little more description of the action so it's a bit longer. Great otherwise.

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    READER 500
    21.08.2007 10:43
    really good

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    READER 500
    21.08.2007 21:30
    Besides the character switch up. Great work. Looks like I have some reading to do since I've been away. Keep it up. Part 2 for sure.



    Your most loyal reader.

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    READER 500
    21.08.2007 21:59
    I fucking love that dude.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    22.08.2007 02:49
    Excellent story. Great depth as well as sex. :D

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  • READER
    READER 500
    22.08.2007 04:21
    Ne yamma , puku lanjakodaka. Kutha musukoni intlo poduko.

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    READER 500
    22.08.2007 07:01
    just at the end there... it says 'lydia put on a black thong and a blu t-shirt.. " when the girl he just had sex with was called kate.. other then that great story

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    READER 500
    22.08.2007 19:52
    great story im going to love the second part so hurry up!

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    READER 500
    23.08.2007 05:35
    Great besides the minor slip-up. Yes definately need part 2!!!

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    READER 500
    23.08.2007 11:10
    i jacked 0ff 2 this story and cummed all over the computer screen pART 2 DEFINITELY

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    READER 500
    23.08.2007 18:45
    great , definitely write a sequel

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    READER 500
    23.08.2007 22:26
    definitely one of the best stories ive read....A sequel would be awesome!

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    READER 500
    24.08.2007 01:21
    one of the best stories, part 2 all the way

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    READER 500
    24.08.2007 01:55
    part two is a must!!!

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    READER 500
    24.08.2007 02:02
    great story I hit the ceiling lol

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    READER 500
    25.08.2007 15:05
    very very good. write another please.

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    READER 500
    25.08.2007 17:22
    wow, great story... i wish i would be the guy ;)

    write part 2 please... :D

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    READER 500
    25.08.2007 17:43
    lol, ummm...at the end of the story you said lydia got into bed first...i thought her name was kate.

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    READER 500
    26.08.2007 00:38
    yeah who the fuck is lydia

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    READER 500
    26.08.2007 11:41
    great story.....who the heck is lydia lol

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  • READER
    READER 500
    26.08.2007 16:27
    part 2 plz...... who the fuck is lydia?

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  • READER
    READER 500
    26.08.2007 20:20
    You the heck is Lydia??? Its suppose to be Kate!!

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    READER 500
    26.08.2007 23:55
    i cummed 2 timess loveee it

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 00:21
    Yes, I want part 2

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 02:30
    It was very well done except for the spelling errors (read through your masterpiece once before you submit ;) spellcheck is shitty)...The actual romance in the story was the best part even if the sex was not laid out as well as I hoped it would...I think you spent more time when they were in the diner than the fucking ;)...otherwise, very good story, one of my favorites 9/10

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 09:53
    who is lydia ? thought it was kate..."He slipped on his boxers and Lydia out on a blue t-shirt and black thong and slipped into bed first" wtf!?!?

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 10:58
    shut the fuck up with who is lydia. one person could say it not 20. so shut the fuck up. good story.

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 11:12
    spell check

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 13:22
    I loved this story!

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    READER 500
    27.08.2007 23:11
    a fucking retarded dwarf could right a better story

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    READER 500
    28.08.2007 13:10
    Couple of inconsistencies in the pronouns, a few spelling errors, and that big OOPS with the girl's name at the end...other than that, pretty fuckin' hot stuff.

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    READER 500
    28.08.2007 13:17
    lydia? but good story. I liked the flirting.

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    READER 500
    29.08.2007 18:23
    Clearly Kyle is homosexual, but at least a sexy biatch... Paris Hillton/Nicole Richie much? Good story though.

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    READER 500
    29.08.2007 18:34
    lol looks like someone was thinking of somebody while writing. ;) good 8/10

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    READER 500
    29.08.2007 19:12
    pretty good story, you need to hire an editor to catch your spelling mistakes 9/10

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    READER 500
    30.08.2007 02:21
    that was great please keep going but who was lydia i dont understand i thought it was kate but either way great story

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    READER 500
    30.08.2007 05:13
    gr8 story..waitin for part 2

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    READER 500
    30.08.2007 17:25
    Sunbored- I dont have that kind of money, haha. I hate myself for not reading that and catching it. I was thinking about the locked out series. stupid mistake really.

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    READER 500
    31.08.2007 01:48
    Okay, but took too long to build up to the climax.

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    READER 500
    01.09.2007 18:07
    Nice Story.9/10.Part 2 please.

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    READER 500
    02.09.2007 03:19
    Very good. Very sweet. 10/10. I liked it. Clean and very good timing. Climax and storyline was timed great. Not to fast or slow. I know some like to jerk to these stories, but I feel this one shouldn't be. Too clean. Good job ^_^

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    READER 500
    03.09.2007 09:14
    lydia?gud story.......part 2 plz

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  • READER
    READER 500
    03.09.2007 20:11
    damn..thats hot!! 10/10!

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  • READER
    READER 500
    03.09.2007 20:49
    hey wats the name of part 2 gonna be?

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    READER 500
    04.09.2007 09:32
    Just guessing, but Lydia may have been the original name the author used and just missed editing one entry in the final draft. All in all not a bad work. Some spelling and grammatical errors, but the heat and passion were there.

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    READER 500
    05.09.2007 17:12
    let me fuck you, please, anybody who can write out every other girl's fantasy that way deserves some good fucking

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    READER 500
    05.09.2007 19:39
    Author....you should be extremely proud of this work you worte. It is a amazing story, romance, friendship, it just has everything. I strongly encourage you to write a part 2 to this. I do think some of the gramatical errors could be fixed, but of course no one is perfect. I will be checking for a part 2 in hopes of reading it. Keep up the good work.

    -Krymzon

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    READER 500
    05.09.2007 21:59
    that was awesome. Please write a part 2.

    ill be checking regularly.

    -Fucker

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    READER 500
    06.09.2007 04:35
    Other than a couple of grammar errors i really liked this story. And also at this point of my readings of stories here, ive decided to write my own. So i hope frequent readers will be looking out for an upcoming story from mem by blinkboxfan16. Im gonna take a good amount of time and it will be long. SO hopefully alot of people will be anxiously awaiting. Ill have to hear reveiws once ive posted it.

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    READER 500
    06.09.2007 05:10
    who the fuck is Lydia

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    READER 500
    06.09.2007 18:25
    i loved it my pussy got a little wet

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    READER 500
    06.09.2007 23:40
    Nice story Part 2 asap

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    READER 500
    07.09.2007 17:32
    Who the hell is Lydia?

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    READER 500
    08.09.2007 00:08
    loved it, but plz, next time, spell check your story, grammer mistakes and typos are a huge distraction.

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    READER 500
    08.09.2007 02:24
    1. lydia?

    2. grammar man

    3. not so much detail in unimportant areas

    4. good job overall, enjoyed it

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    READER 500
    08.09.2007 06:11
    i was blown away....... im in love with my best friend and that would be the perfect way for us to hook up... eagerly awating a part 2

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    READER 500
    08.09.2007 13:30
    Lydia is from a different story. Huge typo I know. But the grammer mistakes.. thats just how I talk.Part 2 should be here soon. check out the new allie and me while your waiting.

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    READER 500
    09.09.2007 20:23
    Lots of potential. You're great at writing romance and foreplay, but you didn't do so much with the sex. If it really was her first time, you should have had just a tiny bit more detail about their fucking. Losing your virginity sort of changes your view of the world; it deserves more than "a few seconds of pushing in her". Put as much effort into describing the sex as the love and this would be tip-top.



    =dreamer=

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    READER 500
    12.09.2007 21:35
    found it lydia is from (locked out) i guess u were wrighting this at the same time as #3

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    READER 500
    13.09.2007 11:58
    very very good

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    READER 500
    16.09.2007 23:11
    i love to sex my cat :{)

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    READER 500
    17.09.2007 20:08
    great story, the best relationships start with friendship.

    and please do check spelling, as i cant help but notice the mistakes.

    keep writing!

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    READER 500
    31.10.2007 05:58
    ahah that lydia thing threw me off guard .. nice story man and good band choice too lol

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    READER 500
    25.12.2007 23:19
    Yes, I think a part 2 is warrented.

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    READER 500
    05.01.2008 16:42
    OMG dude, your story nearly matches my experience. Same name of girl, both know each other for ages then it became more, everything!

    anyway nice story mate

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    READER 500
    10.01.2008 19:22
    yes a part two i love this story! wow i can read this over and over again!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    READER 500
    13.01.2008 22:05
    One of the best stories i have read, nicely done. Very few typos, nothing big. Plz a part 2 would be very nice. try to keep it romantic though, its too easy to turn the relationship into a fuckfest.

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    READER 500
    24.01.2008 20:11
    I caught that lydia thing(0h well)but great story.i love all of ur stories

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    READER 500
    10.02.2008 02:42
    A few spelling errors and that whole Lydia thing, but great story overall.

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    READER 500
    12.02.2008 18:09
    Very nice great storie

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    READER 500
    01.03.2008 00:56
    *sigh*

    I want to fuck my best guy friend...thats a good way to go about it,thanks for the tips lolz

    Gr8 story m8

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    READER 500
    22.03.2008 06:50
    bloody good as, defently want a part 2

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    READER 500
    25.03.2008 08:41
    Dude, seriously. We don't need to know what six-thousand crappy bands they're listening to.

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    READER 500
    29.03.2008 23:11
    fu buddy, this story is great, and I even go to look up some great new bands since he named them. If you listen to some of the songs (I use project playlist) then you would know that some of the songs enhance the story

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    READER 500
    31.03.2008 23:53
    dude in the last part u called her lydia lydia is in locked out bt other then that i loved the story ur my fav erotic story writer

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    READER 500
    03.04.2008 22:00
    This was an amazing piece of work, it is stories like this that have made me write my own which will soon be here. A part two of this would be amazing, just make sure to reread your work you did have a few spelling problems that brought me back to the real world and stop picturing what was going on.

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    READER 500
    21.04.2008 16:16
    Wow! That was incredibly sweet! I wish my first time had been like that! I wish I had a boyfriend that cared enough to even think about it! That was an amazing story thanks for sharing

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.07.2008 01:49
    ok so i like that it said lydia at the end

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.10.2008 23:57
    good story but lots of typos such as he instead of she etc and the lydia thing lol
    part 2 would be nice great story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.05.2009 16:21
    HURRY UP WITH PART 2!!!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.06.2009 20:23
    Dude that was fucking great. I love Woman by Wolfmother.

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  • anonymus
    02.07.2009 18:05
    damn I liked this story, gave me such a fukin hardon

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