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End of the world - Chapter 8

Author: jmiller

Date: 6 August 2006

Incest, Fiction, Male / Female, Oral Sex

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I apologize for the delay of this chapter. Real life kept intruding upon my time.



For the last week and a half, Jason, one of my sons, and two of my daughters, Pam and Patricia, and I had been camped out on the edge of a cliff overlooking the Central California Valley. We, mostly I, had been looking out across the valley each night, watching for a light that would indicate where Frank, another of my sons had settled. He had been banished from our family because of his antisocial behavior. When it happened I left home with him to take him across the valley to find somewhere he could call home. Before we got too far he pulled a weapon and indicated my companionship was no longer required. I left him there and returned home but over the next several weeks I grew increasingly uncomfortable, threatened, not knowing where he was. The four of us had traveled to this spot that overlooked the valley where we could see fifty miles west, across the valley, and easily that much north and south. During this time we had seen no sign of him. It was our last night watching and we had come up empty again. I was packing up our equipment, preparing to leave, when Pam said, “Would it look something like that”?

Pam was pointing down the mountain on our side of the valley. It had never occurred to me to watch this side. I was so focused on where I had told him to go. If I had any intelligence at all I should have started looking at all the places I did not tell him to go. There was just the tiniest spot of light in the distance, down the mountainside from us. My first thought was it was just a star reflecting off water. But as we stared, every now and then it would disappear. I quickly reassembled the telescope. It seemed to take forever to find the light in the viewer. Once I had it centered I stepped up the power. I was looking at a window. I could see the lines dividing the panes but a curtain was blocking the view inside. The light had a flickering quality to it. It must be a fireplace. After a few minutes it went dark for a moment and then the light appeared again. It wasn’t until the second time it happened before I figured out Frank must have walked between the fireplace and the window. I made some marks on the ground to help me find it again in the morning and then we went back to our camp.

Our fire was out and I could see that Patricia and Jason were “snuggling” under their blankets. We politely waited for them to finish though Pam suggested several times, that as long as we were waiting we might find something more entertaining to do.

A while later we gathered around the campfire. When I told Jason what we had found he was all for getting down there now and having a confrontation. When I pointed out that we had not brought any weapons with us and we knew that Frank definitely had a revolver, and probably had the couple of rifles that we later found were missing from the house, it would be a good idea to give this some thought and not be too hasty. Jason calmed down but I could see he was still annoyed. He and Frank had never gotten along. But then I could not think of anyone who had got along with Frank. It was getting late and we were going to have a long ride home tomorrow so we finally called it a night.

The next morning I woke before sunrise. Pam was lying beside me, asleep, warm and inviting, but first-things first. I left the camp and went back to the cliff. I watched as the sun slowly rose, waiting until it was light enough to see. The side of the mountain slowly came out of the shadows. I began looking with the scope on low power. It took a minute to relocate house. A tree covered most of the view of the building from our direction, but if you knew it was there, you could see it. I stepped up the power and it was almost like I was standing beside the house. I could see some signs of life. It looked like a garden had been worked in. I saw a fenced pasture with livestock in it that could not have been in there very long. No sign of Frank though. No smoke from the chimney. It took over an hour for him to appear. If I had taken a break I would have missed him. He walked out of the house and went over to a barn. He was inside less than a minute and then went back to the house.

Now that I was sure, I slowly began taking the telescope apart again. Should I go down and force his hand, make him move across the valley? But what good would it do? Plus my advice to Jason still held; Frank had weapons and we did not. Other than just putting him farther away from us, was I just trying to feed my ego by getting him to do what I told him to do? Or would it be better to let him have his little victory? The net result was that he was away from us. That is what I wanted to accomplish.

By the time I had finished packing I had decided to leave him be. If circumstances changed we could always come back now that we knew where he was. When I got back to the camp I saw that Jason and Patricia were awake and from the way their blanket was moving around they might need several more minutes before they would be ready to leave. When I took a second look I revised my estimate, they might need a half hour. I think our rabbits back at the house had more willpower then Jason and Patricia.

Pam was awake, lying on her side, watching Jason and her sister. When I got to her she lifted the blanket, inviting me back in. I smiled at her and said, “It is very tempting, but we should get ready to go”.

Pam pointed at her sister and brother, “I think we have the time. Besides old man, you can’t last very long anyway, can you”? And, as things turned out, she was right. I did not last very long. Though I would like to think that was more due to her efforts than to my age. I do think I gave her the pounding she deserved for calling me an old man.

One the way home Jason renewed his argument that we should force Frank to move on. I tried to get him to just let it be but I could see that it irked him that Frank could feel that he got the upper hand on us. I was content that I knew where he was and that he was far enough away from us that he was not a concern.

Once we were packed and on the road home Pam sat behind me. Most of the way home she had one arm wrapped around my stomach and the other between my legs, wrapped around my dick. When I told her it was not nice keeping me hard this long she suggested we stop and fix it so that it would not be so hard. I guess I hesitated too long in answering and she took that as a yes, because she managed to get up on her knees behind me and tried to move around in front of me. All she managed to do was to almost fall off the horse. She leaned close to my ear and said, “Well, are you going to help or not”? My mind was not really made up until she nibbled on my earlobe and then ran her tongue around the inside of my ear. I reached back, took her by the waist and swung her around me so she was facing me, her thighs on top of mine. She giggled, “I saw Jason and my sister do it this way on our way out. It looked like fun”.

I had thought it looked like fun also. “Any time I’m in you, it’s bound to be fun”. I just hoped we would not scare the horse.

She put her arms on my shoulders and lifted herself up a bit, wrapping her legs around my waist. “You are so sweet”. She lifted up just a bit more until her breasts were right at the level of my face. “Now don’t talk with your mouth full”.

I started to say my mouth isn’t full but only got as far as “My mouff” when she leaned forward and slid a nipple right into my open mouth. I sucked more of her breast into my mouth and then ran my tongue around and over her nipple for a bit. She was right. I should not talk with my mouth full.

She pulled back a few inches from me and then pushed the other breast towards me, “Now the other one”. As I repeated the treatment to that one she began pushing herself against me. I could feel her pelvis push tight against my stomach, her pussy shoved up right against me, her whole crotch felt so hot. Then she slid down a few inches, rubbing her pussy against me before lifting up and then repeating the motion several times. She finally gave a little low moan and then said, “I’m ready now”. She lowered herself a few inches as she was moving her pelvis around trying to find me. She did not have to look far. Once she got everything lined, up she lowered herself on me. And she was right. She was ready, very ready. I easily slide right into her, not stopping until I bottomed out in her. She ground herself around on me for a few seconds and then stopped. She looked up at me, pulled my head down to her, and began softly kissing me. After a bit she stopped and just rested her head on my shoulder.

The horse had continued walking this entire time. I had one hand on the reins and the other wrapped around her, holding her tight to me. We found very quickly that we really did not need to do anything. The motion of the horse was all we needed. Just sitting on the horse while it walked, had us rocking back and forth against each other. I might slide out an inch but the next step drove me back into her. We continued like that, the horse rocking us, sometimes kissing gently, sometimes passionately, for what felt like hours, but surely wasn’t. My brain would have atrophied from lack of blood by then. Pam finally reached the point of cumming. I could feel her begin to add her own movements to what we were getting from the horse. I quickly wrapped the reins around the pommel so I could use both hands. She pushed her face hard into my chest. “Daddy, I’m cumming”. She pulled herself tight against me and held herself there. I could feel a pulse going through her as she climaxed. Each time it hit her she would try and push me deeper into her. Gradually she relaxed, leaning back away from me; my hands holding her, again letting the horse provide all the movement she needed as the feeling slowly passed in her.

Then she perked up, “Okay Daddy, your turn”. She pulled herself back up tight against me. I expected her to begin sliding up and down on me but she had a surprise for me. She just held me tight and then I began feeling her pussy grab me. It was like a fist was squeezing me and then relaxing. She did this over and over. I had been close to cumming for a while now but this was quickly bringing things to a head.

“Where did you learn how to do that”? I gasped.

“Mom told me about it. Do you like it”?

It was all I could do not to cum right then. I was trying to delay it so I could feel this for a while longer. “That feels great. Wait, your mom told you”?

“Yes. She told me how to do it and then told me to save it for a special occasion. Happy Birthday, special occasion”.

Before I could say anything else she began squeezing me faster. That was the last straw. I let my hands drop to her butt and pulled her tighter against me. Then I had that feeling, like when you pull a rubber band so tight it finally breaks. It was like an explosion went off inside my cock. I could feel the sperm begin coursing out of my body into hers. It felt like all the fluid in my body was being sucked out of me into her.

We held each other tight as the horse continued on the path. After a few minutes I could feel myself deflating. I would be sliding out of her any minute. The return of blood to my system must have brought my brain back to life because I finally noticed the sound of another horse behind us. I whispered to Pam, “Would you look over my shoulder? Are they right behind us”?

When she rose up to look I finally slipped out of her. She looked back down at me with a little pout on her face, “Oh put him back. I might not have been done with him yet”. I leaned forward and gave her breast a little nip in response. “Just for that I think I’ll stay right here the rest of the way home”.

I looked up at her, “Don’t kid yourself. I think you liked it. Now are they behind us”?

She rose up again and I could feel her wave. I guess that answered that question. Now I wondered how long had they been there. Just as I was about to ask how far back they were Jason and Patricia come along side us. They both had big grins on their face. I guess that answers the question of how long they had been in sight of us.

Jason spoke up, “Kind of nice that way, isn’t it”?

He had an infectious smile and I couldn’t help smiling myself. I nodded yes and then Pam and I worked on getting her turned around to face forward.

It had been a nice break but now the day began to stretch on. We continued right through lunch, wanting to get home. We only stopped to rest the horses on occasion and let them have some water. When we came up the final rise, bringing the house in view, it was getting pretty dark.

When we finally arrived in front of the house a crowd came out to greet us. Mikey, the girl’s mother, met us first. She looked at Pam and Patricia and then at me, “I hope you had a good birthday”.

I could not help smiling, “The best”.

I got off the horse and helped Pam down. She leaned over to me and whispered, “I’ve had you pretty much to myself for the last week or so. I know some of the girls will have missed you. I’ll give them a week and then I want to spend some time with you”.

“I’m looking forward to that” I said and gave her a quick kiss on the cheek.

A couple of the kids took the horses and the gear to be put away while we went inside and shared what we had learned. There were mixed feelings. They were split like Jason and I. Some felt that it was okay and others felt that Frank was getting away with something and should be made to move on, be taught a lesson. I felt any lesson would be lost on him. Eventually my argument won out. It was getting late so everyone started drifting away to get ready for bed.

I went out on the porch and sat in a rocker and watched some of the kids play out in the yard. They would stay out until they could not see their hand in front of their face if we let them. There were several large trees out there from which we had hung tire swings. Some of the older kids were pushing the little ones to cries of ‘higher, higher’, and screams of delight’.

I thought again of what Pam had said earlier. Over the years I have had sex with almost all of the girls, and I enjoyed it every time, no complaints on my side. But I was always moving from girl to girl. I rarely spent more than a week with any one of them and many times in the last few years it was just a night or two with the younger ones who were coming of age. Earlier it had all been centered on the girls getting pregnant, growing our numbers quickly. Now it seemed the emphasis was more on having fun. And I had to admit it was fun. But it felt like I was missing something. The week and a half with Pam was the longest I had been with one of the girls in a long time. I had really enjoyed it with her and it seemed like she had also. It made me wonder. We still had a shortage of males to females so it would probably be looked at as being selfish if I wanted to be with just one girl all the time but maybe there is another girl or two out there who felt the same and we could make a small group.

Megan came out and sat beside me. We made small talk for a while before she got to what was on her mind. “Karen has been sleeping with me while you were gone. She wakes up almost every night crying. She’s still having nightmares. Just eleven and getting attacked like that, I’d have nightmares also. A couple of times she asked me if you really meant it when you said she could sleep with you if she did not feel safe”.

“Sure, you know I meant it”.

Megan nodded, “I’ll let her know you said that. Maybe that will help her sleep better”.

It was getting pretty late so I got up to go to bed. The kids were still out playing but I was beat. A week-plus with Pam, followed by the ride home had tired me out. I was lying in bed, about to drift off when I heard a small knock at the door. “Come in”.

The door opened and I could see Karen standing there in an oversized t-shirt, Megan standing behind her. Karen stepped in but did not say anything. Megan spoke up first, “Karen wanted to say goodnight to you”. I sat up in bed and held out my arms to her. That was all she needed. She ran over to me and I gave her a big hug. “Honey, would you like to stay here with me tonight”? She looked up at me with a big smile and nodded her head. I turned to Megan and asked, “Would you mind if Karen sleeps with me tonight”?

Megan answered, “I think that is a great idea”. As she turned to leave she said, “I’ll see you two in the morning”.

Once Megan was gone Kathy snuggled up against me and went right to sleep. We had been asleep for several hours and Karen must have moved away from me in the bed. She woke up and was far enough away from me that she did not feel me around her. She woke me with a scream, “Daddy. Daddy, where are you”.

I reached out to her and pulled her to me. “I’m right here. I would not leave you”. She moved into my arms and fell back asleep. This was repeated for the next two nights. On the fourth night she finally slept through the night without waking.

Life pretty much had returned to normal at home. My only problem now was to figure out what how to convince the family we needed to split up to survive. There was still some resistance to breaking the family up. They just did not seem to have the foresight to see what the future held for us the way we were growing. Jason, Paul and a few others made a trip down to town and I had them get some books for me from the local library. I wanted to see what I could find out about businesses in our part of the valley.

We were having a hotter than normal summer and today had been particularly brutal. I had been out with several of my older sons repairing fences. Livestock and the weather gradually took their toll. Even though we had stopped during the hottest part of the afternoon, I was beat by the time we finished for the day. When I got home I took a shower to cool off, ate a small dinner and then just went to bed. It was so hot that I pulled all the covers off the bed. Karen was outside playing so I stayed up for a while reading from a couple of the books Jason and Paul brought back for me. I was having trouble staying awake so I put the books aside, turned off the light and went to sleep.

I was having a great dream. A couple of the girls were holding me down and giving me a fantastic blowjob. Just as I reached the point in my dream where I was going to cum, dammit, I always woke up then, so of course, I woke up. You know that feeling where you have just woken up from a dream and you are trying to get back in it? That was what I was doing. I wanted to feel those lips again. It had been over a week for a guy that was used to having sex almost every day and night. I was going through withdrawal.

Then I realized I’m not dreaming the hand that is going up and down my cock. It felt so good. Whoever it was must have been doing it for a while because I was well lubricated. Maybe Pam finally came over, or one of the other girls. I kind of hoped it was Pam. I must have moved because then I heard Karen’s voice, “Daddy, are you awake”?

“Honey, what are you doing”?

“I just wanted to know how it felt. I’ve never really touched a penis before. Frank stuck it in my mouth, and, then, you know, tried to stick it in me. But I never really touched it, you know, with my hand”. Then I could feel her fingers moving around on me. “It was so soft when I started but now it is really hard”.

“Honey, you should not be doing this”. Even while saying the words I did not move her hand away. It felt so good. I could feel that electric zing going through me. It would take just another minute and I would be cumming.

“I’ve watched some of my sisters and brothers. Am I doing this right”? Her little hand started moving up and down my cock; the electric charge building.

“Yes honey, you are doing it right”. I started raising my hips slightly each time as her hand went down. “You should stop now or I’ll make a mess in the bed”.

“That’s okay Daddy. I know what to do”.

Before I had time to think about what she said I let out a grunt and brought my hips up sharply. She moved over me and I felt something hot and wet engulf the head of my cock. I looked down and saw she had moved over to take the head of my cock in her mouth. I did not have time to think of anything else when her tongue ran around the head, the built-up electricity suddenly discharged and I started to pump sperm in her mouth. Her tongue continued moving around the head as my sperm went out over and around, coating her tongue. When I had finished she carefully pulled her mouth back, keeping her lips tight against my cock, until she finally had me out of her mouth. Her lips were still tightly closed. I saw her cheeks bulge a bit as she moved her tongue around in her mouth. She visibly swallowed and then moved up to lay along side me.

“Daddy, did I do it right? Sometimes one of the boys comes into our bedroom to be with one of my sisters”. Karen shared a bedroom with three sisters, one her age and two others that I thought must be fourteen or fifteen. “Sometimes they are on top of the covers and I’ve watched what they do, but I did not know if I was doing it right. Cindy always spits the sperm out when the boy squirts it in her mouth but Debbie swallows it. I wanted to see what it tasted like; what yours tasted like. A couple of times the boys tried to get in bed with me when my sisters were already with someone but I didn’t let them. I wanted to do it with you first”.

“Well, yes honey. You did it just right. But you are too young for this. We cannot do this again. Do you understand? I will get in big trouble with your mother. I know I look pretty big to you but she will beat my butt like a drum if she knew what we were just doing. You need to wait a few more years”.

“I know Daddy. I was just curious. I didn’t think you would wake up. I didn’t like it when Frank made me do it. That wasn’t right, and he’s mean. It was fun with you though. I wasn’t sure it would be, but it was. Besides, I had my birthday and I’m over twelve now. It won’t be long”.

I have to admit it was a nice way to end a day. She moved up next to me and we both drifted off to sleep. When I woke up at daybreak, Karen was already up and gone. Her chores this week included collecting eggs and then helping fix breakfast so she had an early start.

After a good breakfast I joined my sons and we continued working on the fences. It was another hot day, though this time we got smart, quit early, and then moved to some work in the shade when it got hot. I called it an early night once again after dinner and was on my way to bed when I met Jason in the hallway. He asked if I wanted to join a bunch of them in the gym. Oh great, the last thing I needed was to go play some basketball with the boys on a hot day. “No, I’m beat. I think I’ll just go to bed early”.

“Dad, I think you’ll…”

“That’s okay son, maybe another time”.

Last year we had built an extension to the house. It was a large one-room building, connected to the house by a hallway. The room was about 30 feet square and was used for classes and as a gym. When the little kids were using it mats were pulled out to cover the floor so they could take naps.

As I was turning to walk away, Jason and several of the boys, followed by around twice as many girls, started down the hall to the gym. I hope the girls get to play too and that the boys don’t make them just sit and watch.

For the next couple of weeks things were fairly uneventful. Karen did not have any further bouts of curiosity. She began alternating with Megan and I, spending a week with me and then a week with Megan. When she was with Megan some of the other girls would come and stay with me, usually just a day or two, sometimes longer. Pam had not come as she said she would and I found I was disappointed. I was looking forward to being with her. She probably was busy with the other boys. I couldn’t really complain. I was with other girls all the time, how could I expect her to come to me whenever I wanted.

Our numbers were gradually changing now. We now had one male for every two females if you counted everyone. Nature appeared to be doing her job. In the beginning we needed females and that is what we got. Now we need more males and she is answering once again. The ratio in the group over fourteen was still one male to about every five females, but that would change as the younger ones got older. I guess I will just have to rough it until they arrive to help. It’s a dirty job but someone has to do it.

I was on my way to my bedroom one night when Jason once again passed me on the way to the gym with a group his brothers and sisters. I politely turned down their invitation to join them and continued on my way to bed. When I got there, Beth, one of Sharon’s younger daughters, thankfully over fourteen, was waiting for me. We had been together a couple of months earlier. She had wanted to get pregnant but had been unsuccessful so far. I had assumed she had been spending time with one of the younger boys since she had not come back to my bed. Whatever the reason, I was happy to find her there, she was, how do you say, enthusiastic in bed. After a strenuous bout of lovemaking we both drifted off to sleep.

I could not have been asleep long. I was still feeling the effects of our earlier activity when I felt her moving around on top of me, trying to wake me. And Beth, climbing on top of you, was bound to wake anyone up. She was sitting astride me with her hands on the bed under my armpits, her breasts dangling in my face. She ran one nipple over my lips and I sucked it into my mouth. Then she pulled back up, stretching her nipple out until I let it go with a pop, followed by running the other nipple over my lips. It appeared I was rising to the occasion, not quite there, but just about, when I felt her begin to dig her pelvis around trying to find me and get me back into her. Unfortunately I was not quite there yet so the poor boy was lying on my stomach and not sticking up in the air where she was busy rooting around.

With a little frustration in her voice she said, “Why don’t you help me”?

I was trying to get my arms down to help with some guidance but her arms blocked mine. Just as I was trying to figure out how to get my arms around hers, I felt her grab me in her fist and begin rubbing the head of my cock against her pussy. That got me to full attention. She then pushed back against me, pushing me half way inside her, and let out a long groan, followed by “Oh thank you, I needed that”.

I heard a familiar voice down towards my feet say “You’re welcome”.

Oh god, when had Karen come in? “Karen, you know you should not be in here”.

Beth, who had begun thrusting her hips at me so that I was now deep inside of her said, “Oh Daddy, let her stay. She has already helped. And besides, I know you have had two girls with you before”.

“Yes Daddy. Let me stay. Maybe I can help again”.

I tried to protest “But she’s too young, and the two girls were both older”. Beth sat up on me and put her arms at her side. I would have said more but by now Beth was moving faster, grinding her pelvis against me. I guess Karen will not see anything she has not seen before. She’ll just be closer.

Karen had moved around alongside Beth and was watching her. She reached out and touched one of Beth’s nipples and said, “Your nipple is really hard. Does that always happen when you have sex”?

Beth opened her eyes to look at Karen. She slowly nodded and said, “So is the other one”. Beth turned her body slightly towards Karen.

Karen reached out with her other hand and touched Beth’s other nipple. She started to pull her hands away and Beth reached out to stop her. “It’s okay. It feels good when you do that”.

Karen began rubbing each of Beth’s breasts. Beth reached over to Karen, and with her hands on her waist, pulled Karen towards her. Karen lifted one leg and moved over and sat on my stomach, facing Beth, just inches away from her. Karen continued rubbing Beth’s nipples, “Your breasts are big. I wish mine were as big as yours”.

“Oooohhhhhhh, that’s nice. Don’t worry yours will get bigger this year or next”.

Karen looked down at herself, “I don’t know. I’m pretty flat. Andrea, she is twelve, and she is almost as big as you”.

I watched as Beth’s hands moved up from Karen’s waist to her chest and then moved around to the front where I could not see. “Does this feel good”?

Karen leaned back towards me, arching her back. “Oh yes. That feels really good”. That surprised me. Beth is rubbing Karen’s breasts, and she likes it. Apparently they both do.

“Well see, the size does not matter much, it is how it feels. Besides, it is only the guys and the babies who care about the size anyway; guys to play with and babies to drink from. Now how about leaning over and giving mine a kiss”.

I watched as Beth moved her hands from Karen’s chest and then felt her slide a hand between my stomach and Karen’s crotch. When Karen jumped Beth asked, “Do you want me to move my hand”?

I could feel Beth’s fingers moving in a slow circle. Karen replied, “No, you just surprised me. It’s okay. You can leave it there. It feels good”.

“That’s kind of what Daddy feels like in me, only Daddy feels a bit better, and much bigger”.

I was beginning to feel left out, “Only a bit better”?

Beth looked around Karen at me, “Now Daddy. This is just girl talk. Of course you feel much better. This is Karen’s first time at this. She needs to learn a few things. You just lay back and enjoy this. I know I’m going to”.

Beth had slowed down on me while she was talking to Karen. Now she began picking up speed, rocking her hips back and forth and then in tight circles on me. Karen had her face in Beth’s chest. I could only assume she was sucking on Beth’s nipples. Karen was also beginning to squirm around on my stomach. We continued like this for several more minutes until Karen began bucking hard on me, pushing down on Beth’s fingers. I could hear little squeals coming from her. When she slowed down and then relaxed, Karen leaned forward to Beth and hugged her, “Congratulations. That was your first orgasm. Now it’s my turn. Move over off Daddy”.

Karen got off me and lay down beside me, still breathing hard. “I always wondered what one felt like. I’ve seen the other girls have one but wondered when I would”.

Beth had closed her eyes and was beginning to rock back and forth faster on me, grinding her pelvis against me. A bit breathlessly she said, “Daddy is great for orgasms. He always lets you cum first. The other boys aren’t so considerate. Most of them will just jump on you, pump it in and out for a while, leave their stuff in you and then they are done, whether you are or not. Daddy will let you cum as many times as you want”.

Now that my ego was too big to fit through any doorways, I thought I should reward her. I moved one hand down to her stomach and rubbed it firmly, right where the head of my cock must be. The other hand moved back and forth from one breast to the other, teasing her nipples, firmly squeezing her breasts.

She pushed hard down on me and said, “Daddy, I’m cumming”. She grimaced like she was in pain and hunched over me. She held the position for several seconds, squeezing me with her thighs, and then collapsed on me. She lay there breathing hard for a minute then said, “Okay Daddy, now your turn”. She leaned over and whispered something in Karen’s ear that I could not hear. Karen giggled and Beth moved back on top of me. “Daddy, you just lie still and let us do everything”. She began gently sliding up and down on me, letting my cock slide almost out of her and then all the way back into her. I just lay there with my eyes closed and my arms spread on the bed, enjoying the sensations she was sending through me.

I had not noticed Karen had moved until a warm hand cupped my balls. The shock made me jump. I started to say something but Karen stopped me, “Let her. It was my idea. She wanted to help. It is helping isn’t it”?

I had to admit it sent chills through me. When Beth moved up on me I could feel Karen’s hand slide up my cock, squeezing me, sometimes just running a finger or two up my shaft. Then Beth would push back down, pushing Karen’s hand back down. The feeling was getting too much for me. I moved my hands to Beth’s butt, pulling her tight to me as I began thrusting into her. It was only seconds before I began picking up speed, thrusting harder. Then Karen circled her thumb and forefinger around the base of my cock and I couldn’t take any more. I began sending streams of sperm through the circle of Karen’s fingers into Beth’s pussy. When I was finished Karen gave my balls one last caress and then moved up beside me.

“Beth, did Daddy put his sperm in you”?

Beth, still lying on top of me, turned her head towards Karen. “He sure did. Didn’t you feel it when you put your fingers where I told you”?

“Yes, I felt something. It was like when water goes through a hose, but it was in spurts”.

“Well if you think about it, it is just like water going through a hose. It just isn’t water and it’s better than a hose”. With that they both began giggling.

“Beth, are you pregnant now”?

“I don’t know. It takes a while to find out”.

I just lay there listening to them talk. It was kind of funny in a way. It was like you were the fly on the wall listening in on a conversation. Except this fly was on the bed with his cock still buried in a young girl’s pussy. They continued whispering back and forth as I drifted off. I woke up a few hours later and they were both asleep, snuggled up on either side of me. I thought about how lucky I was and then drifted back to sleep.

Beth came back the next few nights. Karen was doing much better and without anything being said, returned to her own bedroom. As it turned out, Beth did get pregnant; one more girl passing through.

I was alone in my bedroom a couple nights later when Pam came in and shut the door. She came over and sat on the side of the bed. “Do you remember what we talked about when we returned from the cliff”?

“Yes I do. I thought you were going to come and spend some time with me. You didn’t so I thought maybe you had changed your mind”.

“No, I did not change my mind. I did not want to interfere with Karen. She needed you more at the time. Plus, I wanted to give you some time to be sure you would really want me around more. Then when I was ready Beth was monopolizing you”.

“I’m sorry. I didn’t know”.

“That’s okay. I don’t mind sharing you a bit. They are my sisters and there are not enough guys to go around. I just want more of you for me, that is, if you want more of me”.

I laughed, “I did not know there was more of you to be had”.

She poked me in the ribs, “You know what I mean. I’m serious”.

The last words came out softly, “Yes, I do want more of you”.

She got up, turned out the light, got into bed and moved up next to me. “I am so glad to hear that because there is going to be more of me to get. I’m pregnant. It must have been that horse ride”. That memory brought smiles to both of our faces.

We made love slowly that night, savoring the feeling. Afterwards, as she drifted off to sleep, I lay there wondering how our lives might change from this point. So far no one had really paired off, or, if not pairs, settled as a small group. It would be interesting. With those thoughts still bouncing around in my head I finally drifted off to sleep.

The days had started getting shorter though the temperatures were still warm. Most of our summer work was finished. The harvests were all in. If we got anything more it would be gravy. We had moved the livestock from the higher pastures down where the weather would be gentler to them. We could all take it a bit easier now.

For the last couple of months I had been turning down Jason and Paul’s invitations to join them in the gym. They seemed to come every Friday. Tonight was Friday and I thought I’d finally join in if they asked. I have not played basketball with them since right after we built the gym. I could use some fun.

After dinner I went to my bedroom to get a pair of shorts and some shoes. Most of the boys I had seen going to the gym were wearing shorts and shoes. I guess it could get a little uncomfortable with a dick slapping around while you were playing. The girls were a real mix. Most of the older girls still wore little if any clothing except when it got cold. Many of the younger girls now wore some clothing, even in the summer. It was a funny thing. I was used to seeing the girls naked all these years, and I got a sexual rise when I thought about them sexually. But seeing some of the girls clothed all the time could get me aroused even more, just wondering what their uncovered body looked like.

I was going through my closet looking for a pair of shorts I liked when Pam came in and asked, “What are you looking for”?

“I’m looking for those purple shorts,” I said.

She poked her head in the closet and pointed, “They are over there”. I found them, stepped out of the closet and put them on. “What do you need them for”?

I sat on the bed and started putting on my shoes. “Jason and Paul have been after me for quite a while to play some basketball in the gym. I thought I would join them tonight and have a little fun”.

“Isn’t today Friday”?

“I think so. Yes, I’m sure it is”.

“I don’t think they play basketball on Friday’s, but go ahead. I’m sure you will have fun”. She came up to me and put her arms around my neck, pressing her breasts into my chest and kissed me. “You always could stay here and have some fun. I’m sure I could give you the exercise you need”.

I smiled at her and then rubbed her big tummy. Yes, that would be fun indeed. “I’ll try and not play too long. I’ll be back soon. They usually start around 8 o’clock and it is just past that now”.

She gave me a little smile, “You might be surprised. Friday nights in the gym can get pretty wild. You might not have anything left for me later. But I might come over in a while and watch”.

“I save some energy for you” I assured her. Then with a kiss on her bare tummy and a quick pat on her butt, I was out the door. I went through the house, past the kitchen, to the hallway that connected the gym to the house. We had built the connection hallway so that we could get to the gym even in bad weather. The hallway was a good forty feet long. As I approached the end of it I was surprised not to hear the sound of a bouncing basketball. They must be between games.

When I reached the door, I turned the doorknob and pulled the door open. The scene was so unexpected that at first I did not know what I was looking at. There seemed to be a sea of naked bodies in front of me. There were bodies lying on top of each other, side by side, sitting on one another. I could not see a stitch of clothing on anyone.

Just a few feet to my right I could see a woman that I was guessing was one of my sisters. I guessed because she was facing away from me and I could not see her face though I could tell she was much older than the other girls in here. She was on her hands and knees between the spread legs of one of the younger boys. It looked like Jimmy, fifteen, one of Shelly’s boys. He had his eyes closed and his mouth open as her head bobbed up and down on his cock. Behind her, Jimmy’s seventeen-year-old brother David was on his knees moving up closer to her. His cock was as hard as it would ever get in his lifetime and I could see that he was moving up to fuck her from behind. I continued watching him as he got right behind her, put his hands on her hips and positioned himself to plunge into her. When the head of his cock touched her pussy she waved one hand back at him like she was trying to wave him off. He did not even notice. His attention was on getting that cock into her pussy. He moved a bit closer and then pulled back on her hips and thrust forward at the same time. In one smooth stroke he was buried in her. He held her hips tight against him. I could tell he was just enjoying the sensation of being buried so deep inside of her. The thrust had a different effect upon her though. Her head popped up off of Jimmy. She turned around to see who was fucking her and I got my second surprise, though not my last one of the night. It was my sister Shelly. She was sucking off one of her sons and getting fucked by another at the same time. She motioned at David to stop but he had his eyes closed and was beginning to thrust faster into her. I could see him bury himself right up to his balls in her. Seeing she could not stop him, and from the look on her face, deciding she did not want to, she went back to Jimmy’s cock. It was just a minute before David was slamming so hard into her she could not keep her mouth on Jimmy. She lay her head down on Jimmy’s stomach and let David pound her.

I could see Jimmy attention had wandered and he slid out from under his mother’s head. Just inside the door there were seven or eight girls sitting on the floor just in front of me to my left. They must be the second string waiting to go in. As soon as Jimmy had slid away from his mother two of the girls got up and moved over to him. One of them immediately sat down and impaled herself on his cock and began rocking back and forth on him. The other girl moved around to his head and knelt above him facing the other girl. The girls began kissing each other and rubbing each other’s breasts while Jimmy began licking the pussy above him.

I looked back at Shelly and her son just as he started cumming in her. This was some basketball game. As I looked around the room I could see that there were around fifteen of the boys there. With each one of them there were two girls and with a couple of the boys there were three. There were girl’s knees up in the air, legs up in the air, girls sitting on cocks, and sitting on quite a few faces. On the far side of the room I spotted one of my other sisters, Susan, lying on her back with one of the teenage boys on top of her, his hips pounding at her. I watched for a moment as he finished and rolled off of her. Another of the boys, dick at full attention, was crawling by at the moment, headed for two girls in the corner, saw Susan still lying on her back with her knees up in the air, changed directions and crawled right up on top of her. He just slid right into her and continued the pounding she had been getting earlier.

By the back wall were three girls that apparently did not need any guys, or at the least, were tired of waiting for one. They formed a kind of triangle with a head buried between each pair of thighs.

I must have made some sound because a couple of the girls sitting in front of me turned their heads and saw me standing there. They nudged the other girls and suddenly they all got up and surrounded me. “Daddy, you made it. Come join us”. A girl grabbed each arm, and began pulling me. I felt my shorts drop to my knees. There were so many girls around me I did not even know which one had pulled them down. As I stepped out of them someone was pulling my shoes off. Then two girls were behind me pushing at me, and one, and honestly, I did not even know I was hard, grabbed my very hard cock and pulled me over to where they had been sitting. Before I knew it I was flat on my back and they were arguing over who was going to go first. “I saw him first”. “No you didn’t, I did”. One of the smarter girls did not bother to argue. She just climbed on me and with one well-placed squat, put me halfway inside of her. “Oh Daddy. That’s perfect”. She was a bit tight and it took her several pushes to get me all the way inside of her. By now the other girls saw what was happening and their cries changed to “Don’t let Daddy cum. We all want a turn”.

All I could think of was that there were six of them. They’d kill me before I could satisfy all of them. Then I remembered the boy with the two girls. I looked around me. All I could see were breasts and nipples everywhere. I reached out for the closest girl and pulled her over until her pussy was right above me. I started moving my tongue around her pussy slowly. I sucked her labia into my mouth and then ran my tongue into her pussy as far as I could reach, sweeping up and down her slit. After a few minutes she began to squirm. Now it was time. I started flicking my tongue across her clitoris, then in circles around it. I could hear moaning but was not sure if it was from the one on my face or sitting on my cock. I could tell from her movements she had to be close also. They both came minutes apart and two more took their place as soon as they could get the first two to move. And so we continued. I was getting worried about what would happen after everyone had a turn. Would they want seconds? Would I pass out from dehydration? When the last two girls were having their turn I was saved by the arrival of a couple new boys. The first four girls immediately grabbed them before anyone else saw them and moved over to an empty corner.

I was down to my last ride. She had started out very slowly, rocking back and forth with my cock inside of her. Then she slid off me to one side and pulled at me to get me on her. As I moved above her she spread her legs out wide. When I settled in on top of her she brought her legs up and locked her ankles behind me back. I slowly lowered my weight on her and began pumping into her. “Fuck me Daddy”. Every few strokes she would repeat it. “Fuck me harder Daddy”. I did my best to accommodate.

She tilted her pelvis up to me as I was driving into her, putting hard pressure on her clitoris. “Oh yes Daddy, fuck me”. I was trying hard not to cum but after three pussies wrapped around my cock I just could not wait any longer, I surrendered and let myself go inside of her. As the sperm gushed out of me I grabbed her hips and began grinding against her clitoris. It worked as she gave a little gasp and began thrusting with me. Over the next thirty seconds she began pushing harder and harder with me until she finally arched her back and to my dismay, sank her nails into my back. She finally relaxed, unlocked her legs and lay there breathing hard. I had stayed hard enough for her to finish but the nails had ended that.

“Daddy, you need to come back next week. The other boys don’t fuck me like that”.

“I don’t know. I think I’m going to take up badminton. Basketball might be a little too hard on me”.

“What”?

“Never mind, private joke”.

I looked around the room again. Several of the girls had left but it looked like all the boys were still there. The room was almost down to one-to-one. In fact there were a couple of unpaired boys in a far corner. “Hey, Dad’s finished for the night but I see a couple of boys over there who look interested”.

She raised her head, “Where”?

I moved my head slightly towards them. She looked around at them and then back to me. “You don’t mind”?

“Of course not. Go get’em tiger”.

She smiled and gave me a kiss on the lips. Then she moved off me and began moving towards the two boys. Two images quickly went through my mind; that of a tiger stalking its prey, and two honeybees pollinating a flower. I was not sure which was more appropriate. I finally decided they were both right.

I took one last look around and saw two girls to my right look my way. Before they could get up I got to my feet and scooted out the door. No shame in a strategic retreat. I was finished pollinating flowers for the night and did not want to be prey. As I walked down the hall I met Jason walking back to the gym with a big platter of fruit in his hands. “Glad to see you could make it Dad”.

“You might have told me you guys weren’t playing basketball in the gym”.

Jason laughed, “I never said we were playing basketball. I hope you weren’t disappointed”.

I had to smile. “I wouldn’t say disappointment is what I’m feeling right now”.

Jason started to move past me, “I’d better get in there. Some of the guys are getting pretty dehydrated. Are you coming back next week”?

I stepped aside so he could get the platter through, “We’ll see if I’ve recovered by then”.

When I got back to my bedroom Pam was already asleep. I got in bed and moved up behind her, put my arm around her waist and up between her breasts to her shoulder. In a sleepy voice she said, “I must have fell asleep. How was basketball”?

I could swear she was smiling as she said it. “It was fine. But I think I might have to go back to bucking hay to get a rest from that game”.

I could not see it, but I could hear the smile in her voice, “I’m not saying I told you so, but, I told you so”. What could I say? I just hugged her and we both dropped off to sleep.

Over the winter I studied all the books on the valley the boys had brought back for me. A plan was forming in my mind of how we could disperse to our advantage and not just spread out. From the books I learned there where a number of industries and businesses in the area that we could take advantage. There were huge amounts of rice grown in the central valley. There were also huge fruit orchards and vegetable fields up and down the valley. There were even several dehydrators out there. We would not be able to use the natural gas they had but we could utilize much of the equipment and we always had the sun. There was a farm museum about fifty miles from us that had a huge amount of horse drawn farm equipment. And just fifteen miles from us was a historical site that had a water-driven sawmill. And not too far from there was another site that had a water-driven mill for grinding grain into flour.

Once spring arrived we began checking these out. It took the first month to get around and check out all the sites I had identified as our best bets. All the sites looked promising but we decided that the rice fields and the fruit orchards would help us the most in the least amount of time. Along with the orchards we also found vast fields with vegetables.

Then we reached the tough part; who goes where? I had been mulling on this for over a year and it still was not a clear decision. We finally decided to break along the lines of what our objectives were. We decided that being able to harvest rice was the most important and then the orchards and vegetables. Later we would tackle the mills and anything else that we found to help us.

There were enough people interested in the adventure that we did not have to force anyone, at least for now. We decided that a cross-section of ages and family lines would make up each group. Regarding the family lines, we had Mikey, Sharon, Janelle and our group, all with different DNA. There would always be more from our family but we added people from each of the other groups for the widest diversity that we could get.

During the middle of the summer, Terri, my youngest sister, and her group left for the valley. Jason and Paul went along for the ride and to help them set up. They did not expect to accomplish much before winter except ready living quarters. I considered going but Pam’s first baby was due in a couple of months and I wanted to be there.

The rest of the year went by uneventfully. When Pam’s time came there were three other of the girls giving birth on the same day. It made things interesting having four girls giving birth in the same room. When that happened in the past usually I was the father in each case. This time I could only take credit for Pam. We had our first girl.

During the winter, Sharon came around several times to talk about her interest in heading up the group that would move out to the orchards. She also asked that if she did go, could Paul also be part of the group. So I was not too surprised a few weeks later when Paul made the same request. It seems that I was not the only one interested in a change in our relationships.

As spring approached once again we were readying the second group to leave. All the equipment they were going to take with them was ready but there were still problems picking the group. There were a number of teenagers and their allegiances changed everyday. One day Bobby like Sally and they wanted to be with each other forever, the next they could not stand the sight of each other.

I was once again out in my thinking chair on the porch, thinking, that is napping, when Sharon found me in the afternoon. “Dan, I think I have a group that will work now. I have tried to remove all the Romeo and Juliets”.

She handed me her list and I looked it over. “Yes. I think this will work. Now that it’s settled, when do you want to go”?

She sat next to me and put her hand on my forearm. “It should be soon. How about two weeks from now”?

“That would be good. It will give you a lot of time to get organized once you get there”. I put my other hand on top of hers and we both rocked slowly together for a few minutes. I thought she said something so I turned to look at her. I could see she was fighting back tears. “I’m going to miss my children. So many of them have to stay. For most of them you are their father. You’ll watch after them”?

“You know I will”.

We talked for a while longer about moving plans, what to expect when they got there. How it will be completely different than whatever we could plan for here. Then dinner time arrived, followed by games with the kids out in the yard.

A few days later I was upstairs in what we called the TV room. It was a large room with plenty of room on the floor for playing and couches along three walls. It was where the kids played games on the floor or watched our old taped movies plus the newer ones we brought back from town. Occasionally I would go up and watch one of the old comedy movies. I was all alone and was watching one of my favorites. I made the mistake of then lying on my side to watch. I should have known better. Every time I do this I fall asleep and this time was no different. I don’t know how long I had been asleep when someone sat down on the couch by my stomach and said, “Can I watch with you Daddy”?

In my fog I recognized Karen’s voice. “Sure honey”. I started to sit up but she put a hand on me to stop me. “That’s okay Daddy. You can lay there”. She moved around and lay in front of me, facing the TV. I decided I would just drift back off and let her watch the movie. I put my arm over hers and across her stomach. Karen was pretty much like me. If it was not freezing she was always without clothes, so when I put my hand down it ended up on bare skin, right below her breasts. I could feel the swell of one of her breasts against my hand. It felt warm and inviting, soft yet firm at the same time. I knew I should not be doing this, Karen was still just thirteen. I was about to move my hand away when one of Karen’s hands lifted mine up and laid it down directly across her breasts. My first thought was, Beth was right. My second thought was, forget that thought, she has nice breasts. We’re just laying here watching a movie and we are alone. Plus it was her idea for my hand to be there I rationalized. Then just to be polite I moved it around a bit over both breasts before cupping one breast in my hand.

Karen squirmed around a bit to get comfortable. She was still a bit short so her butt was sticking back into my stomach even though her head was up by mine. The breast in my hand and the squirming was starting to get a rise out of me, sleep now becoming a distant thought. I could feel myself beginning to poke her in the back of her thighs. She felt it too because she lifted her left leg, then reached down and pulled me straight so I was sticking out between her thighs. When she lowered her leg I was trapped between her thighs, those hot thighs plus her pussy and its heat was against the middle of my shaft. Her fingers began moving around the head of my cock, then down the little bit of the shaft that was sticking out from between her thighs.

I did not think I could get any harder but I was wrong. I could feel an ache now, like my cock was trying to stretch out its skin. Without conscious thought I began ever so slightly pushing against her butt as her fingers danced around my cock. My hands began moving from one breast to the other, caressing the breast then her nipple. She lifted her leg slightly and moved her pelvis forward a bit and then tilted back towards me. When she pushed on the head of my cock again I felt the head slide just a bit into her; just the head. She was so tight that I went in just an inch and stopped. I pulled back so I could push in again and I came out. Karen quickly took the head and pushed it back into her. I slid in just a bit further. Now I could pull back a bit without falling out. I was getting ready to stroke again when Karen pushed back against me, and then again. I began sinking deeper in her. She was so tight it was slow progress. The feeling was so intense I wanted to just thrust hard into her. I wanted my whole shaft to feel that grip. It was difficult to restrain myself but I had to go slowly. If it was this tight I might hurt her.

After a few minutes I realized I was halfway inside of her. I heard her give a little gasp after one stroke, and was just about to ask if she was okay when she bent forward, reached down and cupped my balls in her hand and wrapped her forefinger and thumb around the base of my cock. It brought back memories of her and Beth. I thought she was just going to hold me but I found out different when she began pulling my cock towards her pussy. “Please Daddy, deeper. I want you all the way inside of me”. I needed no further encouragement. I had been trying to be very gentle. Now I began thrusting harder against her. I also wanted to be deeper inside of her. It only took a few strokes before both of our wishes were granted. Karen moved her hand down to just cup my balls as the last of my shaft disappeared in her. Karen’s head pushed back to mine, “Oh Daddy, that’s perfect”.

I began slowly pulling out of her a couple of inches and then sliding back into her. Each time I was about to bottom out in her I added a little thrust, pushing her body up on the couch. I was so focused on the sensations I was getting inside of her that at first I did not even notice several of the kids had come into the room. My head was behind Karen’s so I could not see them but I could hear them when they began talking. It only took a few comments from them to realize that Cindy and Debbie, two of Karen’s roommates, and several of the younger children had come in the room.

I thought maybe what we were doing was hidden from them and would go unnoticed until I heard one of the young children say, “Cindy? Why is Karen’s head bouncing up and down”? As I was wondering what she meant by that, I continued thrusting up into Karen. I finally got a clue when I heard Cindy whisper rather loudly to Debbie, “Deb, look between Karen’s legs”. Then it hit me and I froze. I could hear them giggling. After a few moments and no further movements from me Cindy said, “Hey kids, how about we go outside and Debbie and I’ll push you on the swings really high”? The kids thought that was a great idea and were out of the room in a flash. As Cindy and Debbie were leaving I could hear them whispering to each other, “Who do you think is fucking her”? “I don’t know. I couldn’t see who it is”. Then Debbie made one last comment meant for Karen, “Hey girl, don’t let him push you too high”.

Once they were gone I stayed where I was and did not resume moving in her. I was still a bit embarrassed. Well, not embarrassed enough to pull out of her, just enough not to resume enthusiastically fucking her. Karen had no reservations though. “Come on Daddy, they are gone, don’t stop”.

Just to be sure I did not have other ideas; Karen began pushing her hips back against me. She had just enough room to get me moving in her an inch or so and that was enough. She felt so tight around me I immediately forgot about the other girls; I was focused again, and Karen’s head began bouncing up and down again. Karen leaned forward slightly. I felt her fingers brush against my shaft and I thought she was going to grab me again, I was wrong. Every few seconds her fingers would brush against me. It took me a while to realize she was not reaching for me and missing, she was rubbing herself. Just thinking about that got me hotter; I began thrusting harder in her. I just hoped she finished before I did because I would not be much longer.

I could hear her breathing getting more ragged and she began pushing her pussy down to meet my stroke into her. It was a feeling you wanted to last a long time but we were both too far gone. As she began jerking against me in her climax, I started cumming in her. When I jerked against her as the first stream entered her, I felt her fingers push against the underside of my cock.

We were just lying there afterwards when it occurred to me that we should probably make our strategic retreat before more kids arrived. Before I could say anything Karen said, “That was neat Daddy”.

“Yes. It felt really good to me too”.

“No. I mean I could feel your sperm going into me. That felt really neat”.

I laughed, “I thought it felt pretty neat too”.

Before I could add more we heard footsteps coming up the stairs. We had just enough time to get up and move towards the door before they arrived. A group of our young girls came in as we went out. From the looks and smiles they gave us I guess it was no secret as to what was going on at the movies today.

We were about halfway down the stairs with me in front when Karen let out an “eeuw”.

I turned around and asked, “What’s wrong”?

She was looking down at herself, “I’m leaking. I thought it was supposed to stay inside. How do girls get pregnant if it all leaks out”?

I had to work hard not to laugh out loud. “It’s not all going to leak out, just some of it”. I took her hand and we continued down the stairs.

“It better not. I worked hard for that”.

I turned to her, “You were working”?

She laughed and punched me in the arm, “You know what I mean. I want to have your baby. It was all supposed to stay inside me”.

“Don’t worry. There is plenty there”. She did not seem too convinced so I added, “Do you remember when you thought your breasts would never get bigger? Well they did didn’t they”. When she nodded I reached out and caressed her breasts for a moment. “And very nicely I might add. Well the same thing goes for sperm. When it is time for you to get pregnant there will be plenty”.

When we got to my bedroom Pam was there with the baby. Karen ran over to her and asked to hold the baby. They sat on the bed and talked while I went in the bathroom to take a shower. When I came out the both turned to look at me but did not say anything. “What”?

Pam stood up and came over to me while Karen stayed on the bed with the baby. She took my hands in hers and said, “We have a pretty big bed in here. Do you think there would be room for Karen with us”?

I looked down at her, “I think so if you are sure”.

Pam turned around to Karen, “He said yes”.

Karen jumped up with a squeal and came over and joined in a three-way hug. Well I guess it was a four-way since she was carrying the baby. “Thank you Daddy”.

We all went back and sat on the bed. Pam began feeding the baby while we made small talk. When the topic moved around and finally ended up on the next groups leaving, I left to find Sharon to talk about some last minute plan changes.

I looked around the house but could not find her. After twenty minutes looking around the other buildings and the fields I still had not found her. I poked my head in my old hideaway room in the barn. She was not there but I did surprise Richard, one of her sons, underneath two of the girls. “Oops, Sorry”. I started to close the door.

“Were you looking for something Dad”?

“I was trying to find your mom”.

“Last time I saw her she was headed to her bedroom”.

I said “Thanks” and finished closing the door. From the other side of the closed door I could hear giggles and then a moan from Richard. Obviously they had recovered from the interruption.

Sharon had moved from the main house to one of our newer buildings several years ago. She could be closer to her children that way. When I got to her bedroom I knocked on the door. There was no answer so I opened the door. I looked around but no one was there. I was about to leave when I saw a crumpled piece of paper on the floor by the bed. Sharon was anal about cleaning. She would never have tossed paper on the floor. As I was bending to pick it up a thought went through my head that it might have been left by one of the kids. I almost left it there, but I’ve gone this far I might as well pick it up. Then curiosity won out. I picked up the balled up paper and straightened it out. It was a note.

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Dear Mom,

It has been a while since I’ve seen you. I hope you’ve been well. I came back to tell you I’m going to leave the valley. I’ve read about San Francisco and I want to go and see it. There is an area south of there, along the coast, that I am planning on moving to.

Before I left I wanted to see you and say goodbye. I’ll be in the old clubhouse for a couple of hours. I hope you will come and say goodbye. It would mean a lot to me if you could bring Candace and Vicky. They were always my favorite sisters. I would love to say goodbye to them also. If it is possible for you to bring Karen, I would like to apologize to her. I know what I did was wrong and I would like to tell her I’m sorry.

I would appreciate it if you did not let Dad know I’m here. I know he would not understand and not want me to say goodbye to you.

Your son,

Frank
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This did not feel right. Nothing meant a lot to Frank except what he wanted at the moment. He did not get emotional. He would never say he was wrong or even know he was wrong. And he did not have any favorite sisters. Then I remembered his threat to Karen.

I hurried out of the house and started running for the clubhouse. I only got a few yards before changing direction and ran for the house. I would not make the same mistake twice. When I got to the house I found the key to the gun locker, unlocked it and pulled out a revolver. I loaded it and then started again for the clubhouse.

As I neared the clubhouse I slowed to a walk. Once I was insight I stepped off the path. There was no point in being a clear target. I carefully walked closer through the trees. I could not hear anything from the clubhouse. That might not mean anything if they were just sitting there talking. I would not be able to hear them from here. Each time I stepped on a leaf it sounded like a gunshot. I finally reached the back wall. As I slowly moved up to a window I still could not hear a sound inside. I took a quick peak though the window and pulled back. I thought I saw legs on the bed to my right but I did not see anyone else. After a few seconds I took a longer look. I was right. There was no one else in the room except someone on the bed. I could not see her face from here but I was sure it was Sharon.

I moved around the building and went in the door. The room was quiet. She did not turn as I walked in. Could she be asleep? I had a bad feeling. Sadness came over me like a dark cloud covering the sun. Her arms and legs were all spread out on the bed. Her hands were clenched as though she was in pain. I knew as I walked up to her. I just did not want to admit it to myself. Her eyes were open, staring at the ceiling. I could see the mark of hands around her neck. Then I noticed the liquid on her face and inside her mouth. I looked down her body and saw droplets of semen in her pubic hair. When I looked closer I could see some oozing out of her vagina. Then I realized there’s too much. He must have raped her and then beat off on her face. The sadness I felt for her was being quickly replaced by a rage towards Frank.

Then I remembered, where are the girls? Where are Candace and Vicky? What about Karen? Had Sharon even brought them or had she come alone. Was that why Frank got angry? Did he take it out on his mother?

I was about to leave the room when I noticed there was a slip of paper in one of Sharon’s clenched hands. I pulled it out and saw it was another note from Frank:

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Hey Dad, isn’t this a turnaround. The last time I saw Mom she was blowing you. This time she got to blow me. I had been thinking about this since I left. It did not turn out quite as good as I planned but you can’t have everything. I asked nicely but in the end I had to be a bit assertive.

I had hoped to say one last goodbye to Karen but Mom did not bring her, my loss. Well, hope I run into you some time. I’d better be going. I have a long way to travel.

Best wishes,

Frank
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I was so angry I was shaking. Without realizing it I wadded up the note into a tight little ball and dropped it on the floor. I looked back at Sharon, some of the sadness returning. I leaned over and closed her eyes. I kissed her lightly on the forehead and started out the door.

I began walking quickly back to the house. The semen on Sharon had not yet dried. Frank did not have a big head start on us. As I returned to the house a plan was forming in my mind. I found Jason by the barn repairing some tools that Sharon was going to take on the trip. “Jason, I have some bad news. Come with me to the house”.

As he fell in beside me I told him what had happened. “Dad, I knew we should have done something about him”. I turned and looked at him. “No, I didn’t mean it that way. You didn’t know he, none of us knew he would do this. Oh, never mind. Why would he take Candace and Vicky? They are what, maybe eleven or twelve”?

I replied, “Yes, the same age as Karen when he attacked her”.

We were almost to the house and I saw Paul on the porch with my mother and Megan and Shelly, two of my sisters. “Well first of all I need to tell Paul. While I’m doing that I want you to take Richard and David and check the entire area. We need to know where Karen, Candace and Vicky are. I want you to check every building until you either see them or we know they are not here. Don’t take someone’s word that they are here. I want you to actually see them. If you find them, bring them to the house. I want to know they are safe. I think Frank is gone but we should not take any unnecessary chances”.

Jason ran off to get his brother and begin the search. I went on up to Paul. He took the news better than I had expected though tears were running down his face as he ran off to join Jason in the search. My mother and sisters took it harder. After they composed themselves, they went off to the clubhouse to take care of Sharon’s body.

I went on into the house and went to my bedroom. As I entered the room I saw Karen putting clothes away in the closet. I went over and hugged her to me. Although we were always very affectionate she sensed something was different, “Daddy, what’s wrong”. As I told her about Sharon I could see her tense up. “She’s dead? What happened”? Then she looked at me sharply, It’s Frank isn’t it? Is he still here”?

“No, I don’t think he is. But I want you to stay here in the house. We are going to go after him. I don’t want you to go out until I get back. I’m going to have Paul stay with you”.

I talked with her for a while longer to calm her down. She sat and watched me as I pulled out jeans, a pair of boots and one of my good shirts. They were all pretty good since I did not wear them much. After I got dressed I left the bedroom and she was right at my heels. I returned to the living room and went to the gun locker. I laid out five additional revolvers to go with the one I already had. I then pulled out six rifles and set out ammunition for all of them. When I was finished I sat down and waited for my sons to finish the search.

I was anxious for the results, and to get going after Frank. I wanted to run him down like the mad dog he had proved to be. I sat there watching the clock tick off the minutes. It was almost an hour before I decided it would be better to let him get home before we accosted him. One the way there he could always hear us coming and just move off the trail and let us go by. We would never know. If we let him get home we would have the advantage. We knew where he was going and he did not know that.

By the time Jason came in the door, followed by several of his brothers, all the planning that had run through my head had calmed me down. Jason saw me and said, “We could not find any of…”, then he saw Karen sitting next to me. “Oh good, Karen is okay. But Dad, we could not find any sign of Candace or Vicky. A couple of the girls said they saw them with Sharon earlier but were not sure of the time”.

Seven of us went into the kitchen and sat around the table. Besides myself, there was Jason, Paul, Richard, David, Jimmy and, oddly enough his brother, James. I began laying out my plan. I wanted Paul to stay at the house with a picked team of his brothers to protect the girls, especially Karen in light of Frank’s threat, in case we were wrong about Frank’s plans. Paul argued strongly until I explained to him the importance of protecting the family, plus the chance that Frank might still show up.

“Jason, we need two more for my plan. Do you have any suggestions? I would prefer not to have any of Sharon’s sons. I want everyone to be clear headed when we are there”.

“Tom would be good and Sam. They are both good shots. They don’t get excited easily and Megan and Terri are their mothers”. Then he pressed for more info, “But what is your plan”?

“It looks pretty likely that he has the girls. I think the best way to get him is to let him get home. He does not know that we know where that is. That gives us the advantage. He should not be on his guard once he gets there. I’m afraid that if we try to get him on the trail back that he might hear us and just avoid us and go somewhere else. It could take us a long time to find him then. Remember that old John Wayne movie I watch sometimes, The Searchers? Well think about how long they looked? I don’t want Candace and Vicky with him that long”.

I could see the kids were anxious to just charge off. But as we kept talking it out they all finally came to see that the plan was the best way of getting the girls back, hopefully unharmed.

From the books I had read of the area, I had a pretty good understanding of the roads around here. I knew there was a road to the north of us, away from the route Frank and I had taken earlier, that would get us close to Frank’s new home. It would take us a bit longer to get there but that would be safer. There was always the risk that Frank might sit off the road to see if we would try and follow him. It took us a couple of hours to put together everything we wanted. I had a tearful goodbye with Karen and Pam. Terri came around and said she would look after the girls for me. She had that old fierce look in her eye again. I knew she always regretted not being the one to take care of John when we were younger. I thought she would relish the thought of Frank coming in the house.

All the boys were outside and mounted. We wanted to get on the road before the day was over. Get as many miles behind us as we could. I was still in the house, about to leave when Megan came up to me and hugged me. “Be careful. I want you to come home to me safe”. Then she quickly added, “I mean for Karen and Pam. They need you”.

“I’ll do my best”.

“Well be sure you do because I’ll kick your butt up and down the mountain if you don’t”.

She really surprised me. Megan, my sister, who teased me unmercifully when I was a kid. The one who was somewhat reluctant when our family began growing. The only one who was out here telling me to come home safe. I gave her a hug back and a light kiss on the lips. Before I could let go Karen and Pam came up and joined in our hug. Pam looked at Megan and gave her a little smile, “Maybe you would like to join us when Dan returns”?

Megan smiled back at her, “Maybe I would”. Then she turned back to me, “But first you come back safe”.

I gave each of them a kiss and then went out the door. Seven of my sons were in their saddles, waiting. Grouped around us was the entire family to see us off. Several of the girls were coming up to each of the boys, telling them to be careful. It was several minutes before we could finally get off.

Little was said as we rode. There was a full moon so we rode until after midnight. We camped and just put down bedrolls and slept for a few hours. As soon as it began to get light we hit the road again. We stopped just to rest the horses every couple of hours. It was late afternoon when we finally found the side road that would take us near where Frank had settled. By early evening we crested a rise and, with the help of the binoculars, I could see the back of Frank’s house in the distance. It looked like we were around two miles or so from him. There were no signs of anyone there. I continued watching as the sun went down. When it finally got dark a light appeared at a window. Frank was back.

We moved back down the hill so we would be out of sight. We started a fire and had our meal. While we were sitting there eating, I outlined what we would do the next day. Two of us would approach the house from each side. I would approach from the front with Jason hanging back to cover me if necessary. “I will try and draw Frank out. We want to try and get him out of the house, away from the girls. If we are successful, Richard and David, you are going to come in from the rear, will enter the house and get the girls out. Once we have done that we will take care of Frank. If Frank is outside and armed, if he makes a move towards me, you on the two sides, take him out”. I looked around at each of them in turn, “Now remember what he did to Sharon. Do not hesitate when it is time. Frank won’t”. They all nodded. “We’ll get up a couple hours before daylight and make our way to our positions. When we get there, you will all wait for me to make my way in. You will stay out of sight until then. Understand”? They all nodded again.

We put the fire out and all lay down to get some rest. I was having a hard time getting to sleep. As much as I figured he deserved his fate, I did not relish being the cause of it. From the way the others were fidgeting under their blankets, they must be having trouble also, as they should. We were going to take a man’s life.

When I woke, my clock said it was just before 4 O’clock. It was still dark, the moon was gone. I went around and woke the others. We had a quick bite of the food the women had sent with us, and some water. Everyone checked their weapons and then we set out.

It took a good two hours to get there. The sun was not up but it was getting light; false dawn. We got into our positions, each of us about 100 yards out from the house, and then hunkered down to wait. It was another two hours before I saw Frank come out the front door and go to the barn, he had Vicky with him, her hand in his. I could not be sure, but it looked like a holster was on his hip. This was the opportunity I wanted. I stood but was having trouble taking the first step towards the house. Then I remembered the fear in Karen’s face, I started walking.

I was within thirty yards of the house when Frank walked out of the barn with his back to me. Vicky’s hand was still in his, a basket in her other hand. It looked to be filled with eggs. I stopped and called out to him, “Good morning Frank”.

He stopped, dropped the basket, and whirled around to face me, one hand dropping to his hip, the other pulling Vicky in front of him, tight against him, his arm moving around her waist. I was right. He had a holster. His hand now rested on the grip but did not pull the pistol out. That is a start. Maybe this will go easier than I thought.

“Well good morning Dad. You surprised me. Good job”. He watched me for a moment. “Ah, now I remember. You used to watch the valley when I was little. You saw a light didn’t you”. He was nodding his head. I kept watching his hand for any movement. I thought he was talking to try and distract me. I could see his head move slightly to his left and right, trying to see if there is anyone else with me. I kept focused on him. Let him think about it.

“Well what do we do now Dad”?

“I came to get Candace and Vicky. Why don’t you let Vicky come over here”?

Keeping my eyes on him, I could see Richard and David coming around the back of the house and start working very carefully to my Right. David was carrying Candice. In a few seconds they were out of sight behind the barn. They were safe. That left Vicky, and of course, Frank.

“I don’t think they want to leave me. They’re having too much fun. Aren’t you Vicky”? Vicky started to shake her head but Frank bent down to her, his arm tightening around her. “Aren’t you Vicky”?

“Daddy”? She sounded so scared.

“Vicky, we talked about this. You are having fun aren’t you”?

“Yes”.

“Yes what”?

“Yes, I’m having fun”.

“See Dad, you can go now”.

I was okay until he smiled. The rage I felt finding Sharon returned. I took a step towards him. All those cautions for my sons and I could not follow them myself. I was about ten yards from him when Frank pushed down on his pistol grip and the holster swung on his hip. There was a roar.

I could see the sky. It looked so blue. But I was having trouble focusing. There was one small cloud up there but it kept moving around. How can a cloud do that? How did I get down here? What was I doing? I should get up. I tried to move my legs but they felt so heavy, I felt so tired. Maybe if I just rest for a moment, then I’ll get up.

I was still trying to focus on that cloud when Frank’s face blocked it out. Now I remember.

“Dad, didn’t I tell you what would happen if I ever saw you again”?

His voice sounded so small. I could barely hear him. I was trying to tell him to speak up but my tongue kept getting in the way.

“What Dad”?

As he bent over me he let Vicky go. He opened his mouth to say something and a small hole appeared in his forehead. He dropped out of my sight. I tried to move my head to see where he went but it seemed to take so much effort.

“Dad! Dad! Are you okay”?

Jason was there. His lips were moving but I could not hear what he was saying. Why was he so worried?

“Dad. It happened so fast. Vicky was in the way. I did not have a good shot. Dad, can you hear me”?

It's getting so dark. I must have been here for quite a while. We should be going. We need to get the girls home. What’s he doing? He’s tearing my good shirt. Why are his hands so red?

“Dad, hold on. Please Dad”.

Oh good, the other boys are here. There’s David and Richard, Jim and James, and, and, what’s his name? I know him, what is his name? Oh yes, Tom. Now why couldn't I remember that?

“Dad”.

It's so cold? It must be getting late. It’s so dark, and so cold. I wonder why I can’t hear what they're saying? I can see their lips move. Maybe if I closed my eyes for a minute and rested. I just need to rest.

“Dad, no”.

"Dad".




Epilogue:

Fall has come early this year. It’s only the end of September and we have already had a couple days of light snow. It has been so cold that the snow is still on the ground, not a good sign. Lately the days have been dark and heavy with clouds. It looks to be a bad winter. Good thing the livestock has already been moved to a new home.

I’ve been coming up here to our small graveyard about once a month or so, since it happened, to talk to Dad. It has been just over two years since we lost him. Richard made a tombstone for him. He went down to town and looked around until he found a stonemason’s shop. He came back with a nice stone and worked on it. He did a good job. It’s nice. I did not know he had that skill. I guess we are all developing skills we did not know we had.

Almost everyone is gone now. Come springtime I’ll be leaving too and then there will be no one left. At our high point, right after Dad and auntie Sharon died, we had over four hundred people here. We were like a small town. Now it feels more like a ghost town.

Megan, my mom, was pretty broken up when Dad was died. After that she did not really want to be here any longer. She took Sharon’s place, leading a group down to the valley and was gone just a week later. Then we began splitting up rather quickly. Jason and Paul both left the same summer; Jason for the lumber mill and Paul for the mill to grind grain. They were supposed to leave the next year but they did not want to wait. I was not surprised when Karen and Pam left with Jason. Jason was always a lot like Dad.

The following year auntie Shelly and Terri took groups out. Our plan had been for one group to leave each year but with Dad gone, well, things were just different. And now I’m the last.

I know it’s just a sentimental crutch, talking things over with Dad. And of course, he’s the perfect Dad. He just stays quiet and lets me figure them out for myself. Jason always kidded me when he saw me up here. He’d tell me the answer was always inside of me. I just have to find it, let it out. But then, he’s like Dad. He always knows what to do. He would not understand. You see, it was my fault. It will always be my fault. I did not shoot soon enough.


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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 07:41
    is it ok for the delay, i apprecatate for your comitment pls continue in adding more chapters

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    08.08.2006 08:30
    once again superb 10/10.



    bap

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    08.08.2006 08:45
    Very very good. I think you could start stories with all of the groups that moved out. Its sad though that Dan had to die. But best story ive read on here. If i could, 20/10.

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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 08:45
    wow good story the ending was shocking but good story the only thing i wish u did was put more of the older sisters in it like shelly and megan

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    08.08.2006 08:46
    Such great storys you have written and its sad to see them come to such a sad ending, you should turn these storys into a book, Id be one to buy it.

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    08.08.2006 08:50
    What a brilliant story but what a sad ending.I just wanted it to go on and on.

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    08.08.2006 09:01
    again i say you are a fantastic writer. if i where you i would take the sex stuff out of it (at least the detailed stuff) and hae it published. i think it would do well

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    08.08.2006 09:02
    End it here ....it was fantastic........

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  • READER
    READER 500
    08.08.2006 09:20
    Wow, although unwanted, it was a fantastic ending.

    I can see the last shot of the film: With the camera pulling back, slowly, keeping the grave stone with his name in the left corner we see his son standing and walking away, putting his hat back on, the camera pulling back now to show the family waiting for him with sad smiles but with new hope going towards a new future that he had put into motion all that time ago and now coming to fruition. The camera now slowly moves upwards to reveal a beautiful sunrise and slowly fades to black as we see the family move away.

    I've loved this story and hung out for each chapter. It wasn't the sex but all that happened around that. Wonderfully told tale. If you ever decide to write another you'll have a loyal reader waiting to read it.

    Martin WAus

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    08.08.2006 09:31
    great series, 10/10 on all!

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    08.08.2006 09:37
    what happend to susan

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    08.08.2006 09:56
    i read the entier sireis and all i have to say

    10 acrose the bord

    i hope to read more of your matirial its graet

    keep it up mayby youl get some pobliser to pablise this for real

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    08.08.2006 12:07
    Great 10

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    08.08.2006 12:32
    Please, please make another chapter, so we can see Frank get what he deserves.

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    08.08.2006 12:40
    wow this is my favrite series on xnxx and u r my favrite writer. Wen Sharon died it almost broke my heart. I cant believe frank is such a dick. That ending was so sad i cant believe wat happened i never wanted it to end. If i was there that would be the saddest day of my life. Actually im kinda pissed off about this. I wish that it would never have ended. Anyways man i agree with the guys b4 me u get a 10/10 for the whole series, i am a loyal reader to u, and if u do publish i WILL buy i can promise u that.

    U.R Gratist Fann

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    08.08.2006 13:49
    wonderful story and ending was fantastic everything that is needed for a story to bad for the dad. keep writing it brought tears to my eyes to think that this could be the end to a wonderful series. your writing is excellent more than just sex its a great story to. respect to you and i cant wait to see your next story

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    08.08.2006 14:02
    Fantastic story! You write beautifully, and with a lot of creativity. Publish! 10/10

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    08.08.2006 14:07
    wow

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    08.08.2006 14:19
    wow what a great story it was a sad but good ending you should publish make a movie and write another series about them repopulating the earth and finding all the cities again

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    08.08.2006 14:19
    Wow, that was really good.

    Very creative and very good technically too.



    Btw, who was the son at the end?

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    08.08.2006 14:46
    great story.. im pretty sure franks dead ppl...

    i found myself skipping the sexual parts to the story...

    great job

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    08.08.2006 14:58
    one word only BRILLIANT

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    08.08.2006 16:12
    What a great story. From one writer to another good job. I am sad to see it end but i think you picked a great way to end it.10/10

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    08.08.2006 16:27
    Terrific. Anyone who didn't give this a perfect score should be shot too.

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    08.08.2006 16:35
    Great story! Gonna be tough to top it. Very well done. Tex

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    08.08.2006 16:42
    Good way to end it, but I do feel like you pushed the matriarch out of the story. She would have most likely been in a leadership position, maybe not with the sex so much but certainly the decision making. I also wonder, with so many fierce independent women, why he took a bunch of boys on the hunt, I cannot imagine any of them would have been as handy as Terri or Sharons girls. Do not let this come out as critical of the story, it was superb, one of the five best series at the site. Tre Bien, take a well deserved break. . .then get your ass back to work on the next series. Keep writing.

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    08.08.2006 17:02
    I skipped the sex for the story. It gaves me fuckin chills up and down. Jesus christ, SO good!

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    08.08.2006 17:40
    i dont usally post unless something is really good or something is "REALLY REALLY BAD"...lol....gotta say....lovely story ...if it was a novel i wud have bought it...another word ....u are too good with it....write on....!!!!....---JACK

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    08.08.2006 18:13
    nooooooooooo i want more of the story damnit : but good story

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    08.08.2006 18:23
    Omg, I've got tons of chills. I almost cried at the end. This is THE best series on here. Hands down...

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    08.08.2006 18:32
    That was unreal! You are a gifted writer with a fantastic mind for a story and mechanics both. With just a touch of editorial help (basically just someone to proofread and catch the minor errors) you could really go somwhere with this! Fantastic job!

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    08.08.2006 18:45
    This is the first story I have read for the story and not the sex. The sex scenes were good, well done, but the story...outstanding. Very well done. I hope to hear more from you.

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    08.08.2006 19:28
    Story is bloody awesome, the sex is just topping on the cake



    10/10

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    08.08.2006 20:14
    Amazing story. I've read every entry and loved all of them. Perfect mix of story and sex. This site needs more writers with your kind of skill.

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    08.08.2006 20:41
    Bravo! Thank you so much for sharing this with us. I enjoyed every chapter.

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    08.08.2006 21:38
    OMG u are one heck of a writer i swear i have tears in ma eyes right now.. keep up the good work.. the plot is just superb and the whole thing.. Bravo

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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 22:35
    ending sucks (dad dies? no!) , just goes to show they shoulda wasted frank when they had the chance.. but i digress

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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 22:57
    Wow, it was an awesome series, i did cry about sharon dying, that sucked, but hey, great story,

    Chapter 8 - 12/10

    Series - Perfect

    -Doc

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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 23:28
    As usual i am so impressed with this series... i waited on baited breath for this chapter.. came back and checked everyday and you did not let me down...



    You are truly gifted and talented... please don't stop writing... as usual... BRAVO!!!! BRAV fucking O!!!!

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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 23:36
    Keep writing everything else is so tipical you r the greatest writer on this site. amazing series amazing story SERIOUSLY contact a publisher 10/10 best storyline ever

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    READER 500
    08.08.2006 23:54
    holy crap, that was just amazing! the whole series was fantastic. ive never gotten this attached to a character on here! i loved the dad! and you did an awesome job of desribing what the dad was thinking while dieing. barvo!!!

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 00:44
    a damn fine chapter! Even made me misty eyed.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 00:48
    Well well..

    I'm totally excited to see the last chapter.. Sadly as i said, it looks like the last chapter. I agree with so many people (as i have said before) that you a magnificent write. And can't even hardly wait until there is more!! When you publish this. I want to be the first in line... Good luck with your future. And i wish you the best! I can't wait to read more of your stories.!

    - Amber

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 00:50
    great story man, lookin forward to many more from you

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 00:52
    i think you should write a story where there is no sex. You are the best writer on this site and i believe you could make alot of money on fictional stories. i do believe this story is long but amazing

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 01:10
    Hey this had to be one of the greatest stories I have ever read not for the sex or anything like that but you made me actually bond with some of the characters. The ending was sad but it was fulfilling at the same time to see how frank payed for his crimes. As many others have said the sex was just iceing on the cake. Keep writing these stories like this you have a knack for suspense, post apocalyptic stuff. Great job you are my favorite author by far on this webstie.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 01:15
    dude i almost cried when he died at the end but frank got what was coming, a bullet in the head..............you need to publish some of your work

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 01:24
    Kind Of Unclimactic, Would Have Been Better If Frank Had Helpers That Took His Side Instead Of Staying With The Rest Of The Family, And There Was A Huge Gunfight At The End. But Overall Decent Story, And My Dick Is Quite Large

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 01:51
    Don't quite know what to say besides the fact that you could easily make a living writing novels. Follow what makes you happy, best jobs are your hobbies. Work it out to ur advantage.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 02:33
    You are an amazing writer.. I found myself skipping through the sex to see what happens next. Great work! I cried when sharon died... That's a terrible way to die. And I laughed when frank got a bullet in the head.. And i cried again when the main charector died as well... Why did he have to die :( Amazing story!



    I could see the world repopulated in about 1000+ years after this takes place.. wow that actually has me thinking.. what would that be like? wow... WRITE MOOOORE :O

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 02:35
    damn fine chapter. after a while you forget that your reading it on a sex site it is so good. i agree with some of the readers, you should edit the sex down a bit and publish this shit man, killer story. great great story!

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 03:25
    this was probably the best damn story that I will ever read on an adult website ever...here is my only piece of advice for your next story...dont force it, just let it flow, or just let whatever was the inspiration for this story, come back at it's own pace....youre a damn fine writer and will go on to great things

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 04:10
    One of the greatest stories I have ever read and I'm not just talking about sex stories. Great job on the entire End Of The World series. I almost got a bit teary at the end.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 05:08
    why don't you write a sequel and let us know how all the different groups branch out and repopulate the world. this may be a bit selfish on my part cause i enjoyed you're writing and the story so much that i would like to read more.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 05:44
    shit this was a great series you should publish it. i would buy it because of how well you wrote it not for the sex. it's an amazing story you have true tlent like some other people that write on here but hell you need to find a publishist and have them read it but take out some of the detailed work of the sex but what a great ending you had me almost crying :'( 10/10

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 06:38
    xcellent woz a bit shocked about endinn tho :'0

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 10:45
    WOW! This whole series is by far the best on this site. I definately agree with getting it published. Or even writing it in a script to make a movie out of it. It would be fantastic either way. Whole series gets 10/10.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 12:25
    Simply great!!! I have never expected that an american author could write such a nice story without falling into the traps of nationalism. Although I really don`t find anything more disgusting than the USA I love authors like you. Please keep on writing.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 13:57
    Abosoulty Fantastic. One of the best stories i have ever read. 100/10

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 15:30
    Wow...freaking amazing series. Not many stories bring tears to my eyes...erotic or otherwise. I have one question and one suggestion. What happened to Danny's mom? I didn't see her mentioned in 7 or 8...did I miss somethin? Danny should have beaten the crap out of Frank; forget about the gun to check on Vicky then get shot while he had is back turned. Either way, Good job!

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 17:22
    so its over i thought it was 10 chapters?

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 19:13
    wow great story, u seriously need to think of gettin these published, the las part almost got me cryin...lol, i knw its jus a story but u writre so good that it all seems real..like the reality now is all a lie and the reality in ur stories r the truth...lol well great job and kinda sad at the end but good, keep it up

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 21:06
    Hey great story. I would love to see you continue it with a spin off with all the different groups and how the relate to each other. I've got to say I liked the storyline much better than the sex.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 22:02
    Put a spinoff and everyone will laugh at you.

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 22:08
    you know with this being a sex story site you could pull every bit of the graphic sex stories out and i would still read this. It is awesome. i was quite and happily surprised. i knwo this is also fiction but you wonder how would you react in this situation? i think most would do the same things. it was great and i thank you

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 23:21
    i think i cried

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    READER 500
    09.08.2006 23:47
    That was excellent...I kind of figured the ending with frank and his dad, but I am a little suprized that you had Dan die at the end, wounded yes, but not die...But hey that what makes a great story!

    10/10 on the whole series!

    Doc.

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 00:08
    this was an amazing story i give this a 10/10

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 01:32
    is this the end or are you doing more

    you are an amazing author

    100000000000000/10

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 03:37
    That was the best series ever. What a great, but sad ending too. I felt attached to the main character, probably cause my name is the same as his. Please, write more stories.

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 04:28
    You know, you really are a tallented person. Without a doubt, you could make something with your life doing this. Not that I'm saying you are a loser or anything, but this just seems like what you were born to do. I have but one suggestion, and it is'nt about the story. I think it really helps when a writer responds to his/her readers. If we could get a sence of who is behind this it would increase the quality so much more. Just write back in the comments page every once in a while. But honestly, this story brought tears to my eyes. Amazing

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 06:09
    this is the gratest ever i have red i wos glued to your chapters no words man, keep it up if u are contuning pls give us a hint ???

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 07:14
    Well, I litteraly cried. And that's saying something. Well done dude. You hooked us into the characters, threw in drama and excitement (and love of course) and then broke it up. In the end, we all really like sad endings, because when you have a happy ending there's only for it to get worse. But on a sad one you start working on making things better. I've read all of these and hung on your every word. Extremely well done and I'm superbly happy to have read every sentance.

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 08:29
    I would have to say, that this series is the best I have ever read! Also, that the ending was great, I cried, and that I'm for a loss of words, great.... 10/10!

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 08:42
    Holy Shit man you are the best.

    This has been by far the best series i have looked at.

    You made me cry and not many books have made me cry.

    Write more series like these, please.

    You rock, you should write books.

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 10:14
    noooooooooooooooooooooooo!!... killed off the dad... meh...great series

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 13:01
    You did what most writers wouldn't do and that is letting the lead role person in the story die. This has been a really amazing story and I've sent it to many of my friends. you really did a very good job on the writing and planning of the story.



    I hope to be able to read more of your works soon. It was really worth the wait. I am at a loss now I feel that I've known Kanny for a long time and having finished reading this chapter and series I feel sad....

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 14:21
    excellent... prehaps the best ive ever read. now do a spinoff w/ jason & paul

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 16:21
    Loved all eight chapters. One of the very best short stories I've read in a long time. Thank you for continuing the saga.

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 22:23
    excellent story

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    READER 500
    10.08.2006 23:57
    I rarly revew storys but this one i had to make a exseption, this was a wonder full story, and the way it ended was, altho sad, perfect in how it was writen, i love a good story but for me to find one is quite hard the fact that i would have read this in book form is something. you have a talent, dont let it go to wast in your own eyes.

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 00:07
    Very much well worth the wait. The ending was incredibly well crafted, as was the entire series. And like many others i was having a hard time finishing it becuase of the tears that kept fogging my glasses. Thank you.

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 02:04
    this is a rare breed of story it was a drama/action story with sex in it not the other way around you get to know and even relate to a few of them and you hate to see them go but you have to keep reading cause it is truely captivating so keep up the work man

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 03:02
    that's so moving

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 05:32
    i am waiting for the next long story. this one was really good 10/10 for all 8 chapters. i will be quite diapointed if i dont see another large story for you soon. the sex isnt all that grabbed my attention. by the 3rd chapter the Sex was just somthing to look forward to in the story but the plot had me wanting more. sadly it took me 3 days to read the whole thing. but over all 10/10 very satisfying.



    WRITE MORE

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 07:46
    ive read all of the chapters and never saw this ending coming i didnt want to see the dad die but the way you did it was simply amazing you truly are a gifted writer and i look forward to reading more of your stories

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 09:43
    Excellent story I loved all 8 chapters youve got a real talent for writing dont let it go to waste i look forward to reading some more of your stories. 10/10

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 12:05
    NIce ending to a great series, 9/10 for this one

    felt yoru sec scenes seamed a lil dry and rusehd though



    but i still love the way you added a great storyline and made feeling for the characters, did you have some sort of geneology to keep track of all kids or were you just able to remember each time you paired up.



    anyways great work look forward to something new if you decide to work on a new storry.



    great job and best of luck with furture writing

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 13:43
    Not long enough

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 17:03
    Have you ever thought about writing an erotic novel? I think that you have great potential to write a book that is like this series, only longer, with a longer story (and of course don't forget the sex)! Excellent job

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 17:59
    very good story. loved the ending. thought it was going to dry up after shellys husband was killed. but you pulled it back into a new storyline nicely done overall 9/10

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 21:26
    You have a gift. You should cobble this all together and take it to a publisher. I loved the ending. It was a good way to finish it off. Sadly though Im still wanting more. ah well it was excellent while it lasted. 10/10 for all 8 chapters

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 22:06
    wow

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    READER 500
    11.08.2006 23:51
    amazing

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 00:06
    YOU ARE VERY GIFTED MAN AND SHOULD KEEP RIGHTING SOTRYS

    tHIS HAS BEEN THE MOST MOVING STORY I HAVE EVER READ

    DONT STOP WRITING ... EVER

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 03:45
    I am kind of confused on who was the speaker in the epilogue? I feel kind of stupid but i don't know who it ius. It obviously can't be paul or jason. I think it is tom am i wrong? maybe sam but i don't know. I remember you saying earlier tom was sams daughter i think, so who? anyone wanna tell me?

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 03:56
    a sad sad end to a very good series.... wonderfully written.

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 04:31
    But yeah, this was an amazing story, great job. You coould make anothe chapter or even story off this, like a 20+ years later thing, like the world is repopulated maybe. I wont be surprised if there are no more chapters or another story off this, but it would be nice. Like every single other person, 10/10 form every single chapter/the series. This would suck if this actually happened to the world because in the twenty or thirty years that during this ossurred, the world will be so advanced technology wise it will be superbly crazy. But aside of the incest, all the sex would be awesome to the max. Good luck with future stories and again, great awesome job!

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 06:44
    I am amazed. this is one of the best stories ever on this or any other site. Sex or not the writing was awesome. Just loved it all. When i saw that someone gave it a 9/10 i got really mad. what kind of fool gives this kind of writing a 9 when everyone knows it is suposed to have a 10/10. I gave it 10/10

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 08:07
    people can give any rating they want!

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 10:30
    is this the ending or are you going to write more

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 16:44
    noun

    1 epilogue, epilog



    a short passage added at the end of a literary work; "the epilogue told what eventually happened to the main characters"

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 20:27
    Not nice.... IT WAS GREAT!

    Yknow, you should go and get professional, I'm deadserieus

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    READER 500
    12.08.2006 22:06
    I know lot's of people say this, but; GET THIS PUBLISHED!!!!!! Do you have any idea how much money you'd make?

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    READER 500
    13.08.2006 03:34
    Only 9.5?? Who rates this story anything other then 10/10? This story would top Harry Potter!!

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    READER 500
    13.08.2006 05:41
    You are a fantastic author. Every chapter 10/10.

    Please continue the "Daddy" story about the other

    teenagers after the birthday party. It has been 10/10 all the way and I can hardly wait for the sequels.

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    READER 500
    13.08.2006 17:24
    everybody else on this site is a writer... or a perv. but you, sir, are an author, and this was the best series, by the best author on this site, and if this is how you want to end it, then i'll post up one more 10 for you, and leave with a smile.

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    READER 500
    13.08.2006 22:28
    duuuuuuuuuuuude!!!!!!!! i have never read a better story in my hole life it was awsome and my heart was pounding when they were about to attack

    15/10

    i no i cant do that but hay its an awsome story it stinks that its over, but every one says it "GET THE STORY PUBLISHED U WILL MAKE TONES OF CASH" and its true,make more storys like this.

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    READER 500
    13.08.2006 22:55
    Absolutly amazing... What a more perfect way to end the best read seires on this site and, pehaps for the genre, the entire web. Congratgulations 10/10

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 00:50
    oh man, i cant believe you killed him.

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 01:15
    i've read all 8 chapters, and i can't say i've read another story as well written as this, 10/10, please write another story , can't wait

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 03:49
    bloody brilliant, keep up the greatness

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 06:08
    Bloody brilliant mate easily the best story ever full stop. keep on writing dude.

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 09:19
    ..... MOTHER FUCKIN BASTARD! i saw it coming, damn it..... sadly this is what happens with stories, the hero needs a nemesis, john was the first one, then frank, if the last nemesis dies, the hero has no one to match wits with, he becomes just another guy, and the hero can't be just another guy, and since there was no other person on the planet and the only bad kid he ever had just got shot in the head, he had no other nemesis, since he'd already managed to win over nature itself, which makes his role as hero moot..... sadly this is the bane of authors, they come up with an excellent hero, and throw him into impossible situations, with harder and harder enemies, and eventually they find he has no more enemies, what does he do then? the excitment of the story dies with the last nemesis, and while this is a sex story, part of why it is so intense and impossible to stop reading, is because of the danger..... imagine super man without a super villain to combat, no lex luthor, and no disasters to avert or people to save, is he still a hero at that point, or just another guy? and the authors just can't let their creations fall by the way side

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 17:46
    simply awesome 10/10

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    READER 500
    14.08.2006 18:26
    so wait.... who was the son at the end?

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    READER 500
    15.08.2006 03:12
    well done author, silencing the demands for the next chapters. As a side note, people who claim to have never read a better story in their life should really get out more.

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    READER 500
    15.08.2006 12:40
    I cried.. this story is amazing, you are my god, I can only aspire to such greatness, this is the greatest story ever told, this would be one of the greatest movies ever.

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    READER 500
    15.08.2006 16:08
    Loved your work on these stories. Hope when I start writing mine I do as well.

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    READER 500
    15.08.2006 20:49
    Amazing...

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    READER 500
    15.08.2006 23:10
    That was one hell of a series, the best I have ever read on this forum.

    ShaggyBob

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    READER 500
    16.08.2006 01:14
    indiscribable

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    READER 500
    16.08.2006 04:50
    I read it for the story! The sex was great, but sometimes got in the way. In this plot line sex complimented, but was not required. The tenderness before and after were more important. It would make a fine movie, anywhere from PG-13 to R. Enough said.

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    READER 500
    16.08.2006 08:16
    Super story. Thanks

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    READER 500
    16.08.2006 10:34
    Great story and series but i think its time to start ending this great trilogy

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    READER 500
    16.08.2006 22:40
    dude u rock!!!!!!!!!!!!!11

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    READER 500
    17.08.2006 14:38
    Dude, I loved the whole story, but this chapter is really depressing, in the first seven you begin to feel like you are part of the family and you love every one of the main characters...then this dark chapter comes and you want even I am ready to break down and cry. This is my favorite story ever. Thank you for writing it.



    signed

    "The Demon" Xexx Demone

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    READER 500
    18.08.2006 03:08
    Swear to god i almost cried

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    READER 500
    18.08.2006 04:22
    so who was the person who shot too late?

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    READER 500
    19.08.2006 01:05
    i liked the early chapters more

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    READER 500
    19.08.2006 15:53
    Dude i swear to god if you took out all the sex in this story, it would make one hell of a movie script like the guy above me said. You are a fantastic writer and i hope you make some more stories. I will definitely read them.

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    READER 500
    20.08.2006 03:25
    great story like that guy said u could make a movie out of this chapter 10/10 plz write more

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    READER 500
    20.08.2006 13:37
    ffggssdfgfdsgffffffffffffff...

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    READER 500
    20.08.2006 21:44
    Literary Excellence - When is Chapter 9 coming out...You should write a book along this story line, with all the sex included of course. Other people had to have survived also...

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    READER 500
    21.08.2006 17:01
    I really loved the whole series, your a great author! I almost cried at the end of this chapter I'd grown so attached to some of the characters. If I were a publisher or studio I would furnish a project without question. I do hope that you create another series thats linked to this one if you stop this line.

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    READER 500
    22.08.2006 00:13
    DUDE YOU KICK ASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...

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    READER 500
    22.08.2006 01:36
    One of the Best series on this website i have ever read. I will admit i was not expecting the death in the end. Each chapter felt as if i was reading a real life book. The Epilogue was a perfect ending, having Jason confess everything. A Perfect 10 from me!

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    READER 500
    23.08.2006 01:12
    Excellent story i just wish i knew who the person was that blamed themselves for the shooting..

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    READER 500
    23.08.2006 01:45
    You definitely know how to write

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    READER 500
    23.08.2006 23:27
    U r the best real writer on this site no one can combine sex and emotion that brilliantly. Your storys have a plot along with well placed sex. copy right this story fast and KEEP writing it seems like everyone wants more stories from u but dont rush it just do watever u have been doing it work perfect so far

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    READER 500
    24.08.2006 08:50
    Seriously, that was awesome. Your series kicked ass. Write more.

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    READER 500
    25.08.2006 01:26
    yeah wow al those comments b4 me are right, that a real grad story, u even got me sad with that last part ....

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    READER 500
    25.08.2006 01:46
    Great series, the one who blames himself is Tom, Megan's son.

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    READER 500
    25.08.2006 13:43
    as far as im concerned, when it comes to "when chaper nine is comming out" hopefully never. i loved the story, and to try to continue it further would destroy it. much like all the shitty sequels in movies

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    READER 500
    29.08.2006 04:07
    amazin series wow

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    READER 500
    31.08.2006 02:19
    Extremely disappointing ending. all of the previous chapters built the reader up to emulate the hero of it all, only to have him killed by his own son. the son kklling his mother did not add to the appeal of the story. All prior chapters were outstanding, this one could have been so as well, with a bit more of a happy ending.

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    READER 500
    01.09.2006 01:16
    DAM YOU JMILLER.



    HOW COULD YOU KILL HIM.



    John Stewart: "So do you die?"

    Samuel Jackson: "FUCK NO, Im the hero!"



    HEROS DONT DIE.



    THe series si a perfect 10/10.

    You should right a real book, it would def get published.

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    READER 500
    02.09.2006 17:40
    Give me a break. Even John Wayne

    dies in a few.

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    READER 500
    05.09.2006 01:36
    I hate to say it folks, but I knew it was coming... I just knew. It's the classic struggle of fathers against sons and visa versa. Still, it was one helluva story. I hated to see it end but of course it had to sometime - and proves the point that regardless of how well one rears a child or children, there's always a bad egg destined to rise to the surface occassionally. Mother Nature does that to keep us from being bored I guess. I saw only one flaw in the story. The fact that inbreeding reenforces genetic traits, both good and bad. In other words, there weren't any offspring with the genetic birth defects that nearly always arise from such unions. Sorry if I'm being too serious, but even fiction should be accurate while being entertaining. But again - good story.

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    READER 500
    05.09.2006 10:40
    please please please involve granmom and her son please

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    READER 500
    05.09.2006 19:18
    everyone complains about the main character dying...well same guy dies in the bible

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    READER 500
    06.09.2006 20:15
    this shit is weird..

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    READER 500
    06.09.2006 21:32
    jmiller... wow. I would read this story even if it didn't have the erotic content (although it would be rather short ;)).

    Please, start another! Or even start a non-erotic book! I will definetly buy any book you get published...

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    READER 500
    08.09.2006 17:57
    good shit man, real good shit.

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    READER 500
    09.09.2006 04:23
    I'm sad that Sharon died q.q;' And.. Guy with the alien, four-year-old girl, clit chopping off fetish? Yeah.. Get a life. That shit's fucked up, to be honest.

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    READER 500
    09.09.2006 15:57
    great story i no longer read it for sexual content more for the story behind it exellent u should write a book ^^

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    READER 500
    11.09.2006 09:34
    really enjoyed it, looking forward to reading more like this one,

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    READER 500
    13.09.2006 01:58
    Your by far the best writer on this site i love the story great job

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    READER 500
    17.09.2006 20:01
    well written series. Bravo sir.

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    READER 500
    17.09.2006 23:08
    verygood story i read every chapter i never stoped thinking about what frank was going to dobut you did have a twist on the end you got me that was a sad endig ... good job dud. 10/10

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    READER 500
    21.09.2006 00:37
    wow



    thats all i can say really... right up to the end, i was thinking frank would get shot waaaay before dan, but there you went and just screwed everything over...



    ive never seen a series so well written... like the other guy said: write another series... it will porbably get high marks, as this one did...

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    READER 500
    23.09.2006 13:09
    this was a very awesome story all the way thought w.t.

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    READER 500
    23.09.2006 23:57
    was a great series sad to see it end.nice way to end it. verytouching

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    READER 500
    24.09.2006 19:31
    Astounding series, I am an author for Teenagers books, and sometimes work in magazines; Better than half of the stories I've written, you are extremely talented.



    10/10!

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    READER 500
    25.09.2006 16:46
    Very well written story. You did a really good job.

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    READER 500
    26.09.2006 15:51
    I have really enjoyed reading this story it is excellent and very addicting

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    READER 500
    29.09.2006 11:49
    OMg i this was amazing i never thouhgt to see it end at first i was fingering myself now im crying wow you are such a good writer if you wanted to you could make another story but no need to pressure you 1 more thing what happened to frank? omg i just wanna cry some more i no its not real but you made it feel so so so real you have a god given talent use it to the full and ride this thing till the fukin wheels fall off.

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    READER 500
    29.09.2006 16:21
    i started crying at the end because i had became so attched to this story that it was like i was there wtching all of it happen from dannys mom telling himt that she couldnt stop squeezing the way he was fuking her pussy to danny fuking mary to him getting shot..... by his own son boo-hoo

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    READER 500
    01.10.2006 06:08
    excellent story 20/10

    ending kinda sad though =/

    btw who was the narrator at the end i never figured that out o.o

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    READER 500
    01.10.2006 12:59
    This complete story should be published. Very little editing and it will sell on the book rack-------- Great

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    READER 500
    02.10.2006 07:01
    This has to be one of the best stories I've ever read that hasn't been published. I was kinda sad to see it end that way, but it made total sense and you did it well. Just wow. Words fail me.

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    READER 500
    08.10.2006 15:58
    Ok, J MILLER, this question i'm about to ask has been asked by 5 million people, lol. I've NEVER commented on any of the stories--ur the first. So u know how badly i want to know: WHO'S THE SON BLAMING HIMSELF AT THE END???? If you don't want to tell us, cool, say that. But please don't allow the same question to continue going unanswered. We're your loyal fans. Hell, i even skipped a class to read a chapter or two, lol. Please answer the question. I would greatly appreciate it. Thanx.



    P.S. For those of you who have multiple spelling mistakes in your comments: i know this is a sex site, but we can still proofread people. Please don't make erotic story readers look ignorant. Thank you.

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    READER 500
    09.10.2006 17:08
    I have seen the question posted a couple of times and also noticed a couple of wrong guesses. I did not reply earlier because, frankly I wanted it left that way. I wanted to wonder myself, who was it?



    If you read the story you can determine the following:



    It was not Jason. The narrator of the epilogue mentions Jason already leaving. For the same reason it cannot be Paul. Richard and David were taking the two girls out the back of the house so it cannot be them.



    That leaves Tom, Sam, Jimmy and James. Take your pick.



    In reading the story again to be sure of this I found I goofed. There were supposed to be eight on the trip. If you look closely, Dan actually sets out with nine. I forgot to count him when I came up with the eight.

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    READER 500
    12.10.2006 18:22
    wow J i didnt expect this..this is the end...it came fast, my cousing works in a publishing firm...i mean if u want...

    but man o man i loved your story, so sensational...it would be a great story...

    R.I.P Dan

    End of the world 1- End of the world 8, Gone but not forgotten

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    READER 500
    14.10.2006 07:44
    Just finished "End of the World" and loved the story and great writing. Hope to see a continuation or sequeal soon or at least another story of this depth and quality. Keep up the good work and good luck.



    Liberty Bell

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    READER 500
    14.10.2006 18:14
    Awesome story. I will never be able to read a sex story the same way I used to. If you would lower the graphic detail of the sex a bit. It could be published as a real book.

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    READER 500
    16.10.2006 04:30
    OMG this story is great, it is just a cut above the rest of them. It getsthe reader attached to the characters, in such a way that only profesional writers can do. You have a God given talent mate, use to your ability.

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    READER 500
    19.10.2006 19:59
    Im not emotional like.. At all but dude.. When he died I was like fuck. They shouldnt have killed him right away.. like tortured him.. I would torture the shit out of someone if they shot my dad..

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    READER 500
    19.10.2006 23:45
    You, are THE gratest writer in the world.

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    READER 500
    20.10.2006 22:14
    After reading one of your other stories i commented that you wrote a lot like me... I was wrong... I am but a shadow of a flea on the ass of a small dog compared to you.... YOU... YOU ARE A WRITING GOD and I tip my hat to you... thank you for this story... it's nice to see that smut doesn't have to be smutty.



    As for cutting down the graphic sex to make a "real book" FUCK THAT.... Zane publishes erotic novels.... and they sell them at Borders and Barnes and Noble... PUBLISH THIS... MAKE SOME MONEY!!!

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    READER 500
    25.10.2006 00:17
    Great story! You should really go through and revise it and send it to a publisher. Maybe draw things out a little more go into a little more detail on the years. And I don't know if it was just me or my reading to fast but it seemed like you were confusing names of people in the last few chapters. It was probably me. I'll have to go back and read them. Definitely publish it though!

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    READER 500
    25.10.2006 01:53
    this story is amazeing the depth of the writting is awesome i love it make a book man

    But Please add more to this story you could wright a series based on this

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    READER 500
    27.10.2006 06:17
    You're not the greatest writer in the world, as some enthusiastic comment below said. But you're good, very good, at what you do.

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    READER 500
    29.10.2006 22:22
    truely amazing series, this is by far one of the best pieces of literature i have ever read. i agree with the others GET IT PUBLISHED. ill be keeping an eye out for any future work

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    READER 500
    29.10.2006 22:27
    im not an emotional type either but damn that story touches your heart. 10

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    READER 500
    12.11.2006 00:33
    waaaaaaa...u suk wang 4 killing..i finally read the last part and wish i didnt..

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    READER 500
    18.11.2006 13:38
    You've got a fine first draft here. If you revise it, you could be (closer to) worthy of all the praise you're getting from these morons.

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    READER 500
    18.11.2006 20:20
    I feel as if I had grown up alonside these people! All the ingredients of a great story, and the ending was heart-wrenching. The sexual scenes were stunning...erotic without being prurient, if that makes sense. But a strange thing happened as I was reading them, I found myself hurrying through them to get back to the story-line, when usually, I do just the opposite.

    Now, if that isn't a sign of good story-telling I don't know what is!

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    READER 500
    19.11.2006 03:02
    Remarkably excellent story for one so graphically erotic. Made good reading from several viewpoints, action and sexuality. With intensive editing to keep the story line flowing and accurate in so far as names of characters are concerned, could make a best selling novel.

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    READER 500
    19.11.2006 12:05
    Struggle to fill in the blanks and edit this excellent draft into something a bit more palatable for the general public - then seek out the publishers. This has interesting potential - we each can envision several books, as U.S. civilization is Phoenix'd and spreads throughout the world, encountering and enveloping others along the way.

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    READER 500
    23.11.2006 01:12
    snif* wut a sad ending to a sex story ah? ahhh but wut good fun it was to read it. take out the sex fill in a few things and you would have a stroy to show evry one ah. But thw sex and love is wut made it best. And wen he die'd the you made it was difrent a good way to show he was ding(not that that was a good thing that he die'd) but ill i have to say is you start this stoy with a hard on and end with a tear in your eye

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    READER 500
    23.11.2006 19:43
    Madenhead? First time, breaking of the Hymen? Should have its part in the drama.



    ALL IN ALL , EXCELLENT.

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    READER 500
    23.11.2006 21:53
    Very impressive writing and a brilliant but heart rending ending. I don't hink I've ever beofre had tears in my eyes at the end of reading an erotic story (well except maybe a BDSM one!). Good descriptive sexual passages, engaging and interesting emotional storylines and well written.

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    READER 500
    25.11.2006 12:23
    Awesome story, but I really wasn't partial to the ending. Should have had the father kill Frank and rescue Vicky and had a sappy happily ever after story.

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    READER 500
    25.11.2006 23:00
    "I did not shoot soon enough. " Who's view was the last part written in?

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    READER 500
    27.11.2006 08:01
    vgckcgukfcuk

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    READER 500
    27.11.2006 13:59
    I've read a few other stories after I've finished reading this series. I can't seam to find another like this one anywhere.

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    READER 500
    28.11.2006 17:50
    this series ir so incredible i would read it all without the sex in!



    you are extremely good at writing & i wish i was as good as you... honestly; you have made this story so believable, i kept going into a world of my own, thinking i was there!



    the ending was superb, too.

    i don't think there will be a better sex story on any site... ever!



    jmiller you fucking rock!

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    READER 500
    01.12.2006 01:18
    Well done jmiller, of course i read this story when it came out so.. heh.. but ive gotten around to making an acc 10/10

    whole story.. 13/10

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    READER 500
    01.12.2006 07:13
    Analog, Asimov's, Fantasy & SF should all be interested in this story. I Don't think they will care about taking the sex out either.It is an integral part of the story.ZYZX

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    READER 500
    03.12.2006 01:16
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    READER 500
    05.12.2006 19:40
    All i can think to say is...incredible absolutely incredible.not only was it a sex story but it had a plot and a story line.and even without the sex it was still a good story

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    READER 500
    08.12.2006 05:48
    The view was jasons i think.

    I mean it was him shooting..

    And everyone is right

    I would read the story without the sex included. I actually skipped some of the sex to get the story..!

    IN-Fucking-Credib... YOu PWN JMILLER!!



    Keep writing or ill kick your butt up and down the Mountain x)



    10/10

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    READER 500
    10.12.2006 08:58
    This whole story is incredible. You are a superb writer. More!!! I hope you eventually come back to this story and develope it into a new world. Thanks!!

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    READER 500
    13.12.2006 18:29
    the simplest way to say this u rule man u rule

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    READER 500
    15.12.2006 20:18
    you're a genius.

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    READER 500
    19.12.2006 19:25
    This whole series is brilliant, puts some drama into it, not just the sex.

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    READER 500
    20.12.2006 18:09
    Holy shit man ... i finally read this entire chapters... and it was just amazing .... sad in the end ... but still amazing .... this should be a movie

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    READER 500
    24.12.2006 11:38
    qqwerrtetrtoıpğ&#...

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    READER 500
    25.12.2006 12:00
    dam u should turn professional wirte dis stuff for a living get the new stories out man

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    READER 500
    25.12.2006 14:38
    imho sad endings suck, they ruin the story for me. Great job dude, you rock. One thing in the story that didn't make sense was the fact that 'dad' I can't remember his name simply let Frank go. He knew he was violent, he made a death threat against him, and he pulled a pistol on him. I honestly don't think his character would put his family in danger like that. Even so, great story, keep writing.

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    READER 500
    26.12.2006 08:19
    SK is that you? it is everything as your old stories - intrigueing, well written and i spent 22 hrs reading it. - not for the sex but for the story -



    This could be a remake of 1/4 past midnight.



    I've still got my polaroid - which is the only thing missing in the story - apart from condoms



    PS forget the sex and incest, its a story that moves like "A last lade of grass" in 1971



    Regards,



    Jan

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    READER 500
    27.12.2006 03:09
    Best story ever.Spent many late night reading this and the others. All of witch are of the highest quality! Nice end to a beautiful series! Good luck in your further stories. 10/10

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    READER 500
    30.12.2006 09:38
    one thing to say....wow......

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    READER 500
    30.12.2006 11:45
    I read every episode and I loved all of them



    Great Work

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    READER 500
    01.01.2007 02:38
    fantastic man. just fantastic. i read all 8 chapters and they were amazing. go pro id read your work anytime. youve kept me up rather late ive been reading for several hours. your a master of the trade

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    READER 500
    02.01.2007 19:25
    awesome story its one of the first ive read on this site that ive read for the story rather thatn the sex. i wish it hadnt ended on chapter 8. maybe you could do a spin off

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    READER 500
    03.01.2007 00:59
    You should make an alternate ending.

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    READER 500
    04.01.2007 01:46
    Do not make an alternate ending. I hated the ending but I loved it. It makes for a good tragedy after all. You have masterfully closed this book and should start another. I was worried that you would not bring Frank back into the picture. I was worried that you would never find an ending. Great job. Masterful job. It’s got a lot of potential!

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    READER 500
    04.01.2007 17:13
    I was very IMPRESSED! Very well written & great story line. The way you spun off different characters - Totally awesome. I'm afraid you've now created a monster. You have to keep telling the story of this family - WE ARE HOOKED.



    Great Job! 10/10 for all 8 stories

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    READER 500
    04.01.2007 17:57
    good story except you had to be politically correct and get a nigger in there, even though you made her light skinned, which doesnt surprise me as real niggers are unattractive, 99% of them anyway.

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    READER 500
    06.01.2007 12:11
    And just when I thought the assholes stopped visiting this site.

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    READER 500
    07.01.2007 06:51
    whos the narrator of the epilogue

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    READER 500
    07.01.2007 08:07
    Good question. Its gotta be either tom, sam, jimmy or james. He didnt mention sam at the end though which was strange.



    Just out of curiousity, why did you make the narrator of the epilogue so foggy JMiller? I just dont see the point to that.

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    READER 500
    09.01.2007 02:43
    A fantastic story and a very sad ending. I really felt I was living this story. There is not just a lot of sex in the story but there is a real sense of love and care in this community.A situation where there is only one male left 'apparently' in the world and a mother and his sisters, in such a situation culture and taboos change. What was also interesting was how the females (youngest to oldest) took the initiative, that was nice!

    Only one very small criticism which I think tends to happen in situations where repeated sexual experiences are described, there is a slight tendency towards repeatition. All the females say the same thing and respond in the same way.....but hey this is only a small point. I went to sleep with this world firmly imbeded in my mind, I even dreamt about it.

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    READER 500
    09.01.2007 10:19
    Mr Miller I would like to give you the highest praise on this literary work of art. I actually felt like this was a possible scenario and your descriptive sentences painted vivid pictures in my head not only of sex but of family and love as well. The work that you have done in writing this can be called nothing but brilliance and I hope that you continue writing for a long time to come. You are a literary genius and this is quite possibly one of the best works I have ever read. Most writers simply write about sex but you actually put the time into the story to know where you want it to go and you don't divert from that like so many others do. Amazing story and this is one that I am glad to be able to give a 10/10.

    Please contact me when you releast a new story.

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    READER 500
    09.01.2007 13:36
    this is a true work of art, the whole love making scenes the drama action, it captovated me through all the stories. I dreamt of death once and well you put it the way i felt numbness able to still see but couldnt focus, write more about what happens after that, im sure it would be just as great.

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    READER 500
    10.01.2007 00:33
    Great Stories... i feel like it could all possibly happen. 10/10 for all eight in the series!

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    READER 500
    10.01.2007 01:14
    It doesn't really matter who the narrator of the epilogue is since it's the end of the story. Because this story is obviously a story and not a book there was no time to get to know all of the sons and daughters so even if you knew the name of the narrator of the epilogue it wouldn't change anything because we don't know much of anything about anyone aside from the first generation and a select few younger people. This is definitely the best series I have read and overall I'd give all chapters combined a 10/10. You should definitely consider writing as a career if that isn't your career already. Not necessarily sex novels, but books of any kind. Very good detail and structure. Excellent character development... I don't think I can say enough good things about this. Well done. 10/10

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    READER 500
    11.01.2007 11:56
    JMiller, i know you have many praises but i must really say this, your story was fantastic! It had me clinging on to know more about what happens next in the next chapter and the details and effort you put into this story is clearly showing in a lot of peoples comments. Fine peice of work which i think should be published into a novel. 10/10 for the whole story

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    READER 500
    11.01.2007 22:03
    wy did dan die, he never did nuttin; shudve used chinese water tortre on frank

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    READER 500
    14.01.2007 01:51
    Great Story.The whole thing was very well done. Igot to know the characters and oculd almost intify with them Thanks again,JMiller ,for a great story

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    READER 500
    14.01.2007 02:58
    Well, I must say that it is nice to see a bit of tallent for a change. Like your other readers are telling you. You should be published if you are not already. Very, Very well written. Like all good stoyies I didn't agree with some thing's but that is as it should be. You should be proud of this work.

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    READER 500
    15.01.2007 04:42
    so let me get this strait... after dan died everyone moved away from the valley? or did they just disperse throughout the valley? there at the end i got lost. this is a great series though so 10 outa 10. and just so ya know there is nothin wrong with what happens in this series. humans are versatile creatures and just because there are few people all related left doesnt mean we are down and out.

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    READER 500
    16.01.2007 00:59
    gr8 storys man ur series r da best ur stiorys jsut so hardcore rule!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...

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    READER 500
    16.01.2007 16:16
    i think u shuld continue this story

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    READER 500
    16.01.2007 21:44
    definitely appealed to me in more than a sexual way

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    READER 500
    20.01.2007 16:51
    I can say that it was the best story i have ever read. The ending was very sad, im sorry for Dan tho.



    10 points out of 10.

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    READER 500
    22.01.2007 22:20
    this series was the best. please become a writer. =]

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    READER 500
    25.01.2007 04:15
    Alright, I just want to say that after reading all the chapters I Really felt like a part of the story. If you would take out the large amount of fucking and insest ( I am not saying there is anything wrong with that part of the story line) Then you would definatly be able to make a great story. As it were, I am very happy to have stumbled onto this website, as it has the best internet story I have ever read... gramitical errors aside. But hey, that is what editors are for right? Hehe.. Thank you for the magnificant story.

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    READER 500
    25.01.2007 13:43
    i read your series because of the storyline and idea, not the sex. it was amazing. you should realise the finishes version of this as a book, or a series of books. you are an amazing writer .

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    READER 500
    27.01.2007 22:55
    beautiful, unexplainably beautiful. this series has occupied my past week. i used to use this site just to read the sex scenes but that was spell-binding. i love it.

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    READER 500
    31.01.2007 01:36
    I have to say, sir, you have a great talent. Your story was endlessly compelling, and is a standard that all entries on this website should aspire to. A saga that provided heat and humanity, "End of the World" achieved something that I have yet to experience from any other story in this genre. Thank you for this fantastic story. I hope you will continue to contribute for years to come.

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    READER 500
    01.02.2007 01:54
    Just finished, and really didn't real like signing up for the forums. I give it a 10 out of 10, and it's beautiful

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    READER 500
    02.02.2007 16:24
    i to think continue this story. it was very good.

    hope to see more.

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    READER 500
    08.02.2007 02:15
    q

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    READER 500
    09.02.2007 05:34
    cant express how cool this story was. was really shocked when i got to the last bit. but who was that at the end , i did all the math and discovered that all the other sons had left, please do tell me who it was... 10/10 excellent

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    READER 500
    09.02.2007 14:46
    Just wanted to say you are an excellent writer. Hope to read more of this story you should definitely continue with it, VERY NICE ~~~~~ Angel

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    READER 500
    11.02.2007 22:24
    Very good, my friend. You should continue writing, this was more of a "story" than quite a few things on this site are, I'm talking about the whole story. Nothing against other types of entries though. Maybe I should take this up? Hmm. Anyways...



    Just keep it up.

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    READER 500
    12.02.2007 09:54
    great job, I read all the chapters straight through. Im not a reader by any measure. I read comments. Agree with the possitve and constuctive ones. No need to repeat. You managed to keep my interest and bust four nuts. kudos

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    READER 500
    12.02.2007 11:37
    read all together and was over whelmed well written and erotic when needed 10/10 excellent...

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    READER 500
    12.02.2007 20:20
    I've read them all. and you are an excellen writer. i think you should take out the erotic parts and make this into a novel or novella. it was without a doubt one of the best stories i've ever read. PERIOD. Please, i would love to see this in a bookstore at some point. Congrats on your marvelous achievement.

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    READER 500
    13.02.2007 18:41
    I just discovered this website by accident a few days ago and found your stories. I started reading "End Of The World" yesterday and read all of them in sequence. I am a former acquisitions editor for a major publisher and I am speechless! Un-freaking believeable! Joe Schmoe

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    READER 500
    15.02.2007 08:14
    The stories functions without the sex. It seems only to put it in here and works for the first ones, but not later (if You think over it, they had to stretch the gen pool). But i read this and think its good.

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    READER 500
    17.02.2007 10:04
    brilliant!

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    READER 500
    17.02.2007 19:05
    wicked.

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    READER 500
    19.02.2007 16:45
    i have read thousands of short stories and this was by far the best. 20/10 i voted under 2 names

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    READER 500
    19.02.2007 16:45
    i have read thousands of short stories and this was by far the best. 20/10 i voted under 2 names

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    READER 500
    20.02.2007 20:54
    i love your stories but please write more brother on sister stories they are the best .

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    READER 500
    22.02.2007 09:59
    Dude! why are u writting this stuff for free, write a book! like you said atthe begining, u should become a novelist ha. definatlely 10/10 on this one

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    READER 500
    22.02.2007 21:38
    *bows* i am not worthy *bows*

    amazing...truly amazing... i think a quote by our good friend holden is in order..."What really knocks me out is a book that, when you're all done reading it, you wish the author that wrote it was a terrific friend of yours and you could call him up on the phone whenever you felt like it."



    Thank you for this story, it was well worth reading

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    READER 500
    24.02.2007 16:22
    Great story but as i said before i still feel sorry for this guy. In all those years he never had a chance to beat his meat. Oh well!!

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    READER 500
    26.02.2007 17:45
    what i wanna know is... how come nobody ever had her hymen torn when he slid his big cock into her tight hole? it was good, but started getting a little boring with all the daughters getting their firsts.



    another thing... how come it's a black dude?

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    READER 500
    28.02.2007 16:47
    Wait a second....... its a black dude?

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    READER 500
    03.03.2007 00:43
    this story knows no rivals, if you could, make money off your talents!

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    READER 500
    09.03.2007 15:37
    Really Enjoyed the Series................ Every Bit of it......

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    READER 500
    15.03.2007 16:39
    when is part 9 comin

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    READER 500
    16.03.2007 06:28
    wow....well written

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    READER 500
    16.03.2007 22:16
    wow man this story was awesome, i didnt like the black guy part but other than taht it was freakin fantastic. 10/10

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    READER 500
    18.03.2007 00:02
    that was excellent, I haven't seen a story this good since the vampire series written by dank.

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    READER 500
    21.03.2007 14:55
    G rate story mate the ending was well though out an well structured. You should rite more like that one it is worth the read. an i agree with the fifth reader from the bottem there is no rivals for this story

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    READER 500
    22.03.2007 17:30
    Dude. Holy shit. So many great aspects of this story. I dont know if XNXX does it justice. First off, you're fuckin hilariouse. I laughed my ass off during alot of it. Second, this is less of a sex story, more of a work of art. Its amazing. I agree with the reader who says this has no rivals. You should definitly try to make money off this stuff, this is less of talent and more of litarary geinus.

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    READER 500
    28.03.2007 07:15
    why the hell haven't you publised this yet

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    READER 500
    29.03.2007 19:12
    dude im a writer and id like to write this out except without porn ill call it EMPTY WORLD i hope it becomes a hit jsut like this dude

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    READER 500
    30.03.2007 14:59
    NO! you are NOT allowd to end this story. absolutely not. i'll be waiting for End Of The World 9.

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    READER 500
    31.03.2007 19:43
    i just read parts 1-8 in 2 days. its definately the best story on xnxx, u should consider posting your story up on other sites or try publishing it. it would sell many thousands of books.

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    READER 500
    05.04.2007 21:06
    spectacular story

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    READER 500
    09.04.2007 11:13
    hey when the hell is the next part of this comin

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    READER 500
    10.04.2007 10:02
    get it all edited and published great 10/10

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    READER 500
    10.04.2007 21:07
    great story but u have wrote kathy instead of karen in paragraph 42

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    READER 500
    10.04.2007 23:42
    wow .

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    READER 500
    13.04.2007 09:21
    i just read it for the third time, i have noticed som mistakes but its great nevertheless, dad shoulda lived though, but the death made it that much better, you cant help feel sorry for the fictional ppl. maybe you should try cutting the kiddy sex and stick with adults so it can get published in a magazine or book. plus i agree with everyone, keep this going, maybe in free time add in between chapter to where like the bear shows up and dies or other interesting stuff, you jump years quickly. maybe itll also get a miniseries shot on a porn tv channel or just str8 to dvd. i would buy it in a heart beat and so would alot of ppl. for all these movie and publishing ppl who come here, consider all of this, its worth big bucks.

    ps. more chapters and stuff could just get its own book

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    READER 500
    17.04.2007 14:18
    Damn.

    This is just a display of excellent talent!

    If you cut out the sex, and expand it (more detail and such) you have a really good book there!

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    READER 500
    18.04.2007 22:51
    excellent story but shitty ending i always hate it when the main character dies kinda ruins the whole thing to me anyway if u make any changes plz make it so that as soon as frank draws he gets hit right in the head so the main character doesnt die maybe just gets wounded

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    READER 500
    19.04.2007 16:40
    Wow. This is one of the best stories I've ever read in my life, it's so awesome! You're a very gifted writer, you should get this published! I could definitely see this being made into a movie one day! I would love to film this, you created you're own utopia up that mountain.



    I loved your story so much, 100/10. Please keep writing, you're one the best ever. The one thing that left me wondering though, who was the son in the end? It would have made sense if it was Jason, because he was the one responsable for covering Danny, but failed to get a good shot at Frank because Vicky was in the way, but in the end Jason has been kidding his brother about talking things over with Dad. Please let us know who the brother was!



    Thanks for writing this. One of the best stories ever.

    Ape

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    READER 500
    20.04.2007 08:09
    giving you 10 out of 10 is not enough

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    but giving an infinity out of infinity is something

    man this is the best series I have read after PARADISE VALLEY

    this is a really great story

    my hats of to you

    there is a lot of things to say but can't find the proper words hope this suffice

    great work

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    READER 500
    21.04.2007 09:36
    The beat i'v read here.

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    READER 500
    25.04.2007 14:43
    this isnt one of the best stories that i have read this is THE best story i have to give you a standing ovation 4 this story, but im a little upset that the bastard killed dan, Dan should have killed frank not the other way around but ohh well they all cant have happy endings but still 50/10 great work

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    READER 500
    28.04.2007 17:39
    I appreciate the all the kind words. To those who regret Dan’s passing I can understand. I am a big fan of Colin Dexter and his “Morse” series. I was very upset when Morse died in the last book. I was going to miss the future books that would now not be written. How ironic that John Shaw, the actor portraying Morse in the British TV series, also died right after the book was released.

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    READER 500
    30.04.2007 01:59
    you have a true gift.

    best stories i have read ever even tho there arent a whole lot of sex scenes. its sucks that you kill him offf at the end.

    10/10.

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    READER 500
    02.05.2007 01:05
    this story hands down is the greatest on the site.

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    READER 500
    02.05.2007 23:29
    If this were a movie with the sex scenes out, it'd be huge! I was crying when Dan died....HE DIDN'T DESERVE TO DIE LIKE THAT! WHY GOD WHY! HE WAS SUCH A GOOD PERSON!

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    READER 500
    04.05.2007 06:26
    10 out of 10. You have a tremendous talent. Well done.



    End of the World by JMiller is now filed in my favourites along with Al Steiner's "Aftermath "and "Doing it all over"



    Thank you for sharing this tale with us.

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    READER 500
    08.05.2007 07:46
    If you were ever to decide to continue the story, you should begin to follow off with the groups that left, you know telling of their journey to resettle and such. I agree with many of the posts here, 10/10 is not enough and this is truely one of the finest story series on this site. I would love to see more chapters of this (or possible a sequel with the groups?). Extreme talent. Great job

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    READER 500
    14.05.2007 02:43
    Only one thing I can say.

    "This is the best written story I have EVER read. The content, context, plot, narrative, eroticism, heart, and sheer depth have indefinitely proven captivating" Thank you! Please... if you have it in you to write more..... You have a new and I promise long time fan.

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    READER 500
    14.05.2007 11:48
    Magnificent! Great story, Great sex but always with affection. Thanks

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    READER 500
    15.05.2007 23:21
    dude u could be a story writer

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    READER 500
    17.05.2007 00:50
    How dare you keep me awake like this!!! Its 4am!!! the nerve of some people!!! P.S. Niiice!!!!

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    READER 500
    17.05.2007 05:56
    I think that if you took the detailed sexual aspect out of it you could have a best seller series. By far the best stories on this site. I hope that you submit this to a publisher because it is truly great.

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    READER 500
    18.05.2007 05:38
    this is one of the best stories on this site and it would make an awsome book even without the sex parts



    you have got to write some more

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    READER 500
    01.06.2007 04:46
    well....you did it....you made me cry, i havent cried in 10 years, and you did it. this was an amazing story, and i would love to see more. i really wish he hadnt died, but we all have to die sometime. and it was an incredible way to end it, really makes you FEEL the story, feel theyre lives, feel the pain and the happiness all at once. your a great writer, keep up the good work



    p.s. i really needed to cry....so thanks

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    READER 500
    03.06.2007 02:38
    AMAZING!!!!!!!!

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    READER 500
    04.06.2007 13:50
    A fantastic story!!!!!!!!!!

    I hope you continue it to the groups that moved away.

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    READER 500
    11.06.2007 20:11
    what can you say to a story like that. ehat can you say other then 20/10 this whole story was amazing the only thing i didnt like was i couldnt be there watching (and experiancing) there are some ppl who read a story just to discredit it. i wholeheartrdly agree that if you took out the sex part you could have a best seller on your hands (if you could convince a fucking editor to print it) loved the way you summed it all up.

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    READER 500
    14.06.2007 12:35
    I have finished reading this series for a few months now and I still can't get it out of my head. Seeing how so many people have said all these nice things about you I think that you should really consider publishing this out.



    Give it a shot always remember nothing ventured nothing gained. and remember to apply for copyright to this story don't let your hard work go down the drain.

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    READER 500
    25.06.2007 05:41
    too long but good plot

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    READER 500
    28.06.2007 01:42
    i realize y i like this series. it reminds me so much of greek mythology

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    READER 500
    28.06.2007 10:09
    ur saying that after years of having sex with his sister and mother only 1 of the 80+ children came out with a mental disability... none of the other kids where retarded

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    READER 500
    28.06.2007 14:58
    yea i agree only one of his kids had mental problems... half those kids should be retarded

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    READER 500
    29.06.2007 22:42
    u should have put some scenes in there between the son and the father doin it because they went camping together

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    READER 500
    03.07.2007 22:14
    all i can is wow. great job.

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    READER 500
    16.07.2007 23:28
    i have been on this site for many months reading lots of stories and i have yet to find any nearly as good as this one and i am getting discrouged because yours were one of the first i read and i would check daily to see if the new one came out

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    READER 500
    20.07.2007 00:06
    who was talking at the end?

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    READER 500
    26.07.2007 16:30
    perfect. should be a novel without the sex lol

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    READER 500
    19.08.2007 00:35
    This.. Is the first story I've ever commented on here. This was just, an excellent series. At first, I was in it for the sex like everyone else. But, it turned out to be an excellent story. I grew so attached to the characters. I was really sad when Sharon died, she was one of my favorites... Now that this story is over, I'm sad... I just, loved this story so much. I agree with everyone else.. You should really try and get this story published. Add a lot more detail between what happens though. And for a while, I was wondering about what happened to Mary. Keep the sex though, this story wouldn't be right without it. Anyway, yeah, this was excellent. Add more to it, and it will surely become an excellent novel if published.



    Thank you for such an excellent story.

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    READER 500
    31.08.2007 01:45
    it's a shame you didn't have another three daughters to fuck then you would have a good ole time. decent story but way way way way way way too too too long ;(

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    READER 500
    01.09.2007 00:59
    man this has to be the best and sadest min storys i have ever read put this in to a book PLEASE turn it in to a book



    RecSniper (AKA) joey

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    READER 500
    19.09.2007 18:23
    This happens to be one of the BEST written short stories I have read in a long time. Please fill this out into a novel and get it published. It should be shared...

    I cried at the end, and not many short stories do that for me.. congrats!!!!

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    READER 500
    01.10.2007 02:38
    this is the first ever story i had expected to read get some good pleasurable thoughts but ended up wanting to skip the sex scenes jsut to read the story god DAMN this story is worth publishing man send it to an adult publishing house and get this damned thing published keep the title and everything you might want to also elongate the story a bit between chapters if you want to make it better but DAMNIT MAN!!! THIS STORY WAS DAYYYUM GOOD!!!! please write another but no sequel maybe a before story of mebbe sharon and john bc we only got a hint of that story that would be awesome about how the world had ended for them but anyways GOOD WORK AMAIZING JOB!!!

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    READER 500
    09.10.2007 09:42
    Which guy was it at the end? It had to be guy because besides Candace and Vicky there were only guys at Frank's place. I started reading this story after a friend told me about it. You are so well written, maybe a little editing would help in some places but that doesn't really matter. I was so sad when Sharon died and that's nothing compared to how I felt about Danny dying : ( I feel so sorry for Paul, Pam and Karen. Paul because he wanted to be with Sharon and Pam because she wanted to be with Danny and Karen becaus she was so close to him. I haven't read your other stories yet but I can't wait too. Keep writing.



    Babydoll

    xoxox...

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    READER 500
    02.11.2007 15:48
    good story loved all of it keep writing the wee-monster

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    READER 500
    05.11.2007 21:16
    I just copied all 8 chapters into word, and it is 125 pages and 87,457 words long. HAHA and i wasn't bored through 1 moment of it!

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    READER 500
    06.11.2007 23:00
    WOW!!! I LOVED IT!!!

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    READER 500
    08.11.2007 01:33
    I wish there was more but i guess all good things come to an end. 10/10

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    READER 500
    13.11.2007 09:19
    Dr. S. Vensenburge - "I rate this whole series with the folloing stars : ***************************...

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    READER 500
    20.11.2007 17:34
    best story eva i just wanted 2 kno who is at the end

    Tom,or what?10/10 kep up good work

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    READER 500
    21.11.2007 11:38
    Best story ever keep up the good work

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    READER 500
    02.12.2007 00:31
    Greatest storys ever on XNXX. I really skippped teh sex sences to get more of the story.A true nail biting adventure all the way though. VERY GOOD. PUBLISH IT.

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    READER 500
    02.12.2007 19:53
    OMG THE ENDING IS SOO SAD! SO ITS A 9/10 FROM ME, OTHERS WHO LIKE LONG PLOTS, READ THE CAMP SERIES - THERE THE SAME IF NOT BETTER!

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    READER 500
    02.12.2007 19:53
    OMG THE ENDING IS SOO SAD! SO ITS A 9/10 FROM ME, OTHERS WHO LIKE LONG PLOTS, READ THE CAMP SERIES - THERE THE SAME IF NOT BETTER!

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    READER 500
    02.12.2007 19:53
    OMG THE ENDING IS SOO SAD! SO ITS A 9/10 FROM ME, OTHERS WHO LIKE LONG PLOTS, READ THE CAMP SERIES - THERE THE SAME IF NOT BETTER!

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    READER 500
    06.12.2007 21:16
    wow. this is the best story i have read all year! someone once told me good porn should be just like the movies, but show the sex scene more graphically, well, i definately think you accomplished that. Thankyou very much for such a wonderful journey

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    READER 500
    09.12.2007 04:48
    i cant believe this is the end

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    READER 500
    13.01.2008 12:15
    All 8 stories are great. You could continue on with sequels of the kids repeating your incest activities.

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    READER 500
    19.01.2008 09:23
    The ending mad me feel that sad sickly feeling. Not really into incest and all but holy shit loved the story no matter what. It was a great story my friend. Full of happy times and sad times...the last thing he said really made me sad because he would have to live with that guilt of taking away his father by not shotting soon enough. Loved your story it was really heart touching on how well he cared for his family

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    READER 500
    29.01.2008 17:28
    Amazing

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    READER 500
    12.02.2008 18:57
    One of the best, and a very satisfying ending, I must say.

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    READER 500
    22.02.2008 03:18
    This is the only story here that actually made me cry.

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    READER 500
    22.02.2008 17:35
    Amazing story of survival...odd this is something that may happen one day. Funny how taboos can change with need.

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    READER 500
    25.02.2008 08:44
    I dont Usally Leave comments cause that's not my deal. but this has been the most touching storie.. which I think if it wernt for the taboo would have made the best movie ever. I think you are wasteing your time on this website you should write a book with this same kind of storie of the End of the world. and others. your very talented. 10/10

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    READER 500
    27.02.2008 09:45
    read the entire story



    the best i have read here

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    02.03.2008 12:17
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    probley the most comments ive ever seen

    fucking amazing story



    i really wish you did more like this

    or maybe made it into a movie

    but insted of incest, you had 2-3familys that came together. less sex. and it might be a million dollar movie. please write this into a sex book. 15+chapters.





    fucking amazing!





    this is the third time ive read it too

    and it gets better and better





    i loved the non sex bits tho. more than the sex

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    READER 500
    08.03.2008 17:36
    best story ever

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    READER 500
    10.03.2008 23:18
    J this is the best story i have read on any of the story sites if i could ied add two zeros to the ten i gave you for the overall story that is all 8 chapters if there ws a way it should be put in book form it is that good keep wrighting and good luck

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    READER 500
    11.03.2008 03:25
    this is by far my favorite story on this site it was good with the sex and would be even beter without you have real talent i wish i had 1/100th of your talent i believe you should make this in to a movie or at least in to a book it would easily make you millons

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    READER 500
    12.03.2008 17:21
    good story

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    READER 500
    12.03.2008 18:41
    Interesting rip-off of Stephen King's work. Sort of a kinky "Stand". Not very original. The change in perspective is a classic no-no.....but keep working.

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    READER 500
    13.03.2008 20:37
    Well, I can't agree that it is a rip-off of king in that I have never read one of his books and have watched only one movie based on his work that I can think of.

    I don't think this resembles 'green mile' in any way.



    Every work I've heard of by King seems to involve the supernatural or fantasy. The only thing close to that here is the fantasy of thinking any one guy could be so lucky as to be surrounded by this many willing women.



    JMiller

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    READER 500
    17.03.2008 06:33
    Hey to the reader who called this a rip off.. dude even if it was this is a pretty good storie. J I think this is a great Story you should Write another one like this :)

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    READER 500
    20.03.2008 02:05
    Speechless.

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    READER 500
    24.03.2008 17:57
    I'm always surprised by the number of people who say this story is great but then I see how many people have read #8 and how few have read 1-7.



    If you like 8, take a chance and read the others.



    JMiller

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    READER 500
    26.03.2008 01:36
    dude you rock, im not even half way done and i came twice.. or was it 3 times? either way,WRITE A BOOK

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    READER 500
    26.03.2008 16:49
    omg

    you are the best writer ever. I read books every day, reading is what i do, and this series was by far the most absolute best series ever!!

    I cried when dan died, and being a guy thats crazy. you're just a phenomonal writer,I beg you, write another series..

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    READER 500
    29.03.2008 03:20
    this is not gust a sex story but a fill blow novel!!!! take out the sex add some action and you have a best seller!!!! (i love the sex persenoly !) if only evry one would fell that way then you would have a book that go's beound eny book! My advise! re right this in a more friendly way (by all means thow dont stop righting sex storys!) and try to publish it!!!! crazy! i no but hey wear all reading porn so.... ^^

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  • READER
    READER 500
    31.03.2008 00:32
    I had something close to a migraine in the middle of chapter six, but continued reading to the end.



    My head is splitting, but it was worth it. Very well written, the only story I have EVER read on this site that has a decent ending

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  • READER
    READER 500
    09.04.2008 18:06
    pretty cool

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  • READER
    READER 500
    09.04.2008 19:05
    ill admit the ending made it good but there are other endings that can make a storie good whyd u have to kill him off

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  • READER
    READER 500
    12.04.2008 12:19
    could someone tell me who was speaking at the end, durinh the Epilogue? ps, wicked story, end made me sad tho, :(

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  • READER
    READER 500
    13.04.2008 11:41
    Great writting, work on the grammatical errors and you could be one pretty good writter. Great ending also, but at the same time very depressing

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  • READER
    READER 500
    16.04.2008 22:25
    gygug

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.04.2008 00:08
    to the guy who asked why he had to kill him off, he had to because if he didnt the story would continue and continue with no ending. thats not a bad thing but he wanted it to end

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.04.2008 19:14
    A fantastic piece of writing. Wel done. 10/10 all the way.

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  • READER
    READER 500
    20.04.2008 23:03
    I am one to say this series is an original piece done by someone who thought outside the box. Who not only put lust in the minds of the characters, but placed them in circumstances that gave them no choice but that. Good Show very original concept!

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  • DAnnyman
    27.04.2008 11:11
    They fricken cut off the end of the story with the "do you think this was a good story" thing!!! WHAT THE HELL

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  • DAnnyman
    27.04.2008 11:14
    WHAT THE HELL?! I said “Thanks” and finished closing the door. From the other side of the closed door I could. THATS THE END OF THE STORY?

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  • merglitroyd
    06.06.2008 04:47
    My only question about the story:

    Where are the piles of dead bodies from the plague?
    They would definitley passed the virus on to the family when they found them, also.

    Other than that one big hole, I really loved the story.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.06.2008 01:32
    an emotional roller coaster by far the best piece of literature i have ever read
    thankyou for a great story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.06.2008 03:43
    that was amazing I want a movie to be made

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.06.2008 14:34
    Beautiful!
    You are an amazing writer!
    This was one of the best stories I've ever read in my life!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.06.2008 20:17
    Every chapter simply amazing. Best there is and ever will be. Thank you

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.06.2008 04:02
    that is the best story on here that I have ever read. Way to go

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.07.2008 01:25
    this was one the best hands down. and if anybody thinks other wise they are tards.
    this should be in the hall of fame of stories.
    honestly the epilogue made me want to cry. ITS THAT DAMN GOOD

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  • Anonymous+reader
    11.07.2008 06:53
    Its great to see people love this story!

    But now with shit popping everywhere, your series is getting pushed back ; ;

    Its been a while since ive last read it, about 4 months, becuase i want to forget most of it, then re-read it and remember the feelings i got from it.

    Im not at all embarassed to say your one hell of a writer of a very well written sex story.

    And again, Series like what el_hanes has put out were good, but never rivaled this, and the new Horny little women series, that was good also, but the ONLY series i see that rivals you in any way is Kelly's, DAMN! That writer must have gotten some notion from you, your an inspiration to veterans of this website.

    J, get back in the game xD I want to see you win back the hearts of all the perverts on here xD the small stories like coach and stormy nights where extrodinary, but a new series is needed man...

    I hope one day some perverted hollywood producer sees this series and converts it to screenplay, it would be

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.07.2008 00:47
    GOOD STORIES SENOR, top notch, but, i wish dan wouldnt have died, cuz i liked the series, but still like these are probably the best stories ive read so far, and also, in the epilogue, whs perspective was it , like, which son was the one who shot too late...?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.07.2008 06:26
    Wow this was so fantastic... i cant believe dan died, i wanted a happily ever after :(... even with the sad ending it was a great series

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.07.2008 13:41
    I wouldn't even really consider most of these sex stories, they're just brilliant. It's not just mindless sex, there was a purpose to it and there was actually a story. Great.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.07.2008 10:28
    Erotic, engaging, and actually truly touching. Nicely done man. Best sex story I've ever read.. and probably ever will

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.08.2008 01:44
    Amazing truly, You are a fantastic writer, great description and great story. Best Sex story by far. Best ending to any story i have ever read

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.08.2008 17:59
    Great story!!!! I LOVE IT!!!! ALL EIGHT CHAPERTS!!!! I cryed at the end

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  • Anonymous+reader
    20.08.2008 02:47
    fkkk!! damn sad ending..made me cry =( felt sorry for everyone that they had to split up after sooo many years being together! gr8 story, all 8 chapters of it!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.08.2008 17:19
    You are a very talented writer. I read all 8 chapters non stop. The characters all were believable & the sex scenes were great. I look forward to your next story.

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  • Garfield1963
    28.08.2008 22:07
    great story! i was surprised that the main character had to die. hope to more like this. great job, keep writing!!!

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  • Garfield1963
    28.08.2008 22:08
    great story! i was surprised that the main character had to die. hope to more like this. great job, keep writing!!!

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  • tommy
    tommy 252
    01.09.2008 02:29
    This was a great story. I would have rated it 10 even if there was no sex at all. The ending was a little harsh but it was still and ending that brought a final touch of literature to the whole plot. Starting with disaster, then ending the same. Great job, 15/10

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.09.2008 05:08
    can someone pease tell me who was the one who shot to late lol, ?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.09.2008 18:44
    i think it was frank as hes not mentioned at the end and all the others were

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.09.2008 18:04
    i think it tom as hes not mentioned at the end and all the others were

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.09.2008 18:16
    That was one of the best stories I've read in years I didn't expect hime to died very sad but great story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.10.2008 18:16
    This was one of the best stories I've read for a long time - the ending sucks tho'

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.10.2008 01:24
    i agree with the other people, it was a great story. i do wish that it had a better ending though, but then u wood have to keep writing

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.10.2008 14:30
    I actually skipped the sex to read the story! Damn. Too good. Ending was emo but great. Poor dan. I feel sorry for him.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.10.2008 20:46
    what the hell! why did he have to die?! tha was horrible. jeeze!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    09.11.2008 00:36
    Fantastic.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.12.2008 11:22
    Great story!!!

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  • aha
    aha
    04.12.2008 21:16
    I KNEW IT, IT WAS DUMB OF LINK(DAN) TO JUST RUN TOWARD GANONDORF(FRANK) BECAUSE IT WAS OBVIOUS WHAT WOULD HAPPENED, GANONDORF PULLED OUT HIS SWORD AND SHOT A LASER BEAM, KILLING LINK, BUT AT LEAST THEY RESCUED DAISY (CANDACE) AND PEACH (VICKY) AND SHAME THAT OF THE HYRULIANS (THE KIDS/BROTHERS) LINK BROUGHT WITH HI TO RESCUE PEACH AND DAISY, THAT THEY WERENT QUICK ENOUG WITH THEIR BOWS AND SEAD SHOOTERS. BUT I SUPPOSE ITS OK, BUT ENOUGH ABOUT THAT THAT, GOOD STORY, NOW WHO HERE AGREES WITH ME ABOUT MY EXCELLENT COMMENT? EH??!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.12.2008 01:39
    dude that was beautiful i enjoyed the ending it was movie quality because it was sad and anti-climatic

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.12.2008 18:13
    the story is the best

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  • Anonymous+reader
    04.01.2009 15:53
    J.M., you are a hell of a story teller. Don't stop writing! Keep up the good work!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.01.2009 05:30
    i just realize that through out the story except john the bad guy was black........any who's excellent story.....but who was in the epiologe

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.01.2009 06:00
    Wow. I've read a nember of stories on this site and none of them are as good as this.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.01.2009 20:42
    Excellent series! I agree with the others who have said you should write a book. I have rated all possitively but am only posting my comment on the last one. I have also taken the liberty of getting the name of the publishing company who published Anne Rice's erotic trilogy SLEEPING BEAUTY. They were published by Plume, a member of Penguin Putnam Inc. Their address in the U.S is 375 Hudson Street, New York, New York 10014. I think they could help you iron out the minor spelling and grammatical issues and could help make it a great novel. If you decide to publish, you have to let us know. Again, great series. Loved it and would like to read more.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.01.2009 15:43
    Two words - alternate ending. All the best stories have one. You could go back to where Frank pulls a gun on Dan and says he'll kill him next time he sees him. Dan turns to go and a shot rings out. Dan turns back to see Frank with a hole in his head. Kelli rides up with Paul or Jason and says something smartassed about killing the other guy. 'you're not the only one who can help a guy have an accident', or something like that. However, still a great story. Keep it up.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.01.2009 18:52
    They all were good reads, and I agree with alot of people that this should be published. I'll keep reading your other storys but this byfar was the best I have read in a long time. The ending made me very sad but the story to story was very exciting. You never know what you have to do when the world comes the an end.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.02.2009 21:43
    I really loved the story, But the ending really upset me. it feels like to me that in this world after Danny was killed everyone else died with him. please make another ending

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  • anon
    06.02.2009 08:14
    perfect...cant find a better word for this story. i do have one complaint, when the main character died, i felt like i had died. he was so much like me in every way, i actually felt a part of me die. if you dont publish this story i will come to your house and kick your dog. GG

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  • hunt201
    07.02.2009 02:09
    dude this story is one of the best seires on this site tied with the story double trouble for first. you should get published, you can write anything you wanted.judging from this series you are an excleent writer, series props man

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  • Ineferi
    12.02.2009 15:10
    I have to agree with anon, from a single shot like that even at point blank range, that had to be one lucky hit. And what happened to the second son who was covering him, if one didn't have a clear shot the other certainly did, anyway, great story, not so good ending.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.02.2009 05:43
    I'm not going to lie, I hated to see the story end. Like some of my fellow reader, your writing style makes the reader feel like a part of the story. You do have a talent, I just hated to see the story end. Great job.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.02.2009 19:57
    wow that was great ive never read erotic story that was as griping as this. this is my first comment and i had to give you your props you did an excellent job on this i agree with every one you should publish your wrightings great story loved it

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  • Reader
    Reader 500
    19.02.2009 04:28
    You are a very good writer. Whatever the story line don't let you talent go to waste. By the way, don't all virgins have a hymen?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    12.03.2009 07:36
    an excellent story line

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.03.2009 15:19
    I skipped the Sex parts just to follow the Story line too! Haha. The only other story I've read on this site that have such a captivating storyline, was Previously Target Club, now re-named to Béla the Vampire Girl - Part 1 , all the way to Part 4, By Dank. and yeah, i really do hope that you'll have an alternative ending to this Story, Be it Sex or no sex. Cheers man, superb Writing you have there.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.03.2009 22:55
    Great story. Had a depressing ending though but you can sure as hell write. Keep it up.

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  • Reader
    Reader 500
    28.03.2009 23:26
    ...Perfect. It is the only world i can find to descride it. I actually skipped most of the sex parts at the end just to find out how it ended. Very sad ending. Parallel ending would have been good also.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.03.2009 23:30
    You should make an alternate story about one of the sons, or daughters, or sisters. I would read it.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.03.2009 23:32
    You should make an alternate story about one of the sons, or daughters, or sisters. I would read it.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.03.2009 23:32
    You should make an alternate story about one of the sons, or daughters, or sisters. I would read it.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.04.2009 00:00
    i can't figure out who it is talking in the epilogue

    can some1 help?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    18.04.2009 17:49
    *loud clapping* after a while I quit reading the sex to get to the story. It was awesome and much better than all the rest on this site.I love your work.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.04.2009 03:31
    Excellent story man!! I wish i was Danny, except the fact that he died.. Hehe.. And i thing Megan has feelings for him..

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  • Anonymous+reader
    05.05.2009 08:44
    THAT WAS THE BEST SERIES I HAVE EVER READ ON HERE. WAS MAJOR SAD WHEN DAN DIES=(. who was doing the epilogue??(ha ha none of us noe). u need to write more of these u are a talented writer

    good luck to u man for the future

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    READER 500
    19.05.2009 02:52
    wow.... this may be one of the most amazing stories on this sight.... ive been up for hours reading the series. its now 3 in the morning, and i have a major Geography Assignmentdue tomorrrow....fuck....

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  • Anonymous+reader
    30.05.2009 11:30
    i believe it's jason talking in the epilouge because at the end, the epilouge says that it was his fault, that he didn't shoot quick enough. remember, jason was the one who shot frank

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  • Anonymous+reader
    31.05.2009 14:57
    it never daid who shot frank. it could have been one of the other boys. it just said that jason did not have a good shot.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.06.2009 19:50
    it even says jason allways teased me for coming up here. so jason cant be the one talking

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  • Anonymous+reader
    13.06.2009 12:54
    I think it was Terri !!! Great story , keep them comming

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  • Anonymous+reader
    15.06.2009 11:39
    it couldn't be terri because she never went along with dan.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.06.2009 00:20
    i think it was pam

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  • Ed+Itor
    23.06.2009 01:09
    It was Tom, the one he could not remember he was a good shot & Megan's son. The author states this as follows:“Tom would be good and Sam. They are both good shots. They don’t get excited easily and Megan and Terri are their mothers”. & "Megan, my mom, was pretty broken up when Dad was died."
    Thus it is told who was speaking both in the story & Epilogue.

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  • Ed+Itor
    23.06.2009 01:16
    It was Tom, the one he could not remember he was a good shot & Megan's son. The author states this as follows:“Tom would be good and Sam. They are both good shots. They don’t get excited easily and Megan and Terri are their mothers”. & "Megan, my mom, was pretty broken up when Dad was died."
    Thus it is told who was speaking both in the story & Epilogue.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    06.07.2009 11:33
    Pure reading pleasure

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.07.2009 06:41
    best story/series ive seen on this whole website your a great writter and i hope you'll make some more great stories

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.07.2009 06:44
    great stories this is the best series on this whole website your a great writter and i hope you'll make some more great stories like this one

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  • Anonymous+reader
    22.07.2009 05:10
    greatest series ive ever read. in my honest opinion this is good enough to be a movie

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.07.2009 01:57
    Very good piece of literature i agree this could be a film. MORE PLEASE!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.08.2009 21:32
    I've read this series and have to admit I couldn't stop. GREAT JOB!!!

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.08.2009 21:41
    I don't usually rate these storys, butafter reading all 8 chapters I went back and gave each a positive vote. I'd vote more than once if I could. This is the best I have read in this site!

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  • spike
    20.08.2009 17:12
    All i can say is "that is the best fantacy story i have ever read. perfect mix of sex and story line. Well done my friend, Well done"

    "Please write more offten"

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.09.2009 15:31
    Sir,
    This story has the makings of a very good novel. Flesh it out, a bit less sex, this could become a best seller. The premise is one I've never seen before in "end of the world" sci-fi. Give it some thought.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.09.2009 23:42
    you DEFINATLEY have a talent for writing, thank you for sharing this story with us, i think that everyone who reads this series takes alot more out of it that just the sex scenes. thanks again

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  • Anonymous+reader
    29.09.2009 12:43
    Great story. Once I started reading I could not stop. Thank you very much!!!

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  • Lunalupo
    12.10.2009 06:00
    Well done, awesome story.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    27.10.2009 15:38
    Damn! Excellent story. I read all of it non-stop. If I had to offer some criticism, I'd simply say offer a tad bit of clarification here and there (like the very very end, I'm not entirely certain who's speaking, for example, and did they get that rat-bastard Frank?) But overall, I'd rate it a 99.5 out of 100. -.1% for some minor typos, -.1% for some clarification that was missing, -.1% for some of the sex bits (at least ONE of the girls HAD to be a virgin, but not one hymen was broken in this story), -.1% for not making it longer :P, and -.1% because I do everything in fives, and can't really think of anything else to critique, lol.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.11.2009 22:33
    im about to cry with that ending :[ i was up last night thinking about it and it so sad how everyone took his death...

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  • Anonymous+reader
    23.03.2010 10:14
    You write very well I would have prefered a happy ending but in it was an amazing series please continue writing

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  • Anonymous+reader
    26.03.2010 13:42
    damm that was sad i was crying

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.04.2010 01:41
    You are the best series writer on this whole sit and this has been one of the best story saga that I have ever read. I mean you have everything in this story a thriller, sci-fi, death, And most importantly SEX. I believe that if you really tried you could get this published as a book
    p.s. I was crying when I was reading that ednding Bravo

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  • Anonymous+reader
    16.05.2010 23:38
    Dude i never write comments but i could not stop reading and i loved the ending u rock man

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  • Anonymous+reader
    21.05.2010 16:53
    I had taught that the Stormy Nights series was very good but you surpassed yourself with this series. Excellent work. Can't wait to see your next work. Thanks again. AD

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  • loos
    27.05.2010 01:38
    It was Terri at the end of the story. She didn't shoot frank soon enough when he first came. Frank was her son, he was Jon's son too. He inherited his fathers attitude. HOLY FUCK YOU ARE GOOD.

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  • loos
    27.05.2010 01:40
    Sorry i made an error with one of the names

    It was Terri at the end of the story. She didn't shoot Jon soon enough when he first came. Frank was her son, he was Jon's son too. He inherited his fathers attitude.


    also, HOLY FUCK YOU ARE GOOD.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.06.2010 04:21
    god dam that was good

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  • Greg73
    03.06.2010 23:40
    Excellent. Brilliant. Amazing. God, I wish I was a publisher. I would ask you to more or less rewrite this so it was storeshelf friendly, and it would be a hit. man, I would ask for a part two, but there's not much left to tell, and I can only think of one book that continued when the protagonist died. Anyways, good job.

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  • saber.death
    07.06.2010 19:36
    dude man words cannot describe this story. awesome job looking for your next work.

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  • Randoom
    18.06.2010 07:53
    IT cant be terri since it says megan my mom. Terri is magans sister, i think its Tom since he mention reichard,jason and paul and shelly and terri moved on,

    And Tom is megans son so it was him. The person The dad forgot and then remembered

    I got to say tho i had to hold back tears reading this fantastic story

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  • Anonymous+reader
    01.08.2010 22:32
    Awesome, awesome story!!! I loved every part of it, the story and the sex. Would be a best-seller if published.

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  • anonymous+reader
    15.08.2010 20:33
    I have no words. Excellent story, from beginning to end.

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.08.2010 01:57
    Your writing is so amazing. I cummed 3 times reading this story. This is probably the best written series of stories on this website. I honestly think it could become a movie. Keep writing!

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  • anonymous+reader
    17.08.2010 01:58
    Your writing is so amazing. I cummed 3 times reading this story. This is probably the best written series of stories on this website. I honestly think it could become a movie. Keep writing!

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.08.2010 21:58
    i didnt like the ending too well a sad ending to a great story, it would be better if the main character didnt die in the end next time

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.08.2010 22:04
    if you could rewrite this story and instead of the main guy dying in the end do you think you could let him live?

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.08.2010 22:05
    i didnt like the ending too well a sad ending to a great story, it would be better if the main character didnt die in the end next time

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.08.2010 23:42
    the ending was great, the whole thing was

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  • anonymous+reader
    08.09.2010 05:08
    Honestly, one of the best stories I've ever read.
    And I don't just mean on this site, or erotic stories.
    It seemed like a true unbound novel, not afraid to go places that everyone else would be.
    The ending was perfect as well. There was seriously no better way to end it.
    Thank you J. Miller.
    Thank you.

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  • anonymous+reader
    28.09.2010 20:02
    Excelent series! I can't stress enough how much i like this story, truly the best i've ever read on this site.
    The ending gave me goosebumps, touching and amazingly written.
    Loved it, loved it, loved it. Thank you very much for sharing.

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.02.2011 00:49
    Is that normal 59 pages of coments. I think not.
    Amazing story

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  • anonymous+reader
    04.02.2011 00:50
    Ha im also the first person to comment on it during 2011

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.02.2011 15:21
    I must say this is a rather touching story I spent the entire day reading through it and enjoyed it with a few questions though... someone forgot about the hymen rather early on....

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  • Larry55
    27.02.2011 21:57
    I enjoyed your stories for awhile now jest wanted to say thanks.

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.04.2011 17:23
    Over all a well written story. The only complaint that I have is that all the sex was the same with every partner. I would think that with that many partners there would be some differences. Also a lack mutual oral stimulation. And how was there no anal in all these years of fucking. Just some thought if you ever decide to edit it a little.

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  • anonymous+reader
    23.04.2011 18:43
    the end made me cry you might think it stupid but stil it did

    mbos14

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.05.2011 04:25
    very good story. Would have been nice to know who was sitting at the grave at the end though. perhaps the same one that the dad forgot? very good story. I enjoyed it immensely.

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.05.2011 05:55
    the best story ever the ending was such a shock but maby you should think about making an alternate ending where the bulet misses any vital parts and survives

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  • anonymous+reader
    07.07.2011 03:41
    Great story. Sorry main character died at the end, but had to be ythat way to put an ending to it and not leave it open like so many stories. The sex bothered me in that it seemed like it's only purpose was to get the females pregnant and not for some pleasure as well. Mutual oral would have been nice as well as from behind. And some anal as would be natural curiosity. Overall a really good story.

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  • fatal_jmj
    29.08.2011 13:05
    This is an awesome story. This chapter make me cry every time I read it.

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  • anonymous+reader
    01.09.2011 07:18
    Wow an amazing story it made me cry at the end and i agree you should make an alternate ending it doesnt feel right to end that way but bravo you should somehow find a way to publish this

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.09.2011 22:29
    The person speaking at the end is either Tom or Sam

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.09.2011 22:30
    An absolutely amazing story

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  • anonymous+reader
    10.09.2011 10:20
    Great series, loved the plot. Though maybe there should be an alternate ending just to satisfy the what if question.

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  • anonymous+reader
    19.10.2011 11:22
    Awesome storys i enjoyed everyone of them

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  • anonymous+reader
    18.11.2011 04:24
    finally finished...and now i'm sad....awesome story, always worth the tears

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.12.2011 11:28
    Nice ending, appropriate for such an amazing series.

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  • elementh
    30.12.2011 11:29
    Nice ending, appropriate for such an amazing series.

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.01.2012 01:20
    Omg that was an amazing series! The ending make me cry! You are a fantastic writer!

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.01.2012 19:43
    i spent 3 hours reading the whole series, your an awesome writer and shouldn't stop ever. i hope you continue

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  • anonymous+reader
    11.02.2012 19:38
    H239NQ Thanks a lot! An extremely interesting comment!!...

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  • anonymous+reader
    22.04.2012 02:33
    If you fixed up some stuff you could make this into a book. I edit And read over books before the are put out into public places. This is Android amazing series And you should continue making more like it!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.05.2012 19:04
    i wonder who put the bullet through franks head i would like to shake their hand cause it doesnt tell who shot him was it tom richard jimmy james or david cause it talks about jason in the epilogue tell us who shot him if possible

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  • anonymous+reader
    13.10.2012 16:22
    I have to tell you, this is the best story i have read from this site. you are seriously talented in your thought processes. you have some serious talent. Turk

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  • anonymous+reader
    20.10.2012 03:48
    great story dude but it was really fucking sad when sharon and dan died

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  • anonymous+reader
    28.10.2012 10:54
    That was an awesome series. You are a great writer. I was hooked on that series. All aspects of this series were great

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.12.2012 00:06
    WTF?! Why did u let dan die? Would of been better if he lived. But good series

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.01.2013 11:42
    Outstanding story
    I hope you wright more

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  • anonymous+reader
    09.04.2013 12:14
    I read the story started out as a fantasy to end up crying at such a heart wrenching end. well done.

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  • anonymous+reader
    24.04.2013 13:25
    WOW NICE series made we cry at the end but good

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.06.2013 04:01
    what the f***. you cand not leave us like that. what about the rest what happens to them. even it is short and sweet we need to know. up to this point I give a 10/10. so tell us please,please ,please repeated 10000000000000'0 times.what happens.

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  • anonymous+reader
    06.06.2013 04:02
    what the f***. you cand not leave us like that. what about the rest what happens to them. even it is short and sweet we need to know. up to this point I give a 10/10. so tell us please,please ,please repeated 10000000000000'0 times.what happens.

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  • anonymous+reader
    05.07.2013 20:25
    I HATED this ending.. I loved the series and was spell bound! But damn it...I know it was just a story.. but to kill of the MAIN character at the end. Did you just do it so you wouldn't to think of any more chapters? Oh well.

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  • anonymous+reader
    14.08.2013 12:20
    Well.
    I really liked the series. It was sexy but a welcome change from the normal stuff that gets posted here. I wasn't too fussy about the ending but it was realistic. Overall . . . . Great job!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    30.08.2013 01:00
    its been almost a year and I'm still thinking about this store. Great job man!!!!

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  • anonymous+reader
    31.08.2013 20:45
    This was a really nice change from the usual story here. Enough sex to satisfy all us deviants
    And a good story for us intellectual and horror and sci-fi fans. Changing the ways of procreation would allow this to be expanded and welcomed by main stream readers. I really enjoyed the story, even with the ending you used.

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  • anonymous+reader
    12.09.2013 22:01
    A+++ for originality, clever composition, bravo, pls keep up your enrichment of erotic literature, THANKYOU

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  • anonymous+reader
    02.10.2013 20:27
    DO ANY OF U REALIZE THAT FRANK COULD HAVE BEEN JOHN CHILD. ANA THAT HE TOOK REVENGE FOR WHAT HE DID TO JOHN . AN IF U THINK BACK THAT IS HOW JOHN ACT. BY HAVING SEX WITH UNDER AGED GIRLS. JUST SOMETHING TO THINK ABOUT.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    19.12.2013 17:44
    Very good story just a bad ending.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.08.2014 11:29
    Heartbreaking ending. But lets face it readers, there is no more story without Dan. None of the other characters could carry us. The family expanded of course. No disease, no restrictions or social hangups. Thanks writer. I count the lost sleep i suffered in reading this series as time well spent.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.08.2014 23:12
    This is overall the best story I have ever read whether it was a sex stories or a real storie this was amazing great job.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.12.2014 09:24
    If this story did not have incest in it I could be published still might be able to but sadly stories like this are fround on by some people

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  • Anonymous+reader
    10.12.2014 07:40
    We barely knew Tom why was he the one to not shoot soon enough....

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  • Anonymous+reader
    17.12.2014 13:44
    great storywish you can make anotherbig story like that

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  • Anonymous+reader
    28.01.2015 04:26
    So noone of them saw eachother again unless they were in the same group is that correct? And who was talkimg at the epolouge?

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  • Anonymous+reader
    08.05.2015 12:35
    Anonymous 2015-1-28: Since they dispersed to different places- rice farm, sawmill, etc. - which would each provide goods the others needed, no doubt they remained in contact and traded between themselves. Classic expansion of civilization and commerce. The different groups would also intermarry. As to who spoke in the epilogue, you get to guess. I suspect the author left some clues.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.05.2015 09:10
    U r the man dude! U r the man
    Best series i have ever read

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.05.2015 09:11
    Who the fuck give a negative voting to a story like that??

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  • Anonymous+reader
    24.05.2015 08:20
    The best story of all time
    Whoever gave it a negative rating is dumb as shit

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  • Anonymous+reader
    25.06.2015 05:30
    Lazy ending, killing off the main character can be a good idea if you do it right. To fast, not enough meaning.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    03.01.2016 06:14
    very very very good. had doubts at the start but got better and better. well done

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  • Anonymous+reader
    02.04.2016 22:03
    Ohh man I really hoped Dan would not die at last,and they will leave happly everafter.And even if u killed of the main character u should at least have told wat happened next,wen everyone split up.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    14.08.2016 04:26
    It is not just a sex story. It is a great story. I hope it would get Sequel.

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  • Anonymous+reader
    07.01.2017 19:14
    Great story I truly enjoyed the read..I can't wait to read more of your work

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  • Tighttina02
    06.08.2018 05:55
    Awesome story...one of the best I have read on here.will be reading more of your stories.

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  • Doozy+woof+Hunter
    28.05.2019 19:41
    NOOO! Horrible ending to such a brilliant story......please another epic soon...you are a great writer!

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  • ChimeraLoveMe
    02.06.2019 12:08
    This is the best post-apocalyptic story I've ever read. I started this series expecting it be just another poorly written zombie story - but instead you gave us an entertaining and real story. Thank you

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  • nebesprinkles
    14.04.2020 23:05
    Normally just vote and go. This was the best story I have read in last couple of years. Wish was a novel. Keep up good work. Looking for more from you.

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  • andyg13
    01.04.2021 19:14
    awesome story

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  • FNQman
    07.11.2022 00:18
    Enjoyed your story from start to finish, great writing.

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