Your Darkness

Date: 21 January 2005

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YOUR DARKNESS

Let me see the darkness through your eyes
Allow me the right to know the clouds in your skies
Pull me spiraling down to the depths of your world
I want your despair to be my lord
Make me choke on your blood as it spills down my throat
I crave to hear your voice and its somber note
You've introduced me to the pleasure of this pain
I intend to relish it until I am slain
I need to feel your cold arms around me
And your sternness forcing me to my knee
I'm begging you to be my master
Your denial forces my tears to role down faster
You have become my whole life
And your rejection is picking at my hope like a knife
If I am not allowed to see your world, then pluck my eyes out
Suck out my brain before you fill it with doubt
Inject my veins with acid so that your stare cannot fill them with ice
Use your sword to puncture my heart with one swift slice
Leave me to die here in the spilled blood
Allow my sadness to seep out into the red flood
Your constant rejection gives me no reason to try
Without your affection...I must die

-------January 30, 2000

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READER 500

01.02.2005 00:03

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I did notice them rated very low with in minutes of there being posted. LOL, I know they are not the best poems ever, but I hardly thought they sucked that bad.

Thanks for the heads up.

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READER 500

02.02.2005 20:06

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You know, people are assholes. I love the deep tragedy of this story. It's too bad people have to go through giving shitty ratings to people just because they can't write and are jealous of those who can. I wish people would grow the fuck up.

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READER 500

02.02.2005 21:33

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well, you know what they say....

Those who can't, critique

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READER 500

05.04.2005 19:47

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Great! I loved it. It reminded me of someone I haven't thought of in a long time.

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READER 500

18.06.2005 02:59

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It wouls seem that the low ratings could come from not being able to feel, as well as not being able to write...It is painfully beautiful mystress...My heart ached with deep buried memories of a heart struggling to gain the love of her Dark Prince...Te Ubesc!!

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READER 500

28.10.2005 05:12

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I'm not a fan of poetry, but I must say it has a rather interesting flow.

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READER 500

20.11.2005 05:16

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Excellent,, simply.. excellent.

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READER 500

24.11.2005 04:22

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wow....just wow. that was amazing. keep it up!

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READER 500

21.05.2006 20:55

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True beauty

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READER 500

03.06.2006 11:17

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ur poem was the best i hav eva read plz write more

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READER 500

26.07.2006 00:52

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Mystress, I love your work. Don't let the negative nellies deter you. Well down.

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READER 500

09.05.2007 21:11

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pure genious.... pure genious

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Anonymous reader

16.07.2008 16:59

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Beautiful.

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Anonymous reader

24.08.2008 18:46

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Very nice, good job.

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Anonymous reader

27.08.2008 05:25

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It was awesome man i like it too much

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Lil Demon

12.04.2009 05:56

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purrsss .. very awsome

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Anonymous reader

01.07.2009 09:35

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A rare beauty on such a site, It is amazing, and perhaps refreshing.

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anonymous reader

09.09.2012 04:04

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, "You b*tch!" to the name-stealer and escorts Charlotte out of there.With Claire, we kept her name a sercet from the general public, but shared if close friends or family asked. We ended up having one incident where a friend said something negative about her name on TWITTER of all places (and yes, her statuses are public) and not only did we get pretty angry at her, we had to ask her to remove that status update.So with BebeDeux, we have been keeping it a sercet aside from family. Though, in the past month or so we've been more relaxed â€” we will share if we're pretty sure that the person won't say anything bad about it.

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