the one thing i dont like is the purging of the eyes. The word means this: To remove (impurities and other elements) by or as if by cleansing. I get the idea, remove all the non beauty and put in its place beauty. But I think the word purge also conjures up images like its medical definition: To induce evacuation of the bowels . This just does not fit with the whole beauty thing.

maybe a verb that takes something like devour, since the light actually goes into the eye. Or maybe eagerly do something. These words seem full of goodness.

My eyes devour the essence of your beauty
My eyes eagerly discern your beauty at every chance

I liked it

Captured,

But if you think about it. The person speaking these words really is slightly obsessed. They want to feast on their obsession as much as possible. Even if that means over indulging to the point to purging.

I knew what the word meant and knew what I was wanting to express when using it.

Thank you for your comments though!!

it won my gerl other so its grate

pretty well!!

Haha, I love that you know SATC Mr. Bee! :) And yes, we'll be keeping ours a seecrt from people we know - but not from boards like this, cause I'm not worried about you guys stealing my names -it's highly unlikely we'll meet over here in Europe, so we can share names. :)